they play hide & seek
making me search
(wish i had an abacus
to count with)
i order them
in my head
(giving them constellation names,
cementing their positions to memory)
but if forgotten
we'll start again
(as if there really is
an end)
with each sun kiss
adding more freckles
(to be known)
heaven.
Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.
The picture is by Alison Jardine, who was spotlighted at One Stop Poetry earlier this week and will also be part of Friday Poetically tomorrow.
Thanks for all the well wishes for my trip. The concert was amazing, truly an experience. Will be around to see you soon.
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Left me smiling with this one.
Lovely!
Only you could write an ode to freckles and make it work as such a light and fanciful love poem. At least no old socks this time. Excellent 55--and as far as your trip,lavish U2 concert, etc. I hate you. ;_)
Freckles?
(WHEW, I thought we was talking Zits)
Very Cool Pic Son...
Loved your 55.
Thanks for playing,and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Such sweetness here, every word.
Glad you had amazing time. With U2 in the mix, it would've been impossible not to :)
Sweet ode to the summer freckle :) So you saw U2? Aren't they amazing in concert?
I'm with hedgewitch.
A lovely image -- constellations of freckles!
Sweet and lyrical.
I love my summertime freckles - their appearance means I'm on the right side of the door. :)
Sadly, nobody's bothered to count them before. Perhaps I need to work on that. ;)
Glad you had a great trip, BTW!
-C
Nice little story
All glory no gory
Glad you had a nice trip
And now back on the radar with a blip
O.K., I will admit my ignorance. I did not get this one until I read some of the comments (a trick of mine when I get lost). Once I understood, the words transformed from fog to beauty within. Nice, even if I am slow.
Good Brian. And I do confess to reminding myself what "abacus" means via Google.
just beautiful...
and i love to see your smile on this one
So many wonderful memories of hide and seek as a kid. Then as a parent having my kids hide and not seeking them. I especially enjoyed the imagry of you memorizing their positions like constellations.
[laughter]
It's wonderful that some physical characteristics considered by their owners to be detractions from their beauty are actually attractions for the right party.
Pretty, freckles and sunshine. Everything we like about summer. :)
ah, all is right in blog town, you are back :)
I do love the sun, but try to sit more in the shade these days... not liking the faint age spots... er, I mean freckles, laely!
Lovely summer images creating their own breathtaking magic.
Oh, to be so well known...freckles, warts and all. :)
Have a great weekend!
Am not a big fan of U2...yet, but am definitely a fan of you, another great poem, there ain't many people who can include abacus in a poem and pull it off like you.
I worshiped the sun
And the sun
Done me wrong
Song
Nice one...! I loved it.
I love freckles!
This poem, with the fun relaxed summery feel and freckles, reminds me of the Jane's Addiction song, Summertime Rolls.
U2 was here last week and I only got to watch the crowds on the street lined up to get into the stadium. I envy you and your getting to see the boys live!
love this 55, Brian! love the image, too!
{pssst ~ you forgot to put Alison's name in the post}
Heehee I like freckles on other people, not so keen on my own though.
"giving them constellation names,
cementing their positions to memory..."
Hi! Brian...
I love to see people with "freckles" too...because I think..."freckle-face"...Nice use Of 55 words too!
[postscript:Brian, I'm glad that you, enjoyed the concert too!]
deedee :-D
I love this gentle little poem about 'sun kisses', Brian!
Bwahaha @gman...
Excellent.
I'm glad you enjoyed the concert. Great story!
Great write, as always, simplified
Nice to know heaven!
Love that image, so very sensual and evocative and escapist at the same time.;)
Perfectly complemented by your words.;)
Glad you enjoyed the trip and the concert.;)
Have a great Friday and weekend dear Brian, you know where I am headed yet again for the next two days.;))
xoxo
Oh how sweet Brian, this was beautiful.. As the owner of many constellations myself, these are such lovely words to read.
In the winter months my freckles dissappear but in the summer months they come out to salute the sun. I can't get rid of them..so I just have to love them... they're here to stay!
The fact that you are searching for "them" speaks volumes!! Love this!
And the art piece is great!
Hugs
SueAnn
this is so beautiful
Great picture.
I am a huge fan of freckles. Hubby was a carrot top boy and now is auburn haired freckled man. So I love his freckles. Nice writing. I will read this to him.
Yes I can see myself giving names to the constellations of freckles.
Wow, love it.
You make your own heaven and totally deserve it, how lovely
I smile at your sweet poem here and whew...so glad you like freckles! ;)
You do make me feel special. Thanks for loving me and my freckles. <3
Sweetness and delight :)
I got sunburned Monday and this picture reminded me of how my face felt. Good story!
very nice Brian :-) made me smile
love it! wonderful image too!
