Tuesday, July 5, 2011

One (Last) Shot: Strange, no one remembers your name

The echo of the last happy child's laugh
sits in the amusement park parking lot,
its only companion, a dented, empty soda can
in whose metallic stripe, admires its reflection.

Can tired, huffs breath, life support
on the way to rust & they talk deep into
the night about stuff that don't mean much,
filling moments, til the Moon lies, in the ditch.

Through the fence a blue jay alights on the
fortune teller's booth, springing it to mechanized life,
lights chasing each other round the square window
as a moving hand promises fortunes for four quarters.

Whir, Whirrr, Whirrrrr, the brushes of the
street sweeper call the robot gypsy's bluff,
signalling the end of a season, it sucks them up,
re-cycling the year that was, into tomorrow.

One Shot Wednesday was created a little over a year ago by four people that wanted to see poetry elevated and poets encouraged. I had the honor or firing the first One Shot and this will be my last. Officially, I will leave OSP on the 19th. Thank you to the poets that made it what it is, and the dear friends that came from it. I will continue my journey, in life & blog, and hope to still sow seeds of encouragement in the lives of those I have the opportunity to meet along way.

124 comments:

dustus said...

Brian, it was a sincere honor to be part of OSP with you. You're an amazing writer, poet, and friend. You've been a great influence on me both as an artist and individual. Thank you for all you've done this year. All the best to you and your family. Cheers, Brother.

Mama Zen said...

Those first couple of lines are amazing!

Little Ms Blogger said...

Wow, you've managed to do this for 52 weeks. Actually, I'm impressed that you pretty much blog daily. Ummmm...I don't.

Ruthiey said...

congrats on OSP. what a great group. :)

Alan Burnett said...

One of the joys of getting back home and getting back on the net is being able to catch up with such creative work as this.

kaykuala said...

Brian,
One Last Shot and no more? Been impressed with your being 1) a prolific writer and 2) of making an immediate response to every comment made.
It'll not be the same no more. Kind regards for the future and thank you.

David Allen Waters said...

amazing as always man...leaving? :(

Teri said...

Brian...this is one of those that you have to re-read in order to understand it. I guess you need more "you" time in order for you to quit OSP. I wish you well and I know that we will all enjoy reaping the benefits of what you come up with next. It's in you...you'll never stop completely...just move on.

Suz said...

You are a special writer
advance

Brian Miller said...

teri, you are right i will never stop completely and ideas already spinning...smiles.

thank you adam, it has been a pleasure working with you. and speaking of great writers...lets get your book out there...and get to working on the one we are planning...smiles.

ds said...

Oh no, your name will be remembered, long after OSP is gone...Enjoy your journey, wherever it takes you. I'm so glad that you will continue blogging & writing stuff like this. It's an honor to know you...

ayala said...

Brian, it makes me sad that you are leaving OSP. You are a great poet and writer, and I will continue to read your writing wherever it is. Thank you for all your support always.

Glynn said...

Brian - thanks for all of your encouragement, work and support. I'll miss you on OSP. Best of success!

5thsister said...

Brian...your encouragement has meant so much throughout my own journey. I am pleased to read you will still be blogging. I may not always comment but your poetry truly resonates within my soul and I am so honored that our paths have crossed.

Heaven said...

I am sad to read this but who knows what exciting journeys await you. I only got to know OSP because of following you, and now, thankfully I can still read your blog since you will continue writing, right? I can see how encouraging and supportive you are to (new) writers everywhere (including me). I haven't met anyone (yet) that can match your enthuasiam and support.

The end of the season, but also a new beginning... I want to come along with the ride ~

lori said...

Well, the OSP halls will definitely be dimmer without you, but this is exciting because it means new things are happening for you. I can only hope books are among those new things. And, you are beyond generous with your encouragements to all of us, so thank you! I have often wondered how you keep it all going (super-human powers, perhaps?). Oh, and that last stanza is quite an end in this piece of collaboration.

Here's to your new adventures!
:)

trisha said...

beautiful poem brian. hope you had lots of fun in the marriage :)

Help! Mama Remote... said...

