Sunday, December 16, 2012

smiles of the noticed

decaying cucumber pod by Hilary

The boys've been sick all day, like dueling banjos.
One fever under control, the other raged, 103/104
ending us at the doctor

'It's the flu,' he said, "Five days. Just manage
the symptoms, nothing else you can do'

They're asleep now and we are well on our way, but
still on our feet, enjoying moments of peace. My wife
with her back to me, hands in the sink, drains wash water
from dinner dishes & I lean on the bar, it's lip etching
grooves at the base of my spine, where the needle
rides the record, but grants no music

except what we make, back lit in several hundred
Christmas lights on the tree, it enters the corner of my eye
in small movements, like tiny ballerinas

taking stage the first time,
tentative movements, a swirl
of multicolored sheer fabric

'honey, look,'

she turns as it goes low, nearly to
the ground then swells to our shoulders,
dips once and rises around the hanging light, stops
before our eyes in a wobble, 'hello' up, up, through
the nutcrackers, along the wall---no larger than half
a pea, a soap bubble

one of our boys coughs
a rattling wet cough & we lose sight
as it slips into the shadows at the edge
of the infinite.

Over at dVerse, I am still hosting our look at a detail in our writing and after yesterdays post, I said I would try something a little less heavy, but I am at the whims of what comes out of my pen and heart. Captivated as well by Hilary's pictures still as well. I appreciate my visit by the soap bubble last night, it was a highlight among the sickness.

85 comments:

Optimistic Existentialist said...

Hey I finally beat Pat!! I hope your boys feel better Brian.

Grace said...

I hope your boys feel better Brian ~

I like the moment of peace as you and your wife watch the soap bubble, rising then disappearing when your boy coughs ~

Happy Sunday to you ~

She Writes said...

It is all these simple moments that make a life. Children with coughs and fevers in the midst of dish soap and Christmas lights.

Daydreamertoo said...

Aww...soory your boys are so sick. Apparently the flu this year is a pretty nasty one. But then, the 'real' flu is always nasty. Hopefully your boys will be all better by the end of the week and ready and raring to go for their Christmas :)
When Chloe had a 104 temp, I had no idea what to do, had to call a friend and ask if I should take her to the ER or what. Thankfully she came with some kids Tylenol which helps reduces temps and luckily, it must have reached its peak and then went down. Phew.
I love your watching the soap bubble, aren't they magical all in themselves ...
There's a lovely softness in this Brian.

Hilary said...

It's those little moments that count.. if you're open enough to see them. I hope your boys are on the mend soon.

Thanks for the linkage, Brian.

Gloria said...

I love these type of post Brian, really lovely, blessings on Sunday to you and all yours!

anotherwanderingsoul said...

"where the needle
rides the record, but grants no music"
brilliant, Brian.

loved how you captured the mood here... and all the unexpected turns we face throughout the day.
hope your boys feel better, soon!
and thanks for round 2, what a treat.

happygirl said...

I hope they are well soon. It's not fun to be sick at Christmas. Hold them close, my friend. Even I am giving hugs. :)

Helen said...

... 'its lip etching grooves at the base of my spine' ~~ how do you take something as mundane as a body part resting against a counter ~~ turn it into magic? Happy Bubbles!!

Claudia said...

what a magical moment amidst household chores and sick kids...WonderFul images...smiles..sending prayers for your boys...

Polly said...

Ah, those shared moments ... never to be forgotten ~ a gentle yet powerful poem, Brian

Leovi said...

The worst nightmares are memories of my childhood when I had fever. Greetings.

Sabio Lantz said...

Ah, I thought your vision was due to the fact that you became feverishly delirious yourself.

Dishwater bubbles -- someone loves soap! Keep clean, kill those bugs. No microbe mercy this Christmas.

Daniel said...

Sometimes the little or the insignificant can take your breath away and pull back the clouds just a bit. Blessings.

farawayinthesunshine said...

Soap bubbles and the magic they bring in our eyes, captured so well here, Brian

Hoping your boys are much better today...'tis the flu season...Sweet son is on the mend and I hope I did not catch it :/

Dana Dampier said...

