Tuesday, February 14, 2012

OpenLinkNight: Canvas Hearts


Four score and seven years ago
our fathers brought forth on this continent,
a new nation,

conceived in Liberty,
and dedicated to the proposition
that all men are created equal---

but we know thats not true
and this aint a size thing, not what you do
before but after the ring, yeah
script fliped when the lips tripped with 'i do'
and don't, soon as you get home
once hot, now---heh, guess not,
romance, a body that needs exhuming
to search for evidence of its existence---
yeah rome is burning, all heat consumed by ashes,
leaking like ceasar, perpetrated by cassius

clay could rope a dope but when you won't swing
you got no hope and'll kiss the canvas mat
1-2-3 now ten count, yeah you out---what's that,
laid back on the couch, getting while the gettings good
---then you passed out
snore a dull roar, yeah boy you got a pretty mouth
& a silver tongue, enough to seal the deal but what you got
when it comes undone

Four score and seven years ago
has it really been that long since you last tried to woo
instead'a just expecting her in the bedroom,
St Valentine's a martyr, so one day a year---
you can try harder, it's the Hallmark & you been carded,
yeah this is a song for the broken hearted,
 it's time to leave Egypt, water's parted,
don't know bout you but my love needs more than 24 hours
they say the dandelions a weed not a flower
who we got to model the role, but our fathers
but then again, ain't all men created equal
and there's a reason her answer is two advil
ooo how bad's that feel, you can deny
but it's mad real

Time to plant the flag in this hill, nah not like that,
but this, a new nation of understanding what
love is, not a one day plan from a one night man,
in a one minute stand, where ladies got no reason
to say "you mean that's it?"---damn,
time to grow up boy be a man,
open your ears, and don't skip dedicate to a proposition
romance is a life style, not position, once more back to Lincoln
cause---

In the end, it's not the years in your life that count.
It's the life in your years.


OpenLinkNight @ dVerse Poets - time to get all poetic, and you have the perfect reason...it's Valentine's Day...you love it, you hate it...either way let those emotions come out and find a place on the page....tonight, my good friend Claudia is manning the pub...see you at 3 pm EST.

The picture was taken by Lady Fi another long time blog friend.

Happy Valentines Day everyone. I will be cooking an elaborate dinner for my lady tonight.

120 comments:

Birdie said...

"In the end, it's not the years in your life that count.
It's the life in your years." ... love that part so much Brian! i don't love Valentine, i don't hate it ... i'm actually neutral - lol ... but not such a thing as celebrating Valentine our place for it feels so fake to both of us to 'declare' love that one precise day ... but wishing happy Valentine's to all that like to celebrate it :-) so happy dinner with T!! :-)

Birdie said...

could it be i was really the first today? ... :-)

Mary said...

Ah yes, romance is a lifestyle....not a position! Well penned Valentine poem, Brian. Happy Valentine's Day to you.

oceangirl said...

you mean that's it?...hehe :)

Daniel said...

Brian - lovely. Oh, tell me that you're not makin' franks and beans for the special dinner!

janaki nagaraj said...

Beautiful...in celebration of love and the institution of marriage.

A Daft Scots Lass said...

The life in your years, indeed.

ayala said...

It is the life in your years ;) true and a good write. Happy Valentine's Day to you and your love Tara. :)

kaykuala said...

Happy V for the lovers. Over here the immediate and direct effect was an astronomical jump in the price of red roses. Great verse Brian!

Hank

LadyFi said...

Romance is indeed a lifestyle! And one single day won't change that...

Heaven said...

Beautiful~ love is certainly not built in one day ~

Happy hearts to you and Tara ~

Gloria said...

Happy day to you and Tara dear Brian!

The Silver Fox said...

Interesting. I'm seeing the same sentiment today, expressed in many different ways. Love it.

AmyLK said...

I love the end SO much! Such truth in those words. Have a wonderful dinner tonight!

Pat Hatt said...

Yep that mirror is much the same
Even some rhyme to your game
Had be laughing a bit going through
As it's quite sad how many believe it will just magically come due
That last quote was dead on as well
And having such a pretty mouth makes me go to movie land and that caused a shiver I must tell..lol

Valerie said...

