Sunday, July 24, 2011

missing you


imagine 1000
butterflies

stain glass sky dancers
spinning round a-lighting
on your body

then spinning away
finding new places

our bed

is still fields
awaiting you

What can you say in 160 characters. Say it, then tell Monkey.

Also submitted to Poetry Jam,

83 comments:

blueviolet said...

That's very sweet. :)

David Allen Waters said...

I'll have to tell you about the story my mum told me of butterflys someday....this was a very touching piece

happy sunday man :)

Mijayami said...

Beautiful. I like how you pull the imagery into reality at the end.

KLo said...

I am crying right now. Seriously. And I suspect I'll be going to the cemetery this afternoon to "visit" with my father.

You have an amazing way with words.

Pat Hatt said...

Very thought proking 160 that was
Liked the addition of "bed" because
We may seem big and bad
But eventually end up there in the field giving the butterfky, and other critters, life to be had

Daydreamertoo said...

Beautiful. We all seem to create something from the beauty of butterflies.

Magpie said...

"stain glass sky dancers"
such a wonderful line! I love your words.

ladyfi said...

Just beautiful!

otin said...

I hope that Steve isn't the one you are missing? LOL

5thsister said...

Lovely piece, really...

She Writes said...

So you are a fan of tats? ;) I like the second stanza a lot!

Brian Miller said...

lol otin, no the fam has been gone for the weekend...on their way home now...

Brian Miller said...

amy, depends on who is putting them on me...

moondustwriter said...

great pic and colorful sentiment

Cheryl said...

Beautiful. The imagery is something I'd love to see for real.

Monkey Man said...

You make make me feel the wind of a 1000 butterfly wing beats. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.

Fred said...

Very nice sentiment here. Awesome how much you can put forth with so few words. Excellent job, love how it plays off the picture too

Suz said...

what can you say in 160.....you just did ....wonderfully

Sh@s said...

Beautiful. Am visualizing your words.

Daniel said...

Seems like a very personal sentiment expressed here. Words, like a warm embrace, provide comfort.

tarunima said...

Beautiful words:)
It makes me visualize..

The Bug said...

Nice!

Heaven said...

you are sweet today like chocolates *smiles*

great imagery of butterflies like stain glass sky dancers ~

see, you can write poetry in a restricted form like 160 characters or 55 words FFF. don't believe you can't do haiku or nonets....

happy sunday~

Betsy said...

I'm with Otin...had to read twice. haha.

Personally, I'd freak out if 1000 butterflies landed on me. One or two...yeah, cool but 1000? lol...

Ostensible Truth said...

the romantic touch of butterflies - to twist through the air - natures art - you capture the scene - nice!

ds said...

"stain glass sky dancers"
Beautiful (love the pun on "still" too), clever, sweet...

hedgewitch said...

You do more with 160 than many do with a page in this one. Love the whole thing, the end and the middle especially, though.

Unknown Mami said...

Swoon.

ayala said...

Sweet :)

Alice Audrey said...

Butterfly kisses. :) Fun.

nance marie said...

lovely flutters

Christine said...

Very romantic

lori said...

"Stain glass sky dancers" love that. Beautiful, Brian. Kind of dreamy really :)

Katherine said...

Oh my goodness..that reminded me of a scene from the movie 'Bright Star'.. where Fanny explains her love for John Keets to her mother...her room is full of butterflies. Something very sensual about that!! Lovely post Brian! Heres a link to that scene:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LW6AkaO-LQM

liv2write2day said...

Love this...and the art is stunning.

Eva Gallant said...

I love "stain glass sky dancers"--such an accurate description of butterflies.

The Empress said...

So dreamy, and beautiful.

And magic.

otin said...

Nice pic, is it new? hehehehe

Myrna R. said...

This was sweet and a little sad. Love the imagery.

Brian Miller said...

why yes it is otin, ugh...lol.

Friko said...

Brian, you really need to tell me where your ideas come from. i bet you can't say.
You're brilliant.

Donnetta said...

Just lovely, Brian. Hope all is well in your world. D

Bossy Betty said...

SO wonderful!!! I am going to go back and read it again.

Heather said...

ooooooh so very romantic.....and sweet. just back, catching up! hope the weekend was a good one! :)

Margie said...

This is so beautiful and touching!
It made me very sad though as my husband is leaving on a business trip on Tues. and will be gone 10 days!
I miss him already!

Linda said...

Lovely, romantic - beautiful imagery.

Cloudia said...

that is lovely!




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Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hello Brian,

Lovely imagination and a very colorful picture. I will be thrilled to see 1000 butterflies in the sky but all of them alighting on my body makes me shudder with fright.

Have a lovely day,
Joseph

Steve E said...

Butterflies flutter by!

Lolamouse said...

Enchanting words, Brian. "stain glass sky dancers" is just about the most perfect description of butterflies I've read!

susansonnenmuses said...

the first word that came to mind upon reading this was "glorious!" simply glorious! :D

Tara Miller said...

I too liked your description "stained glass sky dancers". This felt beautiful and delicate....and...I missed you this weekend

C.M. Jackson said...

ahhh tugging at the heart strings...nice

KB said...

Aww, she'll be back soon.

Hilary said...

Beautiful.

Reflections said...

A simply beautiful tug at the heart. Sweet piece.

farmlady said...

Lucky woman... and family.

Maggie May said...

How lovely!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Nancy said...

Very nice, as usual!

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

Hi! Brian,
First Of all, I have to second the notion and agree with the previous commenter and say that your poem, your words are simply...."beautiful!"

Brian said,"What can you say in 160 characters..."
Please! pardon not pardom me, but not as much as you, and Mrs. Miller just did...very lovely.
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D

haikulovesongs said...

gorgeous, Brian! have you been to a butterfly "garden" or pavilion? a magical experience and you have put it into words.

kaykuala said...

A butterfly is already a beautiful creature. You have rendered it in a verse more beautifully.

Lorraine said...

awe...ahhh..oh Brian!

Dave King said...

Very well said. Objective achieved, I think.

Valerie said...

Stained glass sky dancers ... what a wonderful description of those beautiful creatures.

California Girl said...

stained glass creatures in the fields of my bed sounds pretty darn romantic to me!

Alan Burnett said...

Your inventiveness with words is limitless Brian.

Pat said...

stain glass sky dancers .....what a beautiful name for butterflies.

PremI said...

Beautifully penned!
Goes well with the imagery.

Mrsupole said...

Butterflies are beautiful.

Sometimes I think your best work comes from when you are missing your family. Love, isn't it grand?

God bless.

Natasha said...

Awe...You can color me quite envious. I go away, and come home to a note that says needs milk! Go figure. I think you poetic boys should get together and offer online seminars for the parteners afraid to pick up pen :)

gautami tripathy said...

Such beauty...

Here is mine:

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Sue said...

You are such a romantic, Brian.

I like it.

=)

Ed Pilolla said...

whew.

AmyLK said...

that is sweet! Hope she comes home soon!

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Simply beautiful!

Anna :o] said...

Simply brilliant!

Anna :o]

Goofball said...

1000 butterflies make me dizzy

Syd said...

Wonderful about the butterflies. I think that they are so beautiful.

tracy said...

Lovely, Brian.

Jeanne said...

Beautiful with moving colors...

william said...

very nice brian, superb play on words...

Olivia said...

Wonderful!

Peaceful Sunday xox