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Sex (is Poetry)
i love the feel of you(r
words) in my mouth,
rolling my tongue around
(vowels)
the sound of you(r
thoughts) run rampant
in my mind
& i sigh as i come
(to the last line)
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Over at dVerse Poets, Gay has us writing poetry on poetry, or ars poetica. To deny the relationship between the writer and the reader and our ability to move those that read, is unwise to say the least. Doors open @ dVerse open at 3 pm.
My good friend G-man is back and re-starting 55s on Friday tonight at 8 pm as well, so here is another (slightly snarky) view on poetry and the endless quest for publication at any cost, which for many will cost them the voice they have that makes them special, in just 55 words.
55 - You mean that's it?
writing poetry that sells is easy,
like faking an orgasm---
emotion commotion
confused with reality
(don't worry,
we all do it, wink~wink)
performance to please
academia or---
do it enough, you'll numb
to the magic that got you
writing, at first
if after, i fall asleep,
immediately
keep writing & congrats
on your recent success.
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120 comments:
Besides liking the feel of words in the mouth, I also like the feel of the looks sending warm tingly ideas across the space between. Oh yeah.
Really nice writing.
Very sensual take on writing poetry! Love the use of the parentheses, very nicely done Brian!
An old-fashioned two-fer. Pretty bawdy on the first one, but the style is new to me. I like it. It's like you can follow one of two paths. The second one I can appreciate too. Writers can only hold out for so long on hope before they have to crumble to put some bread on the table. (smiles)
"I'll have what she's having."
Yep, I always like the sexy poems. I wonder why that is? ;)
Both oF these do hit the nail on the head, brian--you have to write with an audience in mind I think, but not with the approval of that audience at all costs in mind. Great to see G-man back and his challenge of writing in 55 words is one of the hardest ones I face--far more so than pleasing academia. ;_)
Sensuous poems can be ticklish. But it's ok. We're all the richer when presented from different angles. Wonderful write Brian!
Hank
Yes, I think the strength and beauty of a poem lies in: it can lead to creative effect by the reader, and that this effect was unpredictable from the writer.
Both kickass poems, my brother. These are both wonderful with great images and phrases I never uttered before, but have thought to myself.
Trying to be inspired, and not merely envious. :)
Sigh.... ~
you know i like them both but the first one just takes my breath away..i won't even tell you how often i read it as it does just exactly what it says.. and heck yes on number two.. published poetry isn't always good poetry and changing style and everything to please the publisher may stab some poems right through the heart...so i prefer my poems unpublished but still breathing...smiles
Well I think I know of two things that inspire you. Sex and your children's happiness. And I think your poetry on both of these subjects is pretty fantastic.
Great to see you doing the 55 again. Maybe someday I will be brave and try it.
God bless.
First was sensual indeed
With some lovey dovey feeling at your feed
Literally maybe as well
As you like to tell haha
Second was grand
But get some stuck ups in the land
But who really cares
They can live in boredom at their lairs
I was waiting for the first poem. Excellent! This is so you... what you are really good at and how it relates to writing poems... how easy it is to start writing for your audience.
Both good... but love the first one.
God, I enjoyed both poems very much, the 36 and the 55. Glad G-Man is back; been missing that challenge. The first poem does it for me, making me realize that once in poem is given birth/freedom it takes on a life of its own, becomes a separate entity--like your children. So for you to turn back and bathe in the sensuality of your own creation, or just speak this insight to your lover is double cool. But the second poem has a line,
/you'll numb/to the magic that got you writing/ that seems so bang on. I love what Claudia said about some of poetics staying "alive" and unmessed with when they remain unpublished.
Sexy and so true!
Some people have a knack for certain genres.
To some, poetry flows like a dripping faucet. To others, like a raging river. You have a wonderful gift of writing anything you choose.
Nice to be back, nice to have your support. I've missed this family of creativity and escape.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
Brian...I actually laughed and have a s eating grin after reading your 55! F-ing fun, and def snarky. I like!!!
Wander
Wouldnt kick the first one out of bed either:-)
Loved both of these Brian - especially the first. Terse, no words wasted, filled with the glory and fire and passion of writing.
The second, is a trenchant commentary on the poor academics who must publish or perish and generally wind up second rate hacks mimicking more established masters!
Thanks a lot for joining in and helping today. Much appreciated!
I haven't smoked a cigarette for over 30 years but I instinctively reached for one after reading this. ;)
Ooh... that first one's so hot!
Loved both of them!
OH MY!!!
I certainly didn't fall asleep for either. Very sexy first one. Who are you writing the second one to? Any particular publication-whore in mind?
I'll say it before and I'll say it again "Your wife is one lucky woman Brian"
Vous faites l'amour avec les mots
Pheeew Is this hot or what ;) Loved the first one, very sexy :)
The second is also very true. Sell your soul to what publishers desire and, what are you left with. Words that have no feeling or meaning to their once, proud owner.