Aw snap snap! As soon as I start you leave! The whir whir whirr remind me of police cars and ambulace that i've been hearing lately. Sorry, was just having flash backs.

Brian Miller said...

thank you everyone...and i will surely let everyone know where i land...being in a poetry community has been healthy for me, as i think it is for any budding writer...i am sure it will not be too long before i am with/in another...

Pat said...

I am sure you have inspired many, many people with your wonderful poems. I can't write a poem if I killed me. But I loved reading yours!

ninotaziz said...

Dear Brian,
I am sure you know this is sad news indeed for me. Your encouragement has been inspiring and delightful (for lack of a better word). What I am trying to say is that in these weekly...or sporadic at times...interchange, the community has been able to cheer us on , many a times at just the right moment. How does this happen with all of us being so far apart and we hardly knowing each other - we share a passion for writing and thus communicate what is closest in our hearts.

I have a full time job, five kids and write books when I have the time or when my publisher decides they need a book no one else can/would care to write. It is tough and at times, I disappear for weeks. But I always come back.

I hope you will too.

ninotaziz said...

*us hardly knowing each other...

Zeba said...

This is good stuff. Lovely.

Sue said...

What a vivid picture you paint here.
Artfully done!

(Someday I would love to hear how you began writing poetry and when.)

=)

Captain Dumbass said...

Constantly impressed with your ability to churn out such quality work day after day. Good work, sir.

rosaria said...

That last phrase lingers. What remains are these images. Stunning parting shots, B.

Unknown Mami said...

Perfect piece to end this particular journey. Keep on keepin' on.

happygirl said...

Thanks for all your poems on OSP. I've learned a lot by reading you. Hey, thanks for all your encouragement.

Tara Miller said...

I know you will be greatly missed at osp. You have such God given talent and I'm glad to read you're not going to stop writing. Know I support you in all that you do. Love ya!

Fireblossom said...

Why are you leaving? Phooey.

AmyLK said...

This one is SO good! I can't believe you're leaving OSP. Just so that you're still blogging here. I love your work.

Pat Hatt said...

Pffft just making this mention
To get some gushy attention..LOL..j/k

Like how you weaved the fortune teller in
So no more one shots at your bin
I'm sure writes
Of other types
There will be plenty more
As you continue taking your life tour
And good luck
From the rhyming f... umm d... Lets just go with cat
How about that

hedgewitch said...

All life is change my friend--I want you to know how much your support and your particular brand of poetry has encouraged me, and I'm sure many others, with some of the best prompts out there, and an ever positive presence. All the best to you, and hopefully you'll keep writing things like this for us--an excellent poem, tricky and deep.

HisFireFly said...

The end of one seaason herals the beginning of the next. Blessings as you step into what awaits you.

I pray that we are able to keep in touch in one form or another, through post comments, emails, whatever... so that we may continue to share the gift of mutual encouragement.

As you depart, do so with the echo of "well done, good and faithful servant"

Claudia said...

i don't need to tell you how much of an honor it was to work with you bri and how much your friendship means to me and there are times i prefer tunes over words..off to play the blues..

Katherine said...

You are an amazing person, husband, father, a dedicated employee in a very challenging sector of the community, a dedicated blogger & an extraordinary poet. I for one am so pleased to have had the pleasure of meeting you in Bloggerdom. I have always been in awe of how you have juggled everything that you do. I myself could not keep up the pace and fell away from many of the challenges set in bloggerdom. Your presence in this world, and the literary masterpieces you create have definitely left an imprint in my heart. I am pleased to learn that you are not going all together because you would most certainly be sorely missed. I've been reading you for several years now & would miss you if you were gone.

Louise said...

You're leaving?! :( I'm sorry to hear, but thank you so much for your supportive comments/encouragement. I wouldn't be the writer I am now without Onestop. All the best to you! :)

Pete Marshall said...

Bri...you know how much i respect and honour your decision you also know I am right there behind you supporting it.it was more than an honour...keep close..pete

poemblaze said...

Lovely poem. Sad to hear you're leaving. Wish you'd stay.

kkrige said...

You will be missed Brian, but I hope to still see you around the blogosphere. Your words inspire so many and it would be a shame to have them lost.

