Wednesday, June 29, 2011

when the Beatles met Harry & Sally at the mall and Rhett looked on

Crazy is as crazy does, love, what does it say, that we no longer
hold hands?

There was a time we could not keep our hands off each other,
when 'get a room' made us smile & our hands entwined
making love as we walked, sun glinting in the glistening sheen
of their ardor.

I sit, iron frame park bench with wood slats numbing my nether
regions, hopefully not causing permanent damage. A man, handsome,
stylish, his wife beside, but no b-side, if you know what i mean, but
no need to touch. An older couple slowly makes their way in para-
llel lines, age matters little, except the teens who reinact the fall
of Rome on each other at the end of my bench. I take my stubby
pencil out to keep track of how many people touch as they pass.

More often than not they separate each going their own way, want-
on desires and no intention of watch-ing her try on 54 shades of blue in
the same dress to find the one that reduces the size of her (things you
should not mention unless you have a great affiny for the couch
& Rosey, no not O'Donnell, get serious) ass-ets.

This is tragic! Satelites traverse one an-other butt orbits degrade, chick-
en little screams within me, trying to force his way up my throat, "The
sky is falling! Can't you see! Where is the intimacy? Act like you can
at least tolerate her pre-sence much less that you actually have feeling
still simmering on the stove top."

Stuffing the bare-ly marked journal page in my back pocket, hand
trying to curl up in a protective ball, projecting its feelings inward,
whimpers about needing you and people dying in the desert from
lack of water. Me, wanting to say 'hand, be a man', don't, in touch
with my feelings and all, so we cuddle and i talk to it about good
old days, when PDA meant something,

until you finally emerge from within the bathroom and with complete
disregard for how well washed yours may be, desperation gripping,
grasp it palm on palm, raising it exultantly above my head and make
that diner scene in When Harry Met Sally seem tame, YES,
YES, oh YES!

People stare, but frankly, your face a bit Scarlet, I don't give a damn,
and i can tell you don't either, because even after the comments to
perfect strangers on my need for psychotropic medication,
you don't pull away.

written for imperfect prose

77 comments:

Pat Hatt said...

Wow movie references galore
Oh what fun today at your shore
Making that scene seem tame
Did yes get screamed along with your name
hahaha oh that just came out
At least it was good and no one had to pout
Cheating with ass'ets again
Good thing the Grammar Nazi gave you a creative license for your pen..LOL
I don't give a damn was perfectly played too
Loved this one by you
Oh and side note too bad neither of them have made a good movie since
As most of there stuff has been a bit dense

Tara Miller said...

I wanna hold your haaannd....(I sound better singing in comments than in person!)

I think it's important to show the one you love touch and affection throughout the day - something that comes natural to me; as you know well ;) I know it's not natural for everyone but an important investment to be intentional about. A small gesture with huge meaning...holding hands is a good thing.

Kat_RN said...

That was fun. Good to know you still like each other.
Kat

Heather said...

ooooh, good stuff, today! i still hold hands with my Mr....it's a good feeling! I like this one...!!! have a good day! :)

Ed Pilolla said...

sweet, funny, real, insightful, generous and engaging. i especially like the part about you whipping out your pencil:) from the same tribe you and i may be.

G-Man said...

Why not 55 shades of blue?

Tina said...

Smiles. Lots of smiles. Loved this little slice of stop and think. I'm a toucher, too. Need that connection no matter what the situation.
Tina @ Life is Good

Help! Mama Remote... said...

I always hope that our marriage doesn't lose its flavor. However, there are times it can be a little redundant & needs to be revived. Great poem!

hedgewitch said...

So many people seem to want intimacy yet be afraid of what it entails. I love your examination of it here, very real, and the ending is perfect. A high five from the cranky witch.

Monkey Man said...

Mrs. MM and I walk hand in hand most of the time. PDA's are part of daily life. We embarrass out teens. We see the of others walking apart when one wishes the warmth of touch but the other is too cold. I heard this piece and live it daily.

trisha said...

poor onlookers! :(

Sue said...

I love this...the meaning even more than the medium.

=)

Mona said...

