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| Pompeii |
A touch---
Feel the BASS in your chest
air thick with each breathe
ash, & ash, & ash
Feel the BASS in yoUR CHEST
ground liquefies beneath
earth sky earth sky
lines blur between
falling into each other
FEel the BASS in yoUR CHEST
the gods have returned
the gods are here
the gods are insane
the gods
oh my god
bodies, mouths wide
screaming loud but unheard
100, 1000 lions roar apocalypse
fire, fiRE, oil & fIrE
where are the children? where
am i? damp, sweat, piss, blood
god, i, ash & ash
fade to grey, then black,
fingertips on a shoe
a sandal, a..a table leg,
i
orange-red, a light, bright, blink,
black, heat, blink
black, breathe, can't,
black, breathe,
black, can't
i
break
release
breathe
finger hovering over the stone that once was
--was a body, sitting now between stalls, fresh
fruit in the market, it's curled, seeking safety
---and at a touch
i cross time, there, the moment where
hearts stopped--her heart's stopped---
first thoughts in the face of---
of--but then, a woman, her child
on a day of celebration, they are smiling,
laughing, she sees
her husband, smiles, crossing
the stones when---
the BASS begins, (this is the end) feel it
in your CHEST (this is the end)
this is the end---
and you never
never saw it coming, even through
you have felt the tremors for weeks, months
years, and swore, it
would
never
happen
to you---
At dVerse Poets today, I am manning the pub and bringing friends, in particular, Reena from Missing Moments, who has graciously allowed us to use some of her wonderful pictures for our poetry prompt today. Trust me, there are some pretty amazing shots, but---you will have to tune in at 3 pm EST to see which ones...smiles.
And do stop over at Missing Moments and check out an artist behind the lens.

86 comments:
love how you capture the terror, the confusion, emotion and pain in your eruption of verse, how you make me feel the lava on my own skin and in part two your words carry me away from pompeii to so many other places of endings..
wooohooo...i was first!! smiles
A couple of levels apparent in this one. Great way to start my day. Nice.
That truly must have been frightening to live through, and your poem captured that. Makes me think as well of how often even in today's world we don't heed the warnings nature (or humans?) give us of impending disasters (natural, national, or personal). Your poem was thought-provoking, Brian.
Leaves you Thinking - Our Complacency removed
Congrats
Yes, it's wonderful that you are particular to Pompei but also bring in a more universal reaction to portents and disaster. K.
Brian-- you know my URL but on iPad typed it wrong.
A moment caught in time.
I can feel the tremors and terror...the seconds before it call comes crashing down. Sometimes the gods are insane but nature hears only its own heartbeat ~
I've been thru a small earthquake and some hurricanes, but a volcano consuming me and my family in ash and liquid stone - what horror! You have carved that day so well with words. It's so dificult to convey immediacy with language, but your poem does just that, putting us there in thought, act, behavior, and feeling. This language of gesture that you know so well and manage so artistically, wonderful.
You bring your music to the piece with the sound of the bass...but my god..the table leg..the imagery is wicked..feel as though I'm watching a war flick with Run Thru the Jungle blasting, body parts flying...burning under the ash of fire that was centuries in the making..
amazing Brian!!
Um ... wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Do I have your permission to use this with my English 10 students? They are adamant that poetry is "boring" ... I suspect this might change their minds ...
nice
The repeat of the refrain "feel the BASS" is so effective. And the feeling of sorrow over those who were caught unawares in the middle of living by the flow of the lava. You took me back in time.
i chose this pic for the ominous sky...on reena's post for that day though there is a pic of one of the stone bodies in the market and that one def stuck with me and carried over here...
Such a build up at your tree
That one would have to be blind not to see
Of course in real life even the blatant is ignored thinking it would come due
Then such a pight does ensue
One should gawk more
Which you do quite well at your shore..lol
Wow.
At first (this silly old lady) says hm, "does he know that his typing is off? then she says why is he putting caps in these words?"
Then she truly felt the FULL weight of your words, the HELL. You have truly caught and painted what you wished to put across to your reader. Excellent.
I am now feeling better daily and shall probably join my old blog in a few days.
Great capture of that moment of panic, of truth, or ultimate ending and what it brings in visions and in legacy--and a great pic. Looking forward to the rest of the choices being revealed later at Poetics.
Captured the fear beautifully...feel the BASS..this repetition upped my heartbeat. Well done.
Intense and oh so real, Brian. I felt this from the inside out... riveting. I can't wait until this afternoon when the prompt is unveiled.
