Sunday, September 4, 2011

160 - silence kill(er)s


silent movie

actors embellish where words can
not action emotion facial x-
press-i-on

we run
mouths miss

the point

our voices love-
ly in our ears a

clanging gong

What can you say in 160 characters? Say it, then tell Monkey.


Grammar teachers, no punctuation for you today. It all flows together to open some interpretations (and just drives you crazy doesn't it? ha.)


Also, over at dVerse Poets Pub we are using silent movies to write poetry. I am taking a second dip into the inspiration well after yesterdays silent poem.

74 comments:

Daniel said...

Nice, and love the accompanying picture. Have a great one today.

TechnoBabe said...

Very interesting play with the words. Your imagination knows no bounds. Love it.

henryclemmons said...

Yes, I've life were movies there would be days I would rather live a silent film than to listen to someone elses brilliance told by themselves. Enjoyed!

Heaven said...

I admire how the actors in the silent movies exaggerate their facial expressions and body movements to convey words and dialogue.

Happy sunday ~

oceangirl said...

At this point in my life, I go for noise.

annell said...

I could not write about silent movies... after all they are silent. there you go, you did well with the subject.

Colleen said...

I really like this one Brian. I think we can say so much without words sometimes too.

Pat Hatt said...

That blow horn isn't silent for sure
People definetly need to rant and so much more
Thinking it gets them across
When all it shows as they need to floss
Better hope the grammar nazi isn't about
May make him pout..haha

Bonnie said...

Great thoughts so creatively expressed - and the image is perfect!

California Girl said...

(no comment...it's a silent film)

chromapoesy.com said...

clanging gong

I think I'll find some ways to be quieter today :).

Eva Gallant said...

You do have a way with words!

Eva Gallant said...

You do have a way with words!

kaykuala said...

Gosh, the imagination can really run wild on this. I've to retrace back and forth to read through to get some sense. It did finally, I think! Great!

Cheryl said...

That picture hurts my ears and the poem is spot on.

avoidtheclap said...

I know some people whom I suspect their voices are lovely in their ears. Not any of us, of course!

Deidra said...

That ending snuck up on me. Well done!

Jinksy said...

Your layout makes the words flicker just like the old films! LOL

Pauline said...

Mouths miss the point and our voices lovely in our ears - you didn't need much more than that to make your point. What a master of words you are!

Beth said...

Absolutely adore the wordplay and the multi-interpretations allowed by the lack of punctuation. It makes reading this over again a true pleasure as different meanings arise with each one. Excellent as always :)

Mama Zen said...

I love the way this flows!

Kat_RN said...

Sometimes we talk just to stop the silence.

David Allen Waters said...

I have always been amazed at how the actors told such stories with their eyes....an amazing write brotha ;)

Patricia said...

yes we run our mouths off at times, loving to hear our own voices... sadly missing what the silence would say to us. Good one Brian. =)

Sue said...

You are the wordmeister.

The way your brain works those words over never fails to fascinate me.

=)

lori said...

I like that every time I read this, I find something new. The meaning or emphasis changes depending on how you look at it. Favorite part is,

"our voices love-
ly in our ears

a clanging gong"

That is good stuff right there, Brian :)

♥ Braja said...

i think your pictures make it for me :)

Alice Audrey said...

It's so hard for a mime to compete.

PattiKen said...

Actions don't lie (usually, though I can think of exceptions). Words often do. But your words? Never. Glad you found your "voice."

ayala said...

Nice....happy Sunday :)9

Helen said...

Brian .. I had the BEST time reading this aloud (more than once) to get it just right! I would love to hear you read it!

Monkey Man said...

Love that double meaning in your last three lines. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160, my friend. Have a great Labor Day.

Anonymous said...

I love this:

"we run
mouths miss

the point"

~safehousepoetry.wordpress.com

JANU said...

nice poem....

hedgewitch said...

Words can indeed be a total loss, and hide more than they reveal. Amazing what you get done here in such a short format.

Mona said...

In India, there is a silent movie named Pushpak. You don't realize that there is not a word spoken until almost half the movie is over!

Mary said...

In silence, one is forced to observe facial expressions, gestures, etc. more. Sometimes only the speaker enjoys his/her 'clanging voice.'

Mona said...

Pushpak

LadyCat said...

"A picture is worth a thousand words."
I love the silnce...it is so rare.

Sh@s said...

Reminded me of the silent era movies.

MorningAJ said...

That's a cruel thing to do to a pigeon! Great words though.

California Ink in Motion said...

Yes, there was a time when stage actors enterend the film and over-expressed with facial gestures. The audiences became weary of this, so the actors toned it way down. Great poem, great writting.

Sheila Moore said...

hey, double-dipper (smiles) I like this one, too. action, emotion, facial expression (I can't figure out the x-press-i-on) is all lost in this world of texting. You can't even hear their tone of voice anymore. But you are right that most of us do love to hear ourselves talk. Listening is such a lost art.

Steve E said...

Awwww. Not even one little comma?
Tch Tch.

seasideauthor said...

The pic is great with that little air horn to be loud. I liked your write with no punctuation.
'Sometimes we should just be listeners,' ;).

rosaria said...

Oh, look, the reel is off track!

Luke Prater said...

Like very much your clever line-breaking and hyphenation. Very nice Sir

Cinner said...

Okay I will try harder with the punctuation. lol. glad you had such a fun time being kidnapped. your wife is lovely. take care Brian

Vodka Mom said...

wait, I want the NEXT PHOTO! The one wear the bird's suit is there, but his body is not...

Fred said...

Nice Reel-like display. You continue to amaze me what you're able to produce under such character limitation. Really well done

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

I'm always amazed by your concise tales.

Tara Milller said...

That's one of the things I loved about ballet....I didn't have to talk and my body and facial expressions told the story for one to interpret. Sorry love, sometimes I do talk too much now...;)

secret agent woman said...

Silence - I could go for a little of that once in a while.

Victoria said...

Where DID you get that photo. I think you should write a sequel to this, Brian.

Hope said...

enjoyed this Brian!

haikulovesongs said...

LOVE this! brilliant, as always, Brian.

Casey Freeland said...

Oh, yeah, excellent. "Full of sound and fury, signifying nothing." See, you made me think of Shakespeare. :)

Cheers,

Casey

ed pilolla said...

i think the art is a great choice for the insightful post. we all need reminders to listen.

Teri said...

I'm glad that the kidnapper (or Bri-napper) released you and let you back to write more beautiful works. Don't you just love No. Carolina? One of my favorites places was Asheville. My Dad lived there until he made his transition. I hope that the 'napper held you hostage and tied you up!!! Oh what fun! Sounds like you had a great time!

Selina Kingston said...

Oh, it's so good to be back and I can't believe I had actually forgotten how good you are.....

adeeyoyo said...

It does drive me crazy, Brian, haha! Some people's voices are just like an annoying clanging gong!

Lydia said...

This is great, and with the image it gave me a bit of a laugh, too. :)

Zuzana said...

Aw, I feel sorry for that dove;)
Hope you had (are having) a nice weekend dear Brian,
xoxo

Valerie said...

Sometimes expressions are more vital than words.

Interesting picture but a trifle cruel...smiles.

sheila said...

One of my favorite things is NOT having to worry about grammar. :) LOVE this.

Heather said...

facial expressions sometimes are more fun to read than people's voices....i like quiet...
forgot to mention on the last comment - love the pics of "the bux" -

Ténèbres à la lumière... said...

Hi! Brian...
What an excellent use Of 160 words...I really like your play on words when it comes to the title too...I appreciate your readers comments. [Especially, C.G's words...Thanks, for sharing!]
deedee ;-D

Olivia said...

hhmmmmmm...
I loved the breaks and the hyphens to emphasize!!

well, since last eve I'm enjoying my silent times..

Hugs xoxo

Olivia said...

hhmmmmmm...
I loved the breaks and the hyphens to emphasize!!

well, since last eve I'm enjoying my silent times..

Hugs xoxo

Syd said...

I find silence to be refreshing.

Goofball said...

mouths miss the point...that is the essence of dubbed movies :D

Mighty M said...

My Hannah loves to talk, and talk, and talk.. :)

Kerry O'Connor said...

I'm a grammar teacher (among other things) and I seldom use punctuation in free verse. This is a lovely gem of a 160.

Anonymous said...

Silence is beautiful to have in life.

lovely 160.

M.