The ending overcame the switchback ride on the way. We don't do Valentine in our house, why should one day be special when there's a whole year to celebrate love?

The Empress said...

What?? Blogger ate my comment? After I left you what I'd be helping to make at the 8 couples dinner at the catering business tonight?


Oh, so maddening.

Well, happy V Day, B...enjoy your wonderful family, and your wonderful blessed life.

Especially the naked apple tarts. :0

Brian Miller said...

i try to be different and a little unpredictable...and never really heard a valentines rap...oh well...ha...

daniel...that would be funny...but no going a little more classy than that...i got some skillz....smiles...

Magpie said...

Preach it, Son!

Daydreamertoo said...

Whew!
Deep, meaningful and, lovely in its truths.
Happy Valentines's day to you and yours :0

happygirl said...

Lovin' the rap. I like the way you can do that. I guess if I ever want to try I have to die to the tunes in my iPod and let M.I.A. in my mind. :)
ps-Like the Lincoln-VDay connection, too.

Sue said...

I'm down with that.

=)

Eva Gallant said...

Wow! I liked that a lot!!! Especially:
a new nation of understanding what
love is, not a one day plan from a one night man,
in a one minute stand, where ladies got no reason
to say "you mean that's it?"---damn,
time to grow up boy be a man,

that says it all!

Claudia said...

see..i always suspected it...that love is hard work..smiles..and it is..now you got us into the right beat with your valentines rap..love that you connect it to building a nation, a country..it takes time, dedication, idealism and sacrifice - but then...when you stand upright next to her...flag in hand..it was worth it all...have fun cooking..smiles

Anyes said...

I love that Abraham Lincoln quote. You are right, Brian romance IS a lifestyle...You seem to know it in every words you write.

Happy celebration for both of you :-)

Geraldine said...

so true about the life in our years...so true. It's sad when we can't make the most of each day for whatever reason but we have to keep trying, don't we?

I hope your dinner turns out great Brian. I'm guessing you are one romantic guy and a great cook, am I right. ;<)

I'm making a yummy carrot cake here today, or fav. If you want that recipe, let me know. It's the bestest!!!! :<)

Geraldine said...

typing too fast, make that OUR fav cake! LOL

Fred Rutherford said...

Nice write Brian. has a real spoken word/rap type essence to it, it least that's how I caught it. Really interesting the pattern of direction you took here, where each line just so effortlessly starts where the last line ended. Excellent read. Thanks

Vicki Lane said...

What a great juxtaposition of ideas!

Myrna R. said...

Oh yes, romance is indeed a lifestyle - a daily reaffirmation of life and the love in which it is immersed.

Hope every day is Valentines day for all.

tera said...

Nice rap, B. Definitely did not expect that!

Happy V Day to you and the Missus. :)

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

just dropping by to greet

Happy Valentine Sir Brian!

JJRod'z

JeannetteLS said...

Structure was tight, the imagery SO spot ON. And the ending? perfect.

Well, for crying outloud, can't you PLEASE write something Bad??

?

Or not.

Laurie Kolp said...

Brian- I love the rapping beat here. There are so many good lines in this poem (some funny ones, too) but my favorite is:

romance is a life style, not position

Happy Valentine's Day!

Geraldine said...

Yummm....

http://veggiesyarnsandtails.wordpress.com/2009/10/10/carrot-cake-revisited/

Happy Cooking! Dinner should be tres delish at your place tonight. :<)

hedgewitch said...

Very nice blend of romance and realism, politics and personal, bri--lots of zingers and stingers all through--you have rocked the holiday and the Lincoln Memorial, too. Loved esp the syncopated build up in the final half--bringing the mad real, your own self.

Christopher Reilley said...

A nice post-modern Valentine that is obviously from you. Your lady must indeed be pleased.

Steve E said...

A Valentine
History lesson,
counseling session,
even some Mark twain-like stuff.
Man, you got it ALL!

Your posting is worth the price of blogging--hey did we pay that last bill
from Blogger?

Don't know how to say, Brian--you are SMOOOOTH!

Natasha Head said...

