Wednesday, September 14, 2011

Here comes the sun



They line the streets, with large posters
of butchered children, bloody half formed
fetuses, and chant

Their voices tongue my ear

"Hell is lined with baby killers"

"What if God aborted you!"

They seek no understanding, just punch
and punch until you disgorge

Every street corner steams with my vomit,
a mile long river roils at their feet

Free to speak, free to assemble
I flip them off through the open car window

Their god of Hate is impotent,
in my humble opinion

And in this realise how much
we both still have to learn of love.

Here comes the sun.

Written for Imperfect Prose and Poetry Jam.
Photograph courtesy of Ainsley Allmark.

97 comments:

Daniel said...

This is what we call a "learning moment", where you gain some crucial insight that you did not have before. Good stuff.

She Writes said...

This reminds me of some abortion protestors who wore masks over their faces made of scarves, here in my area. They looked like a militant version of the KKK. I wondered if they really believed they touched anyone's heart to make a change in life for their angry God. They hid themselves behind masks to verbally assault women who were already hurting... I wanted to say something ugly to them as I pulled up to a place near the clinic that forced me to see them up close. But then I feared my words, my anger, my ability to nail them would turn me into them. Writing often helps me speak what I wish I could say. Well done.

Pat Hatt said...

Flip them off is the right thing to do
Can't say I disagree with you
They just need something to whine about
So they rant and they shout
Pretending they have the right to impede another
When it should simply be the choice of the mother

Hope said...

your words depict a powerful thinker, Brian. glad you can get it down so expertly as you do

beautiful photo!

Chris G. said...

All hate is impotent...tight way to put it man, it is astounding how much people try to cram change down with hate and force, rather than simple debate, simple words...through honest human exchange. It's not trying to convince, it's just attacking the other person's decisions...

California Girl said...

"Their God of Hate..."

Their God IS hate. So much hate now in our country.

Cheryl said...

Amen. It's a two-way street.

Mrsupole said...

I think that some of them go about it the wrong way. They should just show sonagrams of the babies once they have developed into little babies. It is a little harder to feel it is okay to dispose of them after you see those. They should be showing life not death.

I just wish there were no unwanted pregnancies and then abortion would be a moot point. Going through an abortion is one of the hardest things a woman will ever do and one she will never forget, always wondering if she made the right choice. It is like losing a child and she will often mourn the death and think of what could have been. It is a very personal choice, one I hope very few go through. It hurts you inside like nothing else and never goes away. Yes, we have the choice, but at what cost. It is our choice, not your choice. I just wish we did not have to choose.

God bless.

Sheila Moore said...

it takes a humble mind to realize hate comes in many forms. nice one, bri

PattiKen said...

As long as they demonstrate their opinions with placards and not pistols. Sadly, too many of those haters feel they have the right to punctuate their diatribes with gunshots.

Rachel said...

this is beautiful.

your words are so powerful. you are so right. their God is not our God. it is hate and crime and mistreatment.

my God is quiet in His love and longsuffering, even in His heartbreak.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

If only we would examine both sides of a coin before we choose. Too many times the mob that forms is simply choosing another's opinion instead of forming one of their own.

The Bug said...

Very powerful - you're on a roll this week :)

David Allen Waters said...

powerful, wow.....speechless.

bravo friend

Steve E said...

...and I live and die
breathe and sigh
someone asks "Why?"..
for one thing, I
was not aborted before my
cry.

I do not shout, nor venom spray
only thing I do today...is pray
My thoughts.
Steve

LadyCat said...

God IS Love...for all...no exceptions.

Major.Mack said...

Haters....

When I first glanced at this I wasn't going to even read it. I'm glad I did though. Very powerful, effective.

Titanium said...

Ironically, I've seen parents standing on the sidewalks waving those same signs with their school-age children at their side. On a Wednesday. In the middle of the school year, at -20F. Apparently, passing on the hatred, purposeful ignorance and empty rhetoric is more important than allowing their progeny to learn, grow and experience real life.

Brandee Shafer said...

I feel this so very deeply and have had, for a long time now (thanks to a 1998ish experience w/ protestors), something to add to this discussion. Thank you for spurring me on.

Moannie said...

This is powerful stuff. I have no time for the rabble, only for debate. I can understand the woman who yearns for a child crying at the door of the clinic, and I can understand the woman with too many children from a man who does not think his wife is more than just a vessel for his Saturday night boozy relief. I can understand the Christian for whom all life is sacred but I cannot understand those who believe they can change things with screams and placards and rage.

libithina said...

another powered one Brian ~ your imagery matches the outer and inner disgust at hopeless situations ~ vomit streams ~ flick them out ~ impotent god (as opposed to omnipotent) ~ seeing beneath the skin thats peeled back raw within ~ powerless ~ angry ~ but stil the sun shines ~ another constant ~ Hope it's hope and not in taunting but never go that ~ Helpless ~ you have such a way of nailing the grit and bones of the matter Brian ~ Excellence ~ Lib ~
big love x

Heather said...

