Wednesday, November 2, 2011

speaking love through stitched lips

i wept

which is the shortest verse,
i will ever write in this gospel
of me,

notice the lower case,
i am no divinity,

but weep i did
the day Art met God
on the street

starting quiet,
it quickly escalated
into a fist fight, on the level
of a Presidential hopeful
debate


you are too controversial,
thundered the skies

and in spilled paint
on the sidewalk scrawled
in rainbow hues,
you used to be.

me, i just weep
in the distance be-
tween, for the loss
of Greater Things.

written for Imperfect Prose.

95 comments:

rosaria said...

Weeping for the loss of greater things.................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................I could go on and on and on,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

happygirl said...

notice the lower case,
i am no divinity,

I've never understood the upper case H and I forget to use it most of the time. Is this an ode to the silent majority? 'Cause I think they are BACK.

Old Ollie said...

i am no divinity is a great line - the title is compelling too...made me want to jump and get reading.

Anyes said...

Controversy in Art good, right?

Lady Nyo said...

Oh~! This poem is so layered and so applicable to so many situations...

Great piece, Brian...you just never miss!

Lady Nyo

Pat Hatt said...

Greater things do get lost in the process and the rat race
Took me a second too clue in to the lower case
But that just worked so well
A divine idea I must tell
Oops I used upper case
Did it twice smack my face
Stuck in such a trend
Maybe whoever started it wanted to be divine come the end

Maggie said...

a lump? I'm glad it wasn't anything bad!! But still kind of scary. Right now, I'm a tad bit more relaxed because we didn't have school yesterday nor today because of the day of the dead celebration! YAY! haha:)

Uneven Stephen said...

Awesome. So many great lines (all of them), but I really like this stanza:

"starting quiet,
it quickly escalated
into a fist fight, on the level
of a Presidential hopeful
debate"

Great write, very intriguing.

Ruthiey said...

This is beautiful, Brian. Always love to read your work. You help me think of Greater Things.

TechnoBabe said...

Spilled paint on the sidewalk can still be art. So Art, meet another form of art.

Monkey Man said...

Gospel of me....amen.

Lisa notes... said...

Having to think through this one, Brian. Deep stuff here, as always....

Tara Miller said...

I agree with Lisa - this is very deep and I need to think on it a bit but I feel love pouring out? Yes?

ells said...

not being a poet...I usually have to read a couple of times...but I am getting better with practice..my favorite verse..weep in the distance....of Greater things...
Blessings to you...

Magpie said...

I loved so much about this...there were so many directions it could go.

janae said...

This cut me open and did not give easy answers. Thank you.

adeeyoyo said...

Street art... and sky writing... and someone who compromised his ethics for politics? I'm probably wrong, but hope not, Brian. Anyway I love you weeping on the street for the loss.

Fred said...

Cool write, feel it much the same. The paint stanza is quite perfect. Lots of neat effects here. Thanks Brian, cool read

nicolewian said...

This is wonderful!

lori said...

This brought tears to my eyes. This is a piece of your soul you've shared. May you never have to speak love through stitched lips, ever. I don't think you realize the impact you have on those who read what you write. One day you'll see, but until then, know that each part of yourself you're brave enough to give changes people for the better. I know your words have changed me, and I'm forever grateful.

Rebecca S. said...

This poem has good weight and measure. The spare words make good impact, and it warrants further readings because there is also something elusive...or maybe I just don't get what's happening in American politics right now? Smiles...as you say.

ayala said...

You move me. I love .... I just weep in the distance .....for the loss of greater things ...love it!

Cathy said...

Simple but clever, divine but human, the self and the Self at play.

Jessica Kristie said...

Love this!

Suz said...

stitched lips..hmm
so was it a mumble?

ipenka said...

I really liked this. When I read "you used to be", felt like it was screaming out.

liza said...

me too.

smiles your way.

Sh@s said...

...through stitched lips. Loved the depth in it.

Jinksy said...

Is , was, and will be often collide at the same point...

DJan said...

You are so... deep. I'm not sure what it means, but I do like it, Brian. :-)

Sub-Radar-Mike said...

I really enjoyed this one.

becky said...

Heading to a Chalk Festival on the streets of Sarasota today!!! Sunny forecast, God smiling on the colors...

