Thursday, September 22, 2011

55 - flesh wounds


our new kitten
six weeks fresh
black & white bit of fluff
sleeps on my chest

waking
it stretches
mews soft breath
in my face

then digs
claws in my flesh
to push off
as it leaves

i call my parents
say i love you

just because

we have no bandaids
but
all will heal.

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go tell G-man, at 8 pm EST.

Over at dVerse Poets Pub, Gay is back for round 2 of Sestina poetic form teaching, so if you are up to the poetic challenge, drop on by.

The picture is for my sister Betsy who turned...well had a birthday yesterday. Ok, and she is not really my sister but we are distant twins...and she has been asking for a picture...of the cat. Happy Birthday Betsy!

89 comments:

Everyday Goddess said...

oh, reminds me of my kitty cat, clementine! she was my first pet when i was a child. sweet sweet memories!

lots of us libras around, happy birthday to one and all!

Daniel said...

Something like, with every purr in life, we must deal with a gash to the chest? Kind of like a yin and yang thing?

Margaret said...

You MUST be a great guy! Not many men admit to loving kittens. :) My husband is allergic... or so he says (we still have two cats - maybe it's his way of making sure we don't get three! :) Am I the first one here! Unbelievable!

So I guess I say "Yahtzee" ;)

Margaret said...

Well, I was the first when I started typing....

sheila said...

Awe, what a sweet lil kitty! I like Daniels comment, HAHAHAHAHAHA!

Betsy said...

Aww...thanks, Bri! :)

What a cutie that kitten is! He would fit in right with my black and white ones! They're distant cousins, right? :) I've had quite a few scratches myself in recent months. And I meant to tell you that Tiger has been getting on the roof. He's found his own way down so far. lol. Thought of you. Thanks for the post. You're awesome. xo

Sorry, Goddess...it's still Virgo season! ;)

Pat Hatt said...

Cute little kitty indeed and yes I can relate to the scratches, except the wild cat is sure to make me bleed. They just jump off you without a care, not thinking about how much skin they tear. Didn't want to say your twins age, but I hear ummmm is all the rage..haha

Betsy said...

Patt ~ you just can't count that high! lol...

Heather said...

aw, cute write! yay for Betsy! She's an amazing woman.

Natasha said...

From a crazy cat lady with her own crazy cat...loved it! Short, sweet, to the point! I miss his days as crazy kitten :(

Claudia said...

so after all it's just flesh wounds...and who would mind after a fluffy cat mewed soft breath into ones face and caressed the soul first...? smiles
maybe i need a cat to get more relaxed...at least as long as she doesn't crumble cake trails through the whole house...smiles

Hilary said...

Awww what a sweetie face. Black and white cats are always trouble.. somehow they seem to be particularly intelligent. Just my observation.

Kitty A. said...

this is super cute.

unintentional scars from a beloved pet leave fond memories of beautiful moments in life.

glad that you called your parents...

Fred said...

Brian, bringing back the Kitten memories to me, great job-Hard to believe mine were that size at one time. Better watch out for the pics though, too many and Orlin might think your soliciting Kittie porn-ha ha

Nice write- Thanks

Teri said...

Adorable!

SueAnn said...

Kids are always prone to leaving fresh wounds on our bodies!! Sigh!
They do heal...with time
Hugs
SueAnn

David Allen Waters said...

she looks like the first cat I ever had named Bella.... :)

Heaven said...

cute story.. am playing along later ~

Justin said...

Cats are fun.

lori said...

That is one sweet little kitty-cat :) Too bad my Steven is allergic. Kinda makes me want one, claws and all.

Suz said...

nice turn
a deepening
so few weeks old....it needs humans
as do we all...mom and dad humans
you call it purrs
same thing

rosaria said...

Oh!!!!!!! Now, that's bonding.

Magpie said...

I guess claws come with the purring.

Pat Hatt said...

Betsy and Fred are making fun of me
Oh that brings the cat glee
I'm not yet too old for this stuff like your twin
And Fred just knows he'll never win..haha

Fireblossom said...

Nice, the way you worked those two things together.

li said...

Love always leaves a scar?

This post has produced a lot of profound sentiments :-) I feel all warm and fuzzy.

Maggie May said...

Beautiful kitten. As its a story...... I never know if its really true!
Hope that it is the new household pet!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Eva Gallant said...

I love kittens! I used to suffer from chronic sinus infections and found out it was because I am allergic to cats. We no longer have any cats, and I no longer get sinus infections, but I miss the fun of a kitten and cuddliness of cats.

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"i call my parents
say i love you
just because
we have no band-aids
but all will heal..."

I love these very poetic words too!

Hi! Brian...
The kitten is cute, but Of course!
Thanks, for sharing the pix too!
deedee ;-D

Christine said...

I just came home to our new kitty and remarked how I love them, wish I could wear one like a broach, they are so cuddly, worth every scar when playing with them

hedgewitch said...

Disgustingly cute kitty--and again I can't believe how much you say in 55 words about life, love and human beings.

ayala said...

aww so cute...the kitten looks like a kitten my friend rescued :) and happy birthday to Betsy . :)

LadyCat said...

What a precious face! We have a black & white cat...named him BW...for black & white : )

Ed Pilolla said...

i've dug in claws before i've left a place too.

Monkey Man said...

Funny this occurrences that take your back to childhood.

5thsister said...

Aw! Missing my kitties. Sweet 55.

KB said...

Aww, what a cutie.

Eddie Bluelights said...

Beautiful kitten. Purrfect!

California Girl said...

Brian, terrific portrait of a cat. Soft lighting and edges, I love this. God I miss my baby Maggie. The 55 words captures kitty activity exactly.

