In Central Park, Burns
sits on a tree stump,
poems round his ankles, like pants,
gazing blissfully up
"Might be opium-daze,
they used to write verse after,"
Randy comments
& i
never want to be made a statue
especially not one that looks
like i just took a crap,
that is too close a metaphor.
Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go tell g-man...at 8 pm EST today.
Still have NYC on the brain. The Shelley's Ghost exhibit at the NY public library was a bit disappointing. More the historical aspect of Percy Bysshe Shelley. We did get free calling cards with snippets of his verse on them, which are kinda cool.
I found the Robert Burns statue to be rather funny on Literary Way...it was the look on his face. According to the sculptor, he was pondering his love Mary. I guess if he says so. Smiles.
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nice Brian! ha! I dont want to be made a statue , is a metaphor I think:)
Central Park, a welcomed greenery, great for loafing in the shades. Being aware of ghosts and muggers is a plus point!
Hank
Cute analogy but your writing is anything but crap... it's gold!
smiles...i think you should really work on that burns look...you know...i look like this when i'm trying to write form poetry...haha
Very funny. You have given me a good smile.
LMAO you never know the look they will capture if a statue comes due
So better be firm or have a smile at all times in view
Or as you sit around on your concrete rump
It may just look like you are taking a big dump..hahahaha
:) good analogy and yeah your writing is gold ...
"poems round his ankles, like pants"
Perfect!
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
hahaha
Luckily, you don't write like sh**.
;)
This cracked me up totally, bri. Not only would you look like you're taking a crap, but pigeons would be standing in line to make that metaphor even better! ;_) Pure gold 55, my friend.
As they only makes statues of you after your death, you'll have little say in the matter.
One of the best things about statues in my opinion is how we each see something different and appreciate various things. Your NY trip must have been quite enjoyable.
haha i am glad everyone is chuckling...it was intended to be funny...almost as funny as the real statue...and hedge if i had not ran out of words i def would have made a pigeon reference...
This is funny! You know, you never can tell what kind of statue they would make of a hot guy with a mohawk! wink wink
haha... one that looks like you just took a crap.... hahaha
You should have taken a picture of the statue!
Love the combination of tone here. The idea of the poems and then the wit at the end really go together both as reflection and as set up-punchline. Very nice Brian. Thanks
Guess we all hope we do NOT look like Robert when thinking of Mary if it is going to be put in stone huh?
Ha--we both wrote about crap today! I enjoy writing about crap, as long as it doesn't turn out to be crap.
I understand they have some kind of pigeon deterrant on the Churchill statue across from Trafalgar square, so he is not shat upon. I'll make sure to tell them to do that to your statue too! Except you'll be standing tall and proud in your eternal bronze pose!
xo
LMAO!!! The look of love!!!
Pondering my love...and needing to relieve myself, WOW! I'll have to take note if they both DO elicit the same pained expression.
More on this tomorrow!
No statues please--unless on a horse with armor and a sword (I mean that the HORSE has armor and a sword, you DID understand that?)--grin!
PEACE!
Sorry about the disappointment on the exhibit. At least Shelley is not a disappointment in his writings. He is one amazing British writer I'll forever love. :)
Nice one, Brian!
Had fun with this one didn't you?
Love it!
Hi! Brian...
Tks, for sharing...[Shhhh...I'm afraid Of statues...LOL]
Great use Of 55 [poetic] words in your poem today.
deedee ;-D
Ha! I'm not sure they could capture the hair in a Brian statue!
I do like Robert Burns, but wonder why the Scot statue in NYC. Surely they could have found Americans to memorialize! I have never been a Shelley fan.
I am so late in commenting but this just made me laugh out loud. This is a poem for poets, for sure, Brian.
Plus if you are a statue, the birds poop on your head. Not good.
Sometimes metaphors are unexcapable. An interesting piece you wrote here. I had a little time today, so I wrote some 55 word stories, deleted - not just yet!
Well, well...what picture does this one paint? Too funny, Brian. Being a statue is over-rated anyway...all that bird poop.
This gave me the chuckles...and nice avatar change Brian :-)
thanks...just got the stills today from the last performance i did at the event for foster care and adoption...this one is my fav of them...its actually the performance of the poem about the boy ODing in my car...i added a sung chorus to the end worked out really cool....
Love this! Sounds like fun times in NYC. I don't think I'd want to be a statue either.
The best laid plans of 55's...
Gang aft aglay!!!
Loved your post Son, it's about time!
Thanks for playing, thanks for not crapping for real, and have a Have a Kick Ass Week-End
okay, so I AM five years old- cause I laughed when you said crap.
I have finally joined them.
lol
Ha! This is very funny. I am still laughing. K.
(PS - just don't act it out in Central Park!)
Funny. :) No I wouldn't want to be frozen in that position either. Definitely not this metaphor!
Men and their reading material while .... well, you know.
This is so funny! Thanks for the laugh.
I've never seen the statue but from your description, it sounds like an odd sort of memorial.
Heheh - poet poops! Love it!
*sigh* this makes me want to visit, such passion in your words. I'm booking flights ;)
Ha ha. Funny one, Brian. So what say you about Rodin's Thinker? Constipation?
P.S. I love Central Park.
I'm going to have to look that statue up!
I love the image of poetry like pants. :)
hehe never knew you could be funny :)
That was funny! Wasn't expecting that!
Happy Easter.
Maggie X
Nuts in May
Love that last bit. Only it doesn't apply to you.
I wish you could have got a photograph of Burns. You'd better get that statue started now while you still have a say in how you look. Oh I forgot, you don't want a statue. Oh well!
hehehe... nice one..
Even i dont want to be made a statue :)
I think that is a very reasonable position to adopt.
aaah Robert Burns
hmmm the uncultured me was thinking of Mr Burns from the Simpsons :D
Hee hee, I like this one!
Hey, I never saw this statue. Has it been there a while? Love the line about poems round his ankles, like pants. Perfect. Drugs always enhance creativity, "they" say. And like your new profile pic!
ha, funny stuff. I don't want a statue made of me either cuz that would mean I am famous, and you know how I feel about that (smiles) Shelley wrote one of my fav poems, Mutability. Sounds like a fun trip to the big apple. Sorry, it's been awhile since I've stopped by here. been busy, busy.
Yeh a statue just discolors
Like your new Avatar Bri
Happiest of Easter to the Miller Family
Robert Burns, the poet of defecation--
now I've read it all. Wonderful 55, sir,
full of more responses to NYC, and
the Miller perspective is unique.
Your statue will be you riding
a fountain pen, waving your hat
like Slim Pickens in Strangelove,
scarf flying, wild eyes, bomber
jacket; it'll be cool. I'll get started
right away.
Lol you seemed a bit too interested in the opium.... hmm...
If I twer leave this
dump
would the view be more
pleasant
a sight to see
had they not captured this
visage
in stone, bronze or concrete
indeed
that would be fine enough by me
Chris McQueeney
Thank you for the fun one Brian!
Wander
Poor Robbie Burns would have turned in his grave... Wonder who was responsible for the statue. Pity about Shelley.
Ha! But if you had a statue fashioned after your new portrait pic then that would be quite a great statue!
hahaha!:)
Shelley was an interesting fellow. His wife also. What a time all those brilliant poets and writers had. Maybe a bit of opium helped them to get the muse out.
Not just smiles - laughs!
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