Sunday, February 26, 2012

the can, of soup






the past tense of can
is did
       or didn't

& reason matters little
in the moment

until
     on aisle two
among the soups, you
realize,
        your finger gliding
down a Campbell's label,
tracing the ridge
              of every firm rib,

you could've.

written for Magpie Tales.

113 comments:

Pat Hatt said...

First first with my burst

Maggie May said...

Well, I'll be second.
I wonder what flavour soup you chose?
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Pat Hatt said...

Hmmm the could have beens with soup
That was an interesting take on that loop
Liked the can past tense too
As it is all so true
So may as well be part of the do
Then regret the didn't at your zoo

Laurie Kolp said...

Very thought-provoking... somehow reminds me of The Little Engine That Could...

Shrinky said...

Very clever! Just sooouper (wink).

Whosyergurl said...

Campbell's Tomato has always been one of my comfort foods. My mama always served it with Ritz crackers when we were little, and sick.
Your post is...interesting.
Cheryl

Sub-Radar-Mike said...

I love how you chose to use the wordplay/conjugation of an object in the prompt... that's the kind of creativity I enjoy reading.

R. Burnett Baker said...

Oh this is perfect!! Could've but we didn't. Dammit! Well at least we are still here to eat the soup, while poor Andy can't enjoy the gazillions his "efforts" spawned!

The Constant Complainer said...

Brian. Just stopping by. First-time visitor from Cleveland, OH. Noticed that we follow a lot of the same blogs. Saw a comment you made on Otin's blog and decided to click-through.

Interesting post. I plan to visit more often.

Mama Zen said...

Those first lines are freaking brilliant!

kaykuala said...

Great way of saying it, yes we can! A can, that is!

Hank

Heaven said...

Simple yet creative take on "can" ~

I like this ~

Happy Sunday ~

happygirl said...

I did have a can of Campbell's tomato for lunch. No grilled cheese, but it was as satisfying as a job well done. :)

Anne said...

That was fun Brian. And it took me a minute to get as well. A wicked play on words here.

Claudia said...

still you can...later...smiles..a finely crafted write sir..smiles

C.M. Jackson said...

loved this....whether you did or didn't... absolutely delicious and spicy!!

Yousei Hime said...

Always so fun to read your stuff. I had an idea of where this was going (picture is a major clue) but still just loved it. Thanks for your visits and encouragement.

Fireblossom said...

It's amazing what soup can do.

Tell me I didn't actually just type that.

Daydreamertoo said...

Ooooo... Now, I never did see a can as interesting as the one you described before ;)

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

Hi! Brian...
"the past tense of can
is did or didn't"


What a very interesting poem, which is [very] well-written...questioning what one should have..."did" or "didn't
and..."you could've."

Nice prompt to go along with your poetic words...too!
Tks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D

ninotaziz said...

I love my Campbell Soup. Always have, always will.

hedgewitch said...

Like the way you take cliche and turn it on its head here, and give a nice flip and twist to the little pancake of meaning you mixed up--or should that be grilled cheese sandwich--goes better with soup.

Kathe W. said...

can I or can I not- He didnt ask that question- he just did... brilliant Brian!

Teagan said...

Wonderful! Love the despondency you can see in the photo that you found words for, too.

RD said...

done...where as "did" could have been, but alas; no

there's booze and towels ...

clean up on aisle 3

Peace ☮

Mimi Foxmorton said...

It's all in the choosing......
We never regret the one we picked....only the one we didn't........
;)

(Tell your Aunt & Uncle to meet me with soup at the corner of Tulip & Main when the zombies come. Bring cash.)
:D

Susie Clevenger said...

Love this...I haven't even written one yet..I guess taking too long running my finger down the label :)

kez said...

as usual a cool write ...thank you x x

Jenny Woolf said...

Great -very clever response to the prompt!

Leovi said...

