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| Cole, Branson, MO |
'butt down, head up
3-point stance'
'on the whistle,
run'
'the second,
stop'
'butt down, head up
3-point stance'
'got it?'
'who are WE?'
'Broncos'
'who ARE we?'
'Broncos'
'break it down'
'HUWAH'
'again'
'HUWAH'
(tweet)
(tweet)
a golden horizon stretches
shadows downfield, fading
'#12, where's your mouthpiece?'
'everyone back,
start over'
(tweet)
Over at dVerse today, Claudia is running Meeting the Bar and has us writing Impressionist poetry-you can google Impressionist paintings if you want to get the idea. The other day at my son's football practice, I climbed a hill and watched from a distance...the only sounds were the coach yelling and the grunts of the 7 & 8 year olds as day became night.
Also, said in 55 words, for g-man.
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Mary and Hank are worst!
I think that is practice. Do it, do it again...
Grunting and punting
The coach doesn't sound like Good Will Hunting
Yelling with the up and down
As you capture the hill crown
King of the hill
As you watch like Buffalo Bill
nice. I may try this prompt - very different and a great idea. You seem to have hit all of the characteristics of impressionisms:
Relatively small, thin, yet visible brush strokes
Open composition
Emphasis on accurate depiction of light in its changing qualities (often accentuating the effects of the passage of time)
Common, ordinary subject matter
Inclusion of movement as a crucial element of human perception and experience
Unusual visual angles
(per Wikipedia...smiles)
ha, reminds me of my assistant coach days,....you are the word master my friend.
Super cute picture! :-)
7 & 8 year olds grunting and running and hitting and playing and learning to be a team. This is a good thing. I liked the way this looks from a distance. :)
I only found out about 'huwah' this week. Odd that you should use my new word!
Great poem. As usual!
Oh. Football. I thought maybe so, but I've avoided it most of my life so I thought it might be a pool thing, too.
I think your impressionism worked, because you definitely took me back there...
=)
Lots of fun here - terrifically vivid for all its distillation. Huah! I don't think I spelled that right. Lovely. k.
the work is never done...do it again do it again!
Cole is so cute!
Head down, butt up has always meant hard work to me - this post is a reminder that practice makes perfect.
I can see them. So cute.
It's as if you stepped out of time, to watch your children growing.
Perhaps eventually your son will play for the Green Bay Packers, Brian. Couldn't resist... (Smiles) 7 and 8 year olds are such enthusiastic players. Love to watch that age group.
Yes, just a few strokes, eh sounds, and we get the jest. Lovely.
:)
Can coaches say "butt"? haha
Hi! Brian...
Tks, for sharing the picture Of your son Cole...What a good-looking young man...too!
I must say that you have captured the sounds [in your poetry] Of what 7 and 8 years olds experience
at foot-ball practice.
deedee :)
like the HUWAH most.
You captured the spirit of practice!
Love this--the practicing players as beetles, the sounds. You so caught this!
LOL Would seem pretty funny to hear it and not see it. I bet they do look like beetles in the fading light and distance too.
A fun read :)
Love this, Brian... hard to believe it's already that time of year, huh?
It's like some primitive ritual--painted faces, odd postures, magical incantations. Reminds me of some of Rousseau's work, if we're going Impressionist. Loved it, bri.
Cute pic...looks like he's having a great time.
A long as the kids are enjoyong their sports, that's what counts.
Our school mascot was the "bronchos", too. But yes, spelled that way. They spelled it wrong when they first announced it and kept it that way : )
smiles...i like...just wondering how monet had painted a football game...you do well and make me see it even though i never saw a single football game in my life..but psssshhhh... don't tell anyone...smiles
I hated the repetive nature of practices.
Makes me ready for some football!
Let me guess...two-a-day practice...ugh. If I tried now I would curl up on the grass and cry like a baby!
This is a fun poem! You caught the essence of football practice well.
I felt like I was there.... ;) This is a fun read and sounds like a fun prompt! The sounds of football make me excited for the fall season.
... and that's the way it is, loved the ending lines
Oh, my, thanks for reminding me that it is that time again. My husband will be happy. Me? meh.
By the way have you written something about auto correct? If you did then I must have missed it or forgotten. I was just thinking the other day I wished I could write something about it besides *&%$#(*!
Loved the title, Brian. And you captured the whole nature of practice, with just the right brush strokes.
I can HEAR this.
Interesting to see a longish poem almost entirely consisting of short speech. Nicely done
Very cute - I know nothing about football, but I totally got what was happening from your words. Great fun!
Audio sports poetry!
It's like a haiku with sound:
"a golden horizon stretches
shadows downfield, fading"
and I hear it, I hear it! I could have my eyes closed and know what it is, but I would miss the beetles crawling in a golden glow. Fun take on impressionism!
Fun poem, captured in the moment..nice to stand back a bit & watch the sun set :)
I see it all...
Very realistic! i could almost feel I was there running and jumping with them and the coach looking my way. Nice write Brian!
Hank
Love it! You truly captured the moment.
Ah, the memories in this one, Brian; as a player, coach and dad. Been there and done that. Love the way you painted it!
Good going...at practice, especially the grunts of air! gardenlilie.com
Love how you captured this, Brian...nice, quick brush strokes. And cute photo of Cole.
You found the perfect spot to capture the sights and the sounds of memories. What is even more of a treasure is that your writing is your legacy to your kids that you were there.
Nice capture Brian ~ I like the sounds of this ~
Don't think I can write tonight...too tired from work but will catch up over the weekend ~ Smiles ~
I hear this being chanted, hands clapping, whistles blowing. And then doing it again. Great.
Amazing capture of such a moment, Brian. Sounds like the coach is quite the professional "driller." Thought you were talking about the NFL in this, until I read your note at the bottom!!
