Monday, October 31, 2011
Magpie Tales: ClickclickclickclickclickclickclickTing
ClickclickclickclickclickclickclickTing
Shzipp
The page stares back into his heavy lidded eyes, bloodshot and burning, he forces a blink knowing the contest is unnecessary. Flexing his fingers, he feels tension release from within each joint, then brings them to his face, dragging them down from hairline to hollow cheeks. His tongue dampen his lips, as if he has something to say, but doesn't. A fly lands atop the typewriter, rubbing its front legs.
Taking a cotton cloth from the table top, he works his hands, removing ink and oil, paying close attention to the nails. Longer than he usually kept them, he wishes for a moment he had clippers nearby, contemplates retrieving them from the bathroom. This would mean crossing the room and he can barely feel his legs as it is, just little pin pricks of life along their length.
Stretching his legs under the desk, a small fire erupts in the muscles. It hurts, but feels so good. He smiles and retrieves a crumpled pack of cigarettes from one of the drawers that run along the right side of the desk. Shaking one loose he places it between his lips, where it dances. He inhales, even though it is not lit, savoring the smell of the tobacco as he centers on the fly on the typewriter.
The fly walks a small circle, now facing the page that still rests, pinched in the roller. He wonders if the fly is reading and if it likes what it sees. Kill it, a stray though dances through his thoughts, but he dismisses it. The desire to touch it, to feel its wings, is almost overwhelming. The tobacco tastes sweet on his tongue.
Careful not to disturb the fly, he puts one hand on the roller knob and takes the top of the just completed page in the other and rolls it until released. The fly cares little, remaining where it is, as the man lays the freed page on an inch deep stack of its brethren.
The wall behind the typewriter is grimy with years of fingerprints and sweat of its occupants. Notes are etched in its surface, notes he has left himself among those of others, he left while typing, too busy to pause and find paper. Some he can read and understand, others are nearly intelligible, scrawled hastily in manic swirls.
كلمات غير מילים לא נעמרות Unausgesprochene worte
parole inespresse
Gouged deep in block letters he recognizes as his own, UNSPOKEN. Puckered edges bite his fingers as he traces each letter, he is sure, not for the first time. His eyes spasm wide, accompanied by a sharp intake of breath. The fly launches itself from the typewriter, turning a sharp corner over the man's shoulder disappearing from view.
Grabbing the stack of completed pages, he flips through, a river of white cascades to the floor where pages splash in various directions. Blank, how can they all be blank. A moan begins deep within him, the distant call of a train rising into a howl. Abruptly, he wrenches open the top drawer, removes a fresh sheet of paper and feverishly feeds it into the machine.
Clickclickclickclickclickclickcli---
The fly lands on the crest of the man's ear, crawling to the point where it joins the rest of his head and begins rubbing its legs, which if the man could hear so minuscule a noise, would sound like chaotic laughter.
This is a Magpie Tale.
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Brian,
So the fly finally won the day!
Excellent write!
Hank
Wow..wee!! Top of the list again. This is 3rd time lucky!
Hank
I love your style. I wish I knew what happened here. :-)
Shades of the Shining - spooky!
Dang! I thought surely the fly would go "splat" on the wall! Hee hee. But then again, that would be too obvious. Wicked fly!
Damn those flies, they are the devil in disguise.
Distracting and then laughing over their win, one should clearly whack them and send them to the garbage bin
Thankfully no fly on me
The cat eats them down for free..haha
the other languages all say 'Unspoken words'...my though was this writer is in his own Hell for not writing what he should...or for anyone that has left things Unspoken
Will not let that fly anywhere near eeeks!! but nowadays they have taken a liking for the computer screens doing what they do best..rubbing their legs :D
An enjoyable read despite the bothersome fly!
It feels so raw and so intense. Wanting to be a writer and not having written much yet I can totally understand, Brian :-)
All those blank pages, all those unspoken words. Well written - sad and intense.
Nicely done! (And seasonal too.)
Lots of stress for this writer in the story. Whew. Makes me wish he would just concentrate and type.
He should have killed that fly when he had the chance. Now it's all over his ear and stuff. ;)
I think he needs a new ribbon. :)
"Knowing contest is unnecessary..." rings a bell. I thought I might take on NaNoWriMo but so much else to do...
There are all kinds of contests all the time I guess. Lots of swirling meanings in your creative Magpie I think.
thought I was watching a movie lol whilst reading this masterpiece, well done as always :)
Delicious horror, there.
Eerie...though he really should have swatted the fly!
Fabulous piece of writing. Sounds like me when I get writer's block... minus the fly.
Great storytelling!!
so it doesn't pay to leave things unspoken..... Love the tale.
Everytime I see a writtermachine I think about fringe tvshow
We've all been there at one time or another.
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Another tale from the Twilight Zone from the mind of Brian. Great!
Nightmare!
creepy and chilling write...my kind of halloween tale...using fly as a metaphor is a good technique in driving home your message
happy halloween ~
I hate a blank page. Since my job is to begin the letter or the report or the whatever, I face many blank pages before I send my words to the fly, I mean, my boss. :)
Yikes! Talk about scary!
Is that what you call "fly paper"? :-)
Bringin the crazy--and so well. Loved it. And I'm not sure some days if I'm not doing the same myself.
Oh that moan:) (damn fly)
You do crazy oh so well. I love the detail because I can see the whole scene so clearly. I tend to write with strokes that are too broad, so I admire those that can bring life to the tiniest parts of the story. You bring out this tortured soul and shine a light on him for us. I have too many favorites of yours, but I think I'll add this to my list :)
..creepy and silly – i always wonder how you managed to write huge stories with such ease as if like you’re just chewing some nuts... ha, think ye mastered the art of storytelling.. adorable and truly exceptional – yup, that’s you!
