Sunday, September 11, 2011

160 - Redacted Document


black the words that
convict & convince

leave responsibility's memory
to stain your fingers

as you roll them over

secrets only power
is (lies) in its

silence.

What can you say in 160 characters? Say it, then tell Monkey.

56 comments:

Pat Hatt said...

I'd so like to see what's under those black lines
If people knew there prob be tons of fines
And so much more
So called "secrets" are more like them covering their own rear end so it doesn't get whacked by the door

Brian Miller said...

this is as much about personal secrets as it is anything political...smiles...just saying....

Magpie said...

I think we all have redacted "statements" in our lives. If we could move beyond the thought that we have to always protect ourselves at any cost and admit mistakes and honestly seek forgiveness for them, I think we would be so much closer to where we should be. Just sayin'.

Suz said...

ah a redacted confession

TechnoBabe said...

Secrets and lies.

annell said...

Well done!

David Allen Waters said...

secrets, we all have them...politicians, husbands, wifes, pastors, children...some we keep forever, some we let go into the light....but its a thread we all share, secrets....

have a great one man :)

Brian Miller said...

magpie gets it...smiles.

PattiKen said...

The sad thing is that, "in the interest of national security," entire bits of history have been redacted. Oh, yeah, I feel more secure, don't you?

ladyfi said...

Wonderful. Silence and secrets can be very powerful indeed.

Alice Audrey said...

Makes you want to shine a light up their backside, doesn't it?

PattiKen said...

And my comment is one of the first 10! I feel like I should yell, "Yahtzee, eight times removed!"

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

nice post sir...

JJRod'z

izzy said...

Secrets read as Braille- yes indeed they stain! some of us are fortunate enough to have made hard and dedicated efforts to rectify the wrong beneath the secrets....Thanks-

Daniel said...

What are you hinting at? I have nothing to hide ... errr ... nothing at all.

Monkey Man said...

We think we protect with secrets but we only hurt. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.

Olivia said...

aah! Some more of those secrets- huh?
Loved the whimsical tone of it!!

hugs xo

Eva Gallant said...

What do those secrets hide???

bodhirose said...

Secrets--everybody has them. Very original, Brian--I really enjoyed this.

Belinda said...

This kind of silence is loaded and explosive if finally given voice.

ayala said...

Nicely done, Brian.

lori said...

secrets can be a cancer that eat way the soul. even painful truths are sometimes better spoken. but we all have secrets, some more toxic than others. favorite line, "leave responsibility's memory to stain your fingers" - that's a tough line.

kkrige said...

55 words that can't ever be taken back (from your memory)

Myrna R. said...

Secrets, I guess we all have a few. We wrap them up and hide them, and unintentionally sometimes hurt ourselves or others. Great write in so few words. You are such a deep thinker Brian.

Pseudo said...

Secrets bubble up eventually. Like an abscess.

Janice said...

Thought provoking...but I'm admitting nothing!:)

Me said...

Love the last few lines. Gave me goosebumps.

Tara Miller said...

I think it's our prideful nature that causes us to keep secrets, big or small. We don't want others to see how we "really" are for fear they won't like or approve of us so instead the mask goes on. The longer it stays, the harder it is to remove....just my thoughts.

We should take responsibility and own up to our mistakes and secrets. (easier said than done) Imagine the burden that would be lifted from our shoulders and the freedom we would feel. Everyone is broken....everyone has something they're not proud of. And there is One who knows our deepest darkest secret(s).....and still He loves us.

nance marie said...

read between the lines

Claudia said...

i have this window open for about an hour now...chatting on FB and read it around 10 times in every chat break..and still not sure if i get it...my experience is as long as secrets are secrets they are extremely powerful and when the light comes in they lose part of their power which is a good thing...but it's all too human to hide as long as possible...ugh..

Christine said...

I suppose that's where my nightmares come from, holding the secrets in, releasing them at night, doesn't make me feel any better

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"secrets only power
is (lies) in its..."
silence.


Hi! Brian...
What a great use Of (and play on)160 words...the image compliment your 160 words..."perfectly" too!
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

...By the way, I agree with Mrs. [Tara] Miller's comment too!
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D

Tom said...

great picture, simplicity. nice words too

Vicki Lane said...

So many lies, told to us by those who lied to themselves and redacted, rather than revealed. 9/11 brought out the best in our nation... and then the worst.

Shawna said...

Wow, Brian. This is beyond amazing.

I love this:
"leave responsibility's memory
to stain your fingers"

And this was so clever:
"secrets only power
is (lies) in its
silence"

Helen said...

Brian, there aren't many writers who can say as much 160 words, spaces and characters.

Redacted is a great word, isn't it?

Cathleen said...

Fearing the vulnerability of truth and foolishly hiding in the secret or lie. I think we can all relate. So much in 160 little characters, excellent.

Sue said...

"secrets only power
is (lies) in its

silence."

You are so clever as a poet, Brian. I like the way your brain works.

=)

Betsy said...

Let the secret come to light and feel it's grip release?

Ravenblack said...

Blacked out lines -- makes it stand out something is desperately being hidden. Loved the following line to the first two:

"leave responsibility's memory
to stain your fingers"

It does also seem like something meant to be forgotten.

M said...

The honesty shown in your 160 shows that you have a kind spirit.

keep up the excellence!

Sophia said...

Whoa. Sad but this is so true more often than not. It's amazing how people KNOW "it's" there, yet they still choose to walk forward as if it's not, no matter what topic/area this would fall under. It could be relationships, Religion/God, politics - I really like what Magpie says.

Strumpet said...

This is why I love blogging.

It defeats the purpose to have blackness cover your words.

ds said...

So clever, Brian, and so true. On several levels.

KB said...

Some secrets are best left as they are. Well some of mine are anyway :)

Alan Burnett said...

How many memorable lines can you fit into 160 characters? A heck of a lot it would seem.

adeeyoyo said...

Is our world sick, or what? We lose friends, relatives, children, partners and get REDACTED documents! I would think we deserve THE TRUTH!

SueAnn said...

Ah yes...secrets! I have found that there are no such things as secrets. They are soon exposed for all to see!
Hugs
SueAnn

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

LOVE THIS!

Zeba said...

Hmmm..

Lolamouse said...

As the saying goes, "The personal is political." So much of our personal "crap" gets played out in political agendas. It all becomes more about winning/losing, saving face, protecting secrets than about doing what's good for society as a whole.

Susie Clevenger said...

We all have something hidden under black markers...loved this!

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Your ability to say so much with such a tiny number of words always amazes me.

Syd said...

Maybe one day the truth will be out.

Goofball said...

not much left on that sheet if you black the words that convict & convince. Frightening