Sunday, November 27, 2011

160 - i read my days by-


-soil in whorls
fingerprint remnants
evidence of experience

creation's moment
must have been a blast

echoes of its laughter
still expand
into untouched

space(s)

What can you say in 160 characters (spaces included)? Go tell Monkey.

82 comments:

Steve E said...

Fo Gawd Sakes, man--WASH yo HANDS!

David Allen Waters said...

creations moment, must have been a blast....Brilliant line my friend :)

hedgewitch said...

Big Bang with small spaces. Love it--and could never do it. I feel good when I come in under 160 lines. ;_)

rosaria said...

Evidence of experience, indeed!

Christine said...

Beautiful picture of the creator perfect read minutes before going to church this morning. :)

JANU said...

It always feels nice to create...:-)

Adam said...

nice poem

Claudia said...

oh yes - it must have been a blast and i like that we still hear the echoes of laughter and wonder each time we touch something new and our fingerprints mingle with his.. laughing at hedge's comment...she's awesome..

Morning said...

love this.

Deep and fundamental in many ways yet expressed in a few words.

Friko said...

I love this, seeing creation as a blast full of wild laughter.
The idea of it!

Caty said...

yep, I would think creation's moment was definitely a blast! love the photo too :)

Ed Pilolla said...

something surprisingly sweet about the dirt in that image and the thought of laughter still reverberating throughout the universe. evidence of experience is like another course in this compact, though lush dish of a poem.

you know, you are so consistent, providing such good quality so often, that visiting your blog, probably like so many others here, is one of my favorite blogging experiences. don't know what blogging would be like without waystationone, but it would not be nearly enjoyable.

Andy Santana said...

Passando para conhecer o seu blog,
adorei aqui,
bom domingo

Nanka said...

Few words maybe but you have said so much here!! Fantastic photo and an excellent accompaniment to your lovely poem which explains well the process of bringing something into existence!!

Alice Audrey said...

LOL! And doesn't it make life grand.

Pat Hatt said...

A moment you capture from creation
Prob caused such gratification
But keep those hands away from me
Eww all dirty stirring up my ocd..haha

Madeleine said...

Lovely observations and sentiments.

Evalinn said...

Nicely told! :-)

Daniel said...

Touching, simple, lovely.

Vicki Lane said...

Wonder full, wonder full!

Magpie said...

Dirt...the gift of life.

Sheila Moore said...

mmmm - serenity in 160 characters - love it. this reminds me of what duane wrote about at Songs from the River blog yesterday.

Sub-Radar-Mike said...

Love that middle section... "must have been a blast"

Helen said...

Perfect for a Sunday ....

secret agent woman said...

Sometimes I try to wrap my mind around the nothingness before the Universe was, and can't.

Barbara said...

Beautiful words to go with a beautiful photo, Brian.
Hope you and your family had a wonderful Thanksgiving!

annell said...

So beautifully done, certianly one of my favorites. I am in Texas, my Mother is dying. It has all happened fast.

Heaven said...

This challenge stumps me but you have perfected it~

I like "echoes of its laughter" specially on Sunday ~

Sweeter said...

So little words so great a world you depict: creation a relic. ;-)

CherylK said...

That's a beautiful photo and a great poem...you are gifted, that's for sure! (and thanks for stopping by!)

The Gooseberry Garden said...

You have outdone yourself on this one,

what a pleasant treat for Sunday.

Keep up the excellence.

Someone is Special said...

just 160 characters but you said so much Brian.. Loved it..

Someone is Special

Chip said...

absolutely love the photo. Greatness!

ayala said...

Sweet image!
:)

Monkey Man said...

So true...there must have been joy in creation. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160. Always excellent and thought provoking.

Unknown Mami said...

Love the pairing of the image and words.

Eva Gallant said...

I do believe creation was a blast.

Eva Gallant said...

I do believe creation was a blast.

Goofball said...

the echoes is waving across through your blog

izzy said...

I am not a rabbit but I am running late for everything this weekend; probably tripped on the stall mats
and stone dust pile too many times-
Love the first line!

zumpoems.com said...

Picture in itself is full of meaning (there's always a bit of mess to go with beauty). Love your poem! Great last line -- and of course, the big bang was without a bang --- nothing but space -- so no sound waves -- butthe blast certainly had photons blasting out at some instant (less than a second) after creation. Now if one considers the theory of two universes colliding to create this one..... Great work!

Tara Miller said...

And it is good. Very pretty words today love.

Maggie May said...

That was such a lovely illustration and a very thought provoking piece.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Daydreamertoo said...

