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| Cole & i, reflected in the pace car, Bristol Motor Speedway |
she wears a red tiger stripe thong,
things i should not know, but
her jeans run low,
high riding strip & no
one tells her, the boys
enjoy the show from the back row
form pictures in their heads
of bare ass cheeks & lust-i-vous nights
in dimly lit back seats, downstairs
bed rooms or felt pool tables
with tight corner pockets
'mom, we're just studying'
hormones & history, whore-moans hisStory,
(their Ms.-spelling, not mine) neglect
by mother England & colonial independence
which leads to rebellion, a revolution in
evolution of new countries, free
enterprise & every time she leans
forward to take notes their eyes
go down on her, lower as the tide rises
blond ponytail bobbing time to the next
---class---
they'll blame her
shouldn't flaunt what you don't want
noticed, fail the test & form callouses
that one day---their wives
will pay the price for
in overused plastic
ringAling, bell rings
class dis-
missed
'Miss'
'Yes'
'Check your...'
(blush)
...things i shouldn't know,
things i just can't miss.
written for Poetry Jam
and Theme Thursday
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Ha! Some moments it is hard to keep one's mind on the schoolwork when there are so many blatant distractions and the hormones are flowing. You painted a vivid word picture here. Brian.
boom
Of course it aches to be flaunted!
Thats the whole Idea!
It's all part of higher education.
I weep for this woman-child for reasons men and boys still don't and likely will never understand.
You know you should join in those poetry jams with your touch, it's incredible you should participate in one but then you could get deaf from all the screaming -creaming women with red thongs ;)
Some are just plain teasers. They enjoy that others could only imagine. It's still fun when it lasted! Nicely Brian!
Hank
oh man, so true what you say, how it happens, what happens...
Oh, I enjoyed this one.
Post a sign on the door...if your tramp stamp is showing you're to close to your thong riding to high.
Oh my! yes is true!
Oh my! I bet she knew it all along. :-)
I like how you painted the scene with your sharp eyes, weaving with hormones and history ~ There are things we should noticed, because there is a price to pay for it in the future if we neglect and fail to.
Also, I am enjoying your pictures ~
haha if the tramp stamp is there
You may as well be aware
As the horomones run
The images that flow can be fun
good for you for pointing it out.
the photo...you were at Bristol? Sigh. ...turning green here...
I'm sure that was difficult for you, but you did the right thing.
Wow Brian...you wrapped that up very nicely...and SO TRUE...all of it...I am HOPEFULLY NAIVE so wanting HER to be innocent in it all...and mortified that YOU had to point out what was obvious to all the males in the room...
A slice of life from all angles... and all ages. Enjoyed reading this, Brian.
I always think it's sad when girls attract attention that way. And of course, the boys respond.
You paint a true picture here, and I think I sense a little commentary on our educational system as well.
Did you blush...hmmm. Ok, I believe you. ~Mary
My my...
Temptation right in front of us all the time.
My, my...what class did you say you were teaching? :)
More proof that temptation comes wrapped in all kinds of packages. This makes me think back a bit to some of the clothes I wore to school...I think I'd kill my daughter if she ever tried to dress like that! Very nicely done, Brian, really enjoyed it.
My daughter is a teenager and now in college...this is something every mom has to digest. Sex education is important but, does it serve the purpose?
Great response to the prompt Brian--probably a fairly universal male dream and experience! Somehow male underwear did not interest me in high school LOL.
Ha! Crazy! k.
That whole thong thing is just not cool. And I'll bet it's not comfortable, either.
(I do not speak from experience...)
;)
(P.S. enjoyed the views - all of yours I mean. We live in a very complicated culture, and maybe kind of self-indulgent too - well, you know -) k.
Love this moment you captured so well....the teacher's discomfiture.......so real. You are such a nice man, Brian!
I don't know if the young girls today understand how things like this effect how men will treat them-as objects and with disrespect. I know my opinion is not fashionable, but thongs and tramp stamps don't make for healthy monogamous relationships later in life.
You've caught what happens in the mind quite well with this Brian.
