Thursday, January 31, 2013

FormForAll: not what you expected? don't miss the magic

photo by theartmess


John Mayer says, 'Lower your expectations'
after glaucoma surgery, who has expectations?

see---chasing others expectations, we lose ourselves,
a slave to expectations, post a sign bill, lost & found

the song may not sound the same, expectations
close our ears only to expectations, leaves disappointed

'Expecting to lose, a win exceeds expectations,'
my wife dislikes playing cards against my lack of expectations

at the end of each night, the sun rises to our expectations
how often we lose sight of those same expectations

fail to live up to expectations and they'll fire you, perhaps
it would be best if someone told you, your expectations

if this poem didn't meet your expectations, i had none, so
it met mine. (bet you thought i would say expectations,

right?) exactly.

Over at dVerse Poets today, Sam has us writing ghazals or specifically ghazal sonnets...this is a more modernized version of a ghazal in millermetre (i never do these things quite right. smiles)...if you want to know how to do it right, stop in and see Sam...he will open the door at 3 pm EST.

and for g-man, a story in 55 words...

time & placeholders 

is it late or early,

this blooming flower,
so delicate & silky
fluttering in a winter
breeze?

purple/pink, bright
yellow interior
bruising & tearing
as its battered

east, west
north & south

blame the season
blame the wind
blame the flower

the already brittle grass
watches silent, only
talking when someone
steps on it

96 comments:

Sir Thomas of Sorbie said...

Hi Brian,
Expectations!... reminds me of "Great Expectations"....Good poem, my friend! I have had google computer complications and lost my blog so I created a new one. Please come visit so this old man can try to keep up with you...
Have a great weekend, my friend.
Smiles,
Tom

Pat Hatt said...

Wow now after taking a seat
I have to join the expectation beat
As expectations can expect if your expecting expectations
Otherwise expect to expect expectation saturation

Mary said...

If a person has no expectations to meet, their expectations are always fulfilled...which is a positive way of living life! And your poem MORE than met the expectations I had when I began reading it. Smiles to you, Brian.

Grace said...

What a challenge form Brian ~

If we don't have expectations, we will always win and not be anxious all the time ~

Happy Thursday ~

A Cuban In London said...

"if this poem didn't meet your expectations, i had none, so
it met mine." I loved that short, little line. In fact, I could have that on my grave. Just change poem to "life"! :-)

Greetings from London.

Betsy Brock said...

is this like What To Expect When You're Expecting? Uh..no, I expect not. ha.

Tina said...

Interesting format...I'm behind in dVerse...but there was something about the repeated word that drove home the point to me of that old saying, "You can't please all the people all the time...etc."

Tina @ Life is Good
Co-host, April 2013 A-Z Challenge
@TinaLifeisGood, #atozchallenge

Sadia Khan said...

''if this poem didn't meet your expectations, i had
none, so
it met mine''....wow m in love with these gorgeous lines....i always hv expectations when i read ur work n u so btfly meet mine :)

JANU said...

This exceeds expectation. A very modernized version of ghazal indeed. And, I remember I debuted on dVerse with a ghazal. :-)

CiCi said...

For me, I go a step further, I have no expectations and am much happier this way.

Actually, playing cards and games competitively is so fun, no expectations needed there anyway.

You have so much nerve and verve in what you write.

Alice Audrey said...

I was expecting you to say that. But only because the poem told me to.

Mr. Charleston said...

The great Bard of Florida, Gamble Rodgers, said it best... Life is what happens while you're making other plans.

Syd said...

I do my best to keep my expectations low. It saves me some resentment.

darsden said...

:-)

Valerie said...

if this poem didn't meet your expectations, i had none, so
it met mine. (bet you thought i would say expectations,

right?) exactly.

Yes, I did expect to read that word again. Just shows how easily a formed pattern turns into an expectation.

Green Speck said...

"Expectations" - yes you said it correct !!!!

rosaria williams said...

