Friday, May 6, 2011

friday poetically: neil armstrong dreams

the moon was big & full
but i will never tell

we sat in the bushes
by the road, silence
a crickets serenade,
passing cars occasion-
ally leaving spots
in our eyes, though
they never noticed us
star-gazing, dreaming
neil armstrong landings

the moon was big & full
(through your window)
but i'll never tell
(because i would surely
get in trouble)

Just a silly verse based on the prompt over at Friday Poetically. I chose the crickets to play off of and of course i would...well...ok so any way, middle school...you know...boys, i tell you...

66 comments:

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

amazing, brian
and funny cuz i just posted something on fireflies :)

love this

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

and I'm first on Waystation One ?

Nest time that'll happen is when I'm 89 :)

Betsy said...

haha...funny. Seen one, never been one. ha.

Paul C said...

Neil Armstrong landing July 20, 1969...you capture well the fascination with our generous night accomplice.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Lovely - and please don't tell!

Anna :o]

Natasha said...

Seems secrets are the order of the day, dear poet...you're always welcome to my big book of alibi's ;) Got a kick out of this one as I twisted my head around the full moon through the window...sorry, it's just a silly Friday. Loved it...as per the norm!

Sue said...

Discretion is the better part of valor, as my dad used to say...

;)

David Allen Waters said...

well, um, yeah....love it man :)

nance marie said...

a midsummer nights dream

happygirl said...

I didn't know you could see the moon on a submarine race. I LOVED this one.

secret agent woman said...

Curtains. I need curtains.

secret agent woman said...

Curtains. I need curtains.

nlhwife said...

:) hehe now we're curious ;)

Victoria said...

Ah, Brian, come on. Confession is good for the soul. Especially on the Internet, so I'm told.

LauraX said...

man you are so prolific...this is such a fun little piece...tell your wife happy mother's day for me from one of your blog buddies!

Daniel said...

Whatever could you be talking about here? (smiles)

Bonnie said...

... those were the days ...

Eva Gallant said...

I hope the bushes weren't poison ivy!

Mama Zen said...

I just love this! You set the scene perfectly.

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

middle school boys...a very UNIQUE lot.

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
Thanks, for sharing your dreams Of "star gazing," and "crickets" when in middle school.
[Postscript: Brian, I too want to wish your wife, (Mrs.Miller) and all mothers a very Happy Mother's Day! this week-end.]
DeeDee ;-D

Pat Hatt said...

haha I don't know what you mean one bit
Why would telling make someone have a fit
You're only listening to the crickets play
Looking at the moon at night not day

Yeah prob not really what was going on right?
But I'll keep quiet as I wouldn't want to start a fight

http://1emeraldcity.wordpress.com said...

Boys will be boys..not always puppy dog tails..but other things...and there has to be a conspiracy of sorts involved. A little Huck Finn on the naughty side. I like it.

Jacqueline Dick said...

A naughtier Huck Finn and his friends. Boys will be boys and there must be some sort of conspiracy involved. A secret..and we can guess what. Who cares. This is beyond puppy dog tails...I like it.

Jim Swindle said...

I like the simplicity of the scene; the boys wanting to be exploratory and independent, stretching their limits, but not too far.

tattytiara said...

Wonderful notes of sweetness.

Brian Miller said...

yes, it was...haha

Suz said...

something always lurks below and between your simple words
and so effortlessly
Have a fun Mother's Day

Petite Nakomertje said...

"a crickets serenade"...love that part! It's like adding spice to it all! Oh yes, thanks for stopping by at my blog. Cheers. :)

joanny said...

such sweet secrets on a Friday night, intriguing sentimentality in all the right ways.


Have a good week end

joanny

LeahJ.Lynn said...

Cute. It leaves your mind to wonder. what won't you tell.

budh.aaah said...

Dreamy and the atmosphere just perfect with the getting caught factor thrown in oooohh..I love it.

Henry Clemmons said...

I'll never tell. Great read. Some good sounds and memories. And thanks for the comment.

hedgewitch said...

The guilty secrets of our youth, mostly so innocent now. And crickets, too. Liked it, for being simple especially.

Valerie said...

I was going to say Midsummer Nights Deam but nance marie beat me to it.

slommler said...

They all say that!!! Ha!
Hugs
SueAnn

Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillow said...

Was it Shakespeare or Dylan Thomas who said that no poet should ever, ever feel the need to explain, let alone apologize, for the words that crickets and moons chirp into a young boy's imaginings?

haikulovesongs said...

{smile}

TechnoBabe said...

It is so enjoyable when you write of the young boys and their antics. Some ways "boys will be boys" is really a fun thing.

Lorraine said...

youth and long time agos, love it

Tabor said...

Middle school boys...can't live with them but certainly do not want to live without them.

Heather said...

love this one - i love a cricket serenade...sounds liks a beautiful night - have a great saturday - xo

ayala said...

Fun and perfect... Wish your wife a Happy Mother's Day.. I hope all of you have a great weekend :)

Debbie said...

That's what nice evenings are for!

Laura said...

The Sundays have a song called "Static and Silence" about the moon landing. I love that song, it seems to capture the mystery and victory of it all. You do a pretty good job here too :).

tracy said...

Ah, this was cute! I was wondering what this might be about when I saw the title. Didn't really expect this, but I love it!

ladyfi said...

Not silly - but poetic!

Short Poems said...

this is such a beautiful little piece!
Love it :)

warmly
Marinela

Josh Hoyt said...

Very mysterious this one. Hard to tell what he was really doing:)

Margie said...

Wonderful!
Loved it ....so sweet!

Pat said...

This one leaves me wondering.....what WERE those boys gazing at REALLY?

Carrie Burtt said...

...but I will tell you that this is brilliant Brian....love it! :-)

Claudia said...

he he.. boys... i always tell my daughter to close the curtains.. smiles

Nezzy said...

I taught Middle School...I know of which you speak!

Great poem, warm and fuzzy!

God bless and have a great weekend!

Dulce said...

Beatiful silly verse Brian... sweet and armstrong as romantic as he could be

... Paige said...

and it's most likely a good thang that you didn't kiss & tell

yellowhousecafe said...

ha! blame it on youth...or.. nice turn around the block on this one ~ thanks for fun challenge

gayle said...

Love what I'm thinking! Love this!

Myrna R. said...

So cute. Glad you remember being a boy.

Joybird said...

snicker snicker

Ed Pilolla said...

aw, do tell:)
pretty starry night scene.

trisha said...

good one. sweet and beautiful.

Goofball said...

magic moments

Zuzana said...

I could feel the sense of young dreams in these words.;)
And I love the sound of crickets.;))
Hope you had a great weekend dear Brian, sorry I had a very busy one and am thus a bit late with my visit.;))
xoxo

Magpie said...

Boys will be boys. :)

PattiKen said...

This sounds like the reflections of kids dreaming of tomorrow. Nice.