Great beat and wordplay, Brian
you had me at tiger striped thong ;)
This ain't the first time when you picked up a regular day and spun it into a poetry...
Things I know ;)
Hugs xoxo
Why would a young lady at that age even be wearing a thong if not to be seen?
Thank goodness you had the common decency to tell her (if she wasn't aware) Some things just shouldn't be seen by anyone in public, cracks in butts and thongs are one of them.
Very diplomatic and compassionate Brian
nice
this is the sort of thing I'm trying to educate my kids on as they approach the teenage years. Fortunately my daughter is still very much about modest dressing. Hopefully we can keep her that way. :)
i think it's great that you told her.. some maybe do dress like this on purpose but some have no idea what they're doing to the boys around them..love all the wordplays in this and the colonial independence leading to rebellion..ha...true that..
It's amazing how exposed kids are these days!
Some deep truths here, very well written - I enjoyed this too.
...and she wonders why she is not taken seriously.
Not a fan of whale-tail, but a big fan of the wonderland that is your brain.
What's disturbing is when you see someones thong as they bend over adjusting something on stage, that they are presenting, in front of the church, and they are the missionary couple requesting donations. ew
Wow! Very well expressed Brian! How do you tell someone their thong is showing? Then again, I would guess they know already...says the breeze. Great write!
This is AWESOME!!! Super hot. A distraction for even those who don't want to be distracted. Excellent sound, rhythm, and word play throughout. Here are some of my favorites:
"red tiger stripe thong" ... You got my attention from the get-go, just like all the drooling boys you're writing about. :)
Did I mention that I love this???
"strip & no" ... Contradictory messages she's sending.
"no one tells her ..." LOL, she knows! You can usually feel the air down there when that happens. But in her defense, it is hard to keep your pants pulled up when they're all low-rise these days. That's when tank top undershirts come in handy.
"lust-i-vous" ... So clever!
"felt pool tables" ... Ha! Good play with "felt."
"tight corner pockets" ... You know I was snickering like a junior-high kid the whole way through. :)
"we're just studying hormones & history" ... Your line to line overlapping meanings are always so clever and tight. You're a really smart writer, Brian.
"whore-moans" :)
"their eyes go down on her" Sheesh! Nice.
"shouldn't flaunt what you don't want" ... So smart here, the way you've conveyed the fact that she wants it noticed because she doesn't want it ... any part of herself. She hates who she is, so she pretends to be someone else, to get attention in a way that makes her feel good, if only momentarily.
"form callouses" ... Your double meanings are so good!!!
"overused plastic ringAling" Ouch.
"class dis" ... So true. They're all gawking, but at the same time they're making fun and hurting her.
"dis-missed" ... Again with your multiple meanings. She (maybe) missed the fact that she was being dissed or objectified or talked about behind her back. And also, she is "dis-Missed" in that she is not being treated like a nice young lady.
"'Check your...'(blush) ... So clever. Blush goes on the cheeks, but not those cheeks! Yours, though. :)
"...things i shouldn't know,
things i just can't miss" ... Love your closing. :)
I loved this! I laughed right out loud.
It is hard to follow flipside . . . so let me just say that you can ask a female colleague to speak to her, but you should not, not even with a gesture--really. It's dangerous. Course this is just fiction, a vision of the time line a man straddles one foot in boy-youth another in teacher-respect and another where? Kicking someone else's butt? In the feminist reality? Balancing in the path of afather of young boys? Maybe there are just 2 feet.
I laughed out loud too. But, you still cannot judge a book by it's cover, or lack of cover. I am smiling.
Oh, my. Your new job opens up a whole new world of observations.
A fun read about a little slice of life. Kids will be kids.
Didn't she know she was dissing herself with that style...sigh...you were right to mention the unmentionable but probably better as someone suggested to have informed a female colleague. Uncomfortable all around. Yes, you see more, and it becomes poetry.
hmm, caught the vision and the beat, and I blushed for her, and for you, but grateful you were a gentleman and pointed it out to her...blessings, Sir...(since you called me,"M'am" in one of your comments)...smiles
I don't know about this one. Things are done for many reasons and woman are not that different than men when it comes to attraction and fantasy.
I think there was a dual purpose here and both sides got what they needed, wanted... waited for...
Coming face to face with Playboy and our Puritan ethic.
It's a good poem Brian, but complicated.
you have quite a way of throwing out images and word play. enjoyed. I never assume that a poem is from a persons direct experience but a lot of yours seem to be based on your life and you do well digging out the deeper truths of your experiences :-)
Very nice. That sense of growing up is captured nicely. Love how you painted the scene, the wonderful tone and outstanding wordplay throughout
Nice word play really enjoyed reading
i enjoyed your write as always, Brian.
i did not enjoy some of the men's AND women's comments... i don't give a flying f*ck what a woman is or is not wearing, it is NEVER an open invitation to insults or assaults. YOU know and respect that. it's a damn shame that not all of your readers do.
sorry.
Another piece of great writing!
Splendid stuff. Serious and humorous
at the same time.
Delightful to come across passages like:
hormones & history, whore-moans hisStory,
(their Ms.-spelling, not mine)
Boy, school certainly has changed since I was there... I went to Westminster Choir College in the late 60's and we were not allowed to walk thru the campus without hose!
LOL! I don't think I could pay much attention in class today with all the distractions...
Brian, again, a strong poem that evokes life today as it is.
Lady Nyo
Brian, this was positively brilliant! Such a clever weaving of words-wordplay, things we shouldn't know ms. miss-no miss here, direct hit :-)
You (I know I've told you this many times) are SO creative, SO bright, SO entertaining, SO thought-provoking. This poem a preemo example.
This is my third visit--for Theme Thursday and now Poetry Jam, too. I like this poem better and better.
Wait. Is this a TEACHER? Or a STUDENT?
If this is a TEACHER - shame on her! She should know better!
If this is a student - she would be what we called "prick teaser" in high school!
what a fun read, right there where so much imagination is for so many of us: the classroom. you put me back in high school with this. love the feel of the felt and the playful tight pockets. feels so good to read you again. i just found your nice note at my place. thanks for swinging by. i am doing okay, dealing with the anxiety of a job where i'm on call all the time and working toward making a safe space where i can feel free and write poetry. your words are so wonderfully inspirational. thanks so much, bri.
Read twice...funny...humorous..:-) nice one..
you mean she doesn't do it on purpose? I've seen it so often in places like the DMV and in the stores that I thought it was a fashion statement.
I love how you wove hands through the 55 words. It amazes me what one can do with a guitar (and piano, for that matter) and a sonnet is no mean feat. Always a treat to read what you write, Brian.
As a former teacher, I really appreciated this!
Whoa, freaking awesome, Dude!
Wish I didn't know a lot too. Interesting to get a glimpse into the male mind here. :) :)
We're only studying. Remind me of the movie Juno for sure.
Loved the colonial trip then back!
AWESOMENESS!!!
xo
I liked what Pat said about the "prick teaser" and was thinking that this female knew exactly what was showing. Trust that almost every female knows what she flaunts and what she doesn't.
But I was just thinking that maybe she was practicing for if she ever got a plumbing job. She just was letting her rear hang out there for all to see and thought the thong would help cover up her crack in the head.
She needs to have a little more self respect and realize that surprising a man is a lot more effective then putting it out there for the whole world to see.
Happy Theme Thursday, that would have been one conversation I would have liked to have seen.
God bless.
Poor you, Brian, hehehe, I am sure she knew! No innocent girls any more and... you blushed, did you really?
Hormones, History, hisStory, an amusing and spicy scene, thanks.
:)
I hope she was not a teacher?
does she know? or does she not? I do sometimes wonder. is this the female version of boxers showing? granted I doubt that hindered girls from focusing on history.
That was just wonderful.
Sounds like the sap is rising. It's like trying to keep a bee from a flower.
What a wonderful way to say it .....so true...smiles too..the way you expressed it....with hormones and history....dressing manners should come from home, the first school.....
Ahh, high school.
This captured it perfectly, brian.
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