"Fire burn, and cauldron bubble..."
release me from this toil and trouble.
And yesss, I have often felt--behaved like--I would live forever! Now I realize: IT AIN'T SO, PEDRO!!!
PEACE!
You portray emotions and visuals in this writing that grab us all and tie us into the disorder in emergencies. The words stun me and yet provoke images that quicken my emotions. Fascinating piece.
pompeii... and so many other terrors and warnings and ignorings - when apocalypse hits (in whatever form) it will no doubt find us with our heads still in the sand...
brilliant writing, Brian!
Brilliant. Pompeii and not-Pompeii. Outside and inside. So many levels (like excavation, ha). Love this.
And I love Reena's photographs. Will definitely visit the pub this afternoon.
Thank you, sir.
Brian, this one was so real. It made me feel a primal fear of nature, destruction, death perhaps.
Lots of depth do this.
Def burned our poetic butts
with your brilliance, sir. Loved
every dramatic moment of it.
Fills me with alacrity since I
live in the Ring of Fire, just
a few miles from Mt. Rainier
and one day I could relive
your images.
Warning: If you have a heart condition, don't read this poem.
;o~Mary
OMG! This is a frightening poem. Pompei... Vesuvius... death.
They say that we, here in California, in the west U.S., have a lot more to be worried about with volcanos than earthquakes.
Death is death, not matter what, but hot ash, piroclastic flows... you nailed this one. I was there, in that poem, feeling all of it.
Amazing...
It seems like a wonderful piece!
This is suffocating in it's intensity. Fabulous job, Brian.
Wow, you captured the terrifying moment(s) great...the imagery is powerful. I think my heart rate increased. (I checked out Reena's page-she does awesome work) and now I've added the forgotten city of Pompeii to places I want to visit. Hope you have a great weekend, too!
Really nice job here Brian, the way you used the volcano 's eruption as the centerpiece here really worked well, both as your depiction of that moment and as to the metaphor it creates for any ending. Nice write. Thanks
Boy, did you ever pick me up and take me with you on that one. Great stuff, Brian!
=)
Oh my goodness, I am out of breath after having read that! Excellent, thrilling ride. This is my favorite part:
"orange-red, a light, bright, blink,
black, heat, blink
black, breathe, can't,
black, breathe,
black, can't
i
break
release
breathe"
~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
That rhythm, that beating that goes with the confusion. Brilliant.
... am glad you feel that way, Brian ... I feel that way all the time ... trying to put it into words ... but too frightened to do so ... puzzle pieces of this crazy life are falling into place though ... thanks to you ... Thanks, Brian ... Always, cat.
This is so powerful and dramatic. It really captures what the whole disaster was really about. This is great!!
Bass. I felt crushed into the ground yet lifted up at the end, on wings of heroes. To quote you, "oh my god".
This conjured up words like frenetic,panic, fearful. Cant imagine what it would be like to get aught up in this kind of event- total chaos...horrific. Love the way you captured the explosions of the volcano- the panic of the crowds...and the unpredictability of nature
feel the bass in your chest
yes - this is how I imagine it must have been - but especially at the start; just a rumbling deep awfulness in the chest ...
I was in this area last summer but didn't go - will be there again this year and am determined to make it ... am oddly reluctant to see this moment frozen in time but as I say, am determined ...
Brian,
Don't know why but this one sounds like it could be lyrics to a Pink Floyd song. That's a compliment,BTW!
Gosh... how tense, a great evocative write...so terrifying, you have really let us feel what it must have been like... great stuff!
It's that BASS DRUM in my chest--hey the link to CES ADORIO" works for me, could you try it again? And let me know? Please...TIA.
Would love to hear that performed. Pictures of Pompeii have haunted me since I first saw them about 60 years ago in my grandparents' encyclopedia -- especially the dog...
WOW! This is fantastic, Brian. Grabs the reader and won't let go. DANG! (That's like WOW, only different.) I really like this; different, but very very good!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/02/18/the-last-watch/
That was so real I was holding my breath as I read it.
Wow!
jj
Your poem speaks volumes, on raw emotions and sometimes realities. great work.
I can feel the tremors in my chest...
could it be that a God set this in motion?...an insane God....and the innocence of destiny...and the knowing .....geez....
I recall when it happened to me and I thought...what took so long
Peace
Very good, with enough space in the imagery to feel the present tragedies that destroy families.
I just read this to Gary. He is about to fall asleep. Thank you for your sweet dreams poem : )
Scary stuff.
