Sunday, April 1, 2012

hide & Seek

image by Parke Harrison via Magpie Tales

Keep your eye on the sparrow
but it's a robin, nesting in the crook
of the tree by the driveway

head twisting over a shoulder & eyes
wide, upon me, she does not move
but shifts a wing to flash
a bit of blue underneath

& for a moment, Spring is a secret
whispered on my ear, alone

i take off my shoes, soul to the earth
in bare feet, a child, once
more before his Mother.

written for Magpie Tales & Poetry Jam

120 comments:

Maggie May said...

Wow, Am I the first?

Thats the way it makes you feel, isn't it? Getting so close to Nature.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

I love thE last stanza... Nice!

Have a great week ahead Sir Brian!..

JJRod'z

Geraldine said...

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CiCi said...

Magical moments like this give us such joy.
I am bare foot walking in the grass this morning and enjoying the dew on my toes and the tickle on my instep. The robins share the lawn with me.

Pat Hatt said...

Just remember with those bare feet
To watch for that left over dog treat
No need for them to go brown
And make you frown
As you dig a hole to China or Timbukto
Which might be fun to do
As you bask in the dew
That came due
A whole lot of do
Is also fun to come due

janaki nagaraj said...

Loved the ending...nice.

izzy said...

It has to be barefoot!
Thanks-

Daydreamertoo said...

Ahhh... yes, tread lightly upon the earth. This is a lovely piece Brian. Feels like it could almost be a lullaby for babies. I have the urge to whisper it in case I disturb the fragile safety of the bird.

Laurie Kolp said...

& for a moment, Spring is a secret
whispered on my ear, alone

...I love moments like these! I really enjoyed the barefoot connection with child/mother.

Friko said...

back to Mother Nature, I see.

Claudia said...

oh wow...love the intimacy in this...the taking of the shoes..soul to the earth..and the secret of spring..oh it is a secret and i never get tired unriddling..

Eva Gallant said...

Spring is still a secret, here in Maine!

christopher said...

You know how to love.

Other Mary said...

No secret here! This is a sweet write Brian. :o)

Mary said...

I think I would draw the line at jumping into a nest! These pictures are getting more and more bizarre. LOL.

Fred Rutherford said...

Very nice. Love the sentiment here. And way to use the prompt, which I do have to say is one neat picture, to fuel this piece. Fantastic job. Thanks

manicddaily said...

Very sweet. Great title here too. (I thought it was going somewhere else, but like where it went.)

The feeling of private spring so lovely--hiding in plain sight or flash of feather sheen. K.

Anne said...

You've painted a nice picture here. And the way you began and ended with a reference to mother's and children was a sweet touch Brian.

lifeisaroadtrip said...

What a beautiful ode to spring, Brian. Just as good as any I have ever read! Hope you are enjoying your weekend.

Anonymous said...

This is beautiful, Brian:
"soul to the earth
in bare feet, a child, once
more before his Mother"

~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com

hedgewitch said...

Always nice to find a place to nest--and someone who will never turn you away. Nice, bri.

rel said...

It's hard to get closer to nature than watching a mother bird on her nest. **as he takes off his socks****
rel

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"& for a moment, Spring is a secret
whispered on my ear, alone..."

Hi! Brian...
Your [very]poetic words are a "Breath Of Fresh" air this Sunday afternoon...

"i take off my shoes, soul to the earth in bare feet, a child, once more before his Mother."

...It seems as if when Spring/Summer approaches each year it invokes that emotion in some people...[not all, but Of course!]
Tks, for sharing the [very] "intriguing" image too!
deedee ;-D

A.Decker said...

Very evocative. Good one.

DJan said...

What a bizarre picture! You got it just right, Brian. That's what I think anyway... :-)

Maureen said...

Tender and lovely, Brian.

ayala said...

Spring a secret whispered in your ear... What could be better than that ... Lovely :)

Leovi said...

Delightful poem, very intriguing secret spring. Greetings.

Loredana Donovan said...

I like this, Brian, very touching. I took it that you were connecting with Mother Earth, though I can also see the child/mother connection. It felt nurturing. Thanks for sharing. :)

Stafford Ray said...

Your keen observation gave us "head twisting over a shoulder & eyes
wide, upon me, she does not move" but I really smiled as I read "Spring is a secret...". That is poetry!

Little Nell said...

I like the idea of Spring being a secret, only sherd with those chosen to hear.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

How lovely -- simple and elegant.

Mama Zen said...

Oh, that's pretty!

Anyes said...

...& for a moment Spring is a secret whispered on my ear, alone...

Bringing tears of emotion to my eyes, not really sure why...I know now, because it's so beautiful. Thank you :-)

Tara Miller said...