Excellent poem about this famous soup. Greetings.
PS, Yes, a hair clip.

Linda said...

The tomato that got away.... did she have a nice can?...... I think you should've!

Now... back to the grocery list... =D Thanks, Brian.

Liza Ursu said...

perfect title.
love visiting,
always.
keep well. and writing.

Fred Rutherford said...

Oh, nice. really like the idea of past tense of can, twisted into the literal can there with the labels and all stacked atop each other in the supermarket aisle. Love the in and out nature of metaphor of one kind to reality to metaphor of another kind. Really nice write. Thanks

Magpie said...

Some things can be so simple, but yet so profound. Thank you for reminding us. "the past tense of can is did or didn't".

ayala said...

Love where you took it....

manicddaily said...

Yes--well, to me this was also very Warholesque--wonderful. (I love that about modern art--all the people that say they could do that--ha! But don't, didn't, and, well, can't perhaps.) K.

Mary said...

This poem tweeks memory for me...when I was a kid I ate only Campbell soup to my mother's chagrin!! Now I would 'die' for some of her homemade soup.

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hello Brian,

It is amazing to see how you twist words and make us think and exercise our brain. Very interesting.

Best wishes,
Joseph

Gloria said...

nice!! gloria

tattytiara said...

I concur - very thought provoking indeed.

Daniel said...

Regret is a horrible cloud over one's life. There are times I have tried and failed, but still felt victorious or, at least, at peace.

janaki nagaraj said...

Could have can become a 'can'....nice.

Me said...

Seriously love this. Probably because you've touched a nerve, perfectly.

christopher said...

There's a curious edge between can't can and won't and the critters that live there fidget a bit. Sometimes they believe they won't and say they can't or say they can when they really can't or say they can knowing or not they really won't and on and onandon. It's a place where honesty is fuzzy at the best of times. Better to not visit. Sometimes you get stuck for a while.

SUCEN said...

Haha

Rachel said...

i do adore the way you write.

it's breathtaking. even over the simplest things.

Adam said...

Campbell soup, an excellent painting and poem material

Christine said...

Yes. Isn't amazing how ofen that occurs?

Jinksy said...

Thank the lord you didn't say 'could of' as so many ignoramuses do! LOL

farmlady said...

Is that really him in the photo?
Do you think that he looked at a can of soup with such longing?... that he bought and ate them, finding just the right one that satisfied him... and then had his epiphany?
Campbells should have made a soup in his honor.
I really like this poem.

Dave King said...

tracing the ridge
of every firm rib,

you could've

Can't get much better than that!

Lord Emmanuel said...

There's always this 'feel-good' feeling, reading from you. :)

SueAnn said...

Now I am busy trying to find which one to buy...fingering each label...such a plethora of choices. And a can of soup can take us in so many directions, You went on a few yourself. Dinner....lunch...meal of the week. So many stories!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Valerie said...

I could have, as well. Sorry... smiles...I'm useless without my computer.

the walking man said...

Don't know as I stand there my finger poised on a can rib I might've.

Pauline said...

you never cease to amaze

Lolamouse said...

Rather thought provoking for a Monday morning!

Goofball said...

the past tense of can is did or didn't...brilliant where do you come up with this stuff

Lyn said...

Emotion belongs to the moment...but reason may win in the end..love this many layered, and seasoned piece! Excellent..

mo.stoneskin said...

I think you've spent far too long in aisle two among the soups.

Tara Miller said...

Even if you didn't - you still can. It's never too late to right a wrong or do a didn't. ;)

Nice play on words, love!

Doctor FTSE said...

Great read as usual.

izzy said...

You are either guilty or you are not.
Easy-Peasy ...

Wolfsrosebud said...

too funny

Wolfsrosebud said...

too funny

DJan said...

I CAN not. Oh yes I CAN! Hahahaha!

Sandi McBride said...

