"Can you help me write a poem?" my seven year-old asks.
Then works and works, penning his first ever verse:
i send a piece of mail
from the back of a whale
where i stand
to stay out of the sand
& pack my junk
inside his trunk
oh wait
he's not an elephant
Write a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.
My son Cole, wrote the verse included above using his spelling words this week. Writing being one of his least favorite things to do, i was rather proud of him.
Today over at dVerse, Ami Mattison is teaching on spoken word poetry---Ami is a great word artist and performer, so do stop in. I am still working on my piece, so be back in a bit to add it.
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Oh! I just LOVE it, Brian. He's a chip off the old block, obviously.
For 7 that is MENSA.
darling pic and poem!
Love it! No wonder you are proud ! So cute :)
This is a beautiful thing to share with us! I hope my sone wants to write, he is 4 and already wants to read and spell everything!
Wander
He's excited to see his first ever poem on here! Proud of you Cole because we know you REALLY don't like spelling and writing. Great job!
He's a darling and so is his poem, loved it! The apple...and all that is true!
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Love this, made me chuckle. Entertaining, perfectly whimsical (perfection need not arrive in bells-and-whistles form - it's often in the every day graces).
Brian, I have no doubt you will be a wonderful role model for Cole. He WANTS to write. That is a good sign!! Read to him, read to him, read to him. And praise his every effort. He is so fortunate to have YOU for a dad!!!!
beautiful!!so cute!
awesome, future poet like his dad? We can hope
Totally awesome poem.
Now THAT boy has a future in writing!!
Whimsical, a bit abstract, yet very understandable!!
I LOVED this 55...
Thank you Master Miller for sharing today, and have a Kick A Fanny Week-End...Uncle G
Very nice..Way to go Cole.
Keep on working those verses ~
See you ~
There you go. Everyone else said it all. Seven and eight are magic. PURE magic. Enjoy every second.
Wow, that is really wonderful! :) Good for him that he has a great dad who helps him nurture his talent.
Way to go Cole! Nice poem.
Love it, Cole!
Ah, he's a chip off the old shoulder!
Sweet. Whale surfing will likely gain an increased following now.
aww tell Cole to keep at it (writing) / my college age kids tell me it sets them apart from the pack
Nice job Cole
What a great way to get him interested in learning. Kudos, my man.
It's great, Cole! What a fun way to practice your spelling words! Next week...same time, same blog..new spelling words? ha.
Oh my, I'm almost 50 years Cole's senior, and he outwrites me! Absolutely brilliant verse! Way to go, Cole!!!!
Awesome and cute are my words Sir Brian!..
JJRod'z
haha he did a great job practicing his words at your bay
The elephant ending was some fun play
Did a really good job indeed
The cat likes such rhyming on your feed
Cole! This is so awesome - good for you! You're going to have to have your dad make you your own blog if you keep this up! :)
That is a superior poem for a 7 year old!
Learning about poetry and zoology at the same time - smart kid!
I see
Great job I wish I could write that well and I don't even hate writing:)
He comes by his talent naturally. I used to love to do that with Nicole and her spelling words. Such fun.
what an awesome little man. please give him a high five for me. his poem rocks.
Awe. He is following in your footsteps. This has a really nice happy feeling to it and the imagery is playful. A+
I remember those assignments when my kids were little. I think Cole did a great job making a poem out of a bunch of what seem to be unrelated words :)
smiles...great job cole..i think the back of a whale is a fantastic place to be...maybe i should start writing all my poems from whale backs..but yeah...what to do with the junk then..
For not liking to write he wrote a very good poem.
Maybe this is the way he should "write" all the time. He certainly has a knack for the rhyme.
Encourage him.
Thanks for the tip, Brian. Problem was that SIX of them this morning were from reading messages from February.
I was thinking. EVERY age of our kids has magic. But there is something about them before the third grade that just gets me way inside where I live, perhaps because I am only 8 myself.
THank you for always taking the time to respond to a comment or a posting on my blog. Means a lot to me.
very cute. so sweet that he wanted your help. now i am picturing a shapely whale with "junk in the trunk" though.
