Tuesday, December 20, 2011

OpenLinkNight: Are we there yet? Are we there yet?


Since time began, man sought the stars,
once as gods then for life on other planets,
in our universe & without

without much luck, so we turned to building blocks
that make it sustainable

     water

and search surfaces for beds were rivers
once ran and now sleep, dormant, but

when we find it you can be guaranteed
our curiousity for little green men will be over-
run with the need for

     water fountains
           & toilets

rest stops to the stars in our endless quest
to obtain more, i mean imagine going on vacation
and you are barely passed Saturn, kids screaming,
fear gripping your innards at the thought
of a million golden balls of urine ricocheting off
the walls of your ship in zero g, and knowing
it's light years to next rest stop

trust me, growing up, my sister
would not have made it out of orbit,
but this is not about Mars and Venus bladder sizes
but Uranus---or our anus
and propensity to deficate our own planet
as an expense of today, despite future indebtedness

so mr or missus spaceman you might want to invest
in a better cloaking device, or start cutting down
all your trees pre-emptively to mass produce
toilet paper because we

    are
    coming---

and've flipped the script on Orson Welles
and won't be asking to see your leader, but take us
to your natural resources

and don't expect a kiss as we take off, and yell
"So long and thanks for all the fish!"

OpenLinkNight @ dVerse Poets - a revolution in verse that marches weekly (not weakly) across the net every Tuesday @ 3 pm EST. Today it is hosted by skilled pen of Hedgewitch. Go write something poetic and come join us.

100 comments:

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

Incredible Journey on this.
lovely advice and hints in the end.

kaykuala said...

Brian,
Great Verse! How can we determine the environment is kept perfect for generations! good question!

Hank

Laurie Kolp said...

You really come up with some great topics, Brian. The kids on vacation and having to go to the restroom in space, the "defication" of our planet- WOWza!

Claudia said...

think the bad news is we haven't learned anything...we would do again and again what we've done here to this earth on any other planet..and anyway...who would want to discover other places if they even't have proper restrooms within reach...äh...funny what basic things stop us sometimes from discovering..

annell said...

hummm... very interesting.

manicddaily said...

Ha! Funny and grim at once. I'm afraid that we are almost there (in turns of no turning back.)

One typo in important word--defecate? I think. (I'm blushing now even as I write this comment--a different generation! Ha.)

Li said...

Man's epic reach for the stars - stymied by those pesky physical needs. :-)) But then again, I just read about a purification plant up and running which turns..effluent, shall we say...into potable drinking water. Perhaps if we had some sort of personal hydration/return systems, we'd be a step closer.

Pat Hatt said...

haha all the are we there yet's you would get on such a trip
Leading to some bad word, like that for anus, being spruted from ones lip
But as said the sad part is
We would continue the stripping biz
And the rich would prob tax the more one celled organisms too
As they bid adieu

ladyfi said...

Light years to the next rest stop... no, please no!

Mary said...

Cool stuff. I can always depend on you having an interesting perspective on a subject. This one had my head swimming in the rivers that once were. (smiles)

THE INTERNET said...

I like the piece of writing. Wish I had found your blog earlier.

Rachel said...

this is good stuff, Brian. i'm forever captivated by your ability to take something light, and make it into something RICH.

Magpie said...
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Magpie said...

You have a truly, although sometimes twisted, unique view of the world. I will be thinking all day long about "a million golden balls of urine ricocheting off
the walls of your ship.."
Although it was a serious subject, thank you for the giggle. I needed it.

Bluebell Books said...
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Bluebell Books said...

What A Divine Mind,
Extraordinary Verse...Cutting Trees?
Interesting View...

adeeyoyo said...

Well,I think we'll just carry on with all our bad habits and mess up there too. And then - we'll have to move on, again.

We should rather work on restoring this planet to its former pristine condition. If that is possible.

A recycling system for our body wastes would save on rest stops and fuel. And save the trees too!

Daydreamertoo said...

Oh here here and well said. We've so badly screwed up this world and nearly depleted all of her resources, no wonder the race is on again to find another world we humans can conquer, we've all but destroyed this one now. Why is it that we create but destroy to it. It all comes back to money! You only have to know how much junk there is in space (20,000 bits and counting) already to see what we humans are full of! And yes, you need toilet paper for it. LOL

Daydreamertoo said...

