imagine 1000
butterflies
stain glass sky dancers
spinning round a-lighting
on your body
then spinning away
finding new places
our bed
is still fields
awaiting you
What can you say in 160 characters. Say it, then tell Monkey.
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That's very sweet. :)
I'll have to tell you about the story my mum told me of butterflys someday....this was a very touching piece
happy sunday man :)
Beautiful. I like how you pull the imagery into reality at the end.
I am crying right now. Seriously. And I suspect I'll be going to the cemetery this afternoon to "visit" with my father.
You have an amazing way with words.
Very thought proking 160 that was
Liked the addition of "bed" because
We may seem big and bad
But eventually end up there in the field giving the butterfky, and other critters, life to be had
Beautiful. We all seem to create something from the beauty of butterflies.
"stain glass sky dancers"
such a wonderful line! I love your words.
Just beautiful!
I hope that Steve isn't the one you are missing? LOL
Lovely piece, really...
So you are a fan of tats? ;) I like the second stanza a lot!
lol otin, no the fam has been gone for the weekend...on their way home now...
amy, depends on who is putting them on me...
great pic and colorful sentiment
Beautiful. The imagery is something I'd love to see for real.
You make make me feel the wind of a 1000 butterfly wing beats. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.
Very nice sentiment here. Awesome how much you can put forth with so few words. Excellent job, love how it plays off the picture too
what can you say in 160.....you just did ....wonderfully
Beautiful. Am visualizing your words.
Seems like a very personal sentiment expressed here. Words, like a warm embrace, provide comfort.
Beautiful words:)
It makes me visualize..
Nice!
you are sweet today like chocolates *smiles*
great imagery of butterflies like stain glass sky dancers ~
see, you can write poetry in a restricted form like 160 characters or 55 words FFF. don't believe you can't do haiku or nonets....
happy sunday~
I'm with Otin...had to read twice. haha.
Personally, I'd freak out if 1000 butterflies landed on me. One or two...yeah, cool but 1000? lol...
the romantic touch of butterflies - to twist through the air - natures art - you capture the scene - nice!
"stain glass sky dancers"
Beautiful (love the pun on "still" too), clever, sweet...
You do more with 160 than many do with a page in this one. Love the whole thing, the end and the middle especially, though.
Swoon.
Sweet :)
Butterfly kisses. :) Fun.
lovely flutters
Very romantic
"Stain glass sky dancers" love that. Beautiful, Brian. Kind of dreamy really :)
Oh my goodness..that reminded me of a scene from the movie 'Bright Star'.. where Fanny explains her love for John Keets to her mother...her room is full of butterflies. Something very sensual about that!! Lovely post Brian! Heres a link to that scene:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LW6AkaO-LQM
Love this...and the art is stunning.
I love "stain glass sky dancers"--such an accurate description of butterflies.
So dreamy, and beautiful.
And magic.
Nice pic, is it new? hehehehe
This was sweet and a little sad. Love the imagery.
why yes it is otin, ugh...lol.
Brian, you really need to tell me where your ideas come from. i bet you can't say.
You're brilliant.
Just lovely, Brian. Hope all is well in your world. D
SO wonderful!!! I am going to go back and read it again.
ooooooh so very romantic.....and sweet. just back, catching up! hope the weekend was a good one! :)
This is so beautiful and touching!
It made me very sad though as my husband is leaving on a business trip on Tues. and will be gone 10 days!
I miss him already!
Lovely, romantic - beautiful imagery.
that is lovely!
Aloha from Waikiki;
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Hello Brian,
Lovely imagination and a very colorful picture. I will be thrilled to see 1000 butterflies in the sky but all of them alighting on my body makes me shudder with fright.
Have a lovely day,
Joseph
Butterflies flutter by!
Enchanting words, Brian. "stain glass sky dancers" is just about the most perfect description of butterflies I've read!
the first word that came to mind upon reading this was "glorious!" simply glorious! :D
I too liked your description "stained glass sky dancers". This felt beautiful and delicate....and...I missed you this weekend
ahhh tugging at the heart strings...nice
Aww, she'll be back soon.
Beautiful.
A simply beautiful tug at the heart. Sweet piece.
Lucky woman... and family.
How lovely!
Maggie X
Nuts in May
Very nice, as usual!
Hi! Brian,
First Of all, I have to second the notion and agree with the previous commenter and say that your poem, your words are simply...."beautiful!"
Brian said,"What can you say in 160 characters..."
Please! pardon not pardom me, but not as much as you, and Mrs. Miller just did...very lovely.
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D
gorgeous, Brian! have you been to a butterfly "garden" or pavilion? a magical experience and you have put it into words.
A butterfly is already a beautiful creature. You have rendered it in a verse more beautifully.
awe...ahhh..oh Brian!
Very well said. Objective achieved, I think.
Stained glass sky dancers ... what a wonderful description of those beautiful creatures.
stained glass creatures in the fields of my bed sounds pretty darn romantic to me!
Your inventiveness with words is limitless Brian.
stain glass sky dancers .....what a beautiful name for butterflies.
Beautifully penned!
Goes well with the imagery.
Butterflies are beautiful.
Sometimes I think your best work comes from when you are missing your family. Love, isn't it grand?
God bless.
Awe...You can color me quite envious. I go away, and come home to a note that says needs milk! Go figure. I think you poetic boys should get together and offer online seminars for the parteners afraid to pick up pen :)
Such beauty...
Here is mine:
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You are such a romantic, Brian.
I like it.
=)
whew.
that is sweet! Hope she comes home soon!
Simply beautiful!
Simply brilliant!
Anna :o]
1000 butterflies make me dizzy
Wonderful about the butterflies. I think that they are so beautiful.
Lovely, Brian.
Beautiful with moving colors...
very nice brian, superb play on words...
Wonderful!
Peaceful Sunday xox
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