Oh poor guys... I hope they feel better soon.

Isn't it crazy how the smallest things can capture our attention...

izzy said...

Haven't had a chance to write anything myself, but I like the soap bubble! Magical, unpredictable- 'tis such a relief to have our attention
rerouted! Stress- is no fun, and worry- my oh my...enjoy your moments of peace!

hedgewitch said...

Lots of layers in a bubble, even though they only hold air. I can feel the mood hanging heavy, the exhaustion and the delight of something so fragile and perfect, even for a moment, drifting through. Supposed to be a bad flu bug this year--hope your boys are feeling better soon.

RMP said...

you had me completely entranced with the dance. so much so the cough brought me back to reality bursting the bubble of magic you'd managed to create. hope the boys feel better soon.

Mary said...

Very nice, Brian! Sorry the boys are sick. This has been a bad season... Love that you found beauty in a soap bubble. One takes beauty (and poetry) as it comes our way.

Betsy Brock said...

The flu is going around our school something awful. So far, they haven't brought it home. Hope your two are on the mend soon!

Love those stray bubbles. Occasionally we'd get one from a bathtub full of four boys and we'd all watch as it danced and entertained us. Nice memory!

^.^ said...

I feel compelled to write about really good rememdy for stomach flu, Brien ... please forgive me, if this is way beside the point. My mumme was one of these "witches" in our camp, she cured many a child's stomach problems with an apple or two. Please let me know if you need advice about this particular ailment.
Wishing you a very good season, however you celebrate it.
Love, aalways ... cat.

Paige said...

brian, i admire the way you paint such gorgeous everyday pictures,
of your family, always accenting the
small joys of life.

Brandee Shafer said...

I have to say: this is one of my favorites. I felt like I was in the room with you two. I especially like this: "I lean on the bar, it's lip etching grooves at the base of my spine, where the needle rides the record, but grants no music..." Just beautiful! Hope the boys feel better. I had a nagging cough, myself, part of the week, but sounds like they've suffered way more than I did.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This is so endearing Brian, as are you. The worry over the boys' illness, then the lovely shine of light and color and hope and beauty in the soap bubble. A totally WONDERFUL "detail" poem. Bubbles are enchanting. I always have bubbles for the little kids I look after.

Mr. Charleston said...

It's amazing how kids can be 103 one minute and OK the next, especially when they're very young.
I occasionally indulge myself by blowing bubbles in the light just to be fascinated by the beauty. Ran across a great TED you might enjoy: http://www.huffingtonpost.com/janet-echelman/imagination-becomes-reality_b_2296215.html

Nilanjana Bose said...

Hope your family feel better soon... love the picture you paint here...soap bubble ballerina...very peaceful even amidst the illness

Kim Nelson said...

I admire and greatly respect your ability to note the wonder in the world even when challenged, and your skill at conveying it to us.

Maggie May said...

Oh dear, our grandchildren had this too.
Hope the boys are recovering fast.
Maggie x

Nuts in May

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

I hope they feel better soon! I know this slice of life so well--bubbles and coughs--smiles to you Brian!

ds said...

Lovely. So nice to pause inside a moment like this.
Hope your boys feel better soon; nothing seems right when your kids are ill...

Thank you.

Pat Hatt said...

Ick to the flu
Germs are just eww
Hope both get well soon
And the germs aren't spread to you at high noon

Other Mary said...

What a lovely, if fleeting, moment you captured. I hope your sons are feeling better.

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"she turns as it goes low, nearly to
the ground then swells to our shoulders,dips once and rises around the hanging light, stops
before our eyes in a wobble,
'hello' up, up, through
the nutcrackers, along the wall---no larger than half
a pea, a soap bubble..."


Hi! Brian...Thanks, for sharing Hilary's photograph and once again, for sharing your very descriptive poetic words...As you look at a simple, but wonderful occurrence that occurs during the fine art Of washing dishes... [Cont...}]

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

...I too wish both Of your sons well as they recover from the flu too!
deedee :)

poeticlicensee said...

