Saturday, October 8, 2011

Poetics: Bumper to bumper


We bumper our stickers to remember
what we stand for, work shirts with our
names on them, just in case we forget
in our ignorance, opinions are rectums
every body has one, and when peeled
layer by layer like onions, tears run rivers
at their intentions, lack of forethought
or motivations & if you're close enough
to read this, back off, get your nose
out my---

SCreeeeaaacHHHH! KraSHHKH!

Oh that does it, if you wanted to know
you ain't even got to ask, as John Mayer sings
I'll say what needs to be said, cause slogans,
every body got one of those too, short & to
the point so it can be tweet and re-tweet
on global repeat, grace our t-shirts
and change just as easy, put through
the spin cycle and lost in the laundry

and one day I will figure out where all
those socks go

but tonight, with the stars as my judge
and jury let the scales of justice rest
on the backs of proud parents of honor
roll students from this school or that,
that patrol streets be-tween activities,

I got my own protest against the in-just-us
which begins with the match of my thumb
on the arch of your feet making bold statements
on billboards rising in red heat up your flesh
where the crease of my dress shirt you wear
parts and my fingers march

grab the collar and pull you close so in
the glow of the fierce intensity of my eyes
and U's even the blind could read my lips
and be no mistake in my message, as hoarse
breath on that tender place at the base
of your ear and neck

"This riot
is just beginning."

Today at dVerse Poets Pub, I will be hosting Poetics, with a poetry prompt that will surely get people talking, making statements and taking it to the streets. Slap a sticker on your car and we will see you at 3 pm EST.

81 comments:

Daniel said...

Kind of a stream of consciousness rant that hits a few nerves that need to be hit. Oh, and good morning. Have a great day.

oceangirl said...

Good morning Brian, screeeeaachhhh krashhhh! What a conviction. John Mayer sings Your Body Is A Wonderland. I like that one.

DJan said...

If you ever figure out where those socks end up, please write a poem about it and let me know, too. :-)

Glynn said...

We should start a new movement: #occupydVersePoets! We'd have to do a virtual sit-in, though.

Great poem, Brian - especially the noted equivalence of opinions and rectums.

Pat Hatt said...

haha Not one bit rocky
Guess I made you pull out the old socky
Going all bumper to bumper too
Mentioning rectums and opinions as we all have a few
Of the later that is
Unless somes heads are empty and can be a mock up of the rectum biz
Just I don't even need to post today
You took care of much I use my way..haha

TechnoBabe said...

Whew, really was heating up in this post. Great writing as always, Brian.

Christine said...

a good protest, bumper sticker, or slogan lies in our day to day integrity on how we act and say and do, thank you Brian for reminding me that I don't need to toot my own horn, I just need to live what I believe, and know in MY heart I did the right thing, I don't have to spin it out people will just know
Happy Canadian Thanksgiving to all!

manicddaily said...

Ha! The end of this one almost took me by surprise. Good detail as always.

the walking man said...

The socks slip between the drum and the housing of the dryer, where they lay forever forgotten because disassembling a dryer is just as complicated as taking apart a mind.

Pat said...

Whew! Is it hot in here or is it just me? Hee hee

I love reading bumper stickers

I was wondering where you were going with this....love how it all works together

ayala said...

Brian, this is brilliant!

my day in a sentence said...

I never understood why Americans love bumper stickers so much. Just sayin'.

Heather said...

i like john mayer and this dverse - i dont have any bumber stickers on my car....in case you were wondering...but some people in my town have ATLEAST 10! they put their lives on their cars....have a good saturday ( glad you like the totes!) :)

She Writes said...

I love where you took this, Brian. And, upon your advice I reworked my 10th DOM :). Thanks!

David Allen Waters said...

Dude, I standed amazed....another awesome write :)

hedgewitch said...

Way beyond the bumper sticker here, bri. Nice shift from the global to the personal, and that's how we keep our sanity. Looking forward now to the prompt.

Valerie said...

I wondered where this was going but in the end I found out. Nice!

Mary said...

I loved the stream of consciousness, thinking about the different bumper stickers I've seen (e.g. for candidates who lost the last Presidential election - still sticking fast). Stickers are like tattoos, difficult to remove even when you don't want them anymore. And then I came to the ending...excellent, packed a subtle punch!

Sue said...

Hoo-wee!

=D

Rebecca S. said...

Powerful, Brian. I will catch up on your other posts from this week when I return! Yeah...slogans...neat little soundbites, eh? Easily digestible and easily disposed of.

farmlady said...

How you can go from bumper stickers to heavy breathing is amazing to me.
Your poetry is awesome.

Mama Zen said...

