when was the last time you had sex
no i don't mean that
placating poke you give monthly
just to keep the coals warm
and check the vital signs
of the body laying next to you
i could get more life
from a blow up doll
this guy, sitting across the table,
butt numbing as he settles in the booth,
causing him to fidget something fierce
or maybe its my question
you don't understand, my wife she just
doesn't, she hasn't, i tried, it's
just that, he keeps adding layers
to his story as he explains his woes,
like someone let the air out of his
manhood and he's miles from
a gas station with one of those
quarter inflation machines
without change
really? he nods, it just doesn't seem fair
now does it? he nods more vigorous,
considering all that you do to
make her feel special, and a queer
look starts around the tick of his eye,
when was the last time you did the dishes?
gave her a back rub without intention, much
less her feet, brought her flowers
at work, not on a holiday or special occasion
but because it was raining, kissed her
like you were dying, sang her favorite song
off key, left a love note laying, not lying
or chased her around the house just to embrace
or whisper
dishes, really? oh yeah, hands dish panned
for her pleasure, guaranteed and he looks
at me all serious, screws his eyes into
intensity, fingers drumming on the thick
varnished wood and says,
but you don't understand
so i say, how about them Lakers,
which perks him right up, lips flying
about the ejections and...but i am
hear nothing, cause i do...
i do understand, and start
sketching on a napkin something,
tonight, i will leave on your pillow.
When all else fails, drop it poetically, it's what all the cool kids do...or at least they do at One Shot Wednesday...so what is stopping you...go, write, visit...and do it poetically. Doors open at 5 pm EST Tuesday.
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it really is all about the intentions, isn't it...another good one man :)
... I may just have to go out and snag me a man!
A truly romantic soul you....
You are a wise husband, my friend. And (I'm willing to bet) a happy one!
;)
Growing up up with such a good example,your boys will have very lucky wives someday.
LOVE this. I wish more men did things "just because." Great story (as always).
Lovely post. Now if I only had someone to do the dishes with and for ....
oh yes, it's totally the little things that make us girls swoon for our men....this is sweet and so romantic!
If only more men understood the power of the back rub without intention!
God has blessed your wife abudently......and may you both continue to have many happy years together. And thanks for the reminder that it's so many of the little things that really count....
i'm going to run all my dates past you before getting serious with any of them.
Sigh. I echo Sue and Cathleen's sentiments on this one. When you publish your poetry book I want an autographed copy, okay...then I shall read aloud to my husband when the day is done...
corinna, that might be a future occupation of mine...i can screen them, re educate them as needed...ha
A captivating poem full of nuanced and acute observation informed by experience. I enjoyed this Brian. Thanks for sharing.
This should be included in marriage manuals!
Happy wife=happy marriage.
I love that you understand Brian. You constantly make me smile my friend.
And remind me to only settle for the best. <3
K
I hope that what he sketches and places on her pillow gives him an evening of deep intimacy.
It is all intentions - in everything...if sex or prayer are not done blessed with intention...nothing can ever change or be true to itself...nice writing Brian...bkm
I'm so glad I can honestly say my husband is the most romantic guy I know. Not only does he do the dishes, but he cooks. Wish more guys would realize what is interpreted as sexy by women. I love how you express this relationship dynamic.
I'm really hoping that first line is rhetorical... otherwise, "how about them Lakers!" lol Very creative write, Brian. Intricate, as well as suggestive with cool flow.
you probably solved the mystery of having good sex in relationships....off to do the dishes and kiss him like i'm dying...smiles
Yep, the 'without intentions' part is the biggie...
Everyone up here in Nor Cal is pretty happy about the Lakers' demise (generally speaking). Not the transplants, but the natives (just taking the lead from Dusts who had a VERY funny comment, by the way).
I like that opening stanza a lot! It was a perfect way to draw the line.
....oh it really is about the connection, the intention:) Well done!
You mean men actually do stuff like the dishes? You learn something new ever day. ;)
Seriously though, your wife is one lucky woman. There aren't many like you around.
OK first off, I was like.....((whhhaaA????? He just wrote that?!))) LOL Good points, though. One question, what do you tell those who have done those things for their spouse and still don't get the sex?! Sorry....have a friend here where I live who did all of that and their marriage still ended. Then again....maybe I'm reading more into this poem....ok...done babbling now. LOL
I like the idea of a back massage with no intentions!