Well...here's a great big heart shaped fistpump for you, dear poet. Throw down the words and get the boys off the freakin' coach...PLEASE! There's a reason we love ya!

mrs mediocrity said...

it is a lifestyle, the little things, the every day, the life in your years.

yes.

and the undercurrent here is wonderful.

wolfsrosebud said...

... and I'll tip my hat to that.

zongrik said...

yeah, i always say that we are not really equal. there are times when we are not treated equally, there are times, when we are treated too equally, and often they don't make sense.

Lady Nyo said...

Oh, Oh, Oh!!!!

A Valentine Rap!! LOL!

Loved this, Brian, but I generally love all your work, and the rhythm is just perfect....

and the ending....'da bomb'.

Happy Valentine's Day, even if he died a Marytr.

Lady Nyo

Ash said...

This is beautiful, Brian! Happy Valentine's Day to you and the very lucky woman in your life!

RD said...

we are not destined to repeat the past
as we pass
past the passed
flags raised remind us

you don't have to be blind to see

totally dig the mix of then and now
those and us
heroes and heartache

very well done B

Peace

Manicddaily said...

Favorite line is the two advil! So you are rapping!
rappin'
I did a different one not doggy.

I like the rap, but think maybe you should do spoken version. K.

Divalounger said...

Love the rhythm of your rap--here is to many more years with lots of life in them! Smiles!

@AudreyHowitt

Tara Miller said...

Yes, love most certainly takes work, commitment, sacrifice and fun! And most definitely worth it!! I like this Valentine Rap and look forward to my dinner and evening with you tonight my love....

Josh Hoyt said...

Cool! I like it. I like the part about learning from our fathers and such.

Lisa Golden said...

I would love to see you do a video or podcast of this. Spoken word, rap, scat - they need to be heard.

(I know, I'm bossy. xo)

paysan said...

That's brilliant Brian, love the internal rhymes and "it's the Hallmark & you been carded" is a cracker!

Beth Winter said...

New love and enduring love are really two different relationships, aren't they? Initially, it consumes then shifts to the enduring phase where the comfort level seems to change the relationship with distance. But is it distance, really? That is where the effort comes in.

Wonderful penning, Brian. This would make an excellent vocal presentation.

kweschn said...

Lovely piece, Brian! :)

And I've nominated you for the ABC Blogger Award: http://kweschn.wordpress.com/2012/02/14/abc-for-me-abc-for-you/ :)

Here is for the openlink night: http://kweschn.wordpress.com/2012/02/13/my-peponi/ :)

Cheers,

Anthony Desmond said...

spittin' some fancy, romancy bars huh Brian?? very nice

Timoteo said...

HAH...if all men were created equal--I'd be starring in porn films!!!

Anne said...

I love that stanza for Cassius Clay, I feel less old knowing that someone else remember his name before he changed it. "Float like a butterfly, sting like a bee" I watched every one of his fights. And yes Valentines day can be a day for hypocrisy, but you Brian, write lovely verse for your wife throughout the year and you know how to appreciate the little things that are important in day to day life.

Bar None Publishing Group said...

Here's a big hug for you Brian...not for the whole year but just for these 24 Hallmark hours.

Cheers,

Mark

Shelley Lundquist said...

Brilliant! To the life in your years.. may they overflow with the pure passion that flows from your giant poetic heart...

Arron Shilling said...

some are more equal than others... it always freaks me out how young your nation is - thats alot of weight for young shoulders man :)

Chris Wood said...

Way to Rock It Brian! Enjoyed this immensely!

lifeisaroadtrip said...

A nice little Valentine's rap. I can dig it. Happy Valentine's Day!

rosaria said...

"romance is a lifestyle"
Got to send that to Hallmark.

Liz @ A Nut in a Nutshell said...

I'm not a fan of Valentine's Day, so I laid some pretty strict ground rules that today would be no different than any other. ;)

Caty said...

This is fantastic! I hope you and Tara have an awesome Valentine's day! :)

Zouxzoux said...

Well and thoroughly done. You definitely put your own stamp on your work. Love the photo.

Enchanted Oak said...

Nice one, Brian! That gritty voice talks true. Have you cooked that dinner?

Lilu said...

Ha. This was brilliant.
I want to hear if you rap this out loud the same way I heard it in my head =P
I can't help but smile after reading this.
Love the ending, the quote suits it so well.
Happy Valentine's Day!

Beachanny said...

I'm guessing this is not the note tucked in your woman's pillow. This is for all the guys you know..a love song to your fellow man on behalf of your women friends (of whom by the comments column alone) are many! So thanks for the intercession on the part of my sisters.

For me, I am grateful to have chicken stew alone in silence with the joy of new blinds, a storm door, a fixed bay window, and prep for the paint job on my house! Happy Valentines' Day to us!

otin said...

They're right about freakin' dandelions...my yards full of them..haha.

What's for dinner?

Mama Zen said...

Damn, this is good! I love the loop from Cassius to Clay!

Jebbi said...

I love this...it's like a rap song!!...sweet!

Helena S White said...

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Charles Miller said...

You got the motion in the ocean, brother, i can tell and make earth shift its tectonic plates when you lay it down. There's so much righteousness in your what you say, the way we men should be. It's like they say, where you gonna be when the fires dim, the wine's drunk? Love is hard, and if you can't get it up to take on the hard road don't lead others down a one way street.

flaubert said...

I love your philosophy on life, Brian. Excellent write! Feliz dia del amor y amistad.

Pamela

Stu mcp (hate & hope) said...

Romance- a body that needs exhuming- killer line. In terms of form- this is so unique and creative- fantastic lyricism. The subject matter I totally relate to- valentines day, to me anyway , is a bit of an oxymoron. By that I mean- its supposed to show how thoughtful, loving and romantic we are- but to be honest- it does the opposite. We queue up to by cards and flowers and cook a nice meal because we are told to. Valentines day is the death of romance.

Bradley Howington said...

Wonderful read, Brian! I loved it! :D

jonnia said...

V-day SLAM!!! This is terrific!

TALON said...

I love that quote on life. It's so very true. I wonder what those who forged nations would think if they could come back and take a tour?

Patricia said...

I wanted to get my son's drum set out and play along... but I always embarass them when i start to rap... this rhythm amazing... your truths... penetrating.

johnallenrichter said...

This is an amazing hodgepodge of memory and history and love and life.... Your mind is genius Brian..

darkangelwrites said...

Wise man :) I predict till rocking chairs for you two. Love the way you play with the cliche's too. Happy Love Day Brian.

kaykuala said...

Brian,
To pl send your tel# through my yahoo email.It is needed to ensure smooth tracers. It takes 2 working days to reach.

Hank

ds said...

Oh, you get it. This is one H--l of a V-Day poem (slam is right; it pounds like a heartbeat). Hope you and your lady had a wonderful evening.

Nikki Rules said...

Love how you twist your words and play with them like that.

poetrydiary said...

I got pulled into the pace and rhythm of this and then I couldn't argue at all with your conclusions...

myheartslovesongs said...

and he cooks food as well as words? {smile}

"romance is a life style"

well-said, my friend.

and love wins out in the end ♥

vivinfrance said...

Some interesting ideas explored here in some quirky language. I particularly liked " ...it's the Hallmark & you been carded..."

jackie dick said...

Another Hallmark moment. NOT! Who but you, Brian, can mix Lincoln's address, the founding of a nation, politics, and love? No one I know. But it comes off..yup. I enjoyed this one, lots. :))

Sasmita said...

Love & romance have varied colors in life! Nice pick :)

Dave King said...

As Cassius said, I'm clay in your hands!
That was a great wild and wide ride. Loved it to bits, and you sure couldn't beat the beat...

kez said...

In totally agreement ...but still like chocs on Valentines day !!! great poem with fab beat ...thank you x x

G-Man said...

You keep working at it Son, Never stop!

SueAnn said...

It is not "planting the pole" or playing a role but doing and giving and baring your soul. Hope you both enjoyed the dinner and the dessert!!!\
Hugs
SueAnn

Steve King said...

You've covered the waterfront on this one. A great reminder that things worth having--and keeping--demand effort and commitment. Easy to lose sight of that in all the competing noise of life. Nice one.

Ann Grenier said...