And I can see me in the soup aisle looking for Campbells Bean and Bacon soup and not finding it more times than I care to count...comfort food...it should always be available
Sandi

chiccoreal said...

Dear Brian: "could've" so past tense darling~
We certainly could've been...all Andy Warhols had we thought of it first...dang~!

CiCi said...

Did or Didn't is something we all end up wondering about but the Could've is so sad.

AmyLK said...

Love this!

adeeyoyo said...

Did,didn't, could've - too late, Brian, but now you can do! Clever one... :)

Sue said...

Nice! You are such a smart poet.

=)

Janice said...

You are always interesting and fun to read.

Little Nell said...

Very clever and original take on the prompt. I do like the play on words,

tera said...

Coulda, shoulda, woulda, huh? I like this very much.
As usual.
:)

California Girl said...

clever

Myrna R. said...

What a clever write. Hope I get to feel all the ribs, then can say I did it.

Geraldine said...

could have, would have, should have....I'll never look at the Campbell again, in the same way!

Jen Chandler said...

I love that your poems always have deeper meanings :D

Good to hear from you on my blog the other day! Hope all is well :D

Cheers,
Jen

Tess Kincaid said...

You can...and did...

Rebecca S. said...

Love your 'can do' attitude...teehee.

I do like your Magpie Tales.

drybottomgirl said...

Tomato for me, with a grilled cheese please, Oh and a nice sour dill pickle. (cheap date) liked this write a lot!

FrankandMary said...

Blatant Freudian symbolism...or maybe I just think about sex too much. ~Mary

Laura said...

ohhhhh I LIKE this Brian. What an inspirational photo this has been for so many writers:-)

RJ Clarken said...

I just love to read what you write - and how you write. Yes - you CAN!

Merlyn said...

I would've if I could've but I didn't so I won't... :)

nice post!

Wayne Pitchko said...

good one brian....really liked where you wnet with this

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

i love the way you started this one sir... you're awesome!

JJRod'z

PattiKen said...

Oh, I like this! Wisdom spilled on aisle two.

Tumblewords: said...

Surely, I think you should. :)

Hilary said...

You have such an elastic, creative mind. I love how you play with your words.

Victoria said...

"Could've " is one of the saddest words. You catch that particular sadness so well!ANd the photo is striking.

rel said...

Clever.
Can't can imagination could you?
rel

Lorraine said...

You mean you didn't? oh and why is everybody is changing every format I'm confused

Cinner said...

loved it Brian, I try to stay away from canned goods for now. lol.

jabblog said...

Ah, all those missed opportunities . . .

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

Oh that is BRILLIANT Brian!

Liza Ursu said...

the can, of soup!
you deserve a round of applause.
can you hear it?
and the wave?

those 1st few lines are killer.
yeah.

Josh Hoyt said...

Fun to read :)

Jim Swindle said...

Creative, excellent.

Wander said...

Very good word play, few words with lots of punch!

Wander

Heather said...

excellent...best part of working for myself...( unless I decide to can myself!) hee!

~T~ said...

Oh, I like this one.

Lydia said...

I just love this:
tracing the ridge
of every firm rib,


Catching up, slowly but surely.... :)

Syd said...

Looks like the ghost of old Andy Warhol searching for another can to paint.

Zuzana said...

Oh Brian, this show your absolute control of the English language.;) Truly enjoyed this and it is always fun to see what narrative you put to a picture.;))
xoxo

william said...

now we are talking, I love campbells soup, mmm great post mate.

Helena said...

loved the poem in it's fine format.....and if it's a Campbell's - it's Cream of Tomato.....(with capitals!)

Katherine Krige said...

The last line sends a little chill them Mr sCribe

poeticlicensee said...

Uncanny incantations...

Arian Tejano said...

Another brilliant piece, Bri.

ds said...

Could've, should've....DID. And thank goodness for that!

Emily said...

I love the existential feeling in this poem. And the play on the meanings of "can" - fantastic.