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| dummy in the truck bed, Fireman's challenge, Appomatox, VA |
the lie of the stethoscope, is just
cause you hear the beat, don't
mean there is music
whole cities are built on less
& run by men inside, while out
we wait for a riff
of deliverance, but all we got
was backwoods banjo bent. laugh, it will
make you feel
better?
'In God we Trust' is
still on the dollar? well most,
or vice verse, i surf
sunLight, off lips
of erupting volcanoes
nature abhors a vacuum,
so does my cat & yet
all the air sucks out the room at
'no new taxes'
HALLELUJAH, -yah or -iah
(oh yeah)
to the echo of, 'we'll just take
your deductions,'
someone.
failed.
math.
(insert campaign ad-thumb up, my smiling face)
& meth rots teeth,
had a lady once
tell me she didn't know it'd show
on the test, if she drank it
there is that---
keep the koolaid
on ice, i NEVER inhaled
either (cough, cough)
it's an urban myth people die
because they have no health-
care, someone, anyone
if i have offended, not to worry
47% of you don't matter anyway
oh heck, let's just round that up
enough to star
the spangled banner
(no one is taping this
are they?)
if you don't understand, you weren't
meant to (my staff will issue
a statement to retract
whatever i say today anyway--
to those that do[nate])
but be sure to VOTE
(as often as you can)
for me
just be sure to bring
proper ID(s)
(insert long disclaimer no one reads anyway
and my name - BIG strong & Bold)
fine print: this political (re)mix tape
will self destruct in 19 days
or as soon as the final tally
of the election.
This poem was paid for by FriendsOfResponsibleMasticationOfRealBrainSells, ForMorBS for short...ok, so really it is posted for OpenLinkNight @ dVerse Poets --- where you will find much better poetry than anything i can drivel on the page...anyone ready for election day to be beyond us? Well, in the meantime, write something poetic and bring it at 3 pm EST.
This is what happens when i take the senior government students on a field trip to the campaign headquarters of both parties---and I am not allowed to make comments or ask questions. Ha.
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Hank
I think I will take a number, order mu steak and vote early!
Ha
Hugs
SueAnn
I didn't go poetry today Brian but we're reading off the same page again.
Ha, this made me smile. So much propaganda being spewed. But then again I am looking forward to tonight's debate.
We cast no votes being outsiders
But we're ardent observers
For what happens there affect us here. That's why we're just as eager
The 2nd debate is on tonight
Mr Obama ought to take it in his stride
Hank
LOL! Must have been some field trip. I am so ready for it to be over...
It will be over soon... but not soon enough for me. 19 days left? Ouch! I think I am on the lip of an erupting volcano...
I hope you at least looked presidential. That accounts for at least 30% of the vote regardless of what drivel pours from your lips. ... Oh, and don't worry about the gaffs and outright lies, those we can fix in editing.
Interesting mix of poetic words and political sentiments...your election is sure heating up ~
Wishing you a Happy Day Brian ~
And I do not endorse -- yes I do -- this piece! Always good to take both sides, multi-choice.
i like the quick beat, word plays, clever images and bit of madness in this...just how politics is sometimes...being here in the states at the moment i get a bit an idea of the pre-election spirit and have to check my dollars for the in god we trust line...
You summed things up quite well, there, Brian!
I have been watching your world Brian...funny how I can't seem to put on the blinders like I can in my own homeland. Gotta give 'em props...they make it like a soap opera...would you judge me if I confessed I am looking forward to the upcoming debate...almost as much as I look forward to your words when you pump them up like these...my big question is...did you REALLY follow orders? ;)
Ha! I cannot imagine that field trip! But at least you took them. How great! You are in a state -- again ha for double meaning-- that really counts. I agree am ready for it to be done but have made arrangements to go work in FL. K.
This is incredibly brilliant Brian. I love it and of course hate the topic! GAG. Please let the election be OVER. PLEASE!!!!! There is NO GOOD candidate....so how will we ever escape???
A field trip huh? Oh how tough to keep one's mouth shut...on either side with all the drivel that is spewed forth! YUK.
This is great! Hilarious but sad, ya know.
Are you running for office?
I'm gonna pencil in your name..:P
Well said and beautifully written.
BRILLIANT miller, as always...it rather feels like the final count down, ya know?
I'm so tired of this already. But I sure like your poetic political ramblings. If you couldn't comment during the field trip, you had to let it out here. Glad you did.
You listening to the man?
Did you spend your time in the can? haha
Us Canadians don't count
But those 47% are quite the amount
All so true
Maybe the president should be you
Then you could clean it up your mat
And still vacuum scaring the poor cat
You certainly are Brian. And thank goodness we all are, whether it changes things or not.
Happy Week, G :<)
interesting...
I'm busy hoarding all the entitlements I can get my grubby hands on before November! Especially all that govt. paid for birth control that absolutely DID NOT come out of our paychecks to pay for insurance!
I LOL'd at this:
if you don't understand, you weren't
meant to (my staff will issue
a statement to retract
whatever i say today anyway--
to those that do[nate])
AWESOME! I can just see a politician saying that. :)
Love the ending as well. I parodied inspector gadget this week... but just in a little note to a friend. :)
I will be happy when it's over. But then it starts up again so soon. I feel like disconnecting the phone!
