Wednesday, July 25, 2012

Poetry Jam: Ozark Morning

Branson Landing fountain, Branson, MO

After the shower & still damp
i stand naked on the back deck

no one to watch but the mountains,
we examine each other's fallacy
of immovable objects

the sun runs the warm towel of its tongue
along my body
                my legs
massaging my shoulders, fingers my hair
until each strand stands erect & thick
the forest of my chest

awakening gently together & alone
as is nature - a bird sings,
a rustle in the trees, some small animal
perhaps a squirrel or armadillo
finds himself as enamored,

feels the magic once more
course through their veins, until

'mom, dad is changing clothes outside again'

it does not slip the railing
to steal off like a secret lover, as i step
into my shorts, nor consider an intrusion
but follows me back in
through the door.

written for Poetry Jam.

74 comments:

Myrna R. said...

This is really cute. Love the idea of being naked in nature. Your kids will appreciate that someday.
Take care Brian. Enjoy the end of your vacation.

She Writes Here Now said...

I want to stand naked on my deck and watch the mountains, but instead the neighbors above me would talk and I just hate that ;). Jane would bring me something to wear immediately :). Your family must love you like crazy, Brian. There is nothing like a little freedom in one's father.

Monkey Man said...

teaching your kids to be free spirited is a priceless gift. you know about my childhood, I was taught fear,shame....you rock as a poet,friend and father!

kaykuala said...

To each his own, no inhibitions. Society dictates but we are free to choose within our own private domain what we want. Great write Brian!

Hank

Rebecca S. said...

Kids are so conservative :) This poem really reminds me of my eldest brother. He loved communing with nature 'au naturel' as I remember it.
I like the image of the magic of the morning following you in through the door...lovely!

CiCi said...

Oh Dad, it is a lovely way to teach your boys to like the human body, your example shows them not to be ashamed of the body parts, in a sensible location.
This week must be wonderful for your family.

signed...bkm said...

the sun on our nakedness is the essence of being human...thank you...bkm

Steve E said...

Mom:
"Well...at least Dad is still WEARING clothes--sometimes?"

As a bay I enjoyed being alone, way back on the farm, stay naked all day.

Yes, society dictated, and when I finally found my freedom...ME--it was then called (again!) SINNING!
Be at PEACE, Brian!
I AM!

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"no one to watch but the mountains,
and
"the sun runs the warm towel of its tongue"

Hi! Brian...
I like the mood Of this poem and your description Of you, your family, and [Mother]Nature[doing her [own] thing naturally.]

Tks, for sharing the beautiful image that compliment your poem...too!
deedee :)

Laurie Kolp said...

Nature is. Seductive as is this piece.. I can tell you're enjoying vacation.

Pat Hatt said...

LOL hope there was no peeping tom about
Or any dog poo to once more make you step into it barefoot and shout
But yeah strut away
Doesn't bother me as I'd do it at my bay
But the old folks in the apt building would prob have a heart attack
So I forgo causing them flack haha

myheartslovesongs said...

magic indeed! {smile}

thanks for jamming, brian!

Peggy said...

I could feel the sun as you stood there--ah but those kids do have a way of reminding us that life is real after all. Fun poem.

Gloria said...

hahaha ! oh the boys Brian:)

Susan said...

This one moves me with familiar tones:
It feels like that sometimes, the mutual gaze mountain to body with "immovable objects" noticing. And why should such a secret action ever find home comfort and love interruptive?

(I hope the future looks bright . . . )

^.^ said...

.... I love every word of it ... Master Poet, that you are ... tears running down my face ... nonetheless ... another world ... another time ... another feeling ... thanks for reminding me of better times ... Love you, B. Kisses and hugs ...

Daydreamertoo said...

Some humans teach one another, parent to child to be ashamed of being naked, when we are born into the world naked. I love the way you weaved this, it was a piece of magic. Love how by example you are teaching your boys not to be ashamed of who and what they are and that there's nothing wrong in being naked, in the right setting. I agree with Laurie, it shows so much that you are really loving this holiday. I can see why you don't want it to end.
Loved this!