Tight write! I love the intensity.

Tom said...

i'll bet you have your own theme song.

don't take mine, it goes "dum dum dum dummmmm..."

Fred said...

Wonderful piece Brian. I've often tried to piece together profiles of people using their bumper stickers or "slogans' they attach to themselves. You really to this notion to a whole other place- love it really and can't wait to see what the prompt you provide- because I think one of the things I'm good at is ranting:) Will check in at d'verse after the hockey game completes, thanks

ladyfi said...

What intensity in this writing! Love it.

Daydreamertoo said...

Packs a powerful punch! You sure have a way of telling it like it is, warts n all!
WTG U
Your poetical talent never ceases to amaze me :)

Daydreamertoo said...

Are you a water sign?
I'm Cancer and both the moon and any type of water have always held such fascination for me.
Are you able to use my site a bit easier now please?
I got rid of the Facebook 'like' button. I think when it was hacked they added a small piece of code to it and it was screwing it all up.

lifeisaroadtrip said...

The journeys you lead me on are always surprising and amazing.

My 2 Pesos said...

Funny sticker. :D

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"when peeled layer by layer like onions, tears run rivers..."

Hi! Brian...
Once again, I enjoyed reading your beautiful "play on words" as you "play with words" always leave me to reflect on your very poetic words.
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D

Claudia said...

whew...it's getting hot in here...smiles...tight write brian - i remember all kind of stickers, standing also for different eras like those with che guevara on it for example - sometimes we need those stickers most where we feel weakest -oh and i just printed a t-shirt with my name on it..just in case...smiles

Louise said...

lol ...the first few verses made me laugh! Enjoyed this a lot, and loved the ending. Great write :)

zongrik said...

I really liked this. this is my favorite of all the pieces i've read of yours so far.

Friko said...

It's about time for the riots to begin.

Go on, Brian, write the battle hymn!

li said...

"Tweet and re-tweet on global repeat"; wow, that's just a perfect line :-)))

Kiera said...

Oh Brian, I have missed you so much. I don't know how I "lost time" but it won't happen again. I'm following your magical way with words into whatever hell or paradise they might lead me to.

Ed Pilolla said...

awesome. you have a movement to your words that is unique among anyone i have read. i too remember the dirty harry 'opinions are like assholes' line. you weave pop culture in and out like it's no big trick.

Laurie Kolp said...

Brian- Strong voice! I especially like the opening line.

Here's mine:

http://lkkolp.wordpress.com/2011/10/08/%e2%80%9csave-the-earth%e2%80%9d-my-ass/

Natasha said...

Okay...seriously, when do WE get to hear YOU spit these words! Love the fierceness of your flow here, always do...would love to know if you hear them like I do.

Nikki Rules said...

I love when I can pretend to be Eminem as I read poetry, and it ends up working brilliantly...

wolfsrosebud said...

mini bill boards traveling by...

liv2write2day said...

This does have the feel of a rant or hip-hop and I like the way you blend so many viewpoints into one poem that doesn't have to come to a screeching hald. I never did get that Tahoe one...but we see lots of Keep Tahoe Blue here in Reno.

lynne said...

This pen was running down the road waving the bumper sticker. love poems that move on the page...

this is one of those!!

chromapoesy.com said...

tears run rivers
at their intentions, lack of forethought
or motivations & if you're close enough
to read this, back off, get your nose
out my---

Brilliant and loved in-just-us - you say so much so well. Keep telling the world what you think - we need more thinkers!

S. Sharp said...

kind of reflecting about different viewpoints. Beautiful and Original one.
S.

Sophia said...

Wow, seriously impressive on how you took this (and us) from the beginning to the end. Nice. Just saying. :)

Luke Prater said...

say it loud, brother! Amen to that. Great write Brian

Eva Gallant said...

Wow! That took a sizzling turn! Love it!

Lolamouse said...

Made me laugh then made me hot and bothered! Nicely done! Geez, I HATE those "My kid is an honor roll student" bumper stickers! Like I really care.

kaykuala said...

Thanks Brian,
Currently on the road. Just responding to keep in touch but not posting. Hope for one tonight. Have a pleasant weekend!

Hank

tinkwelborn said...

whoo. when reading this (second time, third time) through, I said to myself --where's this guy's socks?
really, I said what can I say....then I peeked. Yes I did, and somebody said it for me: Stream of Consciousness. Kinda like following Steven Daedelaus around -- but in a car, among bumper stickers.
then there's the onomatopoeia (you all made me look that up, didn't you) SCreeeeaaacHHHH! KraSHHKH! then it heats up.

Just as in Joyce's work....there's a lot of heady stuff here.

