Sunday, February 24, 2013

check the script, i think a love scene is next

photo by articotropical

Tan with brown fleck, the tile in front of the cooler boxes in the grocery store---the doors fog obscuring the names on cartons of ice cream when someone opens one to take whatever---there is something strange about the light in here, it's too bright, too artificial & i feel like a college kid again, on a cheap date---two Ben n' Jerry's tubs and a movie. Cherry Garcia for me and caramel coffee for you, only it has a funny name i don't know. Hit the video kiosk perched on the sidewalk just outside---the stars always twinkle nice when it's cold out.

'you really should get some jeans that fit you better.'

'i like my jeans,' they are two sizes ago.

'they would show off your butt better.'

'exactly.'

it takes a moment for the heat to catch up, in the car, make it comfortable enough to relax. John Mayer acoustic, free fallin', through the parking lot, turn right, left at the light, all the store signs shine in vibrant color, drawing moths---i over take a white car, dive the entrance ramp & merge, fifteen minutes from home,
your hand on my arm, on an otherwise ordinary evening, your hand on my arm, elevating everything to an action adventure movie

'You've got to ask yourself one question: Do I feel lucky?'

'did you say something?'

'no, just thinking out loud, i guess,' flash my teeth, check the mirror for enemy agents, as the city fades behind us and we disappear between the shadows of rolling hills.

yes. yes i do.

67 comments:

Claudia said...

am i first..? *looks around...*

Claudia said...

ha - really love how you describe the evening...how just one touch can make the big difference and elevate the mundane moments to something special...love the checking in the rearview for spys to follow..ha...you never know...smiles

Claudia said...

i'll mark this in my calendar...comment one, two and three...maybe never happens again...ha...smiles
happy sunday..

John DeBellis said...

Nice evening replay, the little things getting us over the hump of the mundane help keep us going.

the walking man said...

Well? Was it a good night after the movie?

Seriously Brian your ability to hold that narrative poetic voice has grown to a tremendous power. Never fail it's responsibility, I beg you.

Grace said...

I enjoy the intimate evening out, with twinkling stars, music and heat escalating in the car ~ Smiles ~

Enjoyed the poetic prose ~

Happy Sunday to you ~


Susan said...

O Walter Mitty was never so beautifully reversed! James Thurber, move over for a poet who never learned to be cynical about love!

dsnake1 said...

sizzling! wonderful imagery.

"check the mirror for enemy agents", wow! :)

Pat Hatt said...

haha oh the jeans
Can make scenes
If one does like
Quite the evening hike
And if your teeth weren't yucky
Could go all bingo and get lucky hahaha

kaykuala said...

Some refreshments, overtaking a car,
the look in the mirror, the touch and the young feel all over again. How nice! Wonderful take Brian!

Hank

Gloria said...

oh I love this one Brian! have a nice day with the kids and T!

Daniel said...

The ordinary can be elevated to such a level that even in the quiet there is a great energy and expectation. Lovely.

Paula Wooters said...

Ah... this is what I love about you, Brian... you're such a romantic!

Suz said...

oh....smooth

farawayinthesunshine said...

I bet you were the hero in this action adventure movie :-)
Enjoy your Sunday Brian

Tabor said...

Even a simple car ride with you takes on the texture of an epic adventure.

Leovi said...

I love this poem that draws emotion sweetly daily events.

DJan said...

You ARE lucky. Given that you have your incredible imagination and mind, and a wonderful family. Yes, yes you are. :-)

Optimistic Existentialist said...

A lot of romanticism in this post my friend...I love it.

adeeyoyo said...

Ah, remember those days... Nice reminder!

anthonynorth said...

That was quite an evening. Excellently portrayed.

Myrna R. said...

A simple evening elevated to divine heights by a touch. It's all a love scene. Thanks for sharing your evening.

JANU said...

It takes a moment for heat to catch up...yeah, you turned on the heat. An ordinary made extraordinary.

izzy said...

As if luck is really the issue- but good fortune is close enough! Love it- and those wretched bright lights.
I couldn't tell you what our flavors would have been back in those early
days...

Green Speck said...

I love the romanticism in this piece :-)

Alice Audrey said...

I always liked the pun in Cherry Garcia, but cherry really didn't fit him.

Love the jeans dialogue.

Eusebia Philotes said...

Nice. Life in its ordinary magnificence.

Hilary said...

Nobody write romance like you do. That's a big part of the feeling lucky.