Magpie said...

Thanks from bringing us back from the edge, "mom, dad is changing clothes outside again.". :)

Claudia said...

hmmm nice..the morning sun is a tender lover, isn't she.. ? great new profile pic as well..probably the first pic i see of you where you're smiling...smiles

Yousei Hime said...

Oh my. ;) I'd die of embarrassment if my kids caught me enjoying nature's bare embrace. Delightful writing.

turtlememoir said...

ah, this is pure magic, brian - now i know what they mean by 'being one with nature'... well, until one of the kids interjects ;) ... i love the silent interchange between man & mountain that gives rise to this:
"we examine each other's fallacy
of immovable objects"

Kathy's Klothesline said...

I have been known to shed my top and bra while taking the dogs out for the last event of the evening. In the privacy of my own back yard, of course. The wind against the bare skin does feel lovely. I suppose a kamper could see me if they came right up to the fence and pressed an eye to a spot between the boards. If that should happen, I hope I don't traumatize some young person, but that's what happens to peeping kampers!

Luke Prater said...

I love the honesty and openness of your wonderful descriptions of your own naked body, the inhibition, the sun, the play of phallus with 'each other's fallacy' I remember confusing the two words as a kid actually!). There is something so very genuine about this. Real. Thank you.

sage said...

Cute! There is something about being so alone you don't worry about anything or anyone else, and the reality strikes.

flipside records said...

This is beautiful and real, expressing our innate hunger for nature, nudity, and raw inner self-expression turned outward.

This is so good I can almost feel it: "the sun runs the warm towel of its tongue along my body"

Excellent subtlety: "until each strand stands erect & thick
the forest of my chest
awakening gently together & alone
as is nature"

I love this: "it does not slip the railing to steal off like a secret lover"

Wonderful piece, Brian. I'm sure you are all having a fantastic time.

farmlady said...

This one makes me feel warm inside. It's one of your "perfect" poems.

Grace said...

I admire the naked beauty of your words...specially the mountains and sun warmth on your body ~ I like that the magic follows and holds on to you, enamored and coursing thru your veins ~

ND Mitchell said...

Loved all of this but especially the lines:
"we examine each other's fallacy
of immovable objects"
Brilliant observation.
Hope it's a good day :)

daydreamerdreams said...

I love the intimacy of this piece gently interrupted by innocence. Beutiful!

Stephanie said...

Adore that this private moment and poem is so rudely interrupted by the reality of your son!

Eva Gallant said...

As a big fan of skinny-dipping back when we had a pool, I liked this poem!

Mary said...

Chilldren def have a way of jolting one back to reality, don't they? I loved the magical sensuality of this poem, Brian. Nice new profile pic as well.

missing moments said...

Something about standing naked in nature is empowering. Until caught! LOL! Great words!

Daniel said...

Freestyling!

adan said...

"awakening gently together & alone
as is nature" -

being alone and together in nature with a growing family, is a mix and hoot of a treat, and you've gotten another flavor of it to us ;-)

thanks so much brian ;-)

Betsy Brock said...

I love how kids tattle on dad to the mom. It's always like that. It's that way in our family, too! We all know who is really in charge! haha.

Hilary said...

Too cute. We're looking for a place that will offer that much privacy.. without the kidlets.

Unknown Mami said...

There is a woman that stands naked on her deck all the time. Perhaps she thinks the building I live, which faces her deck is a mountain.

JANU said...

Wonderful....some awakening here.

Tara Miller said...

Haha! Maybe this is why our boys like to run around in as little clothing as possible. This was a fun read with the peacefulness of nature and then the shock back to reality. :)

ecogrrl.net said...

Haha that's awesome.

Nancy said...

Gottla love the littles.

Zuzana said...