What beautiful simplicity in your words. I love the re-birth of spring and all things new...love you too! <3

Hilary said...

Can't get much closer to nature than this.

Gloria said...

sounds wonderful and nice Brian,maybe all is a secret, the life, or love or joy, all..nice :)

PattiKen said...

Nice. Being barefoot in the grass especially in the spring) is rebirth.

Kathe W. said...

this is a lovely piece-especially the last verse- it quite literally took my breath away.

missing moments said...

So love that line "take off my shoes ...". Such a perfect spring melody!

Nikki Rules said...

On an island called San Isabel I got to stand within a few feet of a hatchery (ok, so it was on a cliffside and kinda scary) but this poem reminded me of that feeling.

Yousei Hime said...

I felt your roots growing. I love the imagery and how the shifts are very subtle. Thinking you see something, then realizing its something else...no, something else. Enjoy your month. I'll be reading and trying to comment. It's going to be crazy and awesome.

oceangirl said...

wow, I take off my shoes, soul to the earth. I want to write like you! :)

Liz @ A Nut in a Nutshell said...

Love those robin eggs. So pretty!

Kutamun said...

Ahh, the simplest of things can trigger our entry into the psychedelic kaleidoscope!

Tabor said...

What a gentle and different direction to go!

Heaven said...

I like this Brian...I thought of a nest and the mother when I saw the picture. I like that we are reminded to be children before her once more ~

ravenblack said...

There's a feeling of a return to innocence at the end there that feels wonderful. Liked this piece very much.

Daniel said...

Yeah, I kind of feel this way too.

R. Burnett Baker said...

You remind us that any vision, grand or mundane, can become a prayer! Beautiful!

Linda said...

Your poem has captured the essence of spring and my heart..... 'in bare feet a child once more before his Mother.' beautiful, Brian.

Slamdunk said...

I like the thought here Brian. Though we had a cold and rainy weekend here and I'll have to look for robin eggs when the sun makes a reappearance.

adan said...

"but shifts a wing to flash
a bit of blue underneath" -

plus bare feet and soul to the earth!

i can feel that connection! nice brian ;-)

Me said...

Last stanza: swoon. I wish I wrote that. Beautiful.

momto8 said...

I love this poem and thoughts!!

Lyn said...

A lovely, mystical quality..you see so much..

farmlady said...

That last stanza is beautiful.
I understand every word of this poem.

Joanna Jenkins said...

A perfect ending.
Happy Sunday, jj

Wayne Pitchko said...

another good one Brian..thanks for sharing your words again

Kay said...

'spring is a secret whispered in my ear'....this line is so beautiful.....well the whole thing is but this made me feel a bit teary!! xx

Dave King said...

Fantastic! It sparks all kinds of thoughts and feelings in me.

Anonymous said...

It's just great the way you can tell a story and write a beautiful poem at the same time. Lovely and serene, Brian.

*kindly excuse my laziness - not signing in* :)

Adura Ojo x

Umamaheswari said...

A child once before a Mother ! wow, I like the feeling of oneness with nature in your poem and hey its great that you visited my blog :)

SueAnn said...

Sharing the newness of the season...spring has arrived.
Beautiful!
Hugs
SueAnn

Valerie said...

'spring is a secret whispered in my ear'

Beautiful.

Pauline said...

robins, bare feet - spring beautifully captured!

mo.stoneskin said...

"i take off my shoes, soul to the earth" is my favourite bit. However lovely piece, a moment beautifully captured.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Love it! Last stanza - perfect!

Anna :o]

Crystal Jigsaw said...

Oooh, lovely Brian. As always.

CJ x

ninotaziz said...

Oh the fancies we have when we are totally alone - one with nature!

Daphne said...

Wonderful, child-like sense of unity with the earth. I loved this!

ccchampagne.com said...

No earthly chance I can say something that hasn't already been said here, Brian... I saw that someone else also felt this way, but that last stanza is really beautiful (and non-denominational, if you get my drift?). As always I'm in awe!!! *smile*

Ginny Brannan said...

Robins home to nest, a perfect spring analogy. Nicely done, Brian.

Tess Kincaid said...

Your opening line reminds me of the beautiful old hymn...lovely write Brian...

Tigerbrite said...

It's so lovely to watch the birds and to feel one with mother earth. There are a pair of blackbirds I observe from my window and visitors of all kinds of tits. The nightingales have just arrived and will be with us for about six weeks or so.

Kat Mortensen said...

I feel as though I've witnessed a private moment. You articulated it so well.

Sue said...

This one is lovely, Brian.

=)

Magpie said...

"i take off my shoes, soul to the earth" what a wonderful thought. I think I shall go do this. :)

ladyfi said...