It's great to know kick ass G-Man is back with us all again. :)
HaHa! That is how a poem should be, could be, would be . . . And I think it would sell, and so the second poem is not totally the opposite of the first. Can't we keep the orgasmic nature after success without faking and losing contentment?
Love them both ;)
Poetica erotica!
Brian, I have never, ever faked an orgasm...I loved your verses..:)
what is this "publication" thing of which you speak...?
Good stuff sir!
Sex and poetry- It's all about love, isn't it? And both feel so good. Thanks for the reminder.
Mary
love the parenthetic trickery here.
more of your playful edgy style shining thru.
Okay, I'm laughing and remembering Garrison Keillor's line that men write poetry only to seduce
Very hot! I think the temperature just rose a hundred degrees! I'm glad Sex (is Poetry) because then I get my fix everyday :)
:-)
You rule, and I bow.
These are perfect.
I sense a brother-poem in the piece you posted with the one I put up although mines maybe a bit more orally fixated! Good write B :-)
Mr. Miller, dude, it's been along time....glad to see you are still putting those magic words to paper.
rock on
Omg! really hot an.nice!
I love it when you bring the snark!
Nice bite in the second; I consider my poems un-publishable so I think I am relatively free from pandering :). On the first, wow, that's an intimate engagement with the work, beautiful!
Love them both, but the snark is fantastic!!!!!!
Great reflection on writing! Love your 55!
Oh no...hope it wasn't mine that made you nod off! In regards to the first...well, you had me blushing with the title (Ha! Predictable me) For the second, some of us long for publication to silent the critics who question why we do this. I have to...I always have, and yeah...guess the critics will always be critics because it didn't freaking work! Still fighting like a beast to write every word...but my punches are starting to hit the target much more than they used to ;)
Once money becomes the objective, things are lost.
Re: the first...hooked on phonics? :)
Well, I guess poetry IS sex. It gives birth too, to wondrous, glorious ideas, thoughts, word combinations that grow into mature pieces of art.
As far as poets who desire publication - hope they don't have to change their art too much, to sell their dreams, and I do wish them success.
... so true and raw and tender, B ... everybody is thinking this ... you put into just the right words ...
I like the play of you(r
words tonight ~
I enjoy writing about love and intimacy in this blog ~ I don't know about selling them but I can see lots of writers selling their work like its easy sex ~ It's pity it has come to this ~
Have a kick ass night ~
A twofer! Excellent! Or, hmmmm... was it a threesome??
Indeed, what a conjunction of piems, like some planets in space - Venus and Mars, methinks. You love poem has that intimacy that wants to blow up all boundaries in ecstasy, superbly punful with determined passion. The other, a poem about those poems tharpt might betray this intimate secret of the poem germinating in love. Mars finds a vein to explore. :)
For the first, i have only one word: sigh... And the second? Faking a saleable poem or anything else has never been a strong suit...
I like this very much Brian - it's saucy and astute and raises a smile with some sneaky wordplay. :)
Wowzers... I LOVE that first one... I guess it took all of ... 55 seconds? :)
Great 55 and it's great to have our Thursday fun back.
The first is ee cummings-ish with your clever parantheticals. . .
Hmmm, this is the 55th comment...
how about art for art's sake :)
glad we can celebrate g-man's return.
Entertaining as always...love your witty way with words..definitely sex is poetry!
Uber groovy on the "Sex (is Poetry)" angle- loved the way you put this together (love the groove of your parentheticals). Peace.
I've always said a poem should feel good in your mouth. I will now not be able to say it without blushing. Thank you very much.
Mmmm, this is yummy. I guess you're right, sex is poetry: it can be short and complete, euphorian and climatic, medicinal and full...I love the sound and taste and contentment, now the heart is complete.
And the other one, wink-wink, that's great. That is it...smiles.
Sorry, double clicked and made a duplicate comment.
basic hard core tantalizing - i like it!
had me smiling at all the currents of thought that ran through me as i read line to line ;-)
yea, writer to reader effect, a biggie, might make another great prompt!
thanks brian ;-)
Oh, Lord, Brian!! I am REALLY late making my rounds today. I just have to say I love this poem, the different levels. When you put together your own chapbook, I think this should be the first poem; and I suggest your book's title be Sex (is Poetry) and I can hardly wait for my copy!
I love the sound of your words in my mind and on my tongue. I could never fake it. And I see neither can you.
I second both poems. Passionate poetry, written from the heart, is like surfing great waves of emotion while those poems written with a passion for publication only are about as exciting as watching water boil.
Seriously, whose life has changed because of a few publications? (not mine.) In most cases, I think you have to die before you become famous, but I don't know much (smiles.)
And I also think, why would I want to pay for publications when I can read wonderful (often times superior) poetry for free in the blogosphere!
oh, one more thing - Miller Park, huh? Named after your family, I suppose - ha ha :)
Both tons of fun. I kind of like the first best, but both wonderful. k.
Oh.... (blush) that was really great, Brian. :-)
Brilliant comparison...love them both.
Brilliant comparison...love them both.
The first two lines are my favorite.
Warm and sensual, like the velvety texture of excellent chocolate.