There are no leaders... only easy charmers, ardent in their belief, that only serves nobody ...You should run...I'd vote even if I'm Canadian, run Brian run...
I think I covered all bases
If you don't laugh, you'll cry.
Not allowed to make comments-argh-yes that's probably appropriate, but what torture! You give this the Miller remix, all the same old lies, just a different day, but you put the volcano surfing sunlight on them and watch them explode. I am really afraid for a country that decides its leaders like they elect a prom queen.
It's a scary time for you all there and.. the rest of us.. wondering if sanity will prevail or...shudders.
Well said sir! ;)
They all lie, no matter what party they're in, only some have the decency to not say that the 47% who they think don't count, wouldn't say so, in public.
I laughed aloud and cringed at the same time. Super impressive! I loved too much of the word play to pull out examples, it all shines, unlike the future. You give me continued faith in critical thinking and humanity. It's a precious gift, thank you!
Ha...brilliant..I am so ready for it to be over. Thanks foe your condolences.
"to the echo of, 'we'll just take
your deductions,'"
Love that line. Thanks for sharing!
Ha... this is such perfect commentary on all the commentary... and it all just makes my head spin. And spin and spin....
I smiled and cringed and nodded my head all the way through.
brilliant...I love the reading of it..and the asides!
LOVED this. My sentiments exactly. I am headed off to Canada if the crazies take over the country. Oh, wait. They already did, eons ago. Might as well stay put then ;)
Fantastic ramblings, and it makes a lot more sense than most of the politico-speech I hear about. Still, the elections in your country provide us in Europe with some entertainment, that we all eagerly watch, because your votes actually do impact our lives as well.
the first stanza is a poem all unto itself...its alive, but is it living...and that does sort of sum up our current state of politics/courtry
Brian, this is such a super write and so very true! Love your tongue-in cheek word play. Thanks for hosting and your poem . . . in honor of the media and america public! :)
V O T I N G E A R L Y
and
O F T E N
Excellent - this is a rollicking good satire - yes, I'm looking forward to the debate. Can't predict how it's all gonna go. You bring in so many divergent elements so skillfully - a real joy to read.
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Brian just so you know, I do read your poems, but I almost never know what to say about them! :) That's not a criticism. I often think you are saying so much more than I am getting out of them.
Love it. I'm glad you were able to get it all out. I love the start up line about the lie of the heartbeat and that last bit too, about who paid for your poem.
Love it! Great summary Brian.
That sounds like poetry to my ears...like it much, very clever and very incisive...I am just a spectator of course, but I and many like me are also affected...
I love this! I love the stream of consciousness, the "backwoods banjo bent" and "nature abhors a vacuum,so does my cat" leading into the air sucking out of the room! And I love the disclaimer at the end! The whole thing is genius. Well done!
Nice fast beat with your rant! Yes, I'm more than ready for it to be over. too much negativity being slung!
I just love your social commentary, Brian. I'm really feeling the jagged edges here. I particularly enjoy the simplicity here:
"someone.
failed.
math."
Depending on which side one's on, it's hard to remain hopeful when this is an election of rich vs. poor.
"nature abhors a vacuum,
so does my cat & yet
all the air sucks out the room at
'no new taxes'"
Yeah, like I believe that one. I'll be buyin' that Brooklyn Bridge now! Election fervor (fever?) is building. I was already sick of the mud-slinging months ago, i.e: (http://insideoutpoetry.blogspot.com/2012/03/mud-season.html) These next few weeks can't pass quick enough for me!
I love it!
Cheers,
Delaina
This made me very sad, you know over here everyone can still access health care...mind you sometimes the wait is long... but they take more and more off those who can't afford it... I am sad and angry I guess you say it all... that gap gets wider and wider and those on the fringes have no voice or vote!
This made me very sad, you know over here everyone can still access health care...mind you sometimes the wait is long... but they take more and more off those who can't afford it... I am sad and angry I guess you say it all... that gap gets wider and wider and those on the fringes have no voice or vote!
this is brilliant, brian...should be taught and dissected in college
haha
A clever man, you are.
=)
Wish that we had early voting here. But SC is still trying to bring back slavery in whatever form it can.
OK! so its a night of poetry and politics yeah? :D ... Nice one Brian!
ha, this made me smile a lot!
"'In God we Trust' is
still on the dollar? well most,
or vice verse, i surf
sunLight, off lips
of erupting volcanoes"
brilliant lines.
thanks for a great read yet again!
wow - yes - we are all ready for this election season to come to a close. Loved the rhythm changes thru out the poem - wonderfully fun out loud too! K
"& run by men inside, while out
we wait for a riff
of deliverance"...
I'll be out of town during elections, already sent in my absentee ballot... It was extra cool because my 18 year old daughter was home from college visiting and we voted together... felt good to know at least two votes are in supporting the 47% of us. (that's right I'm on ssdi... I have MS... just like romney's wife, well sort of...hmmm... she doesn't need ssdi)
Oh, I am ready! This if funny and too true!