Brian Miller said...

see i have you thinking deep...smiles...this is actually a pretty straight forward piece on the tension between art and religeon and how those world often only brush each other...

AmyLK said...

I agree with Lady Nyo.... so many layers and meanings. Have to go read it again.....

PattiKen said...

Very moving, Brian. But no worries. I trust that art will endure, no matter what forces try to oppress.

Josh said...

I don't get poetry.

Chris G. said...

Enough to make an artist weep. Strikes up the controversy and broaches art in a way that is so uniquely you, my friend - well done.

hedgewitch said...

Artful , to say the least--I love the fistfight concept.

Jennifer Dougan said...

Brian,

Your words and rhythm capture my attention, and it leads me to thank the Logos Writer for his skill in you. Thanks for letting me stop by.

Jennifer Dougan
www.jenniferdougan.com

lifeisaroadtrip said...

I thought about you yesterday. You'll find out why soon, but suffice it to say that it had a lot to do with awesome verses such as this one!

Daydreamertoo said...

I do not believe in any religion that sees nudity as vulgar.
Can you believe Pope Pius IX decided that all those penises were too vulgar and he had them all chopped off and covered with fig leaves. When you think about the enormous scandals and cover-ups of pedophile priest's there's been over many years a penis here or there seems hardly serious, does it.
I mean for goodness sake. Again, the Vatican has obtained and has (secreted away) millions $$$ of pieces of art and books and info..
Lovely piece from you again Brian. You always seem to do it! ;)

Goofball said...

I don't get what it is truly about


and yet it feels very touching

Tara said...

love this. strong, simple in statement, heavy in meaning.

me said...

I love this. There is so much in this that moves me, that speaks my truth. Why do the two battle so inside of me? I'd like them to coexist, but I can't seem to make it so.

Ed Pilolla said...

what a scene. what x-ray vision you have.

Blue Cotton Memory said...

Sometimes the greater loss births the greatest revelation!

Matt D said...

God in the blurs behind my tears.

Heaven said...

the title, post specially the ending lines...love it ~

Betsy said...

a loss...over things that are inconsequential?

Amy Sullivan said...

Whew, Brian. You do have a gift.

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

Everything has been said Sir! Nice piece!

JJrod'z

L.A Speedwing said...

nice poem. Can I ask you? How the hell did you manage to get 1000 followers? After a year, I hardly got 50.

Mama Zen said...

This is a stunning piece. I really love this one, Brian.

Vodka Mom said...

i really adored this one.

Syd said...

There are lots of things to weep about, but I prefer to get through the day with gratitude that at least I am still around to see, to speak and to hear.

emily wierenga said...

oh.

this one silenced me

for that space between. that awfully big space that only God can truly fill.

stunning, brian.

emily wierenga said...

ps. love the title

Katherine Krige said...

tissue? or will it help
in the greater scheme
that I fear
is life
...

Laura said...

there is much to weep over in the gospel of me, I fear. But this sounds heavy, Brian. POndering.

She Writes said...

I want to know more.

Jennifer Dougan said...

Thanks, Brian, for your comment over on my post "Sixteen Year Old Son Writes Letter Back Through Time" http://www.jenniferdougan.com/2011/11/my-sixteen-year-old-son-writes-letter.html

I agree that it starts even deeper discussions on life, radical redemption, forgiveness, lavish love and huge second, third and fourth chances.Thanks.

Jennifer Dougan
www.jenniferdougan.com

Melinda said...

I am no divinity..so true on so many levels.

Celestial Dreamz said...

a brilliant piece ... and a compelling title ... loved reading.

Claudia said...

when art met god on the street..the washing away of color on sidewalks made me think of a streetpainter who just painted "himself" in chalk on the street and god comes with a heavy rain and washes everything away...but that's just not how he is..right.. he may blur things and in the washing away will be born something of even more beauty...and it is art with god..at least that's how i read it..

Broken Sparkles said...

Only the author knows what he/she really meant by a poem, I guess many times we find interesting the way readers interpretate our words ... the end line about the lost greater things made me think of the way life has taken direction here in Greece, it's almost unbelievable how once upon a time really great people were walking around here and built so much, only now to be destroyed by modern Greeks ...

somewhereamelody said...

Oh, this is simply exquisite!
:)

ladynimue said...

i weep ...


indeed the shortest and most impacting verse ... but a worthy cause here.. so i do feel .

