Monday, October 17, 2011
Magpie Tales: The Anniversary
Peking Palace is not the best Asian restaurant in town. Hung duck carcasses awaiting their turn to grace the plates of diners turn many away, people like separation between themselves and what they eat. The food is well enough to keep a steady flow of traffic on the weekends, but most Tuesday nights only a handful of tables are taken and the atmosphere is much more muted.
Chris is here neither for the atmosphere or the food. His arm raises and lowers the fork bringing food to his mouth mechanically. He chews and swallows, never tasting. It is a forced effort, the pushing bits of sustenance down pipes to the tight twisted confines of his stomach in effort to calm himself for what comes next.
Tonight is the anniversary of the death of his wife, and this another echo of the last meal shared.
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The first year after her death Chris found himself sitting in the same booth, unsure how he had arrived. He had every intention of going home after work to a quiet night alone, but that was not meant to be. He had ordered the same meal they shared, completed his own and was staring at her untouched plate when the waiter broke the spell asking if he was ready for the check.
He must have waved a hand because the check arrived with three fortune cookies. He did not even like fortune cookies, and their manufactured messages written by some back room hack with nothing better to do than spout nonsense on unsuspecting patrons held no more sway in life than newspaper horoscopes. Chris crushed them one by one, more to feel the texture of their texture in breaking.
Opening his clenched fingers, crumbs scattered across the table and he retrieved the three slips of paper. These fortunes were different though than any Chris had read before. They were messages from her. I am still here, repeated once on each white rectangle.
Chris waved the waiter over, animatedly asking for more, offering to pay for a box. Cooks stared through the hanging duck bodies as his voice got louder and behavior more frantic. To appease him or perhaps in hopes he would leave, the waiter brought him a box, which he tucked under his arm as he ran out the door into the cool night air.
Sitting in the center of their bed, his bed, Chris crushed them one after another, the silk sheets filling with grit and discarded fortunes. Each one mocked him with insane riddles, but no further messages. Howling in anguish, he tore open kitchen cabinets until he found a dusty bottle of bourbon that quickly emptied, becoming another and another.
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Staring into the mirrored window by his table, Chris runs his fingers across his face, each whisker a thorn in his palm. His hair is a mottled nest, barely fit for an animal. Cheeks hollow, eyes vacant unfathomable pools. He is little of the man who once strode confidently into meetings with customers, pen in hand ready for the sure sale. All the trimmings that had come with being a successful sales man had disappeared.
Raising his cup to his lip, he lets the liquor spill into his mouth, no longer feeling the burn of its advance. Five years. Was it five? He is no longer sure of time, other than each year he is here, on this night and she will speak to him. Try as he might to keep himself from this moment, it always came.
A soft click against the table announces the arrival of the check. Turning, Chris is confronted by three fortune cookies in their shiny plastic wrapping, the waiter familiar with what to expect retreats to a safe distance.
Taking the first, the wrapper crinkles, cackling laughter, as Chris' trembling fingers struggle to hold it. Hot tears scald his face, lips sputtering, as he tears the plastic skin. Dropping the cookie, he chases it as it rolls from the table. Aloud crash erupts as the table over turns spilling his empty plate and cup into the adjacent bench seat. He scrambles gathering each of the cookies to his chest, his wild eyes casting about at other patrons.
Cooks yell in chaotic chirps, the waiter appears, grabbing at him, but Chris fights frantically pushing him away. Remnants of his meal soak into the seat of his pants. Their eyes, every person's eyes crawl across his body on sharp feet. What little meal that resides in Chris' stomach forces its way into his throat, hands strangling him from the inside. Duck carcasses dance on the ends of their strings.
Searching his fingers between the shards of cookie, Chris finds the white strips. Words dance in red until his eyes focus. The message is the same. The same it has been every year since the first.
I know it was you. I know it was you. I know it was you.
this is a Magpie Tale.
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Chilling tale, Brian.
I think you accidentally typed "masssage" where you meant "message."
I love the word-collision of rushing visualizations and the crash and burn of mental distress. Once again, love it.
Yes! I love it. I was excited to see another short story up, and you did not disappoint. I could picture him in his bed with the fortune cookies, and at the end in the restaurant. I'm not kidding when I say you're stories would be so good on screen, any screen, big or small. Definitely Twilight Zone-esque, this one is. And, again, I love it :)
Wow you really sucked me in that time
Agree with Lori's Twilight Zone-esque chime
I knew I seen that pic before
With a little verse at another shore
But you took it and blew all away
Always a delight to see a short story at your way
Brian,
Comes along a little of the super natural,a little mystery,a singular love that still lingers. It contends around fortune cookies and Chinese takeaways putting some exotic colour into it! Great Magpie!
