Sunday, April 29, 2012

Magpie Tales: Variations in b Minor


'I was in Plato's closet the other day,'
says the cash register
lady at the bookstore cafe'...

chalk wall, Charlottesville, VA
Wrath (a predetermined theory)

Who we choose to include/
exclude says much of who

we R & R
we that much [            ]

it's funny to watch people
become that which they detest
because those you detest
will meet you halfway if you let
             them

toads crossing roads
SPLAT bNeath
tires of their own progress
             & we call it marketing

Noah built an Ark for two of each
i wonder how he chose which one to take
& which would blow bubble below

as you rise

if you are looking for deeper meaning
in this verse, toss a coin, in the park
fountain, but remember
whose face adorns it

DJs drop beats, pastors preach
& i, just a broke(n) porch swing
squeak-ing as it sways in the breeze.

trash can sticker, Charlottesville, VA

Blowing Smoke out your ass~umptions

A song fills the vacuum of space
stars think it's sung only for them
not a speck in their own eye.

Image by Manu Pombrol (via Magpie Tales)
(con)Sumption

a glass always
viewed half/empty
will never be
full/man

~~~~~

...to someone i can't see, as she hands me change
& a warm cup, then turns away.

written for Magpie Tales and completing 30 poems in 30 days for National Poetry Month.

80 comments:

Sub-Radar-Mike said...

Love the Noah allusion, the idea that he had to pick and choose in a last moment of panic is an interesting thought. Nice stuff as always, Brian.

thingy said...

"blow bubble below." (((snapping fingers)))

Magpie said...

"Who we choose to include/
exclude says much of who

we R & R
we that much [ ]"
Love this passage...means a lot to me and how I think.

Mary said...

You were in fine form today, Brian. Yes..funny to watch people become what they detest; or maybe not so funny but often happens. And what we include and exclude def speaks reams.

Grace said...

I specially like the take on wrath and (con)sumption. The word play of who we R & R , the full/man, is very nice.

Yeah for the last day of NaPoWrMo ~

Cheers and Happy Sunday to you ~

Liz @ A Nut in a Nutshell said...

I recognized the pessimism part of this, probably because I am one.

Myrna R. said...

"those who you detest will meet you half way if you let them."

So true. And in many ways, we're already them.

This was great. Read it twice and it's still brewing in my brain.

Congrats on your 30 poems. Amazing!

Laurie Kolp said...

yeah, sometimes I think people hate those idiosynchrosies they gripe about b/c they have them!

I've enjoyed your poems each day... glad you decided to do it.

Laura said...

"toads crossing roads
SPLAT bNeath
tires of their own progress
& we call it marketing"

don't know why but this line made me smile... or maybe smirk?

Pat Hatt said...

Yeah I wonder how he chose
Who stays and who goes
As there had to be more than two
Vying to be part of his crew
And ass-umptions one should watch indeed
As an ass-urances from those should make you take heed

Daydreamertoo said...

Pheeeew...a lot of ground covered in this one. as long as it was just smoke blowing out his ass, we needn't worry too much... LOL
What else can I say...again!!

kaykuala said...

"DJs drop beats, pastors preach
& i, just a broke(n)porch swing
squeak-ing as it sways in the breeze"

You must have a following, that's for certain. Only then your words (song or sermon) may mean anything.

Hey! who is listening to the ordinary guy, the 'broke(n)porch swing' the 99% out there?

Great write Brian!

Hank

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

another great write Sir Brian... and those four last lines, are awesome!...

JJRod'z

De said...

Such a strong tumble of words. Nice!

turtlememoir said...

"& i, just a broke(n) porch swing
squeak-ing as it sways in the breeze."
- love that so much, also
"A song fills the vacuum of space
stars think it's sung only for them"
and the title, brilliant

congratulations on completing the challenge!

brenda w said...

Oh Brian, I should have been reading you all month. This is an exquisite exploration of culture and angst, full of archetypal images... ooo la la!

Daniel said...

Gritty and raw to my reading. Nice.

Slamdunk said...

Growing into what we detest hit me on one level--man I am certainly like my father when disciplining or commanding respect with the kids.

Vicki Lane said...

I'd like to hear you performing this poem -- I almost can, the rhythm is so good.

Kathe W. said...

it's really a squeeze
having to please
with so many words to choose from!
I love all of these!

Brian Miller said...

i probably went a little overboard with this one...smiles...i was 4 poems short of the goal so i mashed in 4 in one shot...

Quotes,Photos and a little Poetry said...

I don't know why, but last one was funny to me. I like humor through your two poems.
http://leah-jamielynn.typepad.com/blog/2012/04/watch-read-and-get-inspired.html

farmlady said...

Interesting read, Brian. I really like (con)Sumption.

But this one...
"Noah built and Ark for two of each..."
Did you mean "and" or "an"? Is this a typo? I'm not sure.
I know what you do with words but this one threw me.

Anonymous said...

There's a lot of wisdom here:

"those you detest
will meet you halfway if you let
them"

"& i, just a broke(n) porch swing
squeak-ing as it sways in the breeze"