Oh Brian, I really LOVED this one.;) It is loaded with emotions and to a certain degree some primal clandestine pleasures that speak to me.;)
I love for example to use natural showers, that is showers that are integrated with the outside. There is something about the bond we share with nature, the old cave man memories that are carried in the recollections of our cells, brought out as we are exposed to the elements in our sheer nakedness.;)
I absolutely loved this.;))
Hope you are enjoying your vacation
xoxo

PS: Great new profile picture.;))

I do, I do. said...

You have any idea how amazing writer you are?

Love.
inthepourinrain.blogspot.in

gabrielle said...

as is nature - a bird sings,
a rustle in the trees, some small animal

I love the sensuality in this.

Wander said...

I am tired so it took me another read through to get this one...the mt and you...what an image that popped in my head, lol I needed a chuckle. what for you was spiritual, was for me comical...good poem man!

Wander

Valerie said...

Smiling..... at the vision. Nice one, Brian. Ooops... giggling now. Sorry.

Maggie May said...

You never know who might be watching,but when you're little, it doesn't seem to matter as all the inhibitions are gone.
Lovely poem.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

manicddaily said...

Lovely poem - the sun/towel and the child's voice especially fun, and great counterpoints. k.

Anonymous said...

That was such a beautiful moment, and I love a funny ending, wonderful Brian, blogger's acting up I'll sign anonymously again

Lorraine

Dave King said...

the sun runs the warm towel of its tongue
along my body

Not the only magnificent line, but the on that, for me, set the tone of the poem. Love it.

ladyfi said...

LOL - so romantic too!

Liz @ A Nut in a Nutshell said...

Love your kids calling you out. Too cute.

SueAnn Lommler said...

Ah ha...busted!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Suz said...

Didn't now you were Swedish :)

Archna Sharma said...

This is beautiful, Brian. I love the reference to the sun and the form that is created as it blankets you. I love the equality between man and the immovable object before him...and the animal reclaiming its magic...and the hint of reality-little people scurrying by and stealing your peace.

We live in the Sierra Nevada Foothills and there isn't a day that I would give up waking up to the mountain and its trees. Enjoy your powerful, mythic Ozark mornings.

lifeisaroadtrip said...

Saw your title and had banjos playing in my head - until I read the first verse!

izzy said...

Naked is good! in my house anyway.
Skinny dipping is nice too...
I really like your description with the sun! thanks

Goofball said...

Such powerful feeling, so balanced & rooted


My image also got interrupted by your kids

Goofball said...

why "ozark" morning? what is ozark?

FrankandMary said...

Any entrepreneurial tendencies, Brian? Brian & Sons...catchy name.
I do hope your search is quick & fruitful. ~Mary

ayala said...

Sweet :)

Seren said...

I loved this! Especially "the sun runs the warm towel of its tongue
along my body" ... such a cool line. I recently wrote and posted a poem about getting naked outside and I was so scared to put it out there. You have given me courage.

Alice Audrey said...

Armadillo? :D Love it.

Mary Mansfield said...

I guess sometimes it's very healing to strip away the trappings of our lives and just be, if only for a moment. And I have to say, you gotta love a poem that has you naked by the second line!

Lolamouse said...

Love this! Reminds me of when I was a kid and I used to play naked in the rain! Of course, later I, too, found it unacceptable that my parents would undress in front of me or walk around the house partially clothed. Now my daughter feels the same about me!

Sreeja said...

Hmmm really the magic of nature....this magic will never end..she holds such power...

Syd said...

There is something that feels so good about being naked in Nature. It is our natural state.

Green Speck said...

Loved the theme of your poem ... naked in nature ... submission ... loved it :-)

sheila said...

Hope you are enjoying Branson. We were just there last weekend!

Geraldine said...

Alll righta....what a word picture you've conjured up today Brian. enjoy those gentle breezes... ;<)


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Loredana Donovan said...

Are you sure the mountain wasn't watching you? :)

sharonlee said...

Sigh... the pure magic of nature worked its spell on me in recent weeks.

Perfectly crafted thoughts here.

Sue said...

Love this.

=)