Love your imagination, your rhythm and truth wrapped up in a cool heartbeat for the day :-) Great!

Jerry said...

Oh, that is a poetry slam if I aver read one. I would love to hear that one slammed! Brian, your imagination and depth are a gift to all who receive it! Party on!

Andrew Kreider said...

Fantastic rant, right on. Romance is a lifestyle - that should be on a t-shirt somewhere! Thanks for a great piece here.

joanna said...

"It's the Hallmark & you been carded.." tight, brian. and you're right, romance is a lifestyle.

those last two lines-- killer ending.

hope your v-day rocked.

Zuzana said...

Happy belated Valentines day dear Brian, I bet you had a great evening - a romantic like you knows for sure how to make it unforgettable.;))
Lovely piece that would deserve to be read out loud to come to its full potential.;))
xoxo

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love, love, love the beat! the wordplay! but no where more so than here:
St Valentine's a martyr, so one day a year---
you can try harder, it's the Hallmark & you been carded,
yeah this is a song for the broken hearted...

Grand style, Brian.

Raven said...

Hey Brian ... thanks for the come by. Love the ending of this. You have the uncanny ability of getting so much into a poem.

I have been ill and not writing (well writing only as much as able). As a result I joined NaHaiWriMo on FB and created a second blog for Haiku and photography. It is here:

http://nohwhere.wordpress.com/

Thanks again! Raven

Lolamouse said...

I love "romance is a lifestyle, not a position." Great rapping, Beat Box Brian!

Heather said...

hope your dinner turned out fabulous!!! and yes, romance is a lifestyle...i couldn't agree more!

Marbles in My Pocket said...

Awesome write, Brian. I like how you blended things in this piece, and I agree with your take on the "day" of "love".
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/02/14/i-cant-do-this-anymore/

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

OUCH! This HITS it HARD. WISE WORDS!

Whoa is this yours? "In the end, it's not the years in your life that count.
It's the life in your years." Cause that is GOOD stuff.

beckykilsby said...

Yes, let's keep Hallmark out of this. Like your patient articulation here Brian.. bodes well :)

Chris G. said...

A little Lincoln, a little Brian, and a mix that makes for a wonderful contribution to the holiday. Well struck, sir!

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"In the end, it's not the years in your life that count.
It's the life in your years."


Hi! Brian...
Happy [Belated] Valentine Day! to you, Mrs.Miller, and your readers too!
Tks, for sharing a very thought-provoking poem on the "heart"Of the matter...too!

"Happy Valentines Day everyone. I will be cooking an elaborate dinner for my lady tonight."
Brian, I hope that you and Mrs. [Tara]Miller, had a [very] nice [Valentine] dinner.

deedee :-D

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

[postscript: What a [very] beautiful image too!]

Ed Pilolla said...

wonderful how you expose the theme by turning the image inside out at the end.

Rebecca S. said...

Nice way to bring it all together with the Lincoln quote. Hope your V day dinner was superb.

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Misfit. said...

Wow, that is wonderful! Nice job brian! I loved your rythym, and rhyme. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Thanks for sharing!

Christi Moon said...

what a fantastic Valentine's Day poem. You really had me smiling with this line--

you can try harder, it's the Hallmark & you been carded,

enjoyed this immensely Brian.

Ruth said...

great valentine's day message in this - love the rappy rhymes and rhythms, like "script fliped when the lips tripped with 'i do'..." very cool

adan said...

"and this aint a size thing, not what you do
before but after the ring" and "romance is a lifestyle" -

very on in an engaging romp through modern day and ancient history, and why not? love's been around and needs to stay around ;-)

nice, thanks brian!

Rachel Hoyt said...

What a brilliant way to say that we should be romantic every day! Loved it.

Joanne Elliott said...

Love is work, but so worth it. Like it!

zongrik said...

i guess what your trying to say is just grow up!! stop being so selfish. maybe try to be a bit more of a loving person.

Anonymous said...

"they say the dandelions a weed not a flower
who we got to model the role, but our fathers
but then again, ain't all men created equal"

This reminds me of one of my recent poems ... and such a true point.

"romance is a life style, not position" ... another great line and point

Excellent work, Brian.

~Shawna
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