Tuesday, July 19, 2011

OpenLinkNight: i am a gunslinger, rock flinger...

i wrap loose leaf poems round rocks
tucked tight with bailing twine bow
knots trimmed just right so they barely
whistle breaking wind in flight when
they blow between here and there
through doors & dormers, into homes
of neighbors, strangers & stenciled store
front paners---

i menace society with verse
i verse with menace, society
with society, i verse, menace

i don't sleep, walk side streets
bulging bag hugging my hip, hear them
scrape with each step, cock, then
release, chkrishh, glass ceilings sing
dirge hymns in my passing, heads pop
windows, rainbow bubble surface
just-to-see, what's up----

i menace society with verse
i verse with menace, society
with society, i verse, menace

my message is simple if you unwind
the twine, take a look inside, don't settle
to reside in the square you been painted,
how they view you, nor run their spinning
wheel til you've nearly fainted, listen,
my menace is for the pen-chance of a voice
heard, spun verse, bent word, planting trees
like Johnny Appleseed, this fruit bleeds
from nails in a chris't cross tree---

i menace society with verse
i verse with menace, society
with society, i verse, menace
this message written by fingers
in dirt, you are loved, see---
so go & be free.

OpenLinkNight @ d'Verse Poets Pub - doors open at 3 PM EST...bring your verse, let your voice be heard. The world is waiting and needs to hear it.


Much love to my good friend Leslie Moon who closes out One Stop Poetry today with the last One Shot Wednesday.

130 comments:

David Allen Waters said...

you've done it again, drawing me in with verse.

perfection

Magpie said...

What a way to start! I think of you as more gentle blowing on the breeze not so much pitching rocks through windows...but both work. Happy days ahead!

Eva Gallant said...

You are an amazing talent.

Titanium said...

Poem-flinger.

Break a window pane, then, and congratulations on the new Beginning! Can't wait to see what unfolds.

Mrsupole said...

If every menace to society were like you then they would be very much wanted and needed. You draw us in like bears to honey, we are then sated to be honey drunk. What joy!!!

God bless.

Heaven said...

I love those blazing guns..whoo..whoo!


Like the rhyming and play of words:

"i menace society with verse
i verse with menace, society
with society, i verse, menace"

See you later~

happygirl said...

The theme of The Good, the bad and the ugly was playing through my head as I read. The swagger of a gunfighter down main street. Thanks

Fred said...

Excellent piece Brian. A bit of everything in there, wordplay, symbolism and a solid message. Really enjoyed the read. Look forward to the official launch today, congrats

Poetic Soul said...

You're the one menace who'd be welcomed with a red carpet and asked to continue menacing, every time you write I feel like applauding

Little Ms Blogger said...

I'm really very curious about your writing process. So creative...and extremely diverse. Intrigued.

Kate Hanley said...

"with society, I verse, menace" there is something so lyrical about that line and then the idea of throwing brick verses through windows... such great imagery.

Captain Dumbass said...

You've got a mighty pitching arm.

Pat Hatt said...

love the menace society with verse word play
Made me smile as I read today
Hope the launch goes great
Who knows it's fate
But I'm sure you'll never settle to reside in that square
So the pub should always have great flare

Pat said...

You definitely are a poet slinger. With a bad ass arm.

Daydreamertoo said...

Wow... dirty, dangerous, and a dead on shot from the hip of your pen.
Fabulous introduction to your new dverse~!

Alexander Field said...

I just read and experience man, such fun. Thanks for this today! : )

Heather said...

i enjoy your verse...all the time! my favorite line is " my message is simple if unwind the twine" good stuff - good luck with your launch!!! xo

Ed Pilolla said...

what a terrific tail on this on this big and beautiful fun piece:)

Mark Kerstetter said...

Have poem will travel....

Have you ever tried making a reading of your poems? I'd love to hear this.

annell said...

You are a cowboy! I knew it!

AmyLK said...

You Poem slinger, you! Try not to break any windows with your wonderful words.

ModernMom said...

I could hear the song in this poem :)

Mighty M said...

You are no menace! :)

Sue said...

Just read this to my English teacher sister, and she gave it a big thumbs up.

=)

Victoria said...

Another moment of brilliance, Brian. One really cool thing about your poetry is your unique voice. I think I can pick out one of your poems among a hundred, now. And they're all terrific. If I've already said this to you, forgive me. I'm an old lady. :0)

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

Brian said, "my menace is for the pen-chance of a voice..."