Brilliant .. Just made me smile and I must say nicely penned.
Shadiatique
I had a read of this earlier today. Really captivating writing! I Enjoyed it!
oh, my! however did you manage to neither comment nor question? you are a good teacher, Mr. Miller!
saaaay.... have you thought about running for office? {smile}
really great staccato feel..
You speak truth, my friend. And don't worry about it being taped. At this point, you haven't got a chance at ever being president, so might as well go ahead and be honest.
HA! Very clever, bold and brave, besides well dome as always.
Canadian here, but did wear a Elect Obama cap before he became the 44th president but due to fiscal tightening I just added 'Re' with a brush this time.
Though quirky and flippant there is mush that is relevant for the times. Coffee shop tough talk -I enjoyed this, good shtufffs.
Hey Brian
better out than in! (does that feel better?;) The best way to vent is in the poetic place. You give us all the lumps and diversions of the political scape as it oscillates endlessly toward an oblique oblivion: we can only hope!
My moggy also hates a Hoover! ;D
Thanks bro
very of-the-moment, b. my favorite bit was the "do[nate]"... best use of a parenthetical i've seen in a while. smiles. you had me from "stethoscope"....
I'd love to hear this one aloud. You are rockin' it tonight. Love your passionate pieces. Brian Miller for President!
Oh, Brian Won't we be glad when we get to the nexus of this political season?
I am so ready for this to end! I am so brain numb I don't even care who wins. I need to wake up because that is probably what they want!
You have truly outdone yourself, Brian. You have my vote. ;) slightly snide and just worth a second read. Thanks. You and your "dVersers" add to my life. Boldness, like strong coffee. It's how I take my friends. ;)
ForMorBS... but, isn't it all suppose to work?
What happen to the system? Too many people? Everyone thinks they are right. Fifty fifty...Not 49. (No offense)... and then we vote.
We vote.
Beware of stating the truth.
"Some people can't handle the truth."
Brian, meat and potatoes for me. Saw the debates and glad to see Obama feisty. I don't think young women are taking the threats to their reproductive freedoms seriously, so I wrote on that...
LOVE that field trip, plus "I abhor a vacuum (so does my cat") BRILL. Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/10/14/since-the-procedure/
awesome piece Brian, great tone, a nice mix of voice, love the phrasing throughout but especially how one stanza really flows into the next, excellent read. thanks
Election time for you ... poetry and politics a powerful mix :)
Right to the heart of the problem.
At your scathing best, Brian! Yeah how I do wish elections were over! Great Write :))
Powerful stuff, Brian. I don't envy you having to put up with all those debates and stuff.
This had me in hysterics - realising all the time how deadly serious it is. Clever trick that! Have to hand it to you. Best I've read in a long time.
Brian, you should put your poems into a book although perhaps you don't think it is worth it since far more people can read them on the internet. But your stuff is good, should be recognised by the literary establishment too, if that is what you want.
Well done, Brian! Comes off kind of like a slap fight in your mind. As for the elections being over, I don't think so. It appears we have come to a time when campaigning is a constant thing. I've leaarned to take most of it with a grain of salt, and I've decided there definitely is such a thing as too much information.
If only we could trust politicians . . . *sigh*
Someone.
Failed.
Math....
Hahahahahaahhha! Yes friend, indeed!
Must be great living in a country where everyone is so rich they don't need a government health care system.
Kind of crazy that this is what you're left with after a visit to both parties' offices. But I think you've got it dead-to-rights. Someone failed math, indeed.
Very interesting exercise to have to see these two contrasting political perspectives and remain 'neutral' I have to work in political environmentS all the time so tend to see beyond most political rhetoric to what implementing the policy means. you might be be surprised to learn that much politics is changing the label on the policy tin rather than its content! My cutting is your targeting
Yes, we are all afloat in b.s. o disgusting image-- but you manage to do something quite daring-- pull off a unique political poem-- I'm with ya--f i have offended, not to worry
47% of you don't matter anyway
oh heck, let's just round that up
enough to star
the spangled banner
wonderful! xj
poetry, as you have proven, is the perfect outlet. I enjoy your wit on display!
awesome brian, and a lot of someones failed math for years.
you have tapped into my exact feelings towards this nightmare of a process...your words lent me the release I needed! Amen brother ~ Send love and peace Rose
Feeling political today?
you are a great teacher - i laughed with the someone failed math line! 19 days and counting
I found a lot to identify in this entertaining, well-written piece. Funny and insightful!
Brian,
Great poem. I'm glad you took on a poem about the politics. I couldnt help but laugh at one point though. The end was brilliant. Thanks for sharing!
~Corbie SinclaiR
that was quite an entertaining -- I mean informative -- spiel. I look forward to the campaign ad-thumbs up and smiling face!
(an aside: you're last comment to me was much appreciated, though you rarely miss returning the favor with at least one smile.)
Hard to find a shred of genuine compassion and sincere intent to bring much-needed change in the weasel words of politicians. I like how you take this on, Brian.
Your poem is as gritty as our political reality, though I will take your poem a hundred times over the political reality.
Whoever wins or loses, I can't wait for all of the politicking to be over.
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