Cat said...

Caramel coffee ice cream sounds delicious. Hope you enjoyed the movie : )

. said...

... "fits your butt bette"r ... yah, right ... maybe he needs a kick in the butt ... or experience the pain of pregnancy and labour pains and giving birth ... there are some neat videos about this out there ... I remember gaining weight from 110lbs to 168 lbs during my pregnancies ... I was proud of my butt then, because I finally had one ... He He He ...

JeannetteLS said...

I'd write a thoughtful answer, but I need some ice cream ... NOW.

Goofball said...

I feel very lucky

ayala said...

Love the intimacy in this... and yes you are lucky ;) happy Sunday !

Fred Rutherford said...

lots of neat stuff going on in this prose. Love the eastwood reference and how you used it, double meaning is great. The otherwise mundane lit to special circumstance by a simple touch, that's a great thought/feeling. Very nice piece Brian. Thanks

Eva Gallant said...

I suspect you both are lucky!

Tara Miller said...

I really love these simple yet special moments we get to share on occasion. I'm a lucky lady - you can't blame for for liking to take a peek at your tush every now and then!!! ;)

Stacey Warner said...

Fantastic as always, Brian.

Laurie Kolp said...

Aww... with John Mayer and caramel coffee ice cream you couldn't go wrong.

Mike said...

I really enjoyed that. Gave me a very serene feeling.

hedgewitch said...

Life would not be worth living without Cherry Garcia--or those lucky moments.

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"check the script, i think a love... scene is next"
Hi! Brian...
The photo by articotropical...really set the mood for what is to come: A very [beautiful] descriptive poem,with a moment [Of warmth]shared between 2 people in love...on a starry night, with a movie,music,and Ben and Jerry's Ice-cream...too!
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee :)

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

By the way, I<3 Claudia's comments 2
Ha!ha!

Betsy Brock said...

2 sizes too big? Um...careful, you might get mistaken for the plumber. lol...

I thought you'd had too much gin but Pat said you were high on love. Now I understand. :)

Cloudia said...

look how many people are affected by your words!



ALOHA from Waikiki
Comfort Spiral
~ > < } } ( ° > <3

Vicki Lane said...

You gotta ask yourself this question -- Are you a man who's pretending to be in a movie . . . or a man in a movie, pretending to be real?

Brandee Shafer said...

"your hand on my arm, elevating everything to an action adventure movie"

You're the smartest man alive. I know she thinks so, too.

mywordwall said...

hah! this sounds like a fun evening. And somehow, this reminds me of Chuck - that ex-NBC comedy about a bumbling spy. :-)

Lorraine said...

You're awesome !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Mary said...

Oh, this was a sweet one, Brian. Love the description. And neat to see how quickly the cold day turned warm. Smiles.

Valerie said...

No.1. No, not because I'm first in line but because I have a list of No.1. BM poems and this one just flew to the top. So romantic, don't you know... smiles.

Dave King said...

What a brilliant narrative. I stand in awe - and that's a word I hardly ever use.

Other Mary said...

Oh that's fun Brian...I hope you don't drive like Jason Bourne though!

Serena Helriot said...

Yes, yes you are....

odyzz said...

Aah!! vibrant and refreshing..

moondustwriter said...

nice to be able to capture that "young and in love" feeling over and over again

Hope the ice cream melted...

ladyfi said...

Oh, so very beautiful!

Friko said...

Lovely, even checking for enemy agents in the mirror.

It was all so wonderful then.

flaubert said...

What a lovely poem, Brian.

Pamela

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

Me too Brian....I too, am so very lucky...love the memory shared...

ND Mitchell said...

Lots to like here, but I especially liked the fact that John Mayer's version of Free Fallin' was playing in the car. I love that tune...

Rebecca S. said...

Did you just watch the Oscars? The movies, too-bright lights, 'Do you feel lucky?' The possible car chase...or am I missing something more subtle?

California Girl said...

"yes, yes I do"

Sexy stuff there Brian

:)

manicddaily said...

Very cute. I am smiling. K.

Laurie said...

I feel this could go on and on, you certainly set the scene!

The Empress said...

You always remember what is important.

How I wish this for the rest of the world, because it brings such happiness and joy to the ones in our lives.

A pleasure to know you, B.

sheila said...

sweet...makes me want icecream (smiles)

Syd said...

I hope that you got lucky because I know that you are.