Hi! Brian...I like you emphasize on these words in your poem..."i menace society with verse i verse with menace, society
with society, i verse, menace..."
the pen is mightier than the sword...eh?

"my message is simple if you unwind the twine, take a look inside, don't settle
to reside in the square you been painted..."


Oh! yes, always think outside the box...eh?
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

Hi! Brian, Claudia, and the Crew...
I plan to be on-board [Translation: drop by and show moral support to the poets] too!

Monkey Man said...

Even my own short attention span lilted gracefully to the end of this fine piece.

She Writes said...

I like the final lines here, Brian. Knowing you are loved allows freedom. I also very much liked the opener.

nance marie said...

this one hit the mark
on the edge
right where it belongs
crashing
glass finds it way
into my space

Timoteo said...

One of them subVERSives, eh Sonny?

Ginny Brannan said...

Loved the visuals painted with this poem, but you had me with the title! Great start Brian!

Anthony Desmond said...

freedom to speak our personal truths.. priceless... lovely poetry Sir, as always :)

Ann Grenier said...

Gunslinger, rock flinger... OK, I it! ... but this is me over here, as you'll see if you read about my quiet boat house. Best of luck with the new site, sure looks good so far!

ps: I couldn't find a place to comment when I linked up ??

Natasha said...

Bleed it out Brother Poet! Fierce write once again...and the world is in dire need of your voice! Might have a new favorite on the boards for me...what an awesome way to launch dVerse! Go gunslinger...take no prisoners!

chromapoesy.com said...

i wrap loose leaf poems round rocks
tucked tight with bailing twine bow
knots trimmed just right so they barely
whistle

Dirge hymn indeed - you caught my breath and made me cheer you on.

Asobime said...

You got the Urban Poet down pat....all the way to the broken windows! LOL~

Loved the beat on this....I guess breaking windows with rocks has more merit when it's rapping verse! LOL~

Lady Nyo

blackswanpoetry said...

if you unwind
the twine, take a look inside, don't settle
to reside in the square you been painted,

Very nice.... This is my fav part

Daniel said...

Nice beat and pacing to this one. Fun read Mr. Desperado!

Joanne Elliott said...

Love the sounds in this poem! Keep slinging those words around.

Luke Prater said...

Love your manipulation and inversions of 'menace/society/verse'.. a master of wordplay... well, you're flying! Congrats on it all... good times bro

ayala said...

Beautiful, I love it :)

Elizabeth Young said...

I am so glad you do menace society with verse - you and every other poet! I had this image of you walking round the neighbourhood like the postman, with a huge bag of poems and releasing them to the needy. A stunning write about a prophet's work.

California Girl said...

I like this very much. Read it twice to find the nuances.

Beachanny said...

There's form in the liberty of this free verse as verse, i verse, menace, shifts and meanings fly to the heart of writers and readers. Well done on this, the work of getting the site up and going, and putting together an exciting group of people to keep the flame of poetry alive. Much thanks to you! Gay

hedgewitch said...

Love this brian. And you are indeed a menace to society as we know it with verse. Keep it up, man. And the opening night is rockin.

Anonymous said...

Great rhythm here, in time with the walking tone of the poem. Nice playing with the order of words too.

beckykilsby said...

..love your menace Brian...or is that menace your love...?

Dulce said...

and i'll take it... no matter what.

Anna said...

Like the rhythm of this piece... and keep on with the menacing of the verse. "smiles!" Congrats on the new site up and running!

avril yospa said...

whoops, I didn't mean anonymous before...

emma said...

Great piece...awesome message. It reads like spontaneous spoken word...really like the distinctiveness of your style.

mrs mediocrity said...

oh my, this drew me in from the first line, the cadence is just perfect, sing song in a perfect dancing on your tongue kind of way.
pure music.

Suz said...

4 stars

Chris G. said...

Bloody good stuff, man - one community to another, but the talent just don't quit.

Christi Moon said...

"go and be free" indeed!

Claudia said...

you for sure are a poetic gunslinger..and if you start to menace society with verse - then it's getting highly dangerous..this was excellent brian and it would be deadly dangerous if you would read it to us..ha
what a great opening night - isn't it...? party's in full motion and i already love the new mr. linky

velvetinapurrs said...

'i wrap loose leaf poems round rocks' what a great opening line for a great opening night, love you slinging your menacing verse!..

Louise said...

Great poem, brilliant ending. Keep menacing cos we love it!

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

you go Brian...
fling that rock
sling that verse
grab the words
by their comet tails
3 foot vertical leap
one handed catch

Joseph Hesch said...

