Thursday, May 26, 2011

55 - among gramma's things

there were no blank pages
was the first thing we noticed
about gramma's notebook

each page turned, worn
soft as cotton from reading
names, numbers, dates, places
each carrying meaning

& somewhere in the middle,
my name, in red, circled,
among the things
she wanted to remember

blurred by the frequent touch
of her finger


Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see G-man.
submitted to Poetry Jam.

103 comments:

Bonnie said...

Touching.

Daniel said...

Oh man, this was amazing. Absolutely wonderful and heart-warming.

Bossy Betty said...

So sweet.

rosaria said...

Yes, your name is what she circled, kept close to her, kept her attention close to.

Monkey Man said...

Circled in RED...Hmmmm. You little devil.

Pat said...

Circled in red because she didn't want to forget you? Or because she wanted to take YOU out of her will? KIDDING!!

This is very touching!

lori said...

Oh, this brings tears to my eyes! Thank God for grandmas and the way they choose to care for us, intentionally remembering us when we need it most. I keep reading this one because I do love it so...really beautiful :)

David Allen Waters said...

this brought a tear....wonderful write, full of love.

my mum used her cookbooks l;ike journals, so each page has the events of the day when she made the recipe...I wouldnt trade them for a million bucks

Arts web show said...

Such a touching image.
A very sentimental 55 brian.
Excellent

happygirl said...

Isn't that just like a grandma. :)

ayala said...

So sweet and beautiful :)

hedgewitch said...

The pages do indeed fill up as the years go by, and you have to circle the things you don't want to forget,though I think it also is a case of taking pleasure from the rememebering here. Nice 55, Brian.

Linda said...

Well okay...this gramma thinks this is just about perfect.

Elaine said...

What a beautiful memory. Lovely Brian!

Pastor Sharon said...

Precious.

G-Man said...

Awww Brian...
Grandma loved you LOTS
I Just Love nostalgia.
Great 55 Son,
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Betsy said...

a priceless thing to discover!

LadyCat said...

The grandmother/grandchild bond is a very special one. I learned a whole new level of love when I had grandchildren. Very touching...loved this : )

Pat Hatt said...

That must have been a nice find
Reading words that were so kind
Agree with all that has been said
Must have been great memories to have read

Mama Zen said...

This really moved me.

Me said...

Been a *long* time since you made me cry, Brian. Dang, but that one got me...

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

so very sweet...

Lolamouse said...

Got a tear from this one, Brian. Very touching. I know the feeling of being afraid of forgetting things. It must be really terrible when you have to write down your grandkid's name.

Heather said...

oh i LOVE this one...my grandmother passed away 10 years ago and i miss her calls still to this day....she had an address book, too -

Terrace Crawford said...

Beautiful work. This nearly made me cry. My grandmother passed away in January. We watched her slowly fade away over the years with Alzheimers. She remembered only a few things, one being my name. That was priceless to me. Thank you for this poem.

//TC//

moondustwriter said...

Grandmas do that dont they???

What a sweet memory

Hope you and T had a gr8 memory maker Bri

Hugs

Janna said...

My favorite part is how it was "soft as cotton from reading."

Very nice.

Thanks for another Friday 55!
Mine's here. :)

Rachel Hoyt said...

Awww. I wish I had a notbook like that.

Pheromone Girl said...

I lost someone not long ago, and I keep her close by reading her books, rummaging through her boxes - and finding an unusually large collections of notes about me, my husband and our kids.

Amazing feeling to be loved forever, huh?

CM said...

Oh so moving. What a precious heirloom. Nicely written, the first line grabbed my attention right away.

Alice Audrey said...

Nice to know you had a place in her heart, even when the mind turns into a sieve.

Rebecca S. said...

I'm feeling the love.

Boom Boom Larew said...

Wow... another amazing piece. I can just imagine the feel of the page where she rubbed the paper to a satin finish!

Helena said...

What a heartfelt token of remembrance...

Fragrant Liar said...

Ooooh, I love this! Especially the red circle around your name. So touching.

Tara Miller said...

Another sweet poem today - I like it :) What meaning it has to know that you hold a special place in a loved ones heart. My favorite line: blurred by the frequent touch of her finger.

Christine said...

love the description of the paper becoming like cotton from being touched so often. Beautiful.

TALON said...

Beautiful, Brian.

Margie said...

So very touching!
I loved this!
Beautiful!

KB said...

Lovely 55. I miss my Grandma too.

Joybird said...

oh Brian, this may be my new favorite

Joybird said...

I miss my Grams.

tracy said...

This is so poignant. I only ever met one grandparent, and I still miss her.

Claudia said...

this brought tears to my eyes

Sue said...

This is so tender, Brian, and I loved it.

=)

Olivia said...

Oh so touching Brian!!
Beautiful expression..

weekend hugs x

Olivia said...

Hey, I sent you some wishes on your email the other day.. hope you received those :)

Zuzana said...

That was beautifully sentimental.;))
Have a great weekend dear Brian,
xoxo

Belinda said...

Moving. It's such a special kind of love between a grandma and a grandchild.

adeeyoyo said...

I am all choked up, Brian.

anthonynorth said...

Beautiful and poignant.

haikulovesongs said...

stunning!

Just Be Real said...

Supberb Brian. Blessings.

slommler said...

How precious to find ones' name circled in red in a much treasured journal! Slightly smeared from touching more than once.
I loved this
I love that
I just circled you in red Brian!
Hugs
SueAnn

Valerie said...

Very moving. I feel the heat of tears after reading that.

HopeUnbroken said...

sigh. . .

MorningAJ said...

I think I'm going to cry. That's so sweet.

Stillness.

Birdie said...

Brian, this is so very touching. Thank you for letting me remember my grandma today ... have a wonderful weekend!

Lorraine said...

beautiful, what a love she had for you

Tabor said...

I do not know how you do this. 55 words and an excellent story.

Dave King said...

Wonderful tale, simple and tellingly well told. Thoroughly enjoyable.

Crