a mare can dream
fruited planes & fields of
way found but lost be,
hind tit fed bros starving 2 death,
jimi playz en-flames
& purple haze d-sends
a mare can dream
Ok, I got a little thick in the word play in my 160 characters that Monkey allows us. A little a-mare-can social commentary on the improving economic conditions.
The picture is by Adam Romanowicz, who is featured today as part of One Shoot Sunday over at One Stop Poetry.
Posts
74 comments:
Is a dreaming mare like a Phillie at bat?
Aloha from Waikiki :)
Comfort Spiral
><}}(°>
><}}(°>
<°)}}><
Oh my my!!!
Brian, you did it again- din't ya?
A very wise message conveyed indeed..
Sunday Hugs xox
GOOD 160, Brian. We a mare cans dream...but not always the same scenario....PEACE!
MY 160
Cool sound to the lines, Brian ... purple haze props to you for a rockin' 160.
Your ampersands got carried away, but you didn't. Rock on with any Jimi reference you want. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160, B.
Did you know that
"Mairzy doats..."
You amazing me with words.
I think you're kind of like the master of word play. This is really cool. American dreams are not what they once were anymore. I could picture Hendrix bringing it, though.
:)
The title made me laugh. I like dreaming too but its time make some of these dreams into reality.
I love the photo, Brian. I am a bit lost in this write though. Maybe I should be American to understand it? American dream of plenty, but brothers starving to death? Jimi Hendrix inflames with his songs...?? Purple haze - drugs?
i have to start checking your posts before i select a photograph ~ whatever you write is always so much better than mine. {sigh}
your word play is stunning! great One Shoot and 160.
d
This one was tricky for me, but interesting.
Almost double Dutch to a Brit, this sneaky 160!
You are nothing short of amazing...as is the accompanying photo...
Nice one. And that photo's amazing.
Fun, whimsical stuff.
I didn't understand it, Brian, probably because I'm a thick Brit. I'll go back and try again... smiles.
Didn't much care for the Anonymous comment.
I had to read it through a few times, but I think I get it.
Kat
Very deep, needing the mind to think before accepting
not at all, I much enjoyed your "thick" word play. Would quite like some more of the same!
whew that was some challenge *smiles*
Maybe you were trying to say to share our goods and wealth around ~
I just wanted to let you know that I admire your versatility and your participation in the challenges all around the blogger world. Before the week is over, I am dizzy with all the writing ~
Happy Sunday~
valerie...i agree on anonymous...i have reported them numerous times...
Oh dear, maybe it's because I'm Canadian, but I needed the explanation at the end...or maybe I just need more coffee this morning? :)
Anyhow, then I reread, and YES. Nice one, Brian.
I like the wordplay -- keeps me searching! Yesterday's piece was powerful and disturbing and oh so sad.
Cool word play.
Happy Sunday :)
here is how my mind works (scary thought):
american dreams
fruited planes...prosperity...allusion to 'America the Beautiful'
found but lost be...
hind tit fed...a play on sucking the hind tit...getting the left overs, sold a false bill of goods...
jimi...yes lori its hendrix...who played the national anthem on guitar, also set his guitar on fire and played purple haze...
en-flames...see previous jimi reference, but double meaning of angered...
ok, way too tricky, but all in fun...rereading some sections of a book on hip hop poetics and playing a bit...
Got the Jimmy part but the mare had me stare a bit in my mind.
ha - lucky me that i'm late enough to read your explanation...i could write an essay now on "how to get lost in 160 characters.." possible? yes...smiles
but you know i love how your mind works and i love that you brought jimi hendrix in.. (did you see that the & are all displayed with html code on your post...?)
Crap I don't get it! It is American because I is welsh!
Amazing collage of words and thoughts!!
Wonderful
Hugs
SueAnn
Got to love how Blogger adds letters after the ampersand.
A mare can dream. Well yes she can. And you are clevah, Mr. Miller.
A mare can dreams live on!
Hello Brian,
The title is absolutely first class. It is brotherhood we are striving for all over the world so that everyone can live in peace and prosperity.
Lovely short poem.