Thanks for doing Friday 55!
Mine's here. :)
naughty poet!
Pleasant thoughts &
Aloha from Waikiki
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writing is a pleasurable orgy in it's own right every emotion pounds through you and this sums it up perfectly
Given how often I've fallen in love with my words or my characters, I'd say you're spot-on.
Like the first one more than the second one.
You mean that sex and love can be words as well!
Ooh, lots of oooohs, wonderful words, loving the bawdiness in the first, great write Brian
Yup, that relationship exists :). But more for the reader, in most cases, I think, than the writer :).
Heehee now you know why I'm no good at poetry..... grins.
The high on finishing a poem that pleases the poet is at least as good as sex! You've hit the nail on the head with this one. And as for writing to be published - weeelll, it's not as easy as that: no matter how we study the market to see what sells, in the end it is all down to the quirks and prejudices of the publishers. Write what you can't NOT write, say I.
a double shot. Cool. Each piece really says a lot and love the angle you took, especially in the first piece. Great read(s)
Yeah, I've had sex like this: start off totally sensuous and explicit and end up all of a giggle. As (nearly) always, I thoroughly enjoyed it.
To deny the relationship between the writer and the reader and our ability to move those that read, is unwise to say the least.
Hi! Brian...
I agree with the quote [that I quoted] above 100% and I also like your very[play-ful]
play on words in your 1st poem... too!
[Cont...]
"performance to please academia or---do it enough, you'll numb
to the magic that got you writing, at first..."
I think that the words that I have quoted above sums up your words here:
"so here is another (slightly snarky) view on poetry and the endless quest for publication at any cost, which for many will cost them the voice they have that makes them special..."
Tks, for sharing the image too!
[By the way, I liked both poems too!]
deedee ;-D
OFFFF....what a write...and how you delivered the thought....superb!
ShowBiz!
Ahhhh...writing until numb to the original intent!! Can so easily happen.
And your first piece...sex! Loved that...so tender!!
And insightful
Hugs
SueAnn
"Sex is poetry" Nicely done.
I certainly don't want YOUR thoughts running rampant in my mind! I have
just chased mine outside! aaaand
Men can't really fake an orgasm---
Who wants to touch the nasty realm of (fame) and publishing??!
See you got my Goat! szmilesz...
:) Beautiful
Love #55. I've only submitted my work a few times so I can't say I've shared this experience, ut I'll say right now that I'd rather lose opportunity, than lose myself. ::wink::
Very interesting connection!
Sensual poem!
Back with the 55s - great!
Please don't ever "numb to the magic that got you writing". Be successful - but be you!
Ok Brian, This is a different tone than ur usual but I love to hear this side of your words...ESP since its my speciality lol...I may have to restart doing 55's as well....Its been so long...I currently have a sexy poem half written and hope to have up soon...Faking this oragasm gets harder to reinvent the verbal expression without saying the exact thing as last time lol
Brian...I think it's a bit like anything else...do it too much and you get blase...don't do it enough and you get that great longing inside eating you up...as usual great verse!
I think I need a little more poetry in my life! :-)
Both of the poems were good--the first one in an "in your face" kind of way and the second one I think we can all identify with. Both of them also shared a conciseness that I felt gave a more powerful impact by concentrating the energy.
Very nice!
Double-entendre for a double-five Friday. Nicely managed, Brian!
First poem is very cool (and kinda hot!).
Second poem is right on.
=)
Well. It isn't always faking, sometimes it's just tailoring to suit.
Nice pair.
having trouble separating the two,
now that I've read you(r
two parts) together.
brilliant, Brian.
Nice! Love the comparison. Not sure if I should blush or laugh...
BRILLIANT! Both of them!
Both are fantastic, but I like Sex (is poetry) better. Delicious!
A hot scent comes off of this like an expanding cone.
Ok, not really. I was just trying to do with my comment what you were doing with the entry. ~Mary
I too love the words and sounds rolling in my mouth...
As the play with form.
Clever and fun!
So playful - love them both
I enjoyed both of these Brian, nice to see you having some fun in the first one and, as other commenters said, the () work well
The second was sad but true
"do it enough, you'll numb
to the magic that got you
writing, at first "
It's why I love dVerse, here we write for pure enjoyment and share with others who do the same!
Both so good...and the edited photo of the sign! :0>
Wow, both poems have that sexy tinge to them, Brian. The first was a slow sizzle, and your words make the act of writing a poem sensual and inviting. Perhaps more poets will emerge from this! Peace, Amy
Good work Brian.
Wow Brian - both of these are doubly delicious!
Whoa. That was indeed sexy. Where's that husband of mine...
Someday I'll allow myself the freedom to play with letters and punctuation, because you show how that meaning can be wrung out of innovative juxtapositioning of the fundamentals - it's inspiring.
Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes!Yes!YeS!
YES! YES! Y!S Y!S
Dayamn... this poem is muy calientitos. Well done Brian, my hats off to you. Now to find some ice water!
A cool play on the words and their meaning.
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