P.S. That should've been Hear, hear... (maybe time for a nap) LOL

Sue said...

Amen, amen, and amen.

No comment even necessary. You rocked this.

=)

Sub-Radar-Mike said...

Leave it Brian to make something like Space even more awe-inspiring than it already is...

THE INTERNET said...

Thanks Brian, I'm going to check out your website.

hedgewitch said...

Laughin to keep from crying--Space, the Final Rest Stop! You can bet when the business worls has sucked this planet dry they'll be heading onward and outward. Maybe then the rest of us will get a little toxic and radioactive peace.

Natasha Head said...

Damn Poet! Ringing the holiday nerves with this reader...sustainability must be learned before we attempt to cultivate any other planets...we can't be like the aliens get portrayed, we're better than them, right? Big issues here for me, especially when you look at the battles being waged within my borders, unemployment is always huge when you take on industries that destroy for profit...our trees, our fisheries, Oh, dear...another long post I'm afraid. The nerve was hit and the rant was started...YOUR fault once again! (Awesome post and a most festive OpenLinkNight to you!)

AmyLK said...

Very cool way to get plugs in for the environment and our need to explore other galaxies.

Birdie said...

i love the picture Brian!
ps: commenting from my new blog ... it was faster 'problem solver' ...sigh ...

mrs mediocrity said...

I love the way you can say something so profound and serious, and yet, still make me smile.

Timoteo said...

Stunning work...again!

(Ya think maybe Mars and all the other planets are so barren because WE were once there...used up ALL--and I mean ALL--the resources, and then split to pull the same crap here to Mother Earth?)

vivinfrance said...

You write what lots of us wonder about but never ask. My mind is boggling frantically at those golden droplets - and the rest. Terrific poem.

turtlememoir said...

ah, well done - laughed at the part about passing Saturn... but not for long - you throw a powerful punch, Brian

Nick Rolynd said...

Amazing piece. Amazingly written. Yet another masterpiece from you, eh? Love this topic, too. It's something I think about often. =)

wolfsrosebud said...

will look differently at sci-fi from now on...

LauraX said...

wonderfully fun Brian...I hope the rest stops include bathrooms that are more accessible than the ones we have here on earth...trust me, just because there is a picture of a wheelchair on the door doesn't make it easy to get in and out when you are IN a wheelchair!!!

Despite my little rant above, you know I'm a pretty grateful person:-) and so I hope you will consider sending me an email about what you are grateful for to add to this year's gratitude word quilt. It will be posted on my blog on Dec 31st. I am collecting expressions of gratitude from around the world.
Gentle steps,
Laura

Anyes said...

I can already hear them, mr or missus space man, shouting and running in fear of our devastation..."Watch out they're coming..."

Louise said...

Thought provoking write...it amazes me how we spend all this money on space missions, yet there are still people starving in the world. I don't think as a species, we will ever learn...*sigh* though I had to giggle at the 'urine ricocheting of the walls' in your poem ...

Bodhirose said...

Yes, for sure, if they have a cloaking device--USE IT! Cringe...

ds said...

Bravo!!

Maureen said...

What a subject, Brian. The concept of planets like body parts makes for unique poetics.

I recently became interested in Higgs boson and have written a poem about that I'll post in the new year.

Old Ollie said...

Watch out for the mother ship.

Hit the Rink B!

And Merry Christmas to you and the fab fam!

The Silver Fox said...

Hilarious!

ayala said...

A fun and awesome write, Brian.

Andrew Kreider said...

Fantastic take on this one! I love the "are we there yet?" imagery. Impatience. What a fun write.

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Fred said...

Awesome write Brian. I love the use of Science-fiction as the backdrop for an environmentally conscious piece. And love the familial sentimentality infused in here as well. Great job. Thanks

Arron Shilling said...

Kick ass bro - loved it all but that closing finale had me on my feet!!!
awesome:)

poemblaze said...

Fun yet serious poem. Good combination. I love the ending too.

joel w. clackum said...

I believe this is the first time I've ever seen space travel reduced to a need for toilet paper... but then, if we find any trees there, they will certainly hit the shelves as Charmin 2.0, the tissue of the stars.