Heather said...

just getting back into town after a long 4th. You are already fortunate in all you have done...looking forward to what comes next! ( hope you and the fam. had a great holiday!)

blueviolet said...

Why don't you want to continue with it?

Margie said...

Brian, I'm sure you will be missed very much at OSP.
You are one of the nicest persons I have met in Blogland and you encourage so many (I love that!) and your talent in writing, well, that speaks for itself!
Wonderful poem, as always!

Margie :)

Chris G. said...

You're leaving Brian? I was not aware - oh my goodness, my friend, it has been an honor and a pleasure working with you, and I am terribly sorry to see you go...I wish you all the best in whatever you go to from here, though. And all the best to both you and your family.

Well...what changed though, I guess? Goodness, I'm stunned right now. You caught me off guard - but really, truly, I wish you all the best my friend.

Kavita said...

Like they, life goes on... and so do we.. *sigh*

But really, I don't think you need to be bothered about no one remembering your name, Brian! :) cuz YOU ROCK!! And in my poetry world, your name goes a long way alright!

Best luck with everything, my friend...
(hugs)

Anthony Desmond said...

dude. I seriously got sad when I read you're leaving osp! I'm gonna miss you a lot Brian! happy trails to you Sir.

Monkey Man said...
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Monkey Man said...

quite a kaleidoscope of imagery. best to you moving forward.

Goofball said...

end of a season? already? summer is only starting

Randy Behavior said...

Loved the first stanza especially. I was right there watching.

Glad I got to meet you Brian. Love and Light to you on your path.

Duane Scott said...

The first paragraph was awesome! :)

Maggie May said...

I can see in my mind's eye the lonely, empty fun fair.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Uneven Stephen said...

Great write. I really admire your strong use of imagery and storytelling in this piece. I just recently started sharing on OSP, so I've only read a few of your poems. I will definitely miss your presence and wish you well, and I will be sure to follow your blog.

Ben Langhinrchs said...

I love the echo admiring its reflection, but the blue jay evokes the strongest image to me. What fortune might it find if only it had the quarters?

Fred said...

Brian, you are a very good writer, like others have mentioned, but still I'll mention again. you have a style that is pretty fluid, depending upon what you want to accomplish within each piece you put together. I'll keep checking your sites to see what you're putting together. It's always a pleasure reading your work. Thanks again:)

heartspell said...

Maybe I'm reading more into this piece than I should, but I wonder if there is a lot of representation going on of real people? Anyway, I really appreciate this piece as the closing of a chapter of sorts. You will be missed on OSP, but I have a feeling we will still connect otherwise... best wishes in whatever new endeavors you are anticipating...I hope to be reading more of your musings on this blog...you are on my blogroll... and thanks for all your support in the past year.

Timoteo said...

What gives, eh? In a practical (and selfish) way of looking at it--if we still get to read your stuff, that's the important thing!

Deidra said...

The last line is absolutely perfect!

mark said...

Firstly, I truly enjoyed your poem. Word choices are quite tasty and work well.

Secondly, I am saddened that having just recently found OSP, you'll be moving along. Yet, moving on is a part of life they say.

Be well, Brian.

Friko said...

You are leaving with a flourish.

I am glad that you will still be around to inspire me.

Lynne said...

YOu will be missed but I understand the need for growth and new doors.. best of luck to you and I thank you for your kind words on my (sometimes not so good) poetry.
Cheers!!

Daniel said...

Time to turn over a new and different leaf. That's O.K. and likely healthy. You have been one to know yourself and to keep things fresh. More important, you know and understand your other priorities. See you here ... and there.

darsden said...

:-)

otin said...

Some people are just not meant to be put into a mold! :)

Magpie said...

"To every thing there is a season, and a time to every purpose under the heaven"...
Moving on isn't always a bad thing.

Daydreamertoo said...

Wow... amazing and full of vivid imagery. I actually could see the gypsy holding her hand out for the coins before telling her fortunes.
Great write!

Natasha said...