Hi temp in children not as alarming as in adults. Been there. Don't miss that, however. Here's to a week from now & well & good recovered sons. Thought they might appreciate being called sons & not babies, children or boys...

Luke P said...

duelling banjos... what a simile... great descriptive passages, yes...

Cloudia said...

get well, boyz


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Wander said...

Brian...I hate when My kids are sick...eats a hole in my soul to see my little humans suffer! Good poem man!

ayala said...

:( sorry your boys are sick...great images of life here. I hope the boys feel better soon.

Rene Foran said...

sweet :)
and we are just coming out from the other side of that flu...
still coughing but feeling much more alive

Eddie Bluelights said...

Hope your boys get better soon, Brian.
Thank you so much for your very kind comment concerning my dear wife and for praying for her. This is much appreciated. Maria is a little better, partly because dear folk like yourself are praying for her all over the world. Aren't we so very lucky to have so many caring friends. I will do a post about it soon I think. The good news is that after chemo 3 a CT scan revealed that the cancer is receding quickly. Thanks again Brian.

JANU said...

Quiet moments of togetherness brought out well here. Hope your boys are up and about soon.

Emily Wierenga said...

oh man these days are rough, these days filled with sick children, yet i love how you and your wife are still making room for magic. and how your boys have you both to care for them.

adeeyoyo said...

I love how you see all the details,Brian, and make the picture come alive for us. Bless your boys that they may be back to normal soon. And bless you and your wife in that sweet domestic scene!

kaykuala said...

It's been rainy days here. Similarly the kids are vulnerable. They were down with a similar kind of flu last week but are ok now. I hope your boys would recover soon. Nicely Brian!

Hank

adan said...

the contrast of the "rattling wet cough" & the "shadows at the edge of the infinite" tie the elements of a vivid life so strongly and effectively together -

enough to be "etching grooves at the base of my [your] spine" ;-)

hope your boys are well soon

Tara Miller said...

Who knew one little soap bubble could be so mezmerising....and happy. It was. And this was a sweet write of our night.

Susan said...

It is lighter--it shows us a way to the Light. I hope the boys break the fever SOON. I am so glad it is not meningitis!

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Well done, as always. I hope they're feeling better soon!

Fred Rutherford said...

yeah, those reprieves are much needed when they come. I'm crossing my fingers, I have it in my own way all the time but the flu's or some bug of sorts has been making it's rounds here as well, niece goes to day care twice a week and it's like a never ending cycle of kid sick, kid get sick, kid passes it on to my sister, to my mom, and the little baby too, which ya worry about as she's only 7 months old, but so far so good on that front. But poor mom she's just like the 2 year old, three times sick during this rollercoaster bit. Hope you're house gets better soon and keep enjoying the reprieves when you can get them. Thanks

SueAnn Lommler said...

I hope the boys are feeling better today...my hugs and prayers for them.
Thank you for sharing that special moment. Those enrich our lives so much.
Hugs
SueAnn

Syd said...

I hope that those boys of yours will be better soon. Nice that you had a moment of some peace. Being a parent must be especially touching at this time. Take care, bro.

Elsie The Writer said...

It's in those times of chaos we can enjoy the tiniest of things as long as we keep our eyes open for them; good job doing that. Hope your boys get well soon.

Dave King said...

back lit in several hundred
Christmas lights on the tree, it enters the corner of my eye
in small movements, like tiny ballerinas

I could relate to this so easily. A perfect vignette whose familiarity made me feel part of the action. Lovely write.

Lorraine said...

I hope they feel better soon I had the same thing for 2 weeks with high fever too, but I got better, Echinacea tea really helped and I know they'd think it's disgusting but add a lot of honey that is also good for the flu and high fevers...

I told you I'd send you snow...more to come

Laurie Kolp said...

Christmas lights on the tree, it enters the corner of my eye
in small movements, like tiny ballerinas

...I love that precious moment. It's important to take note of those these days. So sorry your boys are sick! At least it's not next week. I once was sick on Christmas and my grandmother felt so sorry for me, she sat by my side all day as I slept.