I bet it was a blast too!
You know I read a book couple of years ago called Blasphemy and in it the author speaks of us having built a particle collider and finding 'God' at the point of explosive collision. (The big bang) and, God tells these scientist/people HE himself doesn't know everything, that, He is the creator but, he doesn't know himself who is HIS creator but that he does know our whole purpose here in the universe is to prevent it from heating up and then collapsing in it itself again...and he ends with 'The truth shall set you free' etc etc...an amazing (hi tech thriller) read. Sounds kind of like recent real life, doesn't it and if history does in fact repeat, who is to say that we are not to original creators of the original big bang by building these particle colliders and running experiments with anti matter and such that we really don't yet understand all too well. I also read that they are in the process of building a huge particle collider in space just to see what happens!...duuhhh. History repeating....maybe.
Great 160 from you.

DJan said...

Lovely, inspiring creation, Brian. That picture... ahhh.

farmlady said...

These could be my hands, with my fingerprints. I love that photo. I can feel the soil between my fingers. I wonder what came before and what will happen after, but I love the idea that...

"..echoes of its laughter
still expand
into untouched

space(s)"

This is so wonderful.

Pseudo said...

I've always liked the word "whorls..." You used it perfectly. For some reason, I feel as if I might have spelled it wrong, only sounded it out before, but not written it myself.

Hilary said...

Beautiful expression of creation.

Pearl said...

I come here often but don't always say anything. Poetry is not my "thing", and I don't feel I have anything real to offer, but this:

echoes of its laughter
still expand
into untouched

space(s)

touched me. :-) Nicely done, Brian.

Pearl

Mama Zen said...

I love it!

PattiKen said...

This is beautiful, Brian.

Heather said...

i agree. creation was a blast...! so much said in few words...love that.

TALON said...

You always pack so much in so few words, Brian. Hope you and your family had a beautiful Thanksgiving!

Laurie Kolp said...

Brian~ A lovely capture, especially:

echoes of its laughter
still expand
into untouched

Enchanted Oak said...

I LOVE IT!!!

You've grown as a poet like a bamboo shoot, Brian.

Betsy said...

probably the only thing we'll ever experience that would be close to that 'blast' is experiencing the birth our children...and I'm sure that still pales in comparison.

manicddaily said...

You've squeezed in so much here and yet manage to include the small and particular. (The world in a grain of sand errr soil.)

Old Raven said...

This is excellent ... creation ...blast ... must have been the Big bang after all. :)

Cloudia said...

this is a tight gem!

great pic.
perfect words
marching to hints
of deep truth-



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R. Burnett Baker said...

This was short, brilliant, and very exciting! Such power in creation....

Sh@s said...

Enjoy being the creator :)

Susie Clevenger said...

What a wonderful piece...creation's moment a blast..echoes of its laughter...Love your choice of words

Anyes said...

It was a blast ;-)

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Excellent. You do so much with so little space!

adeeyoyo said...

I do think the Creator has a great sense of humour, Brian. Just look around...

Vidya Sury said...

So sweet!

Alan Burnett said...

"What can you say in 160 characters (spaces included)?" Not as much as you my friend, not as much as you.

Zuzana said...

Dear Brian, hope you had a lovely weekend - your words compliment the image very well. The power of creation - in any form - is awesome.;)
xoxo

Baino said...

A little Birdie told me that you're missed on 10thDoM. Whack some prose out you..flex that cerebellum

Dave King said...

Lovely. I really like this. The final lines button it beautifully.

Birdie said...

awww, i knew when to come back from my travels ;-) very lovely Brian! my belated 'happy Thanksgiving wishes' !!!

Lorraine said...

I love this....

Jyoti Mishra said...

M gonna sum up all in one word- Beautiful !!!

Cheryl said...

This is wondrous. Love that photo too.

Fred said...

Nice piece. Always a pleasure watching you work in these limited forms, as you always knock it out of the park. I've always found this type of topic great to delve into, well go figure right-lol But amazing job here, and love that word whorl. Thanks

william said...

a plethera of things to think about here Brian, and you always make the reader think long and hard :)

myheartslovesongs said...

beautiful!

Liza Ursu said...

"echoes of its laughter
still expand
into untouched"

that is so beautiful Brian.
wow.
or should I say pow,
in my being.
thanks.

lori said...

Since I'm working my way backwards, I found it kind of funny that you created both this and the haunted couch story. But, it just goes to show how broad your range of talent is. Excellente:)

Syd said...

Love it--creation's moment must have been a blast! And that bang is still expanding further and further.

Myrna R. said...

Sweet. Funny how your few words can conjure up so many thoughts. I thought of my father-in-law's huge, blistered hands. He loved the soil.

Thanks for this one Brian.

eflores said...

You created a poem about creation. Amazing!

Erick Flores