Interesting conundrum! Without expectations the world is always new and fresh; with expectations, we can rely on a routine, take things for granted, be disappointed, yet.....

Cloudia said...

Am wearing ex-specs! Looks good, BRI
Aloha

Tara Miller said...

Oh my! We all have expectations (even in playing cards, hee hee) whether we admit it or not. Otherwise we wouldn't be disappointed or angry when soemthing didn't go our way.....

admit it...you always expect to win when we play cards, love! And most times you do. ;)

Daniel said...

The photo reminded me of the players in a jug band. I could almost hear the music.

manicddaily said...

Ha! Very cute. A lot of fun. (Which I always expect from you.) k.

Mark said...

It's true enough that you shouldn't try to live up to other people's expectations. So well done for not doing it.

Claudia said...

i like how you sum up the message in the title already..we tend to miss the magic of moments, of people, of cities, of food, of everything when we have high expectations cause we're not open anymore to embrace the unexpected.. i def. try to keep my expectations on a low level cause i'm a sucker for everyday and unexpected moments magic..smiles

Optimistic Existentialist said...

I like what you cleverly did at the end there. Well played sir...

Tabor said...

How do you twist your mind around and around in this word poem? Very funny!

sage said...

I always have great expectations of you, Brian!

Cat said...

We shouldn't project our expectations on to others. It puts them in the position of feeling inadequate. Stay true to yourself.

mywordwall said...

Yeah..low expectations lead to less disappointments. But there will be less accomplishments too. There was a saying that goes like this, kind of: Aim for the sky. If one only gets on top of a tree, that is still better than being stuck on the ground. :-)

Fred Rutherford said...

millermetre- nice, you need to toss a copyright sign next to that one :) expectations, yep they are there and having none, you surely can't let yourself down. Really nice lines here. Thanks

. said...

I stopped having expectations as soon as my kids left home ... now I just live and enjoy or reject what comes my way ... easy as pie ...

Goofball said...

but expectations are also linked to ambition, vision, setting goals and therefore enable you sometimes to do more


did you have glaucoma surgery???
I'm genetically challenged to get glaucoma, most of my relatives have it

Paul said...

Some of our expectations can be somewhat unrealistic and grandiose. Other times we don't challenge ourselves enough. My belief is not to focus too much on the future. Here is a line from one of my recent poems.
'one step at a time and all will be fine
no use to worry what's further down the
line'

Frank Watson said...

Too many expectations gives me a lot of stress :P

Good go at the form! My brain hurts after trying it...

Annmarie Pipa said...

I remember reading the lives of the saints, they gave up all expectations...

mefeedyoume said...

Funny, why not “lower your spectacles and observe full of expectations”?

aprille said...

Any expectations about you using this form again? :-)

ND Mitchell said...

Liked what you did with this form. Nice one:)
PS Hope this comment meets your expectations ;)

Sharp Little Pencil said...

Ghazals are hard, man, but you nailed it, Brian! The many forms of expectations you gleaned for this poem, all well said, all apropos to the theme... but the last one, aimed at the reader, was the perfect ending. Loved this! Thanks for commenting on my Puerto Rico poem! Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/01/31/chanteuse-in-sneakers/

flaubert said...

Brian, you did a fantastic write with this form. I don't think we should have expectations, we will only up disappointed and frustrated.

Pamela

flaubert said...

*end up* I have no expectations with my typing abilities, lol.

my heart's love songs said...

LOVE your millermetre, Brian!

absolutely amazing use of the form! just, please, don't ever expect very much from me. {smile}

Steve E said...

Hey, Brother Peep!
I SO glad to receive your new number. In fact I had high expectations, great anticipations for this to happen. I could write dissertations of "thank yous", subject by some readers to reservations, sanctions by others, damnations by the few, all the while myself using machinations, so Peeps will think I'm really an intelligent being...or "doing", whatever!

Guess what I'm trying to write here is "Thank You, my Friend" (Actually, I had NO expectations...just assumptions?)