Well...to be frank, that just sucks! It's because I missed Friday poetically again, isn't it! Brian, no matter where you go, what you do, or what you write,or don't write for that matter, you will be touching hearts and changing lives for the better. Doesn't mean this sucks any less for me, mind you. Hmmm? Blindsided! As for the write, rocks, as per the norm, and somehow, I see poor Tom Hanks in Big, suddenly facing adulthood, all grownup and without a clue...damn fortune tellers! Back to the gushy stuff...I stuck with Onestop because of how strong your voice of encouragement was, and I do hope they realize just how big those empty shoes are going to be. Wishing you nothing but light, love and laughter on your continuing journey...and perhaps a tad bit of drama for muse only! I've got a funny feeling I won't be the only one cyberstalking you out there! :)

Ginny Brannan said...

I have truly enjoyed reading your poetry, you are an absolutely wonderful writer. You helped to start an amazing networking of poets and writers here. I thank you for your kind words on my writing, and wish you well on your journey after One Shot Poetry. I WILL remember your name! :-)

Helena White said...

Brian, Although I am sad that your leaving, I wish you well in all new beginnings. Thankyou for all your encouragement. I hope you will continue your blog and stop by every now and again...You will be missed Brain ~.^

To Everything (Turn, Turn, Turn)
There is a season (Turn, Turn, Turn)

Asobime said...

You are going, Brian? What did I miss? \
You are such a fine poet, and I think this reflects in broader terms, too.

This is a wonderful poem, evocative of so many wonderful images....summer sounds and feelings.

Thank you, Brian....for all you have been here...and there.

Lady Nyo

ModernMom said...

I adore that all you talented poets love and support each other. Clapping here for all your beautiful poetry...

CM said...

Well, since I've been following your blog before OSP ever existed, I guess it doesn't really matter to me...I'll still be reading your blog!

I totally get it, though. As you know, I did a blog hop/meme on my other blog and it got to be too much with just the dozen or so link ups, I can't imagine keeping up with over 100 EVERY week!

By the way, I read where you said you didn't want to post if you couldn't get around to everyone's blogs. You need to let go of that. Just blog for yourself. Leave a few comments here and there where you can. THEN, and only then, will you know who your true readers/followers/friends are. :-)

Oh, and I like this melancholy write. So sad, end of season perspective. The imagery was amazing!

Christine said...

Thank you Brian for all your kind words on my blog, your talent is very inspiring. All the best.

Hilary said...

Wonderful. Your words are always magical.

lynnaima said...

hmmm I like :)
when is the book coming out Brian? You have some awesome writes that need to be shared.

tolbert said...

The echo of the last happy child's laugh
sits in the amusement park parking lot,
its only companion, a dented, empty soda can
in whose metallic stripe, admires its reflection.

Love the opening to this Brian. Waiting is a very difficult thing to do, especially when your only companion is a dented soda can...Good stuff here...

Lolamouse said...

Brian,
Your name will be remembered! Thank you so much for all you've done for OSP and the all the time you've spent commenting and encouraging everyone. Your work is fantastic, and it's been an honor getting to know you.

Me said...

Brian, you are simply awe-inspiring. Every day, I read your posts, receive comments from you on my own, and see evidence of you EVERYWHERE, all through blogland.

I don't know how you keep up with it all, and I'm not surprised that something had to give...

Congrats on being part of something so grand! I know without a doubt that there are many more wonderful things in your future.
-Corrie

Finally said...

Thank you so much for your consistent encouragement of my work and for your beautiful and insightful poetry. I will really miss you at OSP!

Jen said...

I love amusement parks. I miss Astroworld. Some genius decided to turn ours into a parking lot. :(

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Jo Bryant said...

Such a powerful and poignant poem. :)

Pastor Sharon said...

Brian, your poetry has been Absolutely inspirational with every post you bring to us.

I can't imagine what doors are opening for you. However, I am sure whatever it is will be better because you are a part of it.

I cannot wait to see where you land and what you do next. Keep in touch. You have been such an incredible part of my daily life.

As a pastor, your words ring home to me in a reality based way. They have reached the depths of my soul for those I work with. You have touched on every subject I have dealt with daily.

You keep it real and that is what I love most about coming here to read what you write. Let us know where you land!

I know there is a great big ocean out there waiting for you to launch big things!
God bless you and your family!

Slamdunk said...