~~~~~~~~~

"to someone i can't see, as she hands me change
& a warm cup, then turns away"

No one ever listens until it's too late.

rosemarymint.wordpress.com

Anne said...

I'm not sure that God chose which individual animals that would board the ark and the ones who would perish. May have been first come first serve. (I'm going with the retailer motif here). This was a wonderfully strange journey through your head Brian.

Rebecca S. said...

Whew! The line about being the porch swing is my favourite of all. Good work. Wish I had 10% of the innate poetry you have.
You're a machine!

missing moments said...

Catching up with you here ... like I ever could! We are them ... we just don't know it.

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"I was in Plato's closet the other day,'says the cash register lady at the bookstore cafe..."

Hi! Brian...All Of your poetic words in your [4] poems are very thought-provoking [leaving your readers, with food for thought] as you complete your [4o days and 4o nights?...lol]
30 days 30 poems National Poetry marathon.

Tks, for sharing the images[Especially, the image Of the man in the glass]too!

...to someone i can't see, as she hands me change & a warm cup, then turns away.

deedee ;-D

Sue said...

Great stuff, Brian.

I especially love the title of your mag.

=)

College Speed said...

This is radical!

Kutamun said...

Thankyou for rubbing out the pages and pages of mathematical equations and expressing the key to the universe so simply , professor Brian

Fred Rutherford said...

Brian, I really dig these two. Love the sharp sighted philosophy here. Each piece has a major thought that just resonates.
it's funny to watch people
become that which they detest
because those you detest
will meet you halfway if you let
them

and

the consumption piece in the second. Very cool. thanks

Claudia said...

smiles...your variations in b minor are surely interesting tunes..a bit melancholic like minor compositions are by nature, framed by that cash register lady encounter and taking us from there to different places-- and sometimes a squeaking porch swing has more to say than some politicians or preachers..just saying...smiles

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Being a rather cynical person myself, I enjoyed the tone and message of today's verses.

rel said...

I could never contemplate the universe in the bath, but my dad did/and often.
rel

Adura Ojo said...

So many truths in your verse, Brian. A great one to round off NaPo. Like you, I'm glad to have completed NaPoWriMo. It was fun but hard work too.

Dave King said...

If there's no deeper meaning, it's because this is the kind of poem that needs no deeper meaning - but I'm still not convinced. (Deeper than what?)Thanks for another cracker.

Leovi said...

I like the ironic backdrop of their messages.

Pauline said...

love the half-full cup... and the warm one with change :) Are you glad April is over?

Little Nell said...

That’s a clever Mag. Viewing the glass half-empty?

Berowne said...

From one broken porch swing to another - well done.

Tara Miller said...

These felt like they had negative/angry undertones in them. It's a lot easier to judge others than it is to take a look at ourselves sometimes. Our own environment and connections definitely play a large part of our outlook on life.

izzy said...

If you are making a wish in a fountain- be sure to be grateful too!
fun multi post. Thanks.

Gaston Studio said...

Wow!!

SueAnn Lommler said...

Making a wish..making a splash...making your mark. And we all fall into the circus parade.
Hugs
SueAnn

hedgewitch said...

Lots of material to ponder in this one bri--all sewn together with a consistent thread of random thoughts--it reminds me of the kind of thinking you do when you have a high fever, jumping from thing to thing, yet revolving the same sort of feeling in each--the short verse about the stars really hit me. And the opening lines and closing, bookend everything with just the right touch of illogical reason.