I'll give you a call some time just for the heck of it!

On chance I forgot to mention: Anna and I looking forward to dropping by around May 24 OR 25, 26th. And yes...(sigh!) we are actually ANTICIPATING this one!
Love and PEACE!
Steve

Bodhirose said...

Oh my gosh! I didn't know what to expect...but not quite this. You blew away my expectations! That's a good thing...

Laurie Kolp said...

haha... love it!

ayala said...

:) Clever my friend, clever :)I try not to have high expectations ...I strive to feel gratitude and leave myself open to the unexpected...

marousia said...

Love the play with expectations *beams broadly*

quietdaemon said...

I could feel the fun you had writing it, kinda like rocketing of the rails of the form proper into something all your own, ha.
Gene

Apryl Gonzales Sweet said...

I love the wordplay in this Brian. Your verses are witty and fun. I agree, as Hemingway wrote, Expectation is the root of all heartbreak. Perhaps it's better to have none ;)

Semaphore said...

Since I expected that you would put your own twist on the ghazal form, you definitely met my expectations with this one! Nice to see you carry this out with such a broad smile on your face, as well!

Gloria said...

I prefer dont have expectations Brian, I hate live always waiting for something I live only one day at time!
Xo

Gloria said...

Nice work Brian!

Ella said...

Brian,
This was clever and fun to read~
Yes, I'd say you exceeded my expectations ;D Well Done!!!

TALON said...

I loved this play on expectations and how they differ depending on mood and circumstance. They can certainly tie us up and knock us down. Hard to avoid, too. But I think that's okay.

It's good to be back and it's good to be reading your writings, Brian :)

kkkkaty said...

I expect that you are retired for the night in the East.. all these admiring comments are beyond your expectations, I know..but I expect you will be pleased...def took a few liberties here!;)...more than I expected...

farawayinthesunshine said...

That one was quite a mouth full to read out loud ;-)

It's almost Friday...enjoy

Zuzana said...

Dear Brian, this post sure made me smile.;) Yes, I did expect you would write expectations, hihi.;)
I know all about those, often felt my life did not live up to them. Still feel the pressure of not living up to them myself in the eyes of others.;) Blessed are those who do not care, but then again, if we do not strive for anything, nothing much will ever happen in or lives;)
I am busy packing, only a week left to our move, we are all stressed out and I can not wait till it is over.;)
Have a great weekend dear friend,
xoxo

SueAnn Lommler said...

Ha!! Thanks for the big goofy grin on my face this morning! I needed that!
So you met my expectations after all!
Hugs
SueAnn

Dave King said...

Exactly right.Felicitations!

Lorraine said...

I always get what Iexpect from you and that's excellence and tenderness and understanding

Sabio Lantz said...


Fulfilling other's expectations, we feed our families.
We show our flexibility.
Freedom is most powerful when it can be sacrificed.

Fun romp, as always
Loved the phrase "MillerMetre".

lucychili said...

nicely wrapped and rhythmed

rumoursofrhyme said...

Brian, you met my expectations with this poem - witty, clever, well written with that now familiar Miller twist of the form :-) Enjoyed very much.

Lolamouse said...

Brian,
I think you should devise your own form with "Millermeter" and then write a poem and not follow it! You're a rebel, but you're very, very good!

izzy said...

Expectations- on Feb. 1 ?
sick and tired of grey...(Hard to say cold after only one week really-)
When it comes to games? I am a scatter brain- love your playfulness though, thanks!

Mr. Charleston said...

Unmet expectations have kept me in trouble with the wimmen in my life my entire life. Where the hell do they come from anyway?

Nice 55. I love it when those first brave blooms poke their heads out.

Elsie The Writer said...

I expected the best and the best is what I got!

Slamdunk said...

Ha, I find it difficult to believe that when you create anything that you don't have expectations for it. Maybe you were just repressing them this one time...

novroz said...

whoa...two awesome poems. I like the expectation more because it has more power

Sheila said...