SueAnn said...

I too wanted to hear more!!
Hugs
SueAnn

tony said...

Loss Often Seems Black.If It Has To Go, Better It Be In A Rainbow Hues

Valerie said...

I'm another one who didn't get the real meaning, Brian. Or was there more than one? Interesting to read all the comments Hmmm!

somewhereamelody said...

Your poem left me wondering if maybe true art, like true science is actually at one with "true" religion.
All, in their own way seek to reveal truth. Jesus was/is pretty controversial, too :)
I like poems that you can mull over :)

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

So many opinions...SO.MANY...and the clashing of it all. Don't get me wrong...I do not want people to be carbon copies of each other but some understanding on all sides would be nice...I know, I know...wishful thinking.

Ravenblack said...

I don't have anything down in one, I'm not entirely sure I got it. I'm thinking you mean a struggle between following rules and freely exploring unhindered. Very interesting piece.

Slamdunk said...

I like the play here Brian. Shortest verse or saying certainly does not translate into least meaningful.

... Paige said...

um, Dude! Outstanding

ladyfi said...

Ah - what a fabulous poem!

Linda said...

I love your poetry; love your gift for weaving a beautiful tapestry with your words.
This one, I confess, I'm having a bit of trouble understanding fully. But, then, I think that is part of the beauty - pondering deeper meanings.

Robert Gerryts said...

you are too controversial,
thundered the skies


brian, this seven word portion is phenomenal (the rest of it is merely awesome!).

Lolamouse said...

I love this one Brian. The writing style reminds me of Corso's Poets Hitchhiking on the Highway. You'd appreciate it if you haven't read it yet. http://www.u.arizona.edu/~pforeman/Hitchhiking-5-3.html

Joanna Jenkins said...

Lump in throat-- So much between the lines here. Great job.

jj

Natasha Head said...

The battle's not over yet! And you know me...I think you're divinity...at the same time, deep writing...I am saddened...but still willing to fight! Uncensored and unedited (according to my own personal rule book!)

Joanna Jenkins said...

PS WOW, you have almost 1000 followers! High Five Brian.
jj

Lorraine said...

today, i am weeping with you my friend

Sue said...

Artists travel that road not taken...often a difficult journey. But I have to believe the high points are worth the low ones.

=)

Sue said...

It just occurred to me that Frost, at least, agreed. He took the road less traveled by...and that made all the difference.

Anyone who could write that poem had done his share of weeping.

=)

Catherine Denton said...

Stunning.
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Mary said...

Hopefully Art and God (upper case for both) can learn to co-exist!

Mrsupole said...

God makes the most beautiful and wondrous art in the world, look how many try to capture it on canvas.

Religions have the problem with art, or some narrow minded people who destroy art in the name of religion.

The hard part is knowing the difference. But then there are narrowed minded people who also kill in the name of their religion. There is a difference in those that follow God and those that follow a religion. Beware of the latter.

God bless.

Heather said...

yes, this is a deep one...re-read it several times....

Myrna R. said...

If this prose is supposed to be imperfect, then you missed the target. I think it's perfectly artistic, profound, thought provoking, even if you are not divinity.

Anna @ path of treasure said...

This is deep and thoughtful. I guess I'm seeing this poem as to how much of faith is restrained, kept out of art? And yet "speaking love through stitched lips", I think that is a struggle for so many ... since the world's view on art and so many other things is a secular view... devoid of faith... so maybe sometimes we stitch the lips and hands that create, muzzle the gifts, and hide treasures that should be offered... it feels like a dilemma at times..... And I weep for the loss of greater things... oh that is touching line, on so many levels. Another great one, really enjoyed it.

Cindy said...

This poem speaks deep...and I loved reading through the comments, how it touched in so many different ways, but always evoking the deepest emotion and belief system!

secret agent woman said...

Sometimes weeping is the right response.

Christine said...

beautiful, those first four lines could sum up a lot of people

Anonymous said...

Oh, you are such a handsome guy,
the way you react and expression your feelings is mind blowing.

Did you really cry? or simply wrote it as a fiction?

A friendly hug to you, this one makes you look like a big boy who needs motherly comfort.


I am moved reading your lines, very well done.

you are the best.

xox