Raven said...

Love it. Love it. Want to see it in print! This line:

"it's lip etching
grooves at the base of my spine, where the needle
rides the record, but grants no music"

is perfection. I wonder, were you thinking of Mary when you wrote "in the corner of my eye?"

Brian your work gets better with each written word.

DJan said...

Beautiful imagery. Hope your boys are better by now, Brian. I love it and it made me smile in wonder.

Stephanie said...

Oh I do hope your boys feel better soon. Also glad you were able to find a highlight among the sickness, I know even a flu can be draining!

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

That sounds like the same bug my coworker had, but not as poetically.

ladyfi said...

What a lovely description. It's horrible when the kids are sick - hope they get better soon.

Alice Audrey said...

Life is full of those quirky little moments when both good and bad are happening at the same time. Makes for a great poem.

CiCi said...

So sorry your boys were stung by the flu bug. Hope they recover quickly and you all have a blessed Christmas together.

Joanna Jenkins said...

It's a nasty flu bug going around and no fun at all. Hope your sweet boys are feeling good and running around soon. And I really hope you and T don't catch it too.

Loved your words today about the bubble. I could see it in my mind's eye. Beautiful.

Be well, jj

Annmarie Pipa said...

hope those boys are soon well. I know the feeling..

Jen said...

There's nothing worse than not being able to make your kids better. Hope they are well soon. I'm praying my flu shot did the trick. Lots of sick people at work.

manicddaily said...

PS - meant to add I love the dueling banjos line. I found my kids were often like that - alternating in their needs, not only when sick. k.

Janice said...

Your work is always so rich, and this one is no exception. I hope your boys are feeling better today.

Valerie said...

Oooh I'm late.

I see you had your word brush out again, Brian. The colours are lovely. Thank goodness your boys have the dreaded flu now and now at the heart of Christmas. Hope you don't go down with it as well.

Victoria said...

So perfect...the moment and the poem-ing. Don't catch the flu!

Secret Agent Woman said...

It's so hard when your kids are sick. And I've been astounded by how much harder still it became once I was on my own with them, where there was absolutely no moment of respite, with no one to pick up the slack for me.

Kimolisa said...

A great insight into the life of parents. I really liked this.

flaubert said...

Nice atmospheric poem, Brian. So sorry the boys are sick. I also want to apologize for my late visit. I am feeling down in the dumps. I hope it turns around quickly.

Pamela

Marie Nicole said...

I really loved the imagery and the emotion of a couple happy to take a breather and simply enjoy being together... Very beautiful!

Lisa said...

If I say so beautiful, it'll show my limited vocabulary :) But this is so beautiful Brian, the details you see and how you tell us about it and make us see the beauty, the grandness, the sound of silence, the music in the music. It can be infinite if we so choose to.

my heart's love songs said...

i hope the boys are better by now! at least they got it over with before Christmas.

i hope you're having a good week, Bri! love your tale of the dance of the bubble. {smile}

Geraldine said...

sorry about your boys being ill, hope they're all better in loads of time before Christmas.

thanks for sharing a lovely moment of your life too.

Lolamouse said...

Sometimes the little things, like soap bubbles, can really change a mood. Hope the guys feel better soon!

Rachel Hoyt said...

I love it when I can enjoy a special moment like that amongst hard times. :)

Thanks for all the comments you left on my blog while I was traveling! :)

Rebecca S. said...

Ooo...that is a really lovely moment in time, good with the bad, type of poem.

mrs mediocrity said...

"the shadows at the edge
of the infinite." that sounds like a perfect place to be. love the reality, the beauty in this, the magic of these perfectly everyday, ordinary moments.
you just have to notice.

mywordwall said...

I hope you r boys are feeling better. It is hard to see your children sick.

Gail said...

I have never use the word Wow as much as I have here.

You could make vomit and snot sound romantic and convince us it's something we should all experience.

Sue said...

Well done, as always.

Hope the boys are recovering well. The flu is no fun with kids.

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