Sunday, September 18, 2011

160 - First things First


6:30 AM & already

a line
forms @ the door

things

ready 2 fill our day
competing 4 precious
moments

the world
can wait

another fifteen
my love

is self-
ish 4 you

What can you say in 160 characters? say it, then tell Monkey.

74 comments:

Cheryl said...

The romantic in you shines like a beacon of hope.

That Janie Girl said...

I love that you need another 15.

Sweet stuff, that.

Ditto Cheryl.

Pat Hatt said...

Yes tuning out the world for a few more minutes it great
Not dealing with the crap on ones plate
By adding an extra 15 minutes, no one can say you just move along
That could sound all wrong...haha

Mama Zen said...

Yes, another 15 minutes, please!

Deborah said...

Now that's lovely! :o)

the walking man said...

15 minutes? I guess that's better than being known as the two minute man and best yet that you're morning people that way you don't roll over and go to sleep.

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

The world can ALWAYS wait for 15 MORE minutes! OH YES!
Love it.

willfulresemblance said...

nice! well done.

Gerry said...

Very nice, Bryan! A perfect Sunday morning poem.

Fred said...

Brian, nice piece, really summed up a scene and sentiment beautifully here, in 160 characters or less, no less. Really nice, thanks

Heather said...

YAY for romance....on Sunday mornings, have a great one!

Pat said...

I'd take 15 minutes any ole day! *wink*

ayala said...

I love it !

Nikki Rules said...

Let's hear it for selfishness!

Bonnie said...

Sweet.

lori said...

Well, this is simply 160 characters of sweetness :)

David Allen Waters said...

selfish for love....wonderful

bodhirose said...

I imagined children at the door--they never want to wait! Good one, Brian.

annell said...

I liked that! "6:30 &, @, 2,4,and 4. Just wondered what that would look like standing alone?

ds said...

The little joys of Sunday Morning are without number...Cheryl's right. Lovely.

Monkey Man said...

Sweet morning moments. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.

Christine said...

very sweet indeed

Claudia said...

yes - it's good to put first things first

Daniel said...

This is the good stuff.

Heaven said...

on sunday mornings, the world can wait.

and it is sweet of you to say this ~

happy day ~

MorningAJ said...

That's lovely.

Pauline said...

good thing the world doesn't have to wait for your poetry :)

Alice Audrey said...

When my love puts the world off like that, I count him as generous.

Dulce said...

15 stands for minutes- I guess...
Romantic Sunday morning
Beautiful poem Brian--- SO beautiful indeed!

missing moments said...

soft and lovely words for the early morning before all beckons

kaykuala said...

Brian, we often want to have that last few minutes. It is precious. Only the determined morning person can overcome.

Hank

Shawna said...

Excellent capturing of a hide-under-the-sheets moment.

~poetrypastiche.blogspot.com

Just Be Real said...

:) Thank you Brian.

Pastor Sharon said...

Yes, for the love of 15 more minutes. You are a hopeless romantic and we reap the benefits by reading straight from your heart.

li said...

If only more people (men and women) learned to cherish those quiet moments instead of taking each other for granted.

sheila said...

Oh yes that line at the door, lol. LOVE this.

hedgewitch said...

I love your love poems, never an off key note, always just pure love. This one is especially simple, direct and tender.

Cinner said...

Beautiful Brian, thanks.

Mary said...

Loving and wonderful. The line forming at the door can indeed wait.

Tara Miller said...

Yes! That's what I feel every morning when I hit the snooze button.....just a few more minutes to snuggle closer to you before the day starts. I love this! and you!!!

Fireblossom said...

Sounds like "good" selfishness to me. ;-)

Ruthiey said...

This made me smile... and I love your wife's comment. :)

lucychili said...

yes. being alive to the moment
helps with time.

Eva Gallant said...

that is so sweet!

Steve E said...

The world can wait. Sounds to me like "First Things First". GooooD!

Lolamouse said...

What happened to taking the slow train? 15 minutes?!!

AngelMay said...

Hi Brian! You said a lot in a few words. As always. Thanks for keeping me on your faves list - even though I'm not much around lately. I always love to see your comments.

Madhulika said...

nice :)
loved the picture :) :)

KB said...

Lovely.

Joanna Jenkins said...

15 more is always a good thing.
Have a great week, jj

Ravenblack said...

I usually dislike it when numbers are used in substitute for words. But I felt like these in here represented minutes or number on the clock, as the narrator is glancing at the clock. A very sweet poem. :)

Goofball said...

ugh you seem already too awake at 6.30 ...nobody should be awake at 6.30...I'd curse at the line at the door, I'm afraid and turn around. zzz

Alan Burnett said...

You never disappoint with these offerings. So many people do it, so few do it well. You do.

Valerie said...

I think the use of numbers was good, an indication of saving previous seconds inside the fifteen minutes.

adeeyoyo said...

Ah yes, not enough time in the day... but the world can wait...

Lorraine said...

beautiful romantic gentle and sensual and loving and it's all Love bravo

blueviolet said...

Awwwww, there's always time for more snuggles and romance. :)

Hilary said...

Mister Romance.. always.

You brighten by day.

The Empress said...

My first reaction: what a lucky woman.

Then, I caught myself: she must be doing something right for you to want an extra 15.

Both ways.

Ed Pilolla said...

you really said a lot. i really like how you are able to create a mood so quickly and so real, the tension of the demands, the inclination to bolt out the door, yet it all gets started waylaid...

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"First things First"
Hi! Brian...
Not as much as you just said, in 160 poetic words...I really like these lines:
"the world
can wait
and
another fifteen
my love"

Thanks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D

Zuzana said...

From a one true romantic to another - I so recognize this.;)
Bravo Brian.;)
Now I am back from my trip, came home yesterday, so much to catch up on.;)
xoxo

sharmishtha said...

fantastic. sweet and tender.

Sue said...

Awwww.

=)

M said...

Romantic and Fun,
What a magical 160!

Syd said...

another fifteen minutes is good. I hope for another fifteen years at the least.

Teri said...

And those lines never seem to get much shorter!

Mijayami said...

Love it!

e said...

Wonderful things can happen in 15 minutes. Beautiful. Your wife is a very lucky woman.

Myrna R. said...

Of course another 15 won't make a difference to the world. But it will to you. So take them.

Love this romance.

haikulovesongs said...

{sigh}

lifeisaroadtrip said...

Criminy, Brian. Do other men hate you? LOL

Magpie said...

You're such a romantic!

william said...

wow what a guy, you sure your a man lol? no wonder your wife luvs ya, you are pprobably one in a million hehhe..