That brings back some memories for me as a youth too.
Very cool Brian, I remember watching my brother practice while I waited up on the hill. This brought back memories.
I love this! There's nothing like little kids playing football.
Ha. Girls say "no pain, not gain" when at the beauty parlor. I guess boys say that when playing football!
i still can't stop smiling and chuckling and now my wife wants to know what the heck ;-)
your postscript really helped wrap it right ;-)
and,
"#12, where's your mouthpiece?" -
priceless, can see this ten years from now, "#12, where's your hat soldier" or "#12, where'd you leave that file!" while hoping to hear, "# 12, you wanna come in for a bit..."
those boys down there, those beetles, gonna remember all those grunts and huffs as their good ole kid days ;-) and, like i do now with my dad, that you were there watching 'em, yeah, priceless...
Oh yes, you're bringing back bad memories of football practice in the Southeast, hot and humid and go, go, go... I quit in my second season.
Very clever... we live in Queensland...Bronco territory! Though within my house, it's Eels territory... I myself am neutral...best way to be during footy season. It was a terrific write, you captured the chant well!!!
I hated practicing in August.
Thats when I went out and got a job!
Loved your Grid Iron 55 Son
Thanks for playing, and NEVER say your sorry to me for doing "Dad Stuff".
Have a Kick Ass Week-End
Very minimal and I was there - watching those kids games and knowing it would be over in a blink..and it was. Well done.
See! You do such a great job every time...concise - sharp - spot on...I love your 55s.
I have a challenge. Write something that will make me laugh. I need a good laugh.
Love your approach, Brian. Hey I gotta learn to write like that.
Oh, I loved your "impression" of the practice you were watching, Brian..I could hear it myself. Cute, happy photo of your son too..very sweet.
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For a minute there, I thought you were writing about the Olympics. Nice one.
Simple words yet, can visualize the whole picture here...nice.
aw...that's a really cute photo of him. Branson is just memories now! Football practices have started here, too....can't believe summer is almost over!
any news? still praying....
you are so good at this! love the way you grab what life has to offer and shell it out with words. brilliant write. happy almost-fall and football.
:)
heh-heh, must be fun to be one of your kids ~ I like what you've done with this prompt Brian ~ nice slice of life :)
I like a shape of your words mad in this work. well done and I hope all is well.
nice. Definitely had no idea a football themed piece would appear tonight. Really nice spin on the impressionist idea. Fun to read. and the bit about the moutchpiece, priceless.
Very effective, Brian. Almost a found poem, although the craft is in the organisation of language and the strong phonic and aural sense of the piece.
Dear Brian, sorry for my long absence, I guess life demanded my attention, in a good way.;)
Cole is cute and looks as if he is enjoying himself.:) Hope you have been well, how is the job hunt going?
Have a great weekend,
xoxo
This brilliantly covers all aspects. Simple and quick, about the moment.
brilliant as always, Brian! your eye for details really works with this style!
Vivid and vibrant - full of life, my ideal of a great impressionist painting/poem.
Like An Incantation:Like A Prayer.
Too long ago to remember...smiles. Love Cole's picture, Brian. Have a great weekend.
:) feel the excitement
Very interesting play here, and it works, just mainly describing what you hear. :)
This tweet thing I just don't get- BUT I think you cast an impression!
and did it in 55- thanks-
Nice picture; nice poem and nice you lol
any news? I pray dear have a nice weekend!
It first I thought a dune buggy, then a scooter, then I wasn't sure..all to good effect!!
WOW, that was ONLY 55 words, you said a lot!!
What a great shot. Always wanted to see Branson, maybe one day I shall.
Glad to hear of the sports, I think it's one of the best things kids can get into, because there's lots of "naughty" things for kids to get into, as you well know.
HAPPY WEEKEND!! xo
What fun...tweet....everyone applaud!!
Hugging you
SUeAnn
drill drill drill!!
have fun!
oh its good to read you again !
this is a new one for me impressionist poetry "...hmm..need to stop over at claudia's ...i'd love to try this out !
is that ur son ? cute !
(tweet!)
Love it.
Practice makes perfect! :)
Love your new pic! You face looks as sweet as your writing is! Hope all is well with you and yours, and football signals the start of fall..... :-)
Makes me glad I'm a girl who only babysat for a football coach so he could go out and make other people's children run. ;)
Wonderful imagery, as always.
oh dear, that all sounds so very....American...!
is it sad that I did not realize it was football? at least know I know what a 3-point stance is. I'm guessing the (tweet) was the whistle...I would have like to have heard some of the grunting you mentioned.
Really cute piece.
i knew it was football as soon as you said three point stance.
i like the butt up part best
what's up with Good Will Hunting?
foam
Love it :-) fav time of year starting Football .. smell it
I remember those days. you capture it well - like the details of the landscape and asking about the mouthguard
Oh my, football season already?! Hope it is not too hot for the youngsters. You've caught it perfectly, although what I'm remembering are the cheerleaders in HS aping the football team's pre-game warmup (I was in the band; we had a lot of fun with that one)...
Go (Virginia) Broncos!
Catching up from all my travels ... always a pleasure to come here. Sending positive energy your way on your job search. It'll happen!
All from a hilltop, eh? :) My kids did very few sports but I can recall some of the coaches with similar enthusiasm.
sounds like Olympics to me!!!
seriously though, I love the rhythm in your poem. Beautifully done as always.
Mine is here
Have you a Rocking Weekend!
hugs
shakira
I love every word of this read, B ... plus the titel!!! :) Greetings and kisses for your own 2 little beetles as well :)
Cole is so cute :)
interesting concept here mate, but nevertheless one of your best...
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