Friday, October 26, 2012

55 - afternoon urban ballet

skate park graffiti, Lynchburg, VA

brick back drop,
blacktop drop back,
no black board, back board,
chain net

chiSH

trash talk chest bump,
high five,
post up, pass back
behind'a back dish,
juke, alley-oop,
airwalk swoosh,

chiSH

reps birth & die
in moments

spotlight, sun fades,
stars dim stardom
everyone goes home
'cept some

baDUM baDUM
lowrides roll on

chiSH

written in 55 words, for g-man.

50 comments:

kaykuala said...

No.#1

Hank

the walking man said...

Don't you just love the megawatt base after dark? round here the stereo is worth more than the house they park the car next to. BaDUM!!BADumm!! Just dumb.

So what's the word on the cowboys?

izzy said...

I love the sounds ! I thought those letters were the name of a place!
Chish reminds me of Cheeesh!
Thanks-

kaykuala said...

Staccato bursts I see here, Brian! Lots of fun with words. Yes, great word play! Nicely!

Hank

Tabor said...

Rapping in the city. I do not live near that rhythm and activity but you sang it well. You must write me a poem about dirt bikes and country western boomboxes across the river at sunset. Worse than it sounds!

Daniel said...

Good rhythm to this piece. Loved it man.

Mary said...

Love the wordplay here! Love the rhythm. I could see this done as a You-Tube video!

Daydreamertoo said...

Aren't they fabulous to watch too. So daring, or silly....lol
Great 55

SueAnn Lommler said...

Love the beat!! Quite rhythmic...Love it
Hugs
SueAnn

Claudia said...

oh i love to watch them...and you brought the scene so alive with the sound and great rhythm..

G-Man said...

The urban jungle of of...Lynchburg?
(Just messin wit ya)
Perfect peek into the daily drama Son.
This could be ANY city, (exceptin maybe Possum Hollow)
Fantastic 55
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Alice Audrey said...

Um... basketball?

Chantel said...

chISH is an awesome word. The cadence of this was pulsing with beautiful, brave, ragged life.

Valerie said...

I'm totally lost, Brian. What was I supposed to be listening to?

hedgewitch said...

Birth and death as sudden, as much a matter of chance(or focus?) as a good hoop shot, and the sounds, that exaggerated pulse of life, the bass heartbeat that shakes glass--great imagery in this short one, brian--even my ruralized butt can feel the 'juke and airwalk swoosh.'

Pearl said...

Love how the words FEEL like skatepark!

Pearl

Tara Miller said...

It's fun to watch them livin life through your eyes. Nice title and sounds, my love! Think we need another trip to the skate park soon.

Pat Hatt said...

Back to Back
Hank's #1 attack
Back in play
Backing back today
Back to the sheep
Back to the creep
Front to back
Back to the flack
Attack of the back
Be back to your shack

Monkey said...

nicely played miller :)

RNSANE said...

A bit of a change from all the Hindi music I have heard for the past five months. You have such a talent. At least, you didn't blast my eardrums.

My 55 is at: http://rnsane.blogspot.in/2012/10/friday-flash-55.html#links

Lorraine said...

oh my gosh, extraordinaire, I read it out loud,loved it, now that's a
wrap

Lorraine said...

I meant a rap

Myrna R. said...

When I lived in the city, the music was different but the scene so similar. It was du op in those days. Oh my, I'm getting old.

Like this a lot - makes me think - the more things change, the more they stay the same.

JANU said...

Seems like a rap song to me. Couldn't understand much :-(

rosaria williams said...

I hear a beat, young, restless, full of passion and possible mischief.

Jan Mader said...

Playing with words is fun to do and hear! Loved it...

hope said...

I can not only see it, I can hear it. Great, as always!

Laurie Kolp said...

Fun piece, Brian. Did you dance, too? = )

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Fun Brian! Chish!

Francesca said...

You've got rhythm that's for sure! Fantastic poem! I am a new follower from Sicily!

Francesca said...

Oooops, I didn't realize I was already following you:)

manicddaily said...

Sheesh! A sounding board. k.

RMP said...

a lovely dance. especially for my tongue as I tried read that first stanza.

Cheryl said...

This is so rich with sound and action and I feel as though I standing on the sidelines watching it all.

One of the finest 55s you've ever written.

Leovi said...

A good poem that can be applied to the current situation in Spain.

Okie said...

it's been a while since I've hung around a skate park or basketball playground, but your use of words and sounds really brought it all back.

Well done. :)

Grace said...

I like the sounds and beat of this urban dance ~

Wishing you happy weekend ~

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

Hi! Brian...
Try saying these words fast or 100 times:
"brick back drop,
blacktop drop back,
no black board, back board..."

lol
Thanks, for sharing [the image that compliment] your poetic words:which seems to have movement, a flow, a rhythm, an[d] a beat Of their own...too!

[I hope that you and your readers, have a great week-end too!]

deedee :)

Steve E said...

To witness anyone display skills they've perfected is a thrill and a blessing. But when it is the young* Peeps showing the fruit of their sweat-and-tears, I become happy...and smile, knowing the world is going to be OK, left in the hands of Peeps like these.

...and of course, poets who immortalize them--grin!!!!!!!

*Do "old" guys and dolls do this also?

A terrific 55-word piece, Sir!
PEACE, Sir!

Dave King said...

Delicious word play. Wonderful stuff, feeds the child in all of us. I just love it.

Adura Ojo said...

Love the beat, Brian. Keep drumming...smiles.

ayala said...

Fun to watch :)

Shakira Choong said...

Great illustration and extremely vivid images painted. All in 55 words...YOU ARE ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT!!! Have you and your family a truly blessed weekend. hugs shakira

lifeisaroadtrip said...

Your words are so good, Brian. I can hear and see everything you write so vividly!

Eva Gallant said...

The sights and sounds are vividly depicted; I feel like I am there.

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

Cool! Cool!..

JJRod'z

my heart's love songs said...

LOVING the rhythm of this, Brian! fabulous fifty-five!

Syd said...

Every time seems to have a rumble of some sort. But I have to say that the vibration coming from within the cars that makes everything around shake a bit, is a bit much.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Wonderful word play, blending the soft and hard sounds. Love, "reps birth and die in moments". Quiet here in the country. I don't miss the baDUM at all!

Sue said...

I could definitely hear these words and the beat they hammered out. Well done, Brian!

=)