Joanne Elliott said...

I love the way you play with words and bring a smile even as you want to create tears or at least some reflection in the reader. Humor is the work horse of those wanting to wake people up and you use it well.

We humans are the only creature on this planet that seem to dirty our own nests. Strange and conflicted creatures we be.

Anne said...

This is so nicely said and the Orson Wells reference was a surprise (a nice one). I've been reading you for awhile, but have been to intimidated to follow or comment. I'm doing both now. I found you through Pat Hatts site. One of my favorite of your poems is The Journey Love took, amazing piece of work. Cheers, Anne

Quotes,Photos and a little Poetry said...

You have an creative imagination. Traveling to outer space and needing rest stops. I love it. Yes, we need to take care of our environment as well

Victoria said...

Brian, this is so funny. I'd love to have just a sliver of your imagination. BTW...it's defecate. That was my favorite stanza.

Heaven said...

What a space trip from the galaxy to our poor little planet. I like the creative write to this (without the kids screaming and urine ricocheting off the walls). Nice one ~

sharplittlepencil said...

Space Cowboy, you nailed it. Thanks for the fish? Yowza! And thank you for the Welles moment... great stuff. Nice to be on dverse and run into you there! Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/12/21/the-door-to-deceitful-delights-dverse/

Glenn Buttkus said...

Wow, dude, this reads like a rant
by Harlin Ellison on acid, having
a pot brownie with Assimov,
or sitting next to Stephen Hawking
on a two hole crapper; great fun
with tinges of hard ass data; love it.
Your last line: /so long and thanks
for all the fish/ put me in mind
of ET splitting after Jesus did
his thing with the loaves and
fish.

wood said...

very douglas adams (liked the reference at the end). a very keen statement about the mindset of mankind. lets hope we evolve to a better place before we hit the stars and find alien worlds. very well written... enjoyed muchly!

Tara Miller said...

What a vivid imagination you have, my love! This was fun yet at the same time sad because of the truth in the matter. I hope we'll learn from past failures but not so sure....greed sometimes blinds us to the truths.

skyraft said...

Really enjoyed this. The humor and imagery come together really well.

So much decided by the constraints of a bladder.

Daniel said...

Appropriate rant today. A side question that I have pondered for a long time without resolve. Is there any conflict with the Bible if intelligent life is found on another planet? The Bible never says that God only created life on this planet and nowhere else in His universe. Was Jesus only for us or did he die multiple times in multiple star systems? Is the trinity more numerous?

flaubert said...

Brian, this poem is timely and so true. I love the reference to "1984" at the end. Great book, and great poem.

Happy holidays to you and yours, and I will be back around to the pub after the first of the year.

Pamela

Ann Grenier said...

"Our endless quest to obtain more..." Almost always seems to be our problem. Truly spoken.

Wishing you and your family a Merry Christmas!

Mark Windham said...

A fun ride: feeling the need to read 'hitchhikers guide' again.

zongrik said...

so going to space is all about pissing and pooping. wow. i thought it was about engines and composites and astrodynamics.

here's a video you should watch

How Do You Go to the Bathroom in Space?

Elaine said...

Fascinating Write Brian. Lots to ponder with this one...while looking up at the stars.

oceangirl said...

What a poem, what a story. This should be on Unesco banner or something. Next to Angelina Jolie.

Margie said...

I loved your ending!
Great write, Brian.
You are truly an awesome poet!

TALON said...

I wonder if we get to leave before it all falls completely apart or are we the kiss of death?

Loved it, Brian!

Vodka Mom said...

crap. you have to be THAT good.





x

TheRaveSite.com said...

Interesting piece of writing.

Celestial Dreamz said...

a few thoughts that should make us ponder over them seriously ... very captivating as always.

Adam said...

good post

JANU said...

So true...put in a funny way. You know your words, you can pull anything off...this is great.

wayside word garden said...

"take us to your natural resources"... now that is some skillful commentary! :) what a wild journey, this!

jackiedick said...

Don't know whether to laugh or cry at this one, Brian. You had me doing both. Urine balls richocheting....O GawD! This is a great piece, as usual...had me thinking...yeah, what's the point, we'll ruin it wherever we go...and those trees...the never ending toilet paper! Good stuff, Brian..cheers!

beckykilsby said...

superb mix of light and heavy.. intellectual musing and emotion.. finely done Brian..

peace and love.. and then the hope of learning x

Valerie said...