Good day!
~Kelvin
Brian, bang on again, as you
create something kafkaesque,
with a touch of Borroughs, and
this allegory, this macabre romp
this fevered episode will stay with
us for a long time; a terrific take
on the prompt, plunged into
miller-darkness, into an abysmal
daydream, or the writer's nightmare.
Happy Halloween!
Ha! (All work and no play makes Jack a good boy.)
Though this is very different, lovely pacing, sense of niccotine-stained fingers throughout the entire fly walk. Even the flame is unconsummated. Very nice.
K.
Hi Brian . . . you have mastered the art of storytelling better than your character, clearly. Quite spooky.
Obsessive compulsion is a bitch.
Nicely done.
Who said that it would be easy...glad it's not...Ars Longa, Vida Breve..
ah he should've killed that fly and write down these words before they kill him or drive him mad...great capture about that state of madness he's already in..wanting to touch and please what destroys him..love that you included some german words..made me feel at home a bit in all the madness...smiles
honestly, i tried to write a magpie tale..short story because i like the pic..but i was just so bored by my own writing that i fell asleep before the story was finished..smiles
Write, I must writewritewrite as insanity perches at the tip of my ear to read every word the the old machine fails to print.
Vivid, I was engrossed throughout, not by the mesmerizing fly but by the subtle shifts of mood and contemplation. UNSPOKEN is intense and in hindsight could only lead to stacks of blank paper.
Love it
Beth
dark. To me, this man felt very distraught - almost on the edge of losing his mind.
I just love it man.. and I want to comment you first at least once in my lifetime.. Last time I tried but ended up in 4 or 5th.. You are rocking..
Someone is Special
I knew there was something with the fly! This is so beautifully written and descriptive, Brian!
Oh! Wonderful story, in the end I was just looking sympathetic fly.
Hell? I read "The wall behind the typewriter is grimy with years of fingerprints and sweat of its occupants." and thought "Prison?"
For many nowadays, having a typewriter and not a computer would automatically mean "Hell." Heh.
Clever, entertaining tale, as usual!
The fly is laughing? Ouch!
Poor Hemingway, poor man.
That fly is having way too much fun with this poor beleaguered writer! I'd get the swatter immediately.
Is this a retro post?
When is the last time you heard the clicking of a typewriter?
The only thing missing was the carbon paper...:P
Now that truly is a nightmare. This reminded me a lot of a book I read once. It was by Dean Koontz, I think. Writers understand what fears most haunt people like themselves, don't they?
Cool piece, seasonally fitting for certain. Definitely a bit of a shadow cast here. Very interesting how it all played out. Thanks
The pain, the tension, the unending search - it's all here.
Excellent write, Brian.
This is so intense. Wish I could've seen your face while you were writing it.
I had visions of the movie, "The Fly" flash in my head. Only this time, it's the MAN saying, "help me, help me!"
I love the ending. The ending is genius.
very atmospheric
I think the fly must have been applauding your writing. Surely. I am.
great story - you have to be glad for the fly
:)
A real writer's story, this one. It is marvelous, Brian. So much to focus praise upon, these especially shone brightly for me:
Shaking one loose he places it between his lips, where it dances.
and the brilliant ending:
The fly lands on the crest of the man's ear, crawling to the point where it joins the rest of his head and begins rubbing its legs, which if the man could hear so minuscule a noise, would sound like chaotic laughter.
Fabulous Brian! Such a surprising direction!! Blank pages!! Wow!
Loved this
Hugs
SueAnn
So intense and simple, full color images come to mind as I read your writings... :)
that's clever. flies are so cute, I just love killing them
Loved it!
innards
ever see a David Cronenberg film?, I felt like I was drawn into a scene of something dark and psychologically twisted, nice
Excellent, Brian! This makes me think of the old fly movie with Jeff Goldblum.
This is so like an old science fiction flick- Twilight Zone...
very nice.
Cheryl
Creepy...sounds like it could be an episode of the Twilight Zone.
Great job! I think the fly should have died :)
my my...a dark piece.. Love it!! All those pages blank...an evil fly..great stuff!!
Wow Brian! Creepy...and I also saw this almost like watching a movie. (and it sort of makes me want to say, 'Out, out damn fly spot!' lol
Unspoken. Bet you have no trouble with that. You speak your mind, and what a mind. This was fun/strange to read and can only be produced by your mind. A fly of all things. Great write.
Dear Brian: Completely engrossing is the story's precise attention to detail which does lead this "hollow cheeked" man's into his spiralling madness. Wonderful how you allow the feelings associated with writerly accoutrements to manifest in your work. Excellent writerly skills.
This is exceedingly clever! It captured me from beginning to end.
onuitgesproken woorden
Very descriptive and atmospheric. The detail of that fly feels very real. They say details is the key. It clearly is the case here. But what's happening? He is typing away but all pages come out blank...did i miss something?
Typing busily but saying nothing of importance - nothing worth reading... And he is easily distracted by the fly - He was tempted to kill it... just trying to figure out the meaning of the fly...?
Brian, this was lovely. I loved your tale....
Oooo....loving "stack of it's brethren"..........very piratey! ;)
Peeked at your Poetry Jam blog......and hoping to find time to play. Extremely intrigued by the lace post....how beautiful.......!
Have a creative day!
~Mimi
www.collagepirate.blogspot.com
I was enthralled and taken aback by the blank pages! That damn fly - gruesome.
This reminds me of The Shining in a way. Maybe he didn't put a ribbon in the typewriter. Nothing there except blank compresses on the paper.
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