I am so with you on this one...I would flip them off, too! GOOD for you!

Jannie Funster said...

hate will always eat the hater up.

xo

Brian Miller said...

i wish it was 1998ish...this was last week at the local christian university....

Sue said...

While I believe abortion is not an appropriate way to solve the problem of unwanted pregnancy, I am appalled by anti-abortion extremists who are disrespectful and even dangerous to those who disagree with them. If they value life, they need to value all life, including those who are pro-choice.

Having said that, I am pro-life. However, I am always careful to express my opinions on that subject with the utmost respect.

=)

PS. You're having kind of a politically-oriented mindset this week, Brian! ;)

Eva Gallant said...

Excellent, Brian.

lori said...

You are so good when you are writing passionately. This is a hard one. I feel this way about Fred Phelps and his ridiculous funeral protests, too. I love how in one moment we're cheering for you, and the next we're hanging our head with you (or at least re-evaluating with you). Love is not the easy way, but it is the right way.

True story?

Ed Pilolla said...

we have so much to learn of love. these people claim to love the unborn, but not those who are living and dying in wars they so proudly support. they mean well, but these people are manipulated by the powers to focus on anything not having to do with economic justice. abortion and illegal immigration are their big issues. and welfare, not corporate welfare, of which they may or may not benefit, but welfare as ronald reagan defined it. if i was an entrenched member of the elite, part of a lineage of power that has lasted much longer than several generations, i know an important pillar of my remaining in power is to feed a small but vocal minority of the population the tasty misinformation that poor and immoral people are the cause of society's problems.

TechnoBabe said...

There is hate on both sides of the issue. We all have to much to learn.

Tara Miller said...

While I don't agree with abortion, I surely don't agree with the way some go around protesting the issue. In your face ads such as those you describe only make people sick and angry (at the protestors, not necessarily the act). We don't have to agree with the act (person protesting or woman seeking the abortion)but we can still love that person and hopefully they will to.

Goofball said...

I don't want to belief in a God of hate, I can't.

So regardless my opinion, I must seek understanding. I am very convinced that nothing is black or white, but varieties of grey. It makes opinions so much harder, it makes decisions much harder....but it would make the world so much more human

Bonnie said...

The fine art of social commentary in verse.

Isn't it shocking that some of the most horrifying protests, even crimes, are done in the name of god. God, if there is one, could surely never be so vile.

Lisa notes... said...

Oh how we get so topsy-turvy when we try to press our views in hard. It backfires. Sigh. May we all find gentler, more loving ways to give voice.

Thanks for sharing the effect it had on you. It teaches what approach does NOT work.

Laurie Kolp said...

Strong, evocative... I especially like:

Every street corner steams with my vomit,
a mile long river roils at their feet

Heaven said...

The scene is disturbing and issue, even more so. I enjoy your passionate voice in this cause.

Love these words from you:

"And in this realise how much
we both still have to learn of love."

Indeed we do ~

Mary said...

I'm appalled by anti-abortion extremists too. I hate it when they have young children with them holding such signs. Though I would not have had an abortion nor have encouraged anyone I know to have one, I think it has to be an option.....lest we go back in time to having only back alley abortionists. All extremists scare me, to be honest.

Daydreamertoo said...

The world is full of haters like this. These people who say no to legal abortions have obviously never had a child raped and been made pregnant by her attacker. Never had a wife or sister, mother attacked and viciously raped, left half dead and with a child.
I don't take abortion lightly at all, it is a life after all but, it is a woman/child who carries the shame of being molested and then is expected to bear the pain and shame of it all for a traumatic 9 months to give birth to something born out of hatred.
Good grief Brian, you got me on my soap box again...and I'm too old to keep climbing up on it...Hahaha
Seriously, if these haters had a female relative who was attacked/raped, they'd soon change their minds.

Pastor Sharon said...

Say it!

What a loving moment of learning when we are able to realize how much learning we still have to do, to step away from "hate".

Jack Edwards Poetry said...

Powerful poem. I like how the link to the picture was not obvious. This help you avoid cliche. Great stuff.

Here is my post:
http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/09/sea.html

Pseudo said...

Here comes the sun
and I say
it's alright....

It feels like we are a long way from alright though.... trying to hang on tight and hold out for a better future.

Jen Chandler said...

Very powerful stuff.

I agree with another comment: while I don't agree that abortion is the answer, I definitely don't agree with the protesters who show such hate and disgusting rage. They say they are standing up for life and love and yet they demonstrate the opposite.