And to think, I ducked when I heard this come through the window. In this case, the rock was weighed down by the poem. Very heavy, as we used to say in the, forgive me, Stone Age.
Great stuff. Thank you for thinking of me. Thank you for this poem.

moondustwriter said...

Amigo aka gunslinger aka Bri
wishing you and your compadres all the best

you know there are many poems yet to write on paper and in life
thanks for being a poem in my life.

cheers to future endeavors

poemblaze said...

I love the idea of menacing society with verse!

otin said...

Lucy...you got some splainin' to do! LOL

You know me, I have no idea what this one means!

bodhirose said...

This is so cool--a gun slinging poet--menacing society with verse. Loved it--just great!

Cloudia said...

your mind is a fertile delta!



Aloha from Waikiki;


Comfort Spiral

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Belinda said...

Really nice how you ended this, Brian. And your message resonates with me: expand, strethc, broaden your horizon.

Love that you're opened up the Pub. Will be guzzling pints this evening.

Percy@dreamhopewrite said...

Your rock has been thrown through my computer screen and landed in my heart this is an awesome write. It describes what we all attempt to do as writers... BE HEARD!

Randy Behavior said...

Your writing is strong like that! Mine is more the mist that seeps in under the door at night. Someday like you I'd like to hurl rocks though. :)

lynne said...

you would be kick-a** at an open mic reading this. love the repetition of..verse, i.. menace..

i do admire the way you write these pieces that are so simple to be difficult..

Congrats on dVerse. i see many smiles ahead..for all!!!

oceangirl said...

words flow so freely and in perfect order, like they know where to go, how to line up into a poetry of the mind.

Christine said...

very powerful slinging

Steve E said...

WOW! As always, Brian. I have not enough words to yet be a menace...
but I'll try that last part--to love you back...and be FREE!

FREEEEEE!

dragonkatet said...

For me, this had kind of stream-of-consciousness feel to it, but it was a smooth read. When I think of gunslingers, I can't help but think of Roland in Stephen King's "Dark Tower" series. Especially with the title, that was even more in the forefront of my mind as I read. There were familiar images, yet a surreal 'feel' to the piece. Overall, I liked it. :)

Daydreamertoo said...

You must know there was no way I wasn't joining all that talent and chat at your new pub ... Love your smiles ;)

lori said...

I know you can't see me from where you sit, but I am smiling big right now. Knew this would be one of my favorites after reading the first two lines... Congratulations on the new place. It's going to be good :)

marousia said...

Stunning - what a way to celebrate :)

Helena White said...

Love this!
Blazing stanza's lol!
Great Beginning to a new adventure Brian!

i menace society with verse
i verse with menace, society
with society, i verse, menace

Gemma Wiseman said...

Enjoyed the echo of sounds burning the poem along! A most entertaining tribute to the power of poetry!

haikulovesongs said...

"i menace society with verse
i verse with menace, society
with society, i verse, menace"

abso f**king lutely brilliant! one of your best and i've yet to read a poem of yours that isn't great. very, very cool!

so excited for you and Claudia {and everyone participating} on the Opening Celebration at dVerse!

thoughtsofapatcheduptraveler said...

Nothing escapes your pen. I love that. The repetition does so much to enhance this poem. It screams of the fever of the poet, the one who must write. MUST. Excellent poetry.

Beth

That Janie Girl said...

I love your poetry.

Margaret said...

my message is simple if you unwind
the twine, take a look inside, don't settle
to reside in the square you been painted,

Really liked this part! Congrats on Opening Night!

wolfsrosebud said...

Such depth to your writing today.

steven said...

it strikes me that being free, living free, is so often a menace to so many in our society. free people are dangerous people. dangerous in the best way...

Help! Mama Remote... said...

Congrats Brian! Let's see if I can get some verse together for next week.

flaubert said...

Wow, Brian. This is really good. A wonderful poem for opening night.

Pamela

Sheila Moore said...

impressive, the chris't cross tree and message written with finger in dirt - great biblical references for me (hope the Pharisees didn't walk away before the end of this write!)

signed...bkm said...

nice play with words - the verses meant as if for a song...rap in mind here...you verse it well the vision on the streets, the vision in the mind...be free..yes be free...bkm

Tara Miller said...

Fantastic! Your poems are always cocked and loaded with words to leave us pondering and stepping out of our box. This is a perfect opener for d'verse oln, love. And what an awesome turnout it's been over there!

Andy said...

