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| old mill stone |
WHACK! my son
takes one in the shoulder
rounding the corner
into our room
a ricochet
off the wall finds my other
where he is crouched
behind a chair
SMACK! my wife
in the small of the back
POW! its a gut shot
for me
their footsteps retreat
beating time quick
(it will take more than that
to keep my down) hide,
HiDE hiDE, they saw the look
in my eye & they
run
the radio croons a song,
night comes in through the window,
the dodge ball is in my hand,
but wont stay that way for long
& tonight we will sleep
like the dead, for having lived
a bit more furious, in peace
thicker than a winter's quilt.
Wrote this after a mad game of dodge ball around the house last night.
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Looks like a fun time with the family Brian ~ Living life a bit more furious (and passion) looks good to me ~
Happy Sunday ~
Cor, that looked fun, mate! I loved the energy of your poem. It makes my return from my cyber-holiday all the more enjoyable.
Greetings from Lonon.
Why do I think of "Beasts of the Southern Wild?" Something about living a bit more furious! Nicely done, and I like the way "night came in through the window."
A fun game I guess :-)
The imagery you created in your poem is amazing. I love the photograph too. Blessings!
Dodge ball in the house, and you had permission? Neat-o.
nice! sounds like great fun - love the closure with having lived a bit more furious and the peace thicker than a winter's quilt...it's always the extremes that seem to add so much quality to life
Your words are filled with the magic of family
That sounds like so much fun. Your family fun is every day normal for you. I admire your family tremendously.
:)
quality time!
Very physical family time, Brian! Sounds intense. :-)
Your posts really have a way of making me harken back to the funnest of times. This reminded me of all the roughhousing I used to do as a youngter. Fun times. Hope your Sunday is wonderful my good friend.
One can see the beauty of games involving the family! Keeps the family together! Nicely Brian!
Hank
Fun times...I see your week-end is awesome memories in the making...the way every week-end should be...:-)
Isn't it great to be "grown up" enough to play dodge ball in the house with your kids? Sleep well always.
I never know what you'll end up with..chucles ;)
What a fun read!! POW!! Loved the energy!
Thanks
Hugs
SueAnn
When I started read I thought OH, NO...It is a great to have some family fun and be energetic too...I miss those days...have a great weekend, Brian
I don't get this one ... at all, B ... read all comments ... still don't get it ... o,well ... :)
This sounds like a blast!
Ha! Very funny! Very funny. k.
Through the years, my husband and kids have liked nothing better than to run around the house, yard, or pool pegging each other with anything that holds air.
(I, on the other hand, not so much)
Your wife is a better sport than I am...
=)
Fun times make great memories. Enjoyed this fun poem.
The family that's violent together, stays together! or something. Actually, this was fun, Brian. And I bet you all did sleep well.
Sounds like fun :-)
"...thicker than a winter's quilt"
This line just melted me...Another brilliant writing. Keep it up, Brian!
Vivid memory, contrasting images--I like the detail here, it helps visualize the scene well. I spent many hours in the bookstore as well (still do, almost every day :P)
Love the last two verses! AND watch out if you throw a dodge ball my way!!!
Ah, fun...ball in the house is tons more fun than ball outside! No broken lamps or bones? lol....When my five men would do that I was always calling out, "If anyone gashes their head open by falling into the corner of a piece of furniture, you are all in trouble!" haha.
Sounds like one of the old Batman shows on TV. Bam! Pow! Holy dodge ball, Batman!
It is a nice composition, I like this poem.
I thought at first it was paint ball. I've never played dodge ball in a house before.
Dodge ball in a house sounds dangerous for all involved, including the house.
Okay, I was a bit antsy initially, because this would have been devastating had it not taken a sharp turn into playful malarkey, my favorite kind. We have the most fun when we can just act like the primates we are.
I like...I very much like!
Sounds like so much fun... and I love the extra special ending. A day of activity definitely helps with sleep. Hope you're having a good day, Brian.
P.S. The picture is amazing.
Such fun. I could feel those racing hearst in your "HiDE hiDE".
I am smiling...ear-to-ear. I love your stories of your family. I wish every child had such a warm childhood!
LOL! You paint a wonderful "moving picture!"
Took me a bit to figure out what the heck you were writing about! Glad it was dodgeball (although I always HATED that game at school.)
Fantastic. Your sons will develop a very special relation to God, The Father.
I imagine your family game with big cartoon balloon, a la the old tv Batman - WHACK!! SMACK! -- and I loved yesteday's poem about the scent of the aftershave triggering memories of your grandfather.
haha now there is an idea for ones pad
Sure lots of fun was had
Never played in the house before
The house would sure suffer though as you search, hit and explore haha
WoW! Never too old or too young to make that family quilt for a very deep and smiling sleep. Great poem!
Furious, curious, playful,
all grist for the family mill
turning us into useful nourishers. . .
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Dodge ball was a nice break from Blind Man's Bluff! I love our family games in the evening but I don't think anything wears them down much....
Love this so much and Im happy you enjoyef your time with your family; and now sleep well;) blessings!
This made me a child again. At least for an instant!
Hi Brian how are you? Good to read about your funfilled moment ... a happy new year to you and your family. :)
Those are the best of times aren't they. And the most important thing you do with your life.
I'm sure you'll all rest quite well after such a fun filled game. hopefully no one will wake to a dodgeball in the face.
"& tonight we will sleep
like the dead, for having lived
a bit more furious, in peace
thicker than a winter's quilt."
Hi! Brian...
"Wrote this after a mad game of dodge ball around the house last night."
Thanks for sharing the photograph Of The Old Mill Stone...too!
deedee :)
You played dodgeball inside the house? You're brave.
I'll bet your kids will remember this even more fondly than you do.
Wow, I miss that action. Me? I fell on my back last night... all by myself! No excuse for that... You are a great dad. THanks for stopping by my blog! Peace, Amy
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that's fun. love the family games. you know, reading this I knew there'd be a twist, and a part of me was wishing I didn't know you were a good person, because the game was masked quite well, thinking all were getting hell. Great piece. Thanks
sounds like fun!
have a great week, Bri!
... in peace
thicker than a winter's quilt.
Loved that, Brian. That and 'night came in the window' ... brilliant expressions.
Which was the most fun, I wonder, the playing or the writing?
The latter's fun enough for me!
A great capture of life :) love it.
filmed as it actually happened :)
It is wonderful to play hard and collapse exhausted at the end of the day - totally spent!
... wishing my mother had let us play dodge ball indoors!
I love your family-fun inspired poems. How precious these moments are for you and your children, especially.
...thicker than a winter's quilt. NICE!
I was confused why you were throwing snow balls inside the house
ok, so dodge ball. I must be semi frozen her to have snow on my mind first
You have a great family to have such fun, rather than TV and videogames. Doing it right, my friend.
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