This is sadly true of most. It almost seems that people are afraid of love!

California Girl said...

Love this.

Evelyn said...

this is so different, fast, racy, sarcastic goodness.

Vicki Lane said...

Such terrific wordplay -- I'd like to hear this in performance.

Daniel said...

A bit of raw animal tension and passion here. I say bravo and more power to you. Love that you can still scream from the mountain top your passion and it is from your heart and echoed with the same intensity.

Ruthiey said...

aw, love this one.

Steve E said...

Cute observations, Brian. WAIT!!! I meant "ACUTE"--grin!

DJan said...

This must have been fun to immerse yourself in, just look what came out! They day that the Hand becomes a Man, I want to be there...

David Allen Waters said...

what a true delight. Hands making love...beautiful

Alexis Hallum said...

Couldn't wipe the smile off my face if I tried! Love this and your right on about the decline of affection. What's up with that? ;)

Victoria said...

Woweee!So many references, double entendres, creative punctuation and then the messages. Just so clever Brian. I'm envious...meaning I wish I'd penned this one!

Betsy said...

Sigh. :)

lori said...

Well, tell it like it is now :)

Okay, first of all, "When Harry Met Sally" is my favorite movie of all time, though I realize it should probably be something different. Next, I love this because Steven was the only one I broke my pda rules for. I couldn't help myself. I do have to stop him sometimes when he gets carried away and embarrasses me, but he makes me feel wanted, so I wouldn't have it any other way. I always watch couples, too, and it makes me sad when they don't touch or laugh or even talk :( Makes me realize how thankful I am for what I have.

Linda said...

These posts always leave me a bit "wordless." I do like them Brian.

tracy said...

Oh my goodness. I go away for just a little bit and you haven't missed a beat(le).What an amazing piece of work arose from such an ordinary observation.

lorely said...

I still hold hands with my hubby of many years when we walk in our neighborhood and out and about...love the looks we receive...it does seem affection tends to be a lost art...beautifully written...

PattiKen said...

I'll have what you're having.

I got a chuckle when I saw that this began with "crazy is a crazy does," given somewhat wacky title of the piece.

I'd hold hands more often, with whomever hand an empty hand available) if my fingers weren't always so puffed up from fluid retention. Gah. I remember what it was like to be really young. Sort of.

Stranger said...

The end has me smiling. Reminds me of my uninhibited, shameless youth.
The rest was a bit melancholy and bittersweet.
All of it was good reading.
It's always a pleasure reading what you're writing.

gayle said...

Love to hold hands and touch:)

Life@Cee said...

Familiarity versus passion - a creative take on the struggle for balance.

Heaven said...

Relationships evolve but certainly more than just holding hands, is being "present" in each other's presence. I felt like I walked thru a park seeing those people, until I looked and stared at the lovely couple at the end, who don't pull away from each other.

And I love that movie specially that diner scene.

A light creative take on what could have been a preachy post about good ole romance.

kaykuala said...

The Fab Four, Harry and Sally and Rhett Butler. It would certainly be fun and games and in a 'Yellow Submarine' may be.

Stacie said...

A good message wrapped up in some good fun...

Pauline said...

liked your play on words (and novels and movies).

CM said...

Awwww, I just read T's comment...so sweet! That's adorable.

I think the first line really got me, "what does it say that we no longer hold hands?" I think in the busyness of life, raising kids, work, ect. it's hard to remember those early years before kids and how such a simple thing as holding hands means. Nice write.

Me said...

*Sigh* I do wish we all lived and loved like you do, Brian. Great post, this.

And...

"Why not 55 shades of blue?"

*snort*

That G-Man....LOL!

ayala said...

I love to hold hands and touch too.
:) Love this.

Margie said...

Ah, loved this!
One of my favorites!
But wait, they all are!

Margie :)

Deidra said...

I loved reading this. So fun and full of truth. It is sad to see couples who don't touch and show signs of affection. I'm not a PDA person myself, but over the years I've started to care less and less. My husband likes to embarrass me and I'm glad he does. He's not ashamed to show his affection in front of others and that makes me feel wanted and loved.

adeeyoyo said...