Have a lovely Sunday,
Joseph
✿(ྀ.ི)Sµи∂ɑγ M☼яɳɨɳǵ мαgι¢
Great word play here today
Had to read it twice to not be one of the three blind mice
Photo was a nice shot too
Nice little hip hop feel but that you knew
whatta word play :D loved it :)
Jimi, Purple Haze -- and I'm back in high school. Cool interpertation of the photo, Brian.
Quite the interesting direction to take with this prompt, I really enjoyed it and the wordplay sings! ~ Rose
well i guess a phillie at bat would be a baseball player and a filly at bat would be a mare's first season; the connection being that maybe they are both rookies...i'm lost...but it's too early to drink and too late to write prose...i have to decide whether to read Dave King or go to Heaven LOL
an a mazing piece my friend... love the depth beyond your word play.
It must be pure magic inside your head :) luv this
this is cool. i like the beat! That's a beautiful photo, too.
have a good sunday....still doing a whole lot of nothing here! :)
The 'hind-tit' reminds me so much of my grandma - one of her favourite sayings, it was :)
I always stand amazed at what you can conjure out of a picture and so few words. Marvellous work.
A few letters, but a lot behind them today.
Had to read that one about three times...really pretty brilliant with the 160 Brian.
Random tid bit...Purple Haze is one of my ALL TIME favs...absolutely LOVE it. The way I was raised? My parents thought I had had gone PSYCHO and would surely burn!!
"fruited planes & fields of
way found but lost be, "
love the way these words read outloud, and your double entrende is quite witty..
another good one from your pen!!
From title 'til end the word play delights. jimi!!
I like that a mare is female. This makes me think of all the struggling single mothers in America. They can sure use a dream, too.
Nice piece. I liked it just as it was, but after reading your detailed breakdown here in the comments, I appreciate it that much more. Love the though process and how you can see it all connecting in so few words, wonderful write:)
PRECIOSO BLOG LLENO DE POESIA ES UN HONOR EL VISITARTE SOY DE JAÉN SUR DE ESPAÑA, TENGO UN BLOG POETICO UN TANTO ESTRAÑO, SI LO VISITAS LO COMPRENDERAS. TE DESEO UNA FELIZ SEMANA
after reading your explanation, I can now go, "Ahh!" (nodding my head)
Great word work and interesting POV. It read very kool. And I imagine jimmy is playin' in hell.
Gorgeous photo and the 160 was amazing!
How you do this every day amazes me!
Talented writer, beyond words!
Margie :)
Clever, Brian.
Oh my!
This was a laugh.
It is really different when you break it down like that. Interesting and a fun little ditty.
Personally loved the word play. Re: your comment on my blog...your writing demonstrates that you show daily to write. I love what happens in early morning and even in the middle of the night, sleep-deprived as I am. Couldn't let go of an idea last night till I hauled my weary butt out of bed and put it to paper. lol
ah, you had me at a mare can dream...good piece Brian.
My brain is all squiggly now. :-D Thanks for the theme for the poetry wagon this week, too. Off to de-squigify.
Namaste
Clever and short. It was a #Like
Nice, Brian!
I got it!!!!!and I agree with your way of thinking. Sometimes you are able to say exactly how I feel.
....:-)Hugs
Makes me want to whinny the pledge of allegiance!
;)
It's fun to read your poetry but also really fun to read the comments. I love Cloudia's "fish" with just symbols. Who would have thought that could be done! And Farmlady saying Mairzy Doats made me laugh. I'm sure it was a play-on-words for her too, menaing Mares eats oats! What great stuff out there. And that word "squiggy". Classic!
You and Jimi be rockin, indeed...to freakin' clever
"a mare can dream" dang, nice ~
can the mare dream at night?
You did just fine...
Heck..you're awesome!
Impressed...
Possibly third or fourth read and finally got it! Not a simple short piece but an intriguing, intricate piece, Brian. Intriguing because of the mare's dream (I did get the 'fruited plains' on first read, quite brilliant how you used it) and intricate because of the layers in it, layers of symbols and mores. Ergo, a powerful poem! Thanks for the experience!
This mare can dream has a good chance of becoming a chinese takeout. *I'm scared.
what is "a mare"?
Funny word play but a serious message. And Purple Haze is always cool.
I am dreaming too. No mare here.
Thanks for the mention, original photo found at http://3scape.com
-Adam
Post a Comment