I always think of the young girls who feel they have no other option, or, as one girl told me she was told, have had parents tell them if they were to get pregnant they would be kicked out of the house. Such demonstrations are hurtful and frightening, especially to someone who is already having to make a very difficult choice.

Great stuff, Brian, as always.
Jen

lifeisaroadtrip said...

Great job on this one, "Coach". I have always thought the phrase "their God" really says it all.

DJan said...

Giving up on trying to read all the comments. Just a little thought here to tell you I hear you. Me too...

kaykuala said...

Diehard extremists somehow get the limelight. Let them be! They can holler, scream hoarse but who cares. Do what we think is right, Brian. That's how I see it. Circumstances demand so!

Hank

Pauline said...

There's always a moment of truth in your poems. This one's is:
And in this realize how much
we both still have to learn of love.

Fred said...

No place for some of these self-proclaimed "hands of God" They take a message of love or hope- even in the defense of life, and bastardize it all to Hell. You did a great job here, really saying so much. It's odd how one can find them agreeing on the cause, yet vehemently disagreeing with the course of action taken. These types claim all life is sacred, which it is, absolutely, so the first thought they come up with is to end a life to save a life- pretty much sums up the mentality-

Again, another well written powerful piece, thanks for a good "thinking" read

Betsy said...

wow. yuck. We never have that here at our local christian univ. There's got to be a better way to get the message out there. Obviously they don't see that.

Evelyn said...

holy crap.
good stuff.
wow...

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Strong words indeed.

"Their voices tongue my ear" is magnificant.

Anna :o]

Lolamouse said...

Brian,
If only everyone were as reasonable as you. Why can't the anti-choice protesters focus their energies on preventing unwanted pregnancies and/or supporting single parents rather than on harassing clinic patients or even shooting doctors?

colleen said...

I remember thinking it seemed that pro-lifers didn't care what happens to the babies after they are born considering how little they spoke up about all the children who died in Iraq due to sanctions and preemptive war.

Sophia said...

Gosh, I wasn't expecting the verse within just from the title. NICE capture in pulling the reader in, Brian.

Hope you and your fam are well.

manicddaily said...

Their voices tongue my ear is wonderful.

Anna said...

"And in this realise how much
we both still have to learn of love."

Agreed! Not only is hate an ineffective voice, it is the wrong one.

ayala said...

Excellent write, Brian. I hear and feel your passion and you are not alone!

kkrige said...

Interesting the note you end it on;

"And in this realise how much
we both still have to learn of love."

I like how you see the need for education of everyone involved. And you end it on a positive note - the sun! Or at least it sounds positive to me. Dawning of a new day my friend. Walk your path & they will walk theirs I guess.

♥ Braja said...

neither side wins....

sharmishtha said...

very powerful poem brian.

Just Be Real said...

A scary thought to think that God would never want me. Hatred is such a powerful emotion.

Drizel said...

That is hectically Tense, strange they forget the rights of the mother, yes abortion might not be the answer. I just feel people with intense religious believes judge more than others..... Shocking and perfectly written.

Valerie said...

You certainly make us think, Brian. I don't believe in abortion but there are cases where abortion is the only answer. That doesn't give me the right to wave the banner and reveal my hatred.

Dave King said...

Beautifully thought and skillfully wrought.

Vodka Mom said...

this was powerful good stuff.


and I am in your particular corner, fighting that God of Hate.


xx

adeeyoyo said...

It is absolutely useless to shout at or try to outshout the opposition. No one listens or hears anything.

ladyfi said...

You're right - we still have a lot to learn about love.

SuziCate said...

It seems so sad and useless that people choose anger and violence instead of understanding, agrreing to disagree. The hope is that in the end love will win. Here comes the sun. Sorry, I haven't been back for a while, having a hard time getting to all these great reads out here. Smiles right back at you!

Ravenblack said...

I am not fan of extreme views. I don't like these people who make noise and who think that things are so easily black and white, be they anti-abortion, pro-life, animal rights, etc. The last bit of the poem is hard truth. I would've been like you if such pushy types got in my way, very difficult not to be infected, to react unkindly. Therein lies that lesson that is not so easy to learn.

hedgewitch said...

Read this yesterday and thought I commented but apparently not--this is beyond the cliche powerful, because in the last lines you admit a common humanity even with people as broken by hate, vanity and fear as those here. Fine, mature writing, and all the more indicting of that choice to mock,lash out, and find an enemy in the weaker that these people so loathesomely embrace.

Mama Zen said...

Wow. Powerful stuff, Brian.

Magpie said...

Well expressed, Brian. Is it so hard to learn that we can reach others easier with love rather than sticks?

william said...

sometimes they do not do things the right way, but other times they are quite right in their protests, excellent mate.

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

WHOA! Brian! You called this one SHARPLY and with profound truth! They SAY..."all in the name of God"...I don't serve THAT God.

CM said...