Road Rage....let's blame in on the bumper stickers.

Thanks for sharing.

Tara Miller said...

A very good rant, love! I honestly believe there is a bumper sticker for anything you could think of which is a little over the top for me. ;)

Shawna said...

Wow, Brian. You are unbelievably creative.

Morning said...

valid lines,
very creatively done.

Those words burn themselves, with so many FANS hanging on this page, the temperature is perfect now.

Arlee Bird said...

I used to be more vocal than I seem these days. Now I tend to take care with expressing my opinions in any form. Seems like whenever I open my mouth I often stick my foot in it. Hmmm-- maybe that's where my socks went.


Lee
Tossing It Out

Caty said...

"in just us" I love that :) the whole thing was great, kinda felt like a flight of ideas-great ones of course...oh and thanks for stopping by and saying hi today- Happy Saturday to you too!

Ravenblack said...

Awesome. Bumper sticker type talk add to the liveliness. It's got a rallying type mood to it. Enjoyed the read.

The Empress said...

Does this mean what I think it does?

Live readings?

How perfect to hear something read the way it was meant.

I think , no--I know, that is such a treat.

Nice little life, Brian.

To have live readings to look forward to.

lori said...

You so rock! This is awesomeness, Brian. Oh, and do I sense that there are other natives getting restless in your comments section? (testing 1, 2, 3 ... is this mic turned on?)

Seriously, this is a favorite for sure. Only you could go from raving to steaming in on piece without skipping a beat, lol :)

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

That's wonderful!

Kerry O'Connor said...

"This riot
is just beginning."
Kind of says it all. Reading this, I'm amazed how human experience has been turned into the cliched bumper-sticker intellect, where all information comes in bite-sized chunks. What a terrifying legacy.

Dave King said...

I must say I'm allus afeared of reading bumper stickers in case I don't react in time - I never seem to see a good one on a car that's parked. I wonder why that is. Great poem, though.

Steve King said...

A great way to start reading the posts! I love the energy, the stream, the way you wound it all up.

izzy said...

A slogan huh? bumper stickers and telltale moves- Hmmm... " Don't Drift, Drive!"

johnewordslinger said...

wow, fire'd up are ye? lol, I hear that, right be side ya lol, some great lines going on here, love it, thnk you, much appreciated WS

eclipsingwinter said...

Brian, I gave up on the socks long ago and at about the same time wondered if everyone forgot how to think for themselves or simply decided that it was easier to follow than to lead with uniqueness. Fabulous (oh, the dress shirt conjured up thoughts)

Thanks so much for the Bumper-to-Bumper poetics. You rock.

Beth

Sheila Moore said...

this riot is just beginning? way to leave us hanging at the end there (smiles) Love the beginning, too, about rectums - everyone has one - but then when you said "when peeled layer by layer like onions," I was like, "EEEEWWW!" LOL!

ShonEjai said...

Well written. I loved the very first stanza. Very thought provoking.

seasideauthor said...

Ohh so true, I have to read this again this is my second read but there is so much here, I do not get it all yet. I am slow...grace our
t shirts. Shocking stuff on shirts these days! LOL I will be back. Good Read...screech is well placed!

Belinda said...

Great intense poem with an ending that packs a punch and yes, I agree that this riot will continue to gain momentum. Hoping for a revolution.

Baino said...

Please let me know when you find out where all those socks go.

Quotes,Photos and a little Poetry said...

I love the metaphors used in this poem. Onions, peel, tears, layers and more. Also when you find out where all the socks are pls let us know.

Patricia said...

let the wild rumpus begin :)

The Orange Tree said...

My fingers are burning,
water, please!

Great Riot,
have fun with your revolution.

Myrna R. said...

You're so right. We all have opinions, lost socks, causes to put on stickers. What a world we create.

yellowhousecafe said...

Awe...some killer things going on here, Brian. I'm bummed that I missed this over the weekend (just saw tonight) but I did write one in honor of a fab prompt.
"in-just-us"... love that, quiet riot, indeed ~

gautami tripathy said...

Perfect!

Magpie said...

You're driving us headed to the soap box derby...then WOW, you make a sharp turn to somewhere all together different. Something you're very good at, by the way. :)

tera said...

Definitely more cowbell.
And more wonderful poems.

I see a lot of bumper stickers that make me laugh or make me mad, and then I forget them, but there are two I will remember always:

"I love my wife" - how awesome for a man to put that on his wife's car!

and

"Where are we going and what's with this hand basket?"

:)

The Cello Strings said...

Glad to see you inspired.

Great outlet to inspire others to think.

Syd said...

There is a local sailboat named More Cow Bell. Gotta love that.