A game winning three point shot then to celebrate your last OSW. Thanks for the inspiration.

Patricia said...

you doll...waiting up till the last post came in and you STILL graciously commented on it. I feel so fortunate to have crossed paths with you as a newbie. Thank you for the encouragment. May you be encouraged as well. Blessings.

KB said...

I've enjoyed your One Shots and this one is no exception :)

Steve E said...

Brian, this place is like CHEERS, where everyone remembers your name...and what you drink--grin!

"Happy Trails To You...Until we meet again..." (old song.)

For the gifts you have given us/me, there is no way to repay.
Gratefully,
Steve E

PEACE!

haikulovesongs said...

1st, the gypsy fortune teller's booth has always been my favorite. another amazing poem written in the way only you can. you are a stunning wordsmith.

you are also incredibly generous and supportive and encouraging of other poets. i can't tell you how much your comments have meant to me. i will miss your voice at OSP. i hope to keep seeing you writing here at waystationone.

lastly, i wish you great adventures along your journey and much love and laughter with your family. change is good, even if it seems not to be at the time. you ARE a really nice guy, Brian, and i wish you well. *Giant Squishy Hugs* dani

Poetic Soul said...

I knew you through my website, www.souldose.webs.com and you were always amazing, I am a huge fan of your poetry, it has depth and I just love it.

Aquarius63 said...

Sorry to read you are leaving Brian, all the best to you.

An excellent poem with wonderful imagery.

Anita.

lucychili said...

do we watch this space for your next adventures or are you between thoughts on forwards? a book sounds like a great idea =)

budh.aaah said...

n, but why? :( I came back today after a long time and straight to your blog. And...

Sex, Drugs and Bacon Sandwiches said...

I wish I had the patience and talent to blog as often as you :)

Laura Lynn said...

The last few lines .....end of a season...to recycle into tomorrow. The ending had strong meaning for me. The beginning had me picturing a young child at the end of an amazing day at the amusement park but then it seemed to change at the end. I really liked the ending.
Sorry to hear you are leaving OSP. You have been a great light for me in my writing process. Thank you for all you do and good luck in whatever journey you choose in the writing world!

Jerry said...

I imagined the amusement park we attend every summer and the aftermath. A van full of tired kids and sand and half eaten sandwiches. Never thought about the lonely park bedding down for the season. Cool. cool. cool.

repressedsoul said...

Wow, gutted Bri; but it must be difficult to hold it all together like you do. You're an inspiration to us mummies and daddies out there and I'll still be coming to sy hello from time to time! You'll be missed as part of the one stop team I'm sure xx

Jerry said...

Postscript: Thanks you Brian for all your encouragement...personally I wondered how in the world you could comment on every blog...and not token comment either...real thoughts processed and given. You have been an excellent example. Thanks you. You will be missed but I will be looking you up.

wolfsrosebud said...

You've been an encouragement to all... commenting continually to push each one of us to grasp onto our strengths. Needless to say, OSP is losing a great leader. May you follow His light to shine in other places.

lucyfurleaps said...

Love, love, love this poem! The voice and the imagery and the flow of it. Thanks for the comments on my poems - much appreciated - and good luck in your next adventure! :-) x

Ocean Girl said...

it is just nice to be at a place where everyone knows your name. yours is one that will be remembered.

Valerie said...

Excellent, Brian. This will stay with me for a long time, especially this line 're-cycling the year that was, into tomorrow'.

sheila said...

Reminds me of the movie Big. Love this!

annell said...

What does that mean when no one remembers your name? My partner's name is Ward, and yet all people call him Wade? Is it impossible to hear Ward? Or do people just want to think his name is Wade? Do they like Wade better? I loved this write.

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

Hi! Brian...
I'am so sorry to read that this is your last OSP post...Because I participated for the first-time...Well, indirectly, as a matter Of fact, I have sent you an email...explaining all... :-(

...Your words, your poem remind me Of something that has ended and the clean-up after-wards. [Very Bitter/sweet]
Thanks, for sharing my friend!
deedee :-)

annell said...

Don't go too far Brian...

Lorraine said...

it's amazing what you bring to life...

emmettwheatfall.com said...