I think your point is that by flipping them off, you realized that you too were spreading hate, instead of love.

Being Christian, I hate seeing those posters. That is not the right way to approach the subject of abortion. My God would not condone such actions.

I believe there are much better ways to help prevent abortion through education and support.

happygirl said...

I believe love will win if we let it. I'm sorry the generation behind me is suffering the effects from a pro choice America. Not enough workers out there paying into social security, etc.

Myrna R. said...

Yes, we all do have lots to learn about love. This world is perplexing. You depict it so well.

Pat said...

Powerful words. Wow.

Luke Prater said...

thank god for that... an what a great songline, but I digress.. this is full of beautifully nasty imagery and a scathing indictment of the holy haters. Great write Brian

haikulovesongs said...

"Their voices tongue my ear"

trying to get your attention?

i wasn't expecting this from the title or photograph, but a new day gives us a chance to start over, doesn't it?

a very powerful write, Brian. a brilliantly told poetic version of real life.

California Ink in Motion said...

Keeping my posts short, Brian, you are right on! Freedonm of choice is where I stand. Choice is the keyword here. You did the topic and poem worthy! I am old enough to remember the back ally ways and coat hangers.

eclipsingwinter said...

Bravo! To begin with, when I saw the title, a melody entered my thoughts in absolute contrast to the words. I believe it added depth to the hate-love you define. Fighting hate with hate kind of defeats the purpose. Excellent poetry, packs a punch whether discussing the topic of abortion or of hate-love... both wonderfully offered for thought.

Beth

Arron Shilling said...

strong stuff Brian - tough write executed with skkilllssss

emily wierenga said...

wow. so true. i was dragged by my parents to those rallies as a kid. funny how pro-life marches can make you hate living. a profound write, friend.

ShonEjai said...

Lovely! Powerful!

Jo Bryant said...

it is sad that they use their God to sling around hate. You see it with this, and with homosexuality - and they drag their children up into it as well. Cowards underneath it all

oceangirl said...

hello brian, if I were to critique on the approach of the poem I would say I was disappointed because I love the song here comes the sun, and it promises a better time, where ice will melt and smiles will return to their faces and it will be alright, but the content of the poem, reads to me like hate is return with hate and no one, no one really care for the issue at hand.

I am critiqueing on the approach of the poem, between the content and its title. I do not see the sun coming.

yellowhousecafe said...

This is the hypocrisy that kills Christianity. Never is there a greater misunderstanding of what it means to be like Jesus (and this is coming from one who has a LOT of learning to do about THAT). Excellent write ~

SueAnn said...

Yes! We do have much to learn!! It always amazes me how love turns into so much hate? How is that possible?
Hugs
SueAnn

Celestial Dreamz said...

so well said Brian ... it takes a pure humble soul to realise ...

The Cello Strings said...

It feels good to flip them off since they stand against and disrespect the other side.

enjoyed this one,
precise and powerful piece.

lindakruschke said...

Brian, You wished I would critique your poem, even though I wasn't your dVerse neighbor. I decided to give it a try not realizing you would have written on such a heavy subject today (though I should not be surprised because I've quickly come to realize you don't shy away from the difficult things that need to be said).

First of all, I love the way you handled this subject. My favorite part, and the thing I wouldn't change one bit, is this:

And in this realise how much
we both still have to learn of love.

This one line shows a humility and how you are thinking inwardly about what God - the real God, the one of love - wants to change in your own heart. It's easy to point fingers, not so easy to look inward. Kudos for that!

So now onto the few things that I might change:

1. In L1, you might change "with" to "holding" because it conveys an image of posters held high and is more active. Or maybe even "holding high" to really get the visual image of an angry mob across.

2. The line "Their voices tongue my ear" made me think of a wet Willie. I know what you are trying to say, but the word "tongue" kind of tripped me up and didn't convey fully what you were trying to say. I think a word like "bombard" or "assault" would work better.

3. I was confused by the title and the final line. I don't have any suggestions for changing them, but they seemed out of place. But then again, maybe that's the point and why they fit. "Here comes the sun" is what should be juxtaposed against the reality of the rest of the poem.

Well, there you have it. My humble suggestions to incorporate as you see fit. Peace, Linda

Jinksy said...

I wonder, where lies their understanding?

gautami tripathy said...

Sometimes hate is so subtle...

stapled maples

Anonymous said...

Feeling grateful about one's own life choices and freedom is one sure antidote to negativity.

Let them rant...
You are a victor, not a victim.
Enjoy your day.

M.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

A telling last verse!

Enchanted Oak said...

A good poem opens the door to insight, an Aha! moment. You nailed it.

NanU said...

Amen for the Sun.

Syd said...

Yes, I don't want anything to do with those who spew hate. Too much of that craziness about. And all in the name of religion or a God that they have concocted who is hateful too. No thanks!