Maggie X
Nuts in May
I wish I knew what you wrote there. Lucky she is to have you, man.:-)
Sweet sensitive One!
woot...totally unrelated stuff...but my oldest son (8) just got invited to the casting call for the new Spielburg movie about Lincoln to try for the part as Lincoln's son Tad...
Do you want my husband's email? Or how about his phone number? You ROCK, man! Did I tell you that I love you? I did? Oh. Never mind.
No bond, no attraction. No attraction, lots of headaches. Love is giving, not forever withdrawing from a magically refilling account where the check never bounces. Fine poem that dives right into the heart of things.
Very interesting poem, like the intentions and "just because" relationships are about give more than take. (As long as each person gives instead of one giving and one only taking)
Yep, it's the little things that count.
I'd like to make it clear this wasn't the reason for my divorce! Oh trust me to joke about it, but you've written here what happens all to easily in a long term relationship, the dishes take priority. The honesty here reminds me of a Woody Allen film, now where's my foot rub?
Much easier having a dishwasher. Makes the transactions easier to calculate!
Oh Brian! Just incredible!Nuff said!
What I wouldn't give for just a bit of warm up! Perhaps the day or week before :) Not sure how hubby would feel about a poetic rant on such a topic, so I should probably limit my comment to form and structure, right? Again, you have taken what is, I'm sure, more common than we'd like to admit, and turned it into an awesome write. Oh damn! I hear the dishwasher! lol
so, i guess we're both thinking about depressing relationships that just aren't working. sad but truer than ever these days. some are still blessed with genuine love, and i'm thankful to be among them.
Oh for the days of paradise - they fall away so swiftly in the tedium of another not so brilliant day and then as quick as an autumn storm, it's all over and one of you is gone. Grab life by the horns, make love like there's no tomorrow..because there isn't always a tomorrow. Brilliant piece of work, Brian, as always. Gay
Hard won wisdom from a guy who shares his love poems. And I've asked ya, so I kow you share them with your wife. If, I ever have a husband and if, he ever needs this advice, I'll send him over to you and request that he not discuss the Lakers ;)
its the little things that do count ....not that I don't like the grand gestures too. think every happy marriage knows the truth. well put thank you
Good work Brian! For those who are younger I will say this...my wife and I will celebrate our thirty year anniversary later this month and it only gets better!
Great written ejaculation my friend!
You are a brilliant man Brian....this is a wise lesson in the karma of a relationship. :-)
So many seem to linger on what their partner does not do rather than what they themselves do not do, the little things mean so much. Great write Brian.
Anita.
Wife appreciation is good. With notes on the pillow especially.
As always your architecture and design is clever and designed to poetic beauty. I loved it, so many people stand there, when the cure is so small, and the prevention only an ounce...I'm glad you made a note ;) ~ Rose
hahaha the love doctor is in it seems
Sure gave the lazy bones some reams
Maybe you should write a book
Giving all the ummmm once a month guys a place to look
Right now no need for me to worry about that though
As a cat those things one don't need to show..lol
If women suspect something is done with the expectation for something more, forget about it. You get paid when you work for free.
Rollicking piece, threatens to careen of the track, but never does. Wry, knowing, funny work.
Very nicely done...
Ah, Brian, you are so wise. And the other guy? Well, he's typical.
Oh, baby, you had me at the first line. LOL. I thought the wind was blowing. It was just the collective sigh of all the women out here reading WaystationOne today. :-)
A romantic and enlightening piece... thanks!
I know a pope who speaks of self donation. Now, I know a poet who understands and brings it to life.
are you SURE you weren't a woman in some former life, Brian? Because you understand..completely!! What a great piece of writing!
I never ever leave here unsatisfied - that was a masterpiece :)
smiles...Brian,sounds like you run a happy home. It is all about the intention....such as wanting to do the dishes...smart man!
Great poem Brian, you obviously 'get it' that it's all about setting the scene - a home filled with an atmosphere of sacrifice, fun and love in small ways as well as great.
I enjoyed this, made me smile and wonder uhm. I will take a look at my calendar to confirm when (smh)
Thanks for the visit, much appreciated :)
Yes, yes, yes. I DO the dishes. Always. But that just don't DO it! Flowers? Because it's raining?
So, "Here's some flowers. Ya don't need to water them, cause it's been raining--snort!"
PEACE!
Back rub....mmmmmm
whoa, that was great!
Very good. It is the little things that make the special things special. Great write.