Hank
Great story. I was really drawn in at the point when he began breaking the cookies, just to feel.
Oh, this is the first short story I've seen, Brian. OUTSTANDING. It swallowed me up along with the duck and cookies, right to the end.
Man, what a talent you have!
brilliantly chilling....dude, this rocks!
Wow! How to give someone the shivers! Great!
Beautifully done.
Wow, I am covered in gooseflesh, Brian! Fantastic story and well told. :D
Great idea, well worked out. (We Brits are into Fortune Cookies. Our restaurants give us thin chocolate mints.)
You managed to do it again ~ chills up and down my arms, legs, all over!
Excellent! You need to write about a dozen more & then publish a book of short stories :) Or submit them to Ellery Queen magazine (is it still around?).
Ouch, living with guilt takes its toll.
Great tale, again Brian...love the supernatural twist.
This is surprising, you told a story with a guy in a different culture, with such haunting imagery, it reads like a native who made it.
It is also not surprising, because you are capable of writing the best short stories to impress others, regardless of topics or settings.
Vivid and spooky descriptions,
reading it reminds me of myself sitting in a movie theater watching Happy Potter, totally carried away by the picture you draw.
keep it up.
Harry Potter Movie clips alike.
superb job.
Awesome. Reminds me of another tale, by some guy named, Poe. : )
Extraordinary and very touching. It's hard to accept and move on.
Very "other worldly." The dead are never really gone, are they?
Remarkably imaginative and clever...
"I know it was you. I know it was you. I know it was you."
Hmmm, descent into madness, haunting echoes of guilt, or perhaps just the slide down the slippery slope of alcoholism and depression? I thought it was going to be a sad. sweet story of love lost, until I really read this. Quite intriguing Brian, so many ways of looking at this.
Chilling, sad. One can never escape guilt. A well told exploration.
nice and dimly dark. i was into it. great tension. fun read.
thanks so much for stopping by and the note. i've been at a wedding in chicago and am just checking in after a few days offline. looking forward to getting home to la tomorrow and getting back it the writing routine.
:)
That was an amazing story. It gripped me from the beginning.
Thank you for coming by my blog!
lets be honest...I didnt read your full post because i am not interested in food...I am quite impressed by reading your guest post at madhulika's so i am gonna come back :) till then bbye :)
stay connected!!!
its me!!! sharan :)
Most epic story involving fortune cookies that I will probably ever read, nicely done.
Thanks for stopping by! I haven't had much new for you to read, frankly...been a difficult year. The funny thing is that I had come by and read your Magpie earlier today. I was going to comment when someone came into the office, so I'm just now getting back to it. Brilliantly ensnaring! A bit of Poe's Imp at play here. I'll try not to be such a recluse :-)
Wow! I got chills when I read those last words, "I know it was you". Did he kill her? Will we ever know?
Ooooooooooooooh. Loved it. As usual. I try to think of something different to comment every time. But you always leave me thinking.
Wonderful story, I do not want to see in the shoes of Chris.
Awesome tale, love the combination of sorrow, pain and a brain that just can't handle it. Great weaving. Thanks Brian, great read
Now that I did not expect.
Nice little twist, they're the best.
Love it!
Five years? My, the weight of loss!
Oh, that was a twist. Very nice writing and could definitely imagine how haggard he looked.
Reminds me of a chinese gamblers tale for Mahjong. The tiles are always changing until you pick it up. Maybe the same thing for fortune cookies.
The tales fortunate cookies tell ;-)
You let those ducks lead you into a place where all kinds of things are hangin and swingin--loved it bri. And I totally didn't expect the ending--though knowing your twisted mind, I should have.
wow, this is great. :-)
Great tale. I've had some pretty chilling fortune cookies actually. Years ago though. Now, they are more like little aphorisms.
Not yours though!
Great story, Brian. I got lost in it, love it !
wow! That felt like a creepy and guilt ridden tale.
Oh, I can see an entire novel explode from this tale. Ala SK. The innocuity of the humble Chinese restaurant. The inexplicable desire or return of hunger for Chinese food and the fear of being caught, by the spirit of your victim. Oh the tangled web we weave, when....