That is cool...it is in the genes.
I got a huge kick out of this poem. As they say, the apple does not fall far from the tree...
Good job in using his spelling words as well as his creativity. That's not easy for even an adult. This was an A+ for sure.
Your son wrote a nice poem
You have a poet on your hands. Just be sure to remind him you'll be just as proud if he becomes an accountant. Your son has an inventive mind, but I hope folks resist the temptation to ask if he 'writes great poems like his dad,' because Riley got asked about her singing a lot and she took a while to become her "own dog," doing great. Loved your son's verse, true out-of-the-box thinker! Amy
OMG! I adore this. I read and chuckled. Then I read it again, out loud to my oldest. I laughed out loud with delight and read it again. It is a precious, perfect poem. Congratulate him for me. (I used to write stories using my spelling words.)
Haha, that was adorable. Literary sense is in the blood!
You could print it out and hang it on the fridge along with the art work.
Very nicely done. Hope his interest stays.
Great! You are starting them early. We'll certainly see or hear more of him forthwith!
Hank
You were right to be proud of him, Brian. Seven years of age... wonder what he'll be like at seventeen.
love, love, love this!!!!
so happy you posted it, brian!
have a FABulous weekend, my friend.
CUTEEEEEEEEEEEEE..LOVED IT!! :)
Take care
Whale -Mail is so much better than Snail-Mail.
Wow....if this is how he writes at 7 while not enjoying writing you can just imagine how he'll do when he falls in love with writing down the line! Loved it.
Just read your comment at G's about a kid ODing. Hope he survives.
I love the prompt at dVerse and am trying to work on something before Linky expires!
I would have liked to have written that!
One day, Brian you will have to MOVE OVER! A bug is positioning itself ...to
...B I T E !!
Cute photo of cute kid!
You need an elephant to carry a trunk for sure! How great is that! thanks-
what a beauty of a little poem, loved it!
and juxtaposed, on the main page, with "last night of the great dance" - wow!
that's power of contrast and lives...
your little guy's a lucky guy, as i well know you well know, thanks brian ;-)
Way to go COLE!
How fun to read the words of a seven year old. I hope he enjoys writing the rest of his life.
If he keeps this up, he may end up loving it. This is really cute, and so is he.
we have a poet in making it seems :)
Haha... Fabulous 55 :)
sweet ! :)
Off to dverse now ! thanks for the reminder ...
The boy's got it!
;)
Fun first piece. so glad you're teaching him the art of poetry, even more glad that he wants to learn it, despite it being something he has difficulty with. That right there says a ton about his character- really nice job, both on the post and with your son..:)
Very cute! Maybe he SHOULD be an elephant! (Ha.)
I liked your other one too. So sad. Terrible. It sounds like you do very good work.
Mine a bit long, but agh!
K.
awesome!!!!!!!
what a cutie and great words he put together!
May we all have been so lucky to write such a great poem on our first try. I think this deserves to be framed and hung on a wall befitting of Cole's efforts.
I hope he realizes he is a budding talent and with effort will grow into a great poet. Keep up the good work Cole, you rock.
God bless.
Yep. He's your son, all right...
I love it! Don't I remember a verse from his big brother a while back? How wonderful that they have developed a love of writing from watch their dad.
Another Dr. Seuss in the making!
Oh, I think he takes after his father when it comes to writing.;) Is it him on the picture? If yes, then in looks as well;))
xoxo
Like father like son. A sprouting poet you have there.
So cute! I hope your son continues to write; clearly you inspire him. :-)
Oh how I love this. :)
Wonderful poem...full of fun and rhythm. Loved it. Congrats
Hugs
SueAnn
Oooops Forgot to say...congrats on the post of the week too.
Hugs
SueAnn
that is TOO cute! inherited his father's gifts...
congrats on your POTW! (or his, actually!)
PS Congrats to Cole on his POTW from Hilary!!! That's awesome.
jj
He did an awesome job! Congrats on the POTW!
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