All that we have learned can so easily be unlearned.... golden balls of urine ... yuk!

Lorraine said...

oh my gosh FANTASTIC VOYAGE but take an umbrella

Pauline said...

"Take us to your natural resources."

And we won't be able to. I first chuckled at the cleverness of this verse but really, it's a sad commentary.

Steve King said...

You're right...space is the last great engine of hubris. We haven't learned to manage our own basic functions effectively and yet we dream of bringing our presence to the great beyond. This was a pleasing diatribe. Enjoyed...

the walking man said...

Well said! @kaykuala We could accomplish that once we stop shitting over every damn inch of the place and then begin a massive clean up effort that would take at least a century of learning how to live differently.

Zuzana said...

Brian, great poetry piece about our world and the way we choose to use it. Maybe we do not deserve to set out on exploring the space when we can not even protect the space we live on now...
xoxo

5thsister said...

...so sad that it has come to this. We tried to warn you but, oh dear...

Dave King said...

This is a brilliant suppose. Carried me away!

SassyModernMom said...

I can not imagine the trip that inspired this poem:)

colleen said...

The last line is funny and I love the image of kids screaming before we've even gotten to Saturn.

But seriously, my son, who has a composting toilet, says in the future we will be looked at as barbaric for flushing our waste with something as valuable as water.

bajanpoet said...

"But this is not about Mars and Venus bladder sizes
but Uranus---or our anus
and propensity to deficate our own planet"

This rocks ... I've read this about 3 times (at least) trying to come up with the right accolades for it *grin*

Great job!

Reena Walkling said...

always great verse Brian!

HyperCRYPTICal said...

I have read this several times Brian and each time see more wisdom in it.

How true it is that we deficate our own planet while seeking another to deficate on.

We live for today at the expense of tomorrow in our search for 'more, more, more.'

Love the image of "a million golden balls of urine ricocheting off the walls of your ship in zero g, and knowing it's light years to next rest stop."

Merry Christmas!

Anna :o]

♫♪♥PhilO♥♪♫ said...

You took us on a journey :) Great work!

sage said...

I chuckled at the thought of water on a distant planet only for good plumbing and an intergalactic rest stop

Goofball said...

oh gosh, it's my biggest fear to not make it to a toilet in time. Travelling is so stressful!

Kim Nelson said...

Only you can translate a family road trip into a cosmic eco-adventure and make it seem plausible, Brian. What a hit. What a hoot.

yellowhousecafe said...

Love where you took this one...I didn't catch your enviro battle cry at first, then, pow!! Too bad more didn't see the bigger picture, though, it does start with us...be the change...thank you for the well written reminder ~

Joanne said...

Thanks again, Brian! Tell Li that her idea about recycling our bodily moisture is well-established in the novel Dune, by Frank Herbert. So, the bodily wastes can be effectively recycled. Hope we can figure out the best way by the time we head out to the stars, eh? Great down-to-earth look at human tendency to make a mess and then leave it. Lots of earth-like planets out there; maybe our Earth will be removed for a hyper-space bypass? ;)

joanna said...

brian, your imagination just ... astounds me. always a new way of bringing an issue to the front. this has some light-hearted moments, but its seriousness is all too real.

myheartslovesongs said...

brilliant though disheartening!

Syd said...

Powerful--I wish that more people got it--we are shitting ourselves into oblivion.

Teri said...

Great way to put it - we should really be preserving what we have.

Bar None Publishing Group said...

I think poetry with a message is a challenge. I think environmental poetry is damn near impossible to write. You took up the challenge and slapped complacency across the face with it. Well done!
On a lighter note...
Happy Holidays Brian
Cheers
Mark Butkus

Rachel Hoyt said...

I loved the journey through your words! This stanza was AWESOME:

trust me, growing up, my sister
would not have made it out of orbit,
but this is not about Mars and Venus bladder sizes
but Uranus---or our anus
and propensity to deficate our own planet
as an expense of today, despite future indebtedness

Rachel Hoyt said...

Happy Holidays!! :)