Thursday, June 23, 2011

55 - knowing, heaven



they play hide & seek
making me search

(wish i had an abacus
to count with)

i order them
in my head

(giving them constellation names,
cementing their positions to memory)

but if forgotten
we'll start again

(as if there really is
an end)

with each sun kiss
adding more freckles

(to be known)

heaven.

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

The picture is by Alison Jardine, who was spotlighted at One Stop Poetry earlier this week and will also be part of Friday Poetically tomorrow.

Thanks for all the well wishes for my trip. The concert was amazing, truly an experience. Will be around to see you soon.

88 comments:

Monkey Man said...

Left me smiling with this one.

KB said...

Lovely!

hedgewitch said...

Only you could write an ode to freckles and make it work as such a light and fanciful love poem. At least no old socks this time. Excellent 55--and as far as your trip,lavish U2 concert, etc. I hate you. ;_)

G-Man said...

Freckles?
(WHEW, I thought we was talking Zits)
Very Cool Pic Son...
Loved your 55.
Thanks for playing,and have a Kick Ass Week-End

lori said...

Such sweetness here, every word.

Glad you had amazing time. With U2 in the mix, it would've been impossible not to :)

Rebecca S. said...

Sweet ode to the summer freckle :) So you saw U2? Aren't they amazing in concert?

California Girl said...

I'm with hedgewitch.

Vicki Lane said...

A lovely image -- constellations of freckles!

Alice Audrey said...

Sweet and lyrical.

Me said...

I love my summertime freckles - their appearance means I'm on the right side of the door. :)

Sadly, nobody's bothered to count them before. Perhaps I need to work on that. ;)

Glad you had a great trip, BTW!
-C

Pat Hatt said...

Nice little story
All glory no gory
Glad you had a nice trip
And now back on the radar with a blip

Daniel said...

O.K., I will admit my ignorance. I did not get this one until I read some of the comments (a trick of mine when I get lost). Once I understood, the words transformed from fog to beauty within. Nice, even if I am slow.

Slamdunk said...

Good Brian. And I do confess to reminding myself what "abacus" means via Google.

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

just beautiful...
and i love to see your smile on this one

Life@Cee said...

So many wonderful memories of hide and seek as a kid. Then as a parent having my kids hide and not seeking them. I especially enjoyed the imagry of you memorizing their positions like constellations.

Enchanted Oak said...

[laughter]
It's wonderful that some physical characteristics considered by their owners to be detractions from their beauty are actually attractions for the right party.

happygirl said...

Pretty, freckles and sunshine. Everything we like about summer. :)

David Allen Waters said...

ah, all is right in blog town, you are back :)

Margaret said...

I do love the sun, but try to sit more in the shade these days... not liking the faint age spots... er, I mean freckles, laely!

Reflections said...

Lovely summer images creating their own breathtaking magic.

Magpie said...

Oh, to be so well known...freckles, warts and all. :)
Have a great weekend!

okoatokewa - the poet said...

Am not a big fan of U2...yet, but am definitely a fan of you, another great poem, there ain't many people who can include abacus in a poem and pull it off like you.

Steve E said...

I worshiped the sun
And the sun
Done me wrong
Song

Pranavam Ravikumar a.k.a. Kochuravi said...

Nice one...! I loved it.

Stranger said...

I love freckles!
This poem, with the fun relaxed summery feel and freckles, reminds me of the Jane's Addiction song, Summertime Rolls.
U2 was here last week and I only got to watch the crowds on the street lined up to get into the stadium. I envy you and your getting to see the boys live!

haikulovesongs said...

love this 55, Brian! love the image, too!

{pssst ~ you forgot to put Alison's name in the post}

Valerie said...

Heehee I like freckles on other people, not so keen on my own though.

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

"giving them constellation names,
cementing their positions to memory..."


Hi! Brian...
I love to see people with "freckles" too...because I think..."freckle-face"...Nice use Of 55 words too!

[postscript:Brian, I'm glad that you, enjoyed the concert too!]
deedee :-D

adeeyoyo said...

I love this gentle little poem about 'sun kisses', Brian!
Bwahaha @gman...

Steve Isaak said...

Excellent.

Josh Hoyt said...

I'm glad you enjoyed the concert. Great story!

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Kodjo Deynoo. said...

Great write, as always, simplified

annell said...

Nice to know heaven!

Zuzana said...

Love that image, so very sensual and evocative and escapist at the same time.;)
Perfectly complemented by your words.;)
Glad you enjoyed the trip and the concert.;)
Have a great Friday and weekend dear Brian, you know where I am headed yet again for the next two days.;))
xoxo

Katherine said...

Oh how sweet Brian, this was beautiful.. As the owner of many constellations myself, these are such lovely words to read.
In the winter months my freckles dissappear but in the summer months they come out to salute the sun. I can't get rid of them..so I just have to love them... they're here to stay!

slommler said...

The fact that you are searching for "them" speaks volumes!! Love this!
And the art piece is great!
Hugs
SueAnn

magiceye said...

this is so beautiful

TechnoBabe said...

Great picture.

I am a huge fan of freckles. Hubby was a carrot top boy and now is auburn haired freckled man. So I love his freckles. Nice writing. I will read this to him.

the walking man said...

Yes I can see myself giving names to the constellations of freckles.

Ruthiey said...

Wow, love it.

Lorraine said...

You make your own heaven and totally deserve it, how lovely

Tara Miller said...

I smile at your sweet poem here and whew...so glad you like freckles! ;)

You do make me feel special. Thanks for loving me and my freckles. <3

ayala said...

