One day,
I had chicken, fish and jelly
for breakfast.
It was good.
People were on the road
when I was on a walk.
I walked to Texas,
where I was eaten
by a gorilla.
I cut off his tush
and got out.
I ran all the
way home
and milked the cow.
The End.
Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see G-man.
This was written by my son Logan, who is eight, and hopes to be an actor, some day. When asked why he responded, "Because they meet lots of girls." Yes, I will have my hands full, soon enough.
Tomorrow, at Friday Poetically, we will be celebrating the writing of children & youth.
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Love his adventurous imagination! Oh, boy! You are going to have fun with that one. :)
sounds like Logan has it all worked out :) Brilliant.
Girls are a pain in the ass. I know I've worked hard to be.
Poor gorilla!
OMG! I would have been first if Blogger didn't black out on me! Brian...this is adorable! The poor little ladies with the broken hearts will be hurting more than you I think. Did I catch a hint of pride in those statements! :)
Logan's got a talent for spinning tales! That poor gorilla hadn't a chance, did he? :)
I thought the quality of writing on this blog suddenly went way up. Oh, Brian didn't write this. Ahhh. (Smiles) Nice piece.
"Ha Ha", Nelson Mandela Muntz
That was too cute. Your son writes on my level of understanding! lol
Logan, This is awesome! Of course, I never would have thought to cut his tush off to get out. Excellent idea :) And, good luck with your acting career, little man! I have no doubt you'll get wherever you want to go, especially after getting a glimpse into your creative world. Thanks for sharing with us :)
Stop feeding the boy fish and jelly for breakfast and he may back down from these violent fantasies--though I find it rather perceptive of him to populate Texas with gorillas. Talent obviously runs rampant in your genetic fields.
Congrats Logan, this is a cool 55.
I prefer cutting my gorillas off a the knees :) Great job Logan!
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I like Logan's style.
=)
PS. Now, correct me if I'm wrong...Was he the one diving for rings the other day???
This is awesome, Logan!
He did good! I really like it. He writes poetry better than I could ever, and I don't want to say how much older than he I am :-)
Oh my gosh, they grow up so fast! Hey, my nephew wants to be an actor. He is now 26. Just make sure that Logan knows how to take food orders. LOL. Love the poem!
That was a fun post ~
I should ask my daughter to do one for me ~
Thanks ~
Imagine the poem material he will provide for you!!!
Logan, I thoroughly enjoyed your crazy day poem! :)
haha very colorful cast of characters in use
The poor gorilla should cry abuse
I'll reframe from saying other issues about coming out the behind
And keep them in my mind..lol
Good reason to be an actor too
Although I wouldn't want to do some of the things they have to do
But lots of $$$ as well
The women will come running with a whisper or a yell
so he told the story from the belly of the gorilla? hehehe. i just love the imagination kids have. so much fun. and uh, good luck when the girls find him.
Aww I love children and their world - got another story teller
Thanks Bri for offering to post don't know why it was late :)
Logan...
Young Man, Your 55 was Perfect!
A central character, a plot, and EXACTLY 55 words!
You should give lessons.
I see the apple don't far from the tree....
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Yay Logan. Butt monkey, butt gorilla, all the same to me. Gotta love'em.
The girls are going to fall for his story telling, for sure!
this is the best poem/story i have read in a very long time.
and...yes, you are. :-)
That is completely awesome. I can just hear it now... "And the academy award for comedy goes to...!"
I think he has his father's gift of storytelling :)
So funny! He's got quite the imagination, and I feel the pain of what you are going to be going through. Been there; done that!
The apple doesn't fall far from the tree, does it Brian. Tell Logan, this is a great 55!!!
ha..love it !
This one cracks me up! Hope you'll get to share some of the other stories he wrote in his school journal. I thought they were very good and very much out of the box....just like his daddy's writing. ;)
So cute. Now if that's not an eight year old boy's imagination!
Oh my gosh! A mini me. . . of you!
How funny!
your blog is definitely adventerous :) thank you for stopping by.
I am now following you
Rainbow
Poor Gorilla - hope he wasn't family. But I guess he never should have eaten Logan to being with.
Great 55, Logan.
Logan, that was awesome! Now that's an adventure!
riotous 55!
loved it!
Ha!!!! I love the "girls" response. He has a way with words-- like his dad. Maybe he'll end up a writer AND an actor and be a double threat in Hollywood.
Hope everything is good with you Brian. I'm off to catch up on your other posts.
Happy weekend, jj
Great 55!
Tell you son that he will not only meet lots of girls, but he will have many to pick from.
I went to a performing arts high school for acting in 10th grade. It was heaven and for a 15 year old girl discovering her sudden sexuality, it was beautiful torture. I'd not trade those experiences for anything. Best time of my life even if that's where I learned I might be a gay man trapped in a woman's body. *sigh*
nice, Logan!
Aloha from Waikiki :)
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I loved this, just tell it like it is. have a great weekend Brian.
Great write...! Salute for the imagination.
Milked the cow, moo says the cow..I enjoyed the innocence and the fun in reading this poem
yep! you're gonna be in BIG trouble, dad! have fun! it was a great poem!
dani
What a wonderful imagination Logan has. I can see you're faced with competition, Brian.
well obviously talent is rampant in your family...it is essential to get out of a gorilla ASAP atta boy Logan!