Ahhhhh, he is missing out. Those mad chases around the house -- ust watch out for chair legs in the dining room. Poor Jim has ended up with stubbed toes on a couple occasions.
EXCELLENT poem!!
xo
Laughing...hey Brian, you sound like you took a page out of my book!
I have to say...it works for me everytime...but you forgot to mention the painted toes!!!
Excellent writing, my friend.
Interesting to see how many are missing that playful spontaneity that once existed. Would say you quite nailed it with this one!! Nice to see it put into words! Definitely a lesson here to those who might be open to listen!!
Oh yes, the little things speak volumes to our heart - as well as knowing one another's love language....and you speak mine well my love with the spontaneous tender kisses, love and affection.
The chase is always fun too....;)
LOVE! Your wife is a lucky woman but I am pretty sure you are too. It's awesome to read things like this in a world that jumps from one relationship to the next once the going gets tough. So thankful I got this chance to stop by and say hello and be blessed by your words. XX
Only goes to prove that romance lies in little things like notes left on the pillow. Beautiful! :)
It's the little things that make a happy wife! Love this!
the 'little things' are HUGE!
Aloha from Waikiki
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I've only been reading your poetry for a few days but how I love what you write!
Such a romantic you are!
Wonderful poem!
Lucky, lucky girl. I bet she rewards you well.
...with no intentions. Hmm. And dishpan hands.
Did you mention clean toilets? That is a real winner for me. Really enjoyed this! :)
awesome awesome awesome!! Spoken like a true gentleman, Bri! One who "understands" :)
"left a love note laying, not lying" -- I totally LOVED that line...has an amazing depth to it!
Amen- you have really hit the nail on the head here!
There is so much wisdom in this poem that my head...oh no...my head--
*headexplode*
"so i say, how about them Lakers,
which perks him right up"
...made me chuckle. Excellent poem. :D
'gave her a back rub without intention, much less her feet, brought her flowers
at work, but because it was raining, kissed her like you were dying, sang her favorite song off key, left a love note laying, not lying or chased her around the house just to embrace
or whisper' i do not know how many times i read your poem, have to read these particular lines to my husband. Thanks for the beautiful poem, feels like you have written what many women desire from their spouses. Radhika
You tucked some sound advice in this poem, Brian. Too often men just don't get it.
Brian you nailed some of the ways that a woman's attraction slips FOREVER away at the hands of a selfish man. Bravo.
Ha..this was a great Brian.
And yes,sex starts waaayyy before
the act..Well,the good and meaningful
sex does anyways.
Lucky girl! Love this piece, full of surprises and rhythm. Well done Brian :)
youre crafting good fortune
with small treasures =)
damn...you've one lucky wife (smiles)...my favorite line
"left a love note laying, not lying" absolutely...excellent write ~
(btw, saw tweet about your son...sweet!)
Great Brian
This should be written as a manual
Poetic one of course,,,
Moonie
Puts perfectly into words something that needs saying.
hey, you been reading my journal again??????
I always say, there ain't no mojo if the affection is absent during the day,
Di
oh popeye, you are so romantical...
Excellent poem and you know I really hate football season but I can put up with it cos my hubby will do the dishes, he will cook me dinner, the back rub??? But you can't have everything. If anything your words have made me realise how lucky I am! Great write!
Yeh, all that - and buy her a bag of fish and chips every so often. Sure keeps em happy.
Yes, forming a relatonship is definitely a two-way deal.
I though of sending this to my other half, but he would say 'I don't do poetry', and my answer would be, 'but this is life, not poetry!'. Love it Brian. How wise you are.
Romance without the moon and the stars and the roses! This is real romance that lingers!
Ahh .. talk the talk? Also need to walk the walk.
Good for you Brian, good foryour lovely wife...wow doyou ever tell it like it is could be wuld be lol
No, he just doesn't understand. How much fun he could be having, teaching her and encouraging her.
the truth cuts deep sometimes...to really put another first, especially the mate of your life, always starts with willful choices and answers to the alter commitment so many years ago..."YES"
The deflation part and not having a quarter at the air pump...brilliant.
Thanks Brian, once again truth will prevail.
Nice poem! :)
perfect
felt this, in my heart.
what a wise post! you are brilliant:))
i sure will have to make my future partner read such wise lines!
kudos!
keep rocking
Two sides to every story. You've done a great job of pointing that out here. As they say, familiarity breeds contempt.