Ginny Brannan said...

I love how this flows, from the cafe' through a dozen thoughts and back again--all those different levels where the mind takes us in an instant. Especially like that brief moment of almost self-reflection/critique:

"if you are looking for deeper meaning
in this verse, toss a coin, in the park
fountain, but remember
whose face adorns it"

You're words never disappoint, Brian!

flaubert said...

That first poem is very profound, Brian. Nicely said. Yes, today marks the 30 in 30, I for one, am glad it is over.

Pamela

ladyfi said...

Love the rhythm of this writing.

mrs mediocrity said...

and quite the finale it is!

i love all of it, the form is exquisite... the interplay between all four pieces is perfect.

oh, the humanity....

Carrie Burtt said...

Some amazing word play here Brian.....i love that last line " a glass viewed half empty will never be a full man"!

Natasha Head said...

Honestly? Still trying to get past the little dude in the mason jar! Some killer lines laced thru this weave, as always Poet, but who we choose to exclude speaks strongest to me...and know doubt about me...Way to blow it up for your final offering for National Poetry Month!

manicddaily said...

Hi Brian - I love the glass/full empty man.

K.

versebender said...

Good stuff all around. A lot of insight here on the human condition. Thanks for the brain exercise. Vb

Lolamouse said...

Your wordplay is delightful, Brian. Your poems have a wonderful jazzy quality-it's like listening to cool music at an outdoor cafe (perhaps in C'ville on the downtown Mall!) and just groovin' along.

happygirl said...

it's funny to watch people
become that which they detest
because those you detest
will meet you halfway if you let
them

Like the rhythm today. Btw, I think we may have been near the same page today. :)

Tess Kincaid said...

I'm always amazed at those who choose to burn bridges...and in the name of half full...

chromapoesy.com said...

Congratulations on NaPoWriMo, your ending with fireworks! I still have mine to write - eek! I love these, love the title, and the porch swing seems to me to be a maestro.

Doctor FTSE said...

A great round-off to your 30 in 30. Thanks.

JeannetteLS said...

"toads crossing roads
SPLAT bNeath
tires of their own progress
& we call it marketing"

I may have to embroider that in cross-stitching. Oh. Right. I don't sew.

Well, Brian, the comments are a love fest. Laughed all the way through, except where something that felt serious smacked me upside the face.

GREAT dance with this one, my friend.

Helen said...

I like the way you 'stylized' your poetry today! Thought-provoking words, Brian!

Goofball said...

wow you're going a bit all places to day, are you?

lifeisaroadtrip said...

Congratulations on your 30 poems thingy. Plato's Closet...I bet he had some things hidden in there just like the rest of us. So many good lines in this one I won't even bother...:-)

Helena said...

God - you can say it, man......!

otin said...

*Pondering heavily*

Still don't understand. lol.

Abstract is definitely not in my wheelhouse.

Margaret said...

From 26 to 30 in one fell swoop! Ha. Now you can enjoy that squeezing swing. You earned a rest!

ayala said...

NICE ! Well done :)

Heather said...

woah - cool - ok love the guy in the glass- going back to re-read - love your stuff!

Tumblewords: said...

A full quart of neat!

Christine said...

you always know how to grab me Brian, amazing first line, and it just keeps going

PattiKen said...

This is so intriguing, very stream-of-consciousness (with a healthy dose of the subconscious, I suspect).

Pranita said...

A very interesting piece of work here.. looking forward to more visits to your blog! :)

Secret Agent Woman said...

I've often thought about the bizarreness of the story of the Ark and how animals had to be chosen.

Okie said...

what a fun selection of poems...interestingly combined.

I love the way you play with language and form.

Meg said...

Interesting stuff.

razzamadazzle said...

I love the way you can make me smile and think with the same poem.

william said...

the illusion with Noah was well done, also lol love the graphic with the guy in a jar, heheh

susan m hinckley said...

After I read your pieces, I always have a certain look on my face. That was a compliment.

zongrik said...

i like the connotations of plato's closet and i like the blowing smoke up the ass

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Syd said...

Like the glass half empty will never be full--so true. Optimism and hope keep us going.