/me giggles at hedgewitch's comment
Logan is all male. And my breakfasts have looked something like that too.
What an awesome 55, Logan! I'm tickled by the thought of making a getaway by cutting a gorilla's tush.
What a great way to escape from a gorilla! Clever lad.
Only an 8-year old boy would enjoy such a crazy day breakfast!! Love your 55 Logan ~ a budding career in writing, no doubt acting and quite possibly driving your parents a little nuts with your active imagination.
P.S. Enjoy these "quiet" years Brian ~ they get louder!!
Here's mine: Friday Flash 55 ~ Repeat Echo
That was some breakfast!
Kids, the greatest source of laughter and inspiration.
This is so G-man-ish!!!
lolsss
Now you take classes on how to rip open a giant gorilla.. hahahaha!!
A perfect children story!
Weekend Hugs xoxox
Jelly? Lovely 55
Mine is up too.
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some days you eat the jelly other days the gorilla eats you but every day the cows have to be milked, Verrra fun read Brian.
Great poem. I wish him luck as an actor but at least he'll have poetry to fall back on.
Hi! Brian and Logan...
Nice use Of 55 words...today and now you can go outside and play.
Oh! by the way, I'm quite sure that you will become an actor one day... Logan Miller.
[Postscript: Brian,I must admit after reading the title I thought that this poem was going to be dedicated to your son, Logan.]
Thanks, for sharing!
deedee ;-D
:-) That kid's going to be a lot of fun!
Pearl
Oh! Your son takes after his father. Incredibly creative. I loved the imaginary trip that he took me on. Please tell Logan "Well done"
Beth
hedge, we laughed at your comment last night...and again this morning with logan...too funny...
with all this encouragement we are surely in for trouble...
Adorable! A young blood with miles of imagination.
So sweet... I love:
I walked to Texas,
where I was eaten
by a gorilla.
(Hey, I live in TX)
Amazing how innocent we once were - and anything was possible!
I love this one, Brian, what fun. I'll have to wait until my sweet teen awakens to give this a go.
Logan,
You wrote a great story. Very imaginative.
Thank you for sharing it.
Good luck meeting girls.
Logan,
I like how your brain works! It sounded like a twist on Jonah and the whale... Logan and the Gorilla!
Thank you for your story... you made me smile =)
When I was reading this I thought that it was yours! The apple doesn't fall far from the tree does it Brian! You have taught him well. Or maybe he has taught you well. They always say to "think like a child". And that "lady" comment...brilliant!
Dear Logan,
You tell that daddy of yours that one day you will be the best actor in all the world ... and yes it's a great way to get girls!
That's awesome!
Talent runs in the family :) Good imagination.
this is a great 55! Way to go Logan!
"I cut off his tush and got out" - now that's imagination!
Logan's got talent!!!
Hi Brian,
Logan may or may not become an actor but surely he will be a creative artist and a wonderful writer. His imagination is fascinating.
Best wishes,
Joseph
He's on his way.
It's in the genes, and starting so early so wonderfully! Logan should know he's got 77, with this, medals for this poem! Thanks for sharing this poem, Brian!
Oh, this is full of such imagination! Wonderful job by Logan, age 8! Keep your imagination sharp. I've no doubt you'll figure out a way to get away from any gorillas that you may come across! :)
Logan, you are such an imaginative thinker. A lot like your Dad.
Brian, good luck. I hava a feeling the girls will be around sooner than you expect.
Loved this!
Logan is eight, gosh, so talented with his writing.
Hope you post more of his writings.
Proud dad, I'm sure!
Margie :)
Logan's got his daddy's talent...yeah!
I feel for you on the little lady's man. Mine is 16 now and has already run through six girlfriends. That I know of.
Hahaha - great escape!
BWAHAHAHAHAH!!! Seems like quite an adventure he had!! GOOD FOR HIM!!! :))
And he sure knows hows to narrate them too... LOVIIEEZZ!! :))
haha:) hysterical.
Oh my gosh -- LOVE IT!!!!!! So fun.
Logan has talent to spare!
xoxo
LOL, enjoyed this muchly. Inspired stuff.
Looks like Logan has his daddy's charm and talent
Your son is a lot of fun. I'd like to have this kid in my class.
Okay, did Logan really say, 'tush?' Some boys just really love girls - I think yours is one of them :)
Seems to me a lot of fun.
Gorilla's are scary sometimes! Thanks Logan.
totally loved this one !!! :)
Hope to read more of his words ;)
hey logan, enjoyed your poem...chicken, fish and jelly sounds like the perfect breakfast to me...smiles
Fruit doesn't fall far regarding cleverness, ha! What a boy you've on your hands. Tell him his story was much enjoyed ~
He has the imagination. Cut off his tush--LOL.
That's adorable.. and just be grateful that he's not a daughter anxious to meet the guys. ;)
What an imagination! Now where could he have gotten that?
Absolutely cool. Loved this! Your son has quite the imagination.
especially the fish, chicken and jelly for breakfast is really crazy. hahahahaaa
Glad I had the opportunity to read the original by the author, Logan, last weekend. Thanks for sharing his writing with the world.
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