Brian, I pray I never hear the last laugh from a child. Wonderful poem man, wonderful!

James Rainsford said...

Wow Brian! Look at all these comments. You've certainly managed to touch a great number of people with your poems and encouraged many with your supportive comments. Thank you and good luck. James.

Kim Nelson said...

To every thing there is a season. Closing up, closing down, leaving town. Transitions are inevitable. Your poem addresses this eloquently. Best of luck in reality.

tracy said...

Your words made me smile even though this was a little wistful. Moon in the ditch...

You must have enough pieces to rival a volume of Shakespeare by now!

Kerry O'Connor said...

These are the lines that captured my imagination:

& they talk deep into
the night about stuff that don't mean much,
filling moments, til the Moon lies, in the ditch...

Sometimes the stuff that don't mean much is the glue that binds.

Victoria said...

I was so enjoying this post...the poem just placed me right in the scene you created...and then I read you're leaving One Shot and my heart just got this heavy sad feeling. I do hope we will continue to see your work all over the place. I understand that sometimes we need to cut back a bit and focus on other things that are important. Blessings to you.

adeeyoyo said...

Quite sad, AMUSEMENT park after hours... I don't know anyone who can write like you, Brian, and bring everything alive into our imagination... I really don't know how you find the time for all that you do, but I must say I really appreciate it and can understand that your time is limited. I wish you everything of the very best on your journey and hope that you will continue writing on this site.

Luke Prater said...

Brian - Sad news that you are leaving OSP; I hope you'll still be blogging your wonderful poetry and that you and I can continue our poetic exchanges, even if you don't do OSW anymore. I won't say goodbye cos I know I'll see you round, right?

John (@bookdreamer) said...

Thanks for being around!

C Rose said...

"til the moon lies, in the ditch" I adore your expression Brian, you capture the world in a wonderful way. ~ Rose

Jeanne said...

Ooooh this one is a feeling of everything being just done...absolutely spent! the dented can, the echo, even the moon!

Patricia said...

just came back here to share another thought...
I hope you hear all these comments as an uproarious applause... can you hear us?! We are all shouting "bravo!"

yellowhousecafe said...

You know, Brian, I've oft been amazed at how many blogs you hit in a day...exhausting! You've been quite the inspiration for me as I feel that your approach reminded me of what I wished to do a few years ago. After reading your work, I was able to get that groove back a bit (nothing compared to your fine fashion, I must say!) Your commentary has always been most welcomed & I wish you best of luck. (I've got Waystation bookmarked now, so you best continue the craft!)

As for the poem...very fine and it took me back to the movie Big, which has ironically crept into my mind just today after a patron started to read my palm (long story). Crazy how something can keep calling, no? (I fashioned that same gypsy like booth in a recent poem (smiles)). I think I best watch the movie, tis a sign!

You've a gift, my friend...keep writing ~

Anna said...

I will miss your encouraging comments; thank you for being so faithful in visiting and encouraging so many. You're one talented poet and I've been inspired by your writing. I'm glad to know you'll still be around and wish you the very best!

Ann Grenier said...

Brian, so sorry to hear you are leaving OSP but wish you the very best in your next venture. I feel priviledged to have met you, a genuinely nice guy with kind encouragement for everyone.

Alegria Imperial said...

What a deep and lovely poem, Brian, this your swansong for OSP--reflective and poignant perhpas that other self gazing from behind your shoulders when you wrote your jazz poems, your songs, your children's lines. Of all the poets, I believe I'll miss you the most! Miss your words, that leads a few later, wich never to make me soar. But indeed, life wouldn't be what it is if it stays put. Life is a river that only ceases when it's gone. I've felt quite attached you these 28 weeks of OSW and OSS as a friend and would want to hug you in words to wish you the best on whatever you'll do next and to wherever you sail. And I'll keep my fingers crossed on my wish that our paths may cross again.

Olivia said...

hmmmm........

that strange saying- life goes on.. we do as well!

when I see my blog and your comments; I boast up in pride. One helluva supporter that you have been, I always remember your name and will!

hugs xoxoxox
will keep hovering your blog- no matter what.. wink!!

Syd said...

You are so faithful as a writer and reader. Amazing, Bro.