Oh, what a perfect description of spring!

thingy said...

Oh, very lovely. Thanks. : )

Stephanie said...

Oh I do love spring:) Such a vivid picture!

artbyrae said...

I like all your writings. The time I spend watching a bird's nest can be a thought on parenting. Feed the kids and teach them to fly, This will take time and sometimes you just have to sit on them and let them grow up. (LOL)

Helen said...

Spring is such a lovely time of year.. this reminds me of watching a robin (in 1973) who had constructed a nest in a tree in our front yard. We had a great vantage point through a wall of windows to watch its comings and goings ... only problem ~~ the robin was so FAT that taking off and landing were real problems. We named the poor creature 'Fat Robin' and still talk about him all these years later .................

Katherine Krige said...

to touch the earth is to touch life eternal

happygirl said...

I love watch a bird nest, in theory. In reality, they wake up much earlier than I do and leave a mess. Welcome spring.

zongrik said...

you really got into the nitty gritty of what is going on in the picture. you see the things, and then interpret the meanings in a very plausible fashion.

The Bug said...

I don't want you to take this the wrong way - but this is the kind of stuff *I* write. Which means I like it. A lot :)

emmett wheatfall said...

The rock hard strength of this poem is that 3rd stanza. Man, that's masterful. It's the punch the poem gives at just the right moment. Plus, a short verse poem for you Brian. Love reading a poem by you formatted that way. A nice change man and a great poem.

^.^ said...

I'll take off my shoes before you anytime ... Excellent post, Brendan. Love, cat.

Carrie Burtt said...

This is beautiful and perfect for the Easter season Brian! I adore this poem! :-)

kaykuala said...

Spring is in the air. The robins and sparrows take a new form. Great write, Brian!

Hank

Vicki Lane said...

Love 'Spring is a secret, whispered in my ear alone.' Exactly how I feel sometimes -- but then I'm compelled to share that secret.

TALON said...

That photo freaked me out. I'm going to be careful peeking into any nests in future, Brian!

I loved this. It had a surreal quality that was perfect.

Apryl Gonzales Sweet said...

awake and aware, approaching nature childlike... I like it very much brian :)

emily wierenga said...

oh brian.

this is perfect.

Wander said...

I think I may be stumped by this mag prompt...not your poem, the prompt:-) good poem Brian...I often wish nature spoke to me this way, not often.

Wander

Madhulika said...

Such moments are so magical... feeling nature so close is beautiful :)
Loved the last paragraph...

Paige said...

Btian, this poem gave me the chills.

Tina said...

Packs a lovely punch - fantastic last stanza. You just keep rockin' it!
Tina @ Life is Good
Co-Host of the April A to Z Challenge
Twitter: @AprilA2Z #atozchallenge

everedwater said...

I can feel the wisps of earthy nature - beautiful work as always Brian! Also, that picture is almost unnerving - not sure why!

Eve

Josh Hoyt said...

nice. That picture is fun.

Josh Hoyt said...

nice. That picture is fun.

Syd said...

We have a Carolina wren in the newspaper box. And there are others nesting around the yard. Spring is in full fling.

~T~ said...

Lovely!

Gail said...

I'm simply awestruck.

I see the pictures with your words. I am impressed.

Rebecca S. said...

Ahhhh...lovely image. Great ending.

Helena said...

I've got beautiful visions of motherly love here!

Tumblewords: said...

Feet to earth, bird to nest - life is wonderful!

Ed Pilolla said...

soul to the earth in bare feet. that's the sort of line i wish i had written:)

poeticlicensee said...

Poetry for spring well done...

Sue said...

I often feel this way.

=)

Rachel Hoyt said...

Very inquisitive and innocent words. Loved it. :)

Christine said...

terrific ending, rebirth is a mystery

Peggy said...

I like this very much Brian and the creative approach you took. Sorry to take so long to comment but it has been crazy at our house this week with my mother in law's funeral. I really do enjoy your work very much. I have long wondered if you really wear your hair in the style in your profile picture or if it is from some former stage of your life. LOL

moondustwriter said...

I loved Tess' prompt so I jotted one down quickly
A curious picture
I like the way you addressed spring

Secret Agent Woman said...

I love this.

Margaret said...

So very sweet, this poem. I think you really tapped into this image - it is soothing and comforting.

Goofball said...

I love watching the birds outside...always put out food in winter to see them come close . Robins can be quite nasty to other birds though.

Lydia said...

Oh, Brian, those last two lines really got me. Love this one.

twinkly sparkles said...

I haven't been following on PJ, but I'm so glad I read this, Brian.

A really lovely poem. Thank you!

twinkly