Sweetness and delight :)

DJan said...

I got sunburned Monday and this picture reminded me of how my face felt. Good story!

ScottF said...

very nice Brian :-) made me smile

Hope said...

love it! wonderful image too!

Heaven said...

Hey, that's me. ha..ha...

I never thought of this so I am amazed and delighted by your post.

Nice to see you around... I want to follow you around in the blogger world.

There are so many challenges for the week that I can hardly keep up. Might join you on this challenge next time.

Someone is Special said...

lovely brian...

Heather said...

yay for freckles! we've got lots here! lol!
great idea to give them constellation names!. glad you are back and hope you enjoyed your time away! happy friday

Help! Mama Remote... said...

Brian when you talked about hide and seek it reminded me of playing with the kids. I also interpreted it as you counting the stars.......am I close? :)

Bonnie said...

Ahhhhhhhh - sweet. Have a fabulous weekend Brian.

Louise said...

Ah, freckles...very sweet. :)

chiccoreal said...

Dear Brian: The limiting words to 55 sounds Haiku-ish! (bless you!) and I think that it is a wonderful way to give added bang for the buck! You have some great ideas and you see freckles in this prompt..ok...:) Love it!

joanny said...

Makes me wish I had freckles all over for that "special" someone in my life to count, and then to start all over again..

Lovely Brian, as always you are in top form.

joanny

Natasha said...

They move in mysterious ways! ;) Wonderful write Brian, as per the norm, and I am once again envious of your adventures...as per the norm! lol My own beauty marks come and go, much like the astral travellers through the night sky...but they've yet to travel to a U2 concert, as much as they long to! :( They're headed to New Brunswick this summer...maybe my freckles and I will as well!

JStar said...

This is a verey refreshing write Brian!

PattiKen said...

I always wished I had freckles. (I know, weird.) Your homage makes me realize why.

LauraX said...

"with each sun kiss
adding more freckles

(to be known)"


there is such a sweetness to this Brian. Thank you:-)

Akelamalu said...

Ah sunkissed skin - beautiful!

Cyn Bagley said...

with each sun kiss
adding more freckles


These lines pack a punch. ;-)

AmyLK said...

Love it. Searching for freckles in the sunshine. :)

Kerry O'Connor said...

This poem shows an angle on the picture which I did not see, and that, sir, is the art of the poet - throw open doors to the imagination, go beyond - which you do so well.

Fred said...

That was really pretty cool. I like how you broke that down. 55 words, brevity has always been a vice of mine, really good job here. The picture was great, reminds me of heat mapping, really cool:) Glad you had a good time, U2 always seems to put good shows on

yellowhousecafe said...

What a lovely 55...made me think of an old low brow movie Serendipity, where the guy traces the freckles on girls arm to form Cassiopeia (smiles) ~

Margie said...

Oh, I love this!
My son has some freckles on his nose and I still kiss those sweet freckles!

No, my son did not make it to CWS.
But, his team did well!

Margie :)

Belinda said...

Makes me wanna play connect the dots with my son's freckles. Sweet!

Betsy said...

Ah, sweet! I get them across my cheeks and nose...they'll be here until winter!

Claudia said...

isn't it beautiful when those we love never stop to change and we get to know them and the moment we think we know everything, there is another layer, the next level, more depth and we start over and over again...love that poem bri

MorningAJ said...

"each sun kiss
adding more freckles"

Wow!

tony said...

Life Is One Big Happy Hide+Seek!

Friko said...

freckles as constellations, that's brilliant.

Ed Pilolla said...

i have always thought freckles were pretty, too, and could never understand how they could be viewed as anything else.

Kavita said...

Aww.. there was something very warm and relaxing about this one... :)

And I hear "concert"... whose? where? when? Well well.. never mind the answers to my prying questions.. just HAVE FUN!!! :)

Mama Zen said...

This is lovely!

Patricia said...

nothing is better than counting those freckles as they are falling asleep. Adorable. Heading to the U2 concert in MI this Sunday... been waiting a long time for this one! Glad to hear it's a great show... but what else would I expect?
p.s. maybe you missed those comments from 'anonymous'?

C Rose said...

Such a sweet take on the prompt! And I am glad you had a wonderful trip, US is amazing! Great write as always Brian (oh and yes I have plenty of Ambrosia for everyone!) ~ Rose

thoughtsofapatcheduptraveler said...

freckles :) This is wonderful. I love the naming of constellations and the starting over. It brings a sense of intimacy and forever to the poem. Thanks for the smile.

Beth

Laura Lynn said...

I love this poem!

....(giving them constellation names,
cementing their positions to memory)

love it!

Patricia said...

I was referring to and giving you a heads up regarding those harsh comments from 'anonymous' that have now been deleted. I knew they didn't belong on your site.
(excited for U2... there's a little rock star in all of us, eh?)

mark said...

Reading this, I was reminded of something I saw on the tube some time ago, where the Leading Man says to his Lady Love at the end of the show (whatever it was), "C'mon, Kid. Let's go home and play connect the dots on your freckles..."

A lovely paean to freckles..

Leo said...

I have one too many freckles I think! :D Loved this take, Brian!

Olivia said...

oooooooh!!!!
You got me with this one Brian.......
wide eyed hugs xoxo

Victoria said...

Ha! Wait till you're my age. Only we call them age spots. I have the big dipper and an equilateral cross on my left hand. Symbolic, huh?

trisha said...

good one brian :)

Goofball said...

:)

Lolamouse said...

My husband does this with all of my freckles! Now he'll have to start doing it with all of my age spots too!