I'm never smart enough to write any worthy comments on your blog but know that I read it and I love it :)
accountability is a good thing, open minded understanding even better, the willingness to try a suggestion or two over a period of time, the best :)
sex, drugs and bacon sandwiches, that is bunk and you know it...smiles. the unworthy part...you are..we all are...smiles.
Greetings from Casa Hice. What a lovely surprise to find after all these months. So good to see you again. And wow. Just wow.
You are always right in the picture, Brian. Your description and images are perfect.
You're a smart cookie, Brian. And you've got a lucky wife. The back rub without intention comment was a doozey.
I absolutely love this! :)
now, i need to show this to my husband!
Excellent advice, in poetic form!
Think reciprocation, people. You get what you give. Simple.
My wife had a sweatshirt that summed it up nicely: "If momma ain't happy, ain't nobody happy!"
Drop it poetically...we could all learn a thing or two from you, Brian. Romantic and sweet...and you know what's a good sign? Just look how many women on these comments your words set to swooning. Oh dears. Haha. Fine work though my friend.
How about them Lakers? To some men, that's foreplay....
Brian,
Flowers for no reason and backrubs w/o intention are 2 of the best things a husband can do to make a wife happy. Happy wife, happy life!
Brilliant insights and brilliantly written, too.
So real yet romantic! Great job, Brian :-)
lovely story, lovely sentiment. it's not for naught that they say poets make the best lovers...
Oh, that one killed me.
Oh, yes, deep breaths.
Life.
Ya have an older brother, maybe? LOL! Great, Brian!
You have an older brother maybe? LOL! Great, Brian!
I'll have to admit that first line made me blush a bit, but once again clever poem full of good advice.
Very clever poem, I like it.
Thanks for sharing :)
Great story, this poem rocks
Ah, yes, you understand. Too many men don't, and then wonder what happened?
This made me ache. So much beauty, wisdom, and humility comes through your words.
We all need a kick up the arse when the complacency sets in.
It was very easy to picture the scene you describe.
Awesome !! so much full of love .. sigh !!
"o i say, how about them Lakers,
which perks him right up, lips flying..."
LOL!
Hi! Brian...
When it comes to your words in this post...
Not that I'am an expert when it comes to "advice," but I think this man should start to rethink how he treat the woman in his "life."
[Postscript:a hat-tip to the Pat Hatt]
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee :-/
I think that this may be my favorite of yours, ever. Cause and effect, baby!
I hear the men where I work talk to each other, and 95% of it is sports. I think, if that's all I ever got to talk about, I would hang myself.
I love the ending of this. I love the whole thing. And I'll wager your wife loves YOU.
Oh Brian. You get it! If this what you believe and how you act, your wife is very lucky lady and I hope she is as generous and loving towards you.
Beautiful.
Have you read the Roald Dahl story "Switch Bitch"? It's a comedy from the perspective of the less involved lover.
My favorite!!
If only more men knew this! It's so many little things that make us feel loved!
I like how you brought in the Lakers into this poem. Some guys miss all the little things but will stop the earth for a game.
I love the not having intentions part.Those are the best moments I feel in a relationship. just doing something special because. Love
Nice one. Very pragmatic words of wisdom.
What a romantic soul are you! Was this a conversation with your alter ego self?
well you were bound to get a huge response from the women with that one....
:)
Oh my! A back rub without intention? Beautiful!! Every man needs to read this, you get what a woman wants. How wonderful! You have a lucky love!! Kiss her like you're dying- sigh... We should all kiss like we're dying. Hail romance!! So glad it's not dead!!
It took me like 10 seconds (that's a long time) to scroll down through all the comments to get to where I could leave you my words of wisdom and insight. You have become famous! This one obviously struck a note with lots of people. You said it all so perfectly and still I wonder how many won't understand. Always looking for what's in it for them. :)
you understand women so well
aw, wish he would have seen the light - at least you tried...
It's always her fault when the magic fades, isn't it? Yeah, thought so.
i swear, poets are the most romantic people on earth. and being sensitive enough, tuned in enough to know that doing the dishes or cleaning the bathroom mirror or writing a love poem just for her is what she really wants, then that makes you the most romantic man she's ever known. {and vice versa of course.}
but kissing like you were dying has got to be one of THE BEST things anyone could do!
Enjoyed this one Brian.. You said it! :)
When we forget the person who we are closest too, lots of things quit happening. I am glad that I am a romantic at heart and in deeds.
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