Hey, that's me. ha..ha...
I never thought of this so I am amazed and delighted by your post.
Nice to see you around... I want to follow you around in the blogger world.
There are so many challenges for the week that I can hardly keep up. Might join you on this challenge next time.
lovely brian...
yay for freckles! we've got lots here! lol!
great idea to give them constellation names!. glad you are back and hope you enjoyed your time away! happy friday
Brian when you talked about hide and seek it reminded me of playing with the kids. I also interpreted it as you counting the stars.......am I close? :)
Ahhhhhhhh - sweet. Have a fabulous weekend Brian.
Ah, freckles...very sweet. :)
Dear Brian: The limiting words to 55 sounds Haiku-ish! (bless you!) and I think that it is a wonderful way to give added bang for the buck! You have some great ideas and you see freckles in this prompt..ok...:) Love it!
Makes me wish I had freckles all over for that "special" someone in my life to count, and then to start all over again..
Lovely Brian, as always you are in top form.
joanny
They move in mysterious ways! ;) Wonderful write Brian, as per the norm, and I am once again envious of your adventures...as per the norm! lol My own beauty marks come and go, much like the astral travellers through the night sky...but they've yet to travel to a U2 concert, as much as they long to! :( They're headed to New Brunswick this summer...maybe my freckles and I will as well!
This is a verey refreshing write Brian!
I always wished I had freckles. (I know, weird.) Your homage makes me realize why.
"with each sun kiss
adding more freckles
(to be known)"
there is such a sweetness to this Brian. Thank you:-)
Ah sunkissed skin - beautiful!
with each sun kiss
adding more freckles
These lines pack a punch. ;-)
Love it. Searching for freckles in the sunshine. :)
This poem shows an angle on the picture which I did not see, and that, sir, is the art of the poet - throw open doors to the imagination, go beyond - which you do so well.
That was really pretty cool. I like how you broke that down. 55 words, brevity has always been a vice of mine, really good job here. The picture was great, reminds me of heat mapping, really cool:) Glad you had a good time, U2 always seems to put good shows on
What a lovely 55...made me think of an old low brow movie Serendipity, where the guy traces the freckles on girls arm to form Cassiopeia (smiles) ~
Oh, I love this!
My son has some freckles on his nose and I still kiss those sweet freckles!
No, my son did not make it to CWS.
But, his team did well!
Margie :)
Makes me wanna play connect the dots with my son's freckles. Sweet!
Ah, sweet! I get them across my cheeks and nose...they'll be here until winter!
isn't it beautiful when those we love never stop to change and we get to know them and the moment we think we know everything, there is another layer, the next level, more depth and we start over and over again...love that poem bri
"each sun kiss
adding more freckles"
Wow!
Life Is One Big Happy Hide+Seek!
freckles as constellations, that's brilliant.
i have always thought freckles were pretty, too, and could never understand how they could be viewed as anything else.
Aww.. there was something very warm and relaxing about this one... :)
And I hear "concert"... whose? where? when? Well well.. never mind the answers to my prying questions.. just HAVE FUN!!! :)
This is lovely!
nothing is better than counting those freckles as they are falling asleep. Adorable. Heading to the U2 concert in MI this Sunday... been waiting a long time for this one! Glad to hear it's a great show... but what else would I expect?
p.s. maybe you missed those comments from 'anonymous'?
Such a sweet take on the prompt! And I am glad you had a wonderful trip, US is amazing! Great write as always Brian (oh and yes I have plenty of Ambrosia for everyone!) ~ Rose
freckles :) This is wonderful. I love the naming of constellations and the starting over. It brings a sense of intimacy and forever to the poem. Thanks for the smile.
Beth
I love this poem!
....(giving them constellation names,
cementing their positions to memory)
love it!
I was referring to and giving you a heads up regarding those harsh comments from 'anonymous' that have now been deleted. I knew they didn't belong on your site.
(excited for U2... there's a little rock star in all of us, eh?)
Reading this, I was reminded of something I saw on the tube some time ago, where the Leading Man says to his Lady Love at the end of the show (whatever it was), "C'mon, Kid. Let's go home and play connect the dots on your freckles..."
A lovely paean to freckles..
I have one too many freckles I think! :D Loved this take, Brian!
oooooooh!!!!
You got me with this one Brian.......
wide eyed hugs xoxo
Ha! Wait till you're my age. Only we call them age spots. I have the big dipper and an equilateral cross on my left hand. Symbolic, huh?
good one brian :)
:)
My husband does this with all of my freckles! Now he'll have to start doing it with all of my age spots too!
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