Oy, loved this, loved your play on words, Brian!

Sage said...

A collection of 20th century pop culture! :)

Christine said...

My heart if pounding.

Sheila Moore said...

true love - love the PDA reference - made me smile

Joanna Jenkins said...

I'm a big fan of hand holding with hubby-- PDA's not bad either ;-)
This was terrific!
jj

Claudia said...

love this - first the observation - then the realizing, the sum-up - the sky is falling! a certain "mad desperation" and the over the top reaction which i love because it makes it so urgent and real. gonna be on a business trip all day and think i will take my pen to keep track of - you know... smiles

KB said...

I love holding hands with my man.

Tabor said...

There are posts when you sound somewhat like my husband. :-)

ladyfi said...

Fabulous writing! Sizzling.

Valerie said...

Love is.... enjoying the different stages of intimacy

Lorraine said...

or maybe my friend, as age creeps hands can kind of cramp up you know, so they just occasionally knock their knuckles together :)

sheila said...

Shit happens when you get old and comfortable in life. But the spark is always there... maybe shown in other ways.

Rachel Hoyt said...

So many great movie lines alluded to. My favorite is where you chose to put, "yes, yes, Oh YES!" :)

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

Yup, this one really does speak volumes!

Cinner said...

Beautiful Brian, there is nothing I like better than to see an elderly couple holding hands and being in love. I agree the world is so busy that there is not enough of the good things and romance out there. Sometimes I see people arguing and they just seem to loath one another.
Thank God live is good.

Mama Zen said...

Good, good stuff, Brian!

The Retired One said...

Aorable, Brian! We have been married almost 39 years now and we always hold hands...on the street, in the car, in movies and at restaurants. I love it and would miss it if we didn't!!

tony said...

reinact the fall
of Rome ...
:)

Kate Hanley said...

Great stuff. Unfortunately I did not grow up in a touchy feely family so I have trouble with it but this makes me want to try harder.

Kati patrianoceu said...

I like the switch to prose :) I can see it didn't hold back your honesty, though! Anyway, this was a good read.

Goofball said...

you can usually mark a line on your sheet when my husband and I would have walked by. I love walking hand in hand and it usually does end up in a tickle fight

Fred said...

Really like the observations in this piece. Well done, and seeing how much I like structure, I appreciate the breaks you used, especially on parallel. Enjoyed it very much, thanks:)

secret agent woman said...

Get a room - that one's made me giggle a few times, too.

lucychili said...

=)

emily wierenga said...

this is so intimate a write, brian... and so needed, for every marriage needs to remember what it's like to make love just by holding hands. beautiful.

Lolamouse said...

Bravo! Good for you and for your wanton displays of affection. So many couples turn into roommates. It's sad. Gotta keep the spark alive.

yellowhousecafe said...

Really enjoyed this read, Brian...couldn't help it as you referenced so many things that bring a smile (H&S is a fave). Thanks for the link, I visited and I am blown away by Emily's blog.
As for you, so talented...a man of the arts, indeed ~

Zouxzoux said...

Just awesome!

william said...

there is always so much to read into with your work, which makes it fascinating :)

kisatrtle said...

This just kept me reading...loved it

haikulovesongs said...

Oh, i LOVE this! holding hands is just about the most romantic thing a couple can do in my opinion. Yay! for PDAs! {smile}

martine said...

just perfect. we hold hands a lot. and still kiss on park benches after 10 years. i crave physical contact when I have been at work all day touching no one.
thanks for sharing
(following you here from Poetry Jam)
martine

Pastor Sharon said...

Well now, that's more like it!

Rebecca S. said...

Sun glinting in the glistening sheen...? I'm getting my red pen out :)
But yes, I get your point - older couples often smile at my husband and I when we walk down the street holding hands. I love to see tenderness between couples, too.

Syd said...

Everyone wants the closeness but fear drives people apart. I hope that I never lose that ability to love and be loved. It is the meaning of life.

ninotaziz said...

Ahha, here is something I don't have a problem with. I hope it stays that way.

Sometimes I wonder...will it be this way ...when I am 55, and he 44?