I'd say the key to happiness is to have no expectations.

anthonynorth said...

Something from Dickens comes to mind. yes - Great Expec ...
Nice one.
Damn, just noticed first commenter beat me to it.

G-Man said...

Well...I think it's late!
Not you, the flower!
You are the MASTER of writing about what you observe Son. Turning a blustery day into literature is not an easy task.
Fantastic 55.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End in NC....G

Maggie May said...

Great Expectations, I say!
The poem is expectedly good.
Maggie x

Nuts in May

brandi said...

Expect, assume, NOTHING.
Free your mind and your ass will follow????
My theme for the day is that People are FUcking Retarded.
What else can you expect from them?

Geraldine said...

Some good advice here Brian, thanks!

Vesper said...

Yeah... gotta learn how to forget about expectations... clever poem! :-)

And, yes, blame the flower...

Manicddaily said...

Brian - I didn't notice your 55. Very nice. k.

you are a fount. k.

Laurie said...

they both met mine!

Leovi said...

Yes, you're right. My my expectations I have caused many disappointments, perhaps for not being realistic.

razzamadazzle said...

Way too many conflicting expectations for me in this world. I love your 55.

Randy said...

Life minus expectations = You are what you is !!
I of course expected to enjoy this, wasn't disappointed !
Great job with the form !! Hyper-modernized !!

Luke Prater said...

That's a whole lot of expectation... hehe... nice

vbreverb said...

50 to 50 chance of winning at gin or Scrabble: realistic expectation.
Being asked to participate on "Dancing with the Stars": unrealistic expectation.
Success or failure of your expectations depends on how realistic you are about your goals. That said--very enjoyable post, Brian (expectation: 100%).

Other Mary said...

Hey I have high expectations of you Brian...and you never disappoint! And your totally different, and delicate 55 is very cool. Hope you have a great weekend!

daydreamerdreams said...

Expectations...I can't tell you how many times I've either exceeded or fell short of someone's expectations. Or tell you how often those expectations have been either wrong or right. Expectation is a two edged sword that does not discriminate ;) I love it!

Grace said...

Am back for the 55 words ~ I think its too early for the blooming flower as our winter is really harsh ~

Happy Friday ~

Eddie Bluelights said...

Whoops! I overshot my last comment into your previous post. I meant to put it here. Try again:

I didn't expect to see all those 'expectations' so well put together. No doubt our Mr Charles Dickens would have said, "Great Expectations!" LOL

Liz @ A Nut in a Nutshell said...

lol, you made me laugh with that last line of expectations!

My Meddling Mind said...

Ah, expectations, so many have sent me head on into a brick wall. Especially, my expectations of others. Now Im learning how to have healthy expectations, goal orientated ones with a positive frame of mind. Glad I found your blog!

Madison:-)

Mama Zen said...

Brian, your form poem made my night!

Vicki Lane said...

I would have expected nothing less from you.

RMP said...

on the first: I feel sorry for your wife—I have a feeling those low expectations make you quite the annoying (to put it mildly) winner. I really enjoyed the last stanza—it met expectations.

on the second: poor flower. I love the talking grass.

Rebecca S. said...

I'd expect nothing less from you, Brian. Ha. No, seriously, expectations are like the word, 'should'...dangerous to the confidence.
That second poem is fragile and lovely. It seemed like an Asian poem...but maybe that was just the flowers :)

Susan said...

How did I miss this? I have high expectations for everyone, and am rarely let down EXCEPT by those who refuse to compete in a competition game (grrrr). Student used to tease me about caring, but they also rose to the occasions more often than not.
And, how about that battered flower? narrator and brittle grass watching it have expectations . . . or why watch? Your poetry gets to me--a very good thing.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

I think it's very clever, the way you both follow and vary the form - using the refrain but not always situating it where - ahem! - expected.

Lady In Read said...

great expectations met here :) i liked both the poems offered today..

Margaret said...

The 55 is beautiful. Only someone who takes the time to stop and observe could write this.