Hmm, like how you move from "I am still here", where you create sympathy for the grieving widow, to the end, where it is accusatory "I know it was you". Nice twist.
Another great story, Brian!
That's a clever ending to the story.
ugh...was feeling sorry for him first...but should've known there would be a twist....but somehow still feel sad for him...maybe even more now..
The twist at the end was great...I assumed his alcoholism was from grief not guilt...guess, I was wrong :)
A gripping read Brian - I think you could turn this into a first class story.
Excellent story - grief and guilt are quite often interchangeable!
chilling and gripping... you are a marvelous writer here :)
Excellent. Love your short stories Brian.
Chilling, dramatic, spooky and perfect!
Tell me, if you were to create your family tree at ancestry.com would one of the branches above you say Alfred Hitchcock?
This was amazing. All of your stories are, but each is amazing in its own way. This one fooled me because I was getting all sentimental over the first messages, and then.....Yikes!
Reminding me of 'The Fountain', an odd but lovely film. I have found love a curse, myself, confounded by it for many years till giving up the ghost. :)
Most excellent writing, Brian!
Brilliantly written. Maybe it was the Chinese connection: I somehow knew there was chaos ahead. Great tale.
So beautiful Brian!! Many things can speak to us and transport us to another time and place. It is quite surreal! Pleasant! And a little frightening as well!!
Hugs
SueAnn
I am delighted to read another Magpie Tale. You do these so well, Brian. This one filled me with goose bumps and that's all down to your excellent writing.
Wow. While taking a break from blogging, I truly missed reading your work. When I got to the end of this story, I realized I had been holding my breath...really. You created suspense with your words and I can 'see' the whole story in my mind. The ending blew me away !
Dear Brian, I have to return to read this more carefully, I am still out of town, but sneaking in to blog a bit.;)
Hope you are having a great week,
xoxo
Very chilling. I was totally hooked start to finish.
Very Poe-like! The beating heart of guilt. Love it!
oh man that story breaks my heart...you are such a gift for bringing out all emotions :)
DAMN Brian!!!!!!!! I was SO CAUGHT up in his GRIEF...and then WHAM....
GUILT!
GUILT!
GUILT!
Did NOT see that coming!!!!
Love it!
Brian, this is unbelievably good!
awesome! thoroughly enjoyed it!
Brian Allen Poe.....
ooh, creepy!!!
Oh, good one!! I love it. I like what G-man said. So appropriate for this time of year. Whatever happened to your Odin tales?
Eerie, spooky and so well written. Enjoyed this one so much.
Kind of a "Twilight Zone" kind of tale. A bit spooky and eerie.
Hi! Brian...
What a very interesting read...very vivid, descriptive and captured my attention until the end. I agree with the previous commenter quite an interesting, chilling tale as is the title Of this tale.
[Once again, I liked the "breaks" in-between the tale!]
Ty for sharing!
deedee ;-D
Keep it up Brian, your penchant for horror is good.Nice to see prose again.
I think I get it-love the jangling ducks!
A poignant take on this prompt. A very distressing experience well-related.
What a great story...reminds me of Hitchcock...
Brilliant and you kept the suspense line going!! The details are superb!! That's the way the cookie crumbles!!
Great surprise ending! Just those few words, "I know it was you" were at the same time confusing and a shock. Guilt is the culprit, more than grief.Really had me glued to the piece.
Sorry, Brian, but I only think I understand the ending. Needs another wee clue somewhere?
It is worthy the time reading your words.
Another grabbing tale,
;)
xo
Dear Brian: Very imaginative short. I particularly like how the conscience plays trompe l'oeil mind games with the "fortune" cookies. (some fortune!) And poor Chris reliving each year his denouement. Chilling. My favourite line;
each whisker a thorn in his palm
Ouch! and ToucheZ! great story!
WOW. This really pulled me in! I kept reading faster and faster so that I might see what happened. You sure have a way with words, my friend.
Cheryl
she'll come after him!
Wow, that one certainly kept me on the edge of my seat! Now, there are a thousand different possibilities running around in my head...
Loved this!
Cheers,
Arnab Majumdar on SribbleFest.com
Spot on, Friend. You've got an impressive winner here - a classic Tales from the Dark Side ...
I love the ever increasing maddness, there is a beat like Poe. A good, chilling tale!
Exemplary, effective in its language and structuring - mood-effective and quietly amazing.
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