Mary said...

Brian, this is so sweet. Nothing like new life. Human or kittenish. I love this poem.

G-Man said...

HA!
I have scratches all over my body from that same thing!
Nice Feline 55 Son...
It was Purrrrrfect.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End

lifeisaroadtrip said...

I am more a dog person but that kitty is the cat's meow.

DJan said...

I love little kitties, and your poem just made me homesick for one I loved and is long gone... thank you for your beautiful poem.

M said...

A Purrrrrfect 55 with Very hairy and cheery imagery.

Happy Belated Birthday to Your Half-Sister. She is cute looking.

emmett wheatfall said...

Awesome! I loved the transition to your parents. Although they appear suddenly, at the end of the narrative--the way you introduce them in light of telling us about the newborn kitten, just got me. Your parents were cast in a light of tender love and pure perfection. I enjoyed the piece immensely, Brian.

magiceye said...

this is so tender

Slamdunk said...

Look like a great addition to the family.

I would rather have no bandaids than kid theme ones we have here--will it be Barbie or Dora?

CM said...

Awww, my boys totally want a kitty too! Cute.

ds said...

Sweet kitty. Yes, no matter how cute they come with claws ;)
But we wouldn't want it any other way...

Matthew said...

Another fantastic posting in fewer words than I'd take to write an average one. Really enjoyed this one, Brian.

Vicki Lane said...

A sweet verse and a sweet tuxedo kitty.

Unknown Mami said...

My 7 month old digs her nails into me as she nurses.

adeeyoyo said...

Everything's right with the world, eh? Lovely...

oceangirl said...

I am scared of cats, but your story is really lovely. And deep in just 55.

Zuzana said...

Oh, you know that I love this one.;)
Have a great weekend Brian,
xoxo

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

DARLING!!! Just darling! WHO can resist a kitten!? Sorry for the puncture wounds---the one downside to cat ownership!

And as for Betsy!??? She is a certified CAT LADY now! :)

izzy said...

Nice! between them and the dogs,
rabbits, chickens etc. do we ever get a chance to heal ( my ponies treat me best!) thanks.

annell said...

Love kittens.

kaykuala said...

Reminds me of Clyde, one tabby we had in the house.If we had not cut its nails, it might jab into our fingers drawing some blood. We had to make a careful approach when touching it. All in the house cried when it died of old age 2 years ago!

Hank

A Daft Scots Lass said...

Purfect 55!

Have a brilliant weekend.

Laurie Kolp said...

Aww... so precious. Wouldn't it be great if they could just stay kittens?

Stretching, clawing chest, pushing off... brings back memories of my cat days (my husband and daughter are allergic).

I especially like the last verse... wow!

Whosyergurl said...

Nice. Our cat still digs his claws into everyone's chests. Everyone thinks he is so nice sitting there purring until the little knives come out! Cheryl

Valerie said...

Naturally I was reminded of my old puss cat. Loved the flow of this one, Brian.

Daydreamertoo said...

Awwww she or he is adorable!
Never too late to heal wounds, I'm glad you called, it's too late when you can't call anymore and wish you had.
Hugs.

TechnoBabe said...

You knew this would tug at all our hearts.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

More to this that kitten scratches, Brian. Nicely done 55!

TechnoBabe said...

Quite disturbing picture you paint with your words. Such a sad life for a child and for parents without much hope.

Alice Audrey said...

I want a kitty!!!

At least now I have a place to keep one.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Nice, Brian, how you connected the trust of a kitten into a call to the parents.

AmyLK said...

Beautiful kitty! Love the words too!

sharmishtha said...

awesome brian. thats how we act too i believe.

happygirl said...

more kittens... le sigh.

Mama Zen said...

Great write, Brian. I found this really moving.

blueviolet said...

She's a sweet little kitters. Soon she will step all over your keyboard and mouse.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Ahh, baby cat claws-- But the sweet purring makes up for it.
Cheers, jj

Ravenblack said...

What a sweet poem. Kittens really don't understand their claws can hurt. I love how it ties into a relationship that is close to our hearts.

PattiKen said...

Awww.. Those claws of departure are metaphor for the future, and the past. But then, you know that.

sharplittlepencil said...

Brian, this is a sweet moment out of an everyday occurrence, but you make it special. That little detail of kitten breath brought a tear to my eye, because I miss our kitty, who died a few months back.

Happy cat times. May you be blessed with many more "moments," and more poems as well. Glad you called your folks; they're better than an bandaid! Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/09/23/jazz-is-abc-weds/

Lydia said...

I'm pretending that the picture of the cat was for me....such a sucker for kittens I am and yours looks like a real doll.

Oh, that soft breath and then the claws. Call me crazy but I think that is perfect package indeed.

Your 55 is wonderful.

Just Be Real said...

OUCH! Blessings to you Brian.

Lorraine said...

Relating I am, ,he's adorable, come scratch me...love this

Liza Ursu said...

"six weeks fresh"
what a great line Brian.

Janice said...

Sweet kitten. And then no bandaids and parents...zing. You got me.

Myrna R. said...

So cute. Yes the kitten inflicted wounds will heal, as will others.

william said...

wow I love cats and this one is adorable, much luck mate, they are a part of the family and you love them to bits, great post..

Goofball said...

oooooooh can I come and babysit the kitten? I love kittens

Rebecca S. said...

One image evokes another, and brings it to life and comprehension...such is the beauty of what you and other poets do :)

Sue said...

Lovely kitten.

Nice write, too.

=)

Syd said...

I have two on my lap which makes it hard to type. They are now grown but the kitten stage was both cute and devilish.