I felt like I was there and could feel my heart thumping and see the panic in the faces of others with your amazingly descriptive words.My favorite was your end....many layers there my love.
wow. this gave me chills... and i felt my soul applauding with the resurrection of the end...
I was always horrified by the story of Pompeii and the way people were caught in their daily lives in molten rock... Wow...you made me feel it..the bass in the chest...with a breath of ash...whoo!
So much more powerful and instant than a narrative.
Going to think about having my 16 yr old read this....it's a gut punch.
And like a transport to that time.
This one was different from the others....felt like written for a future audience.
Perhaps your boys, one day?
haunting, you never saw it coming and swore it would never happen to you. What you visualize is something else Brian.
A masterclass in pacing this: breathless to measured and all at exactly the right moment. I stand back and applaud.
This has an aural and visceral quality Brian, gets you in the guts.
I once lived in a town that had casts of Pompeii bodies in one of the squares. (The heat at Pompeii was so intense that the bodies burned away, leaving spaces in the solidified lava. Archaeologists have reconstructed them by making moulds from the spaces.) You could see the terror in their postures, even though there was no remaining detail on the faces.
Your words brought the same kind of feeling. Well done.
one would think that you lived through something similar for being able to write it so well ... have a wonderful Sunday Brian!
You captured their last moments wonderfully!! I felt myself grasping for breath and running...unable to find any escape. How terrifying!!!
Hugs
SueAnn
Something is coming my dear Brian, stay you
This was intense. I felt a need to read real quick through it so I could reach the end and tell myself that it's going to be okay. Sigh.
i don't know if we even recognize that we feel anything, but the collapse does seem immanent. every volcano has to blow its stack now and then. Good one Brian, especially where the wife and kids see the old man al smiles headed there way and the moment arrives. That my friend is an image to ponder.
This is a fabulous write Brian. Read it in my email yesterday and thought WOW, he's done it again. I searched through the blog of the photographer and discovered those columns were from Pompeii before I read yours and as soon as I did I thought wow! You described what they must've been thinking at the moment it happened. They must have felt the tremors as it was readying itself to blow but, how could they know it would be so bad. And would preserve them into history.
Another absolutely amazing write Brian. Sometimes I am in awe of your raw talent.
Wow...such an intense capture of emotion...brilliant poem..
Brian,
I'm glad! I'm just back barely 2 hrs ago from my trip.
Great write! Disasters tend to take centre stage and you brought it out very well into the open!
Hank
"FEel the BASS in yoUR CHEST
the gods have returned
the gods are here
the gods are insane
the gods
oh my god"
damn! you certainly capture the feel of a catastrophe, brian! brilliant writing! i need to catch my breath now!
The only thing that would scare me more in all this is if big dogs started chasing me too.
Intense write, Brian. I love it, every single word.
Pamela
ur totally right about the gods being insane.
thanks for the headsup on magpie, i put another link up. what i did, for the first time, was use a short link. won't do that again.
I loved your take on the amazing photo prompt, Brian. You captured the essence of terror perfectly.
I don't understand this at all :(
"The gods, oh my god," the bass thumping. You captured the scattered panic of the victims of a Pompeii-like disaster. Seemingly random moments, etched in amber under the ash... the mere idea of breathing in nothing but the ash scares the crap out of me. Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2012/02/19/coming-back-to-life/
The earth is ill at ease still. Anything can happen. Got snow, dude?
Just over from Heather Stillfusen's art blog....mowhawk and ballet tights. hmmm...lol :D
Anyway, what a SUPER great write. Wow. Your brilliance continues to grow. You suck....just saying. lol
You put us right there at the moment of terror and disbelief. The BASS. Exactly that. We feel that when the large power plant down the road does an emergency release of steam.
Come to think of it, that power plant is not unlike a manmade volcano.
The fear you have been able to relate...it literally was the end of their world for them...the pounding fear in their chests...great job! It seems we went to the same place with this poem.
This is so well done. You have captured our eternal fears so well. By eternal I mean both ever present and unchanging in the human race. And oh - phooey I missed getting into your article by 12 hours. Ah well I did a haiku anyway. Her photos are so wonderful! Thanks for the introduction.
Ah, nice. The moment hearts stopped. Everywhere around us.
This is a great experiment for you, I think, Brian. I love your reliance upon the senses in this poem-- the photos are beautiful as well. xj
ummm... that was a dramatic intense poem that left me with chills...
your never cease to paint a picture in my mind...
great work brian!
an action packed piece, enjoyed it very much :)
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