Laughing...somehow I can't see you as a "menace to society".
Nice rhyme & flow.
You're definitely a man of many talents.

Perfect for the opening night!

Mama Zen said...

"my menace is for the pen-chance of a voice"

Hell, yeah!

Pseudo said...

I really loved this one Brian. The rhythm, the tightness, the alliteration.

"i verse with menace."

yes you do.

kkrige said...

Like the repetition here, you crazy verse-slinging fool.

Reflections said...

If there is such a thing as getting drunk on poetry... yours sure does start the night well.

Louise Gallagher said...

Whew!
I don't need a brew
to make me feel alright
I just gotta
read your poetry
in the night!

Great piece! Great opening to the Pub.

Pranavam Ravikumar a.k.a. Kochuravi said...

Creative!!! Blessed to be here. Have a nice day!

ds said...

Wow. You verse with brilliance. I could "hear" this as though you were up on a stage in front of me...which of course you are now.
Fantastic opening night!!

Margie said...

Simply fantastic!
Love this one!

CM said...

Homerun! You go, boy!

Dang...that was good. Congrats on your new venture too.

River said...

Someone mentioned the movie "The Good, The Bad.." exactly :) I had the same theme song running through my mind while I read. A cowboy of words that points out what needs to be said. :)

Just Be Real said...

As usual there is art in your words. Blessings.

Jerry said...

May the bailing wire be snapped open every time! Keep menacing, if only I could menace near as much as you. The last two stanza's cut to the spirit. Thanks.

TechnoBabe said...

Johnny Appleseed of the literary bent. You have a wonderful mastery of words.

Old Ollie said...

cool: you rocked out some sweet original images...thanks Brian

Colleen said...

Love it, your poetry makes me remember freedom.

the walking man said...

hahahahahahah Loved it! The day i stand still in a square that someone else painted me into is the day they find my footprints walking away from poetry and them. Good luck on your new venture, not up to speed on it but good luck anyway.

James Rainsford said...

An intriguing and dramatic write for opening night. Thanks for all your effort. James.

Lorraine said...

I would say magnificent, but it's not enough. I'll just say..if only I had the words

Nancy said...

It just needs a good beat.

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

The flow and rhythm of this is just awesome! I love it! So full of the energy that drives!

anointedruins said...

Nice meditation on the salutary subversiveness of verse. Thank you for hosting dVerse Poets Pub!

David

Joanne said...

Just great mind paintings in short spurts, just like the fling of rock-cored poems. This feeling of spreading verse all around...thanks!

Alegria Imperial said...

Wow!!! It feels like watching the constellations put on a dance in the sky but with your lines! I'll miss you here, Brian!

susansonnenmuses said...

"this message written by fingers
in dirt" ...I LOVE that image! :D

colleen said...

Words have living power. And I like the idea of verse as a verb.

Carys said...

This one has plenty of swagger. What a great opening act Brian!

rmp said...

a lovely menacing verse...

I might think of some more to say when this concussion goes away.

william said...

You a menace...never one of the nicest people I have ever met ...great post mate.

Tom Eliot said...

I can feel the beat and the passion. Fantastic.

Tom Eliot said...

Great beat and the passion jumps.Fantastic.

yellowhousecafe said...

I really love the idea of this...rebel poet, kinda a take on graffiti artist 'tearing things up' (as long as you don't hit anyone, ha!) A fabulous idea, thou, wouldn't it be cool to start leaving stones wrapped in verse around town... who would read... a poetic revolution ~

Rachel Hoyt said...

I like the vibe in this pub! Awesome verse.

juca2 said...

Cracks along at a great pace! // Peter.

joanna said...

congrats on a great opening night!

the tone of this piece was perfect for the occasion-- the world needs more poet slingers such as yourself.


(very literally speaking, i have heard of "poetry bombing" before--maybe just not with rocks, though) ;)

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love the opening stanza - what a novel way to describe the intention and art of a poet.

Great piece, and good luck to your endeavours on this site.

Goofball said...

oh never found one of your stones yet in my garden :( :(


fortunately I can visit your blog

Laura Lynn said...

Dang Brian.....your message rang true. You should turn this into a song. It would be a great song!

tracy said...

You said "breaking wind". -:)

So if you are a menace then I love the anarchy you bring. "Attica! Attica!"

Charles Elliott said...

Smashing!

But "they barely
whistle breaking wind in flight"

had other unfortunate associations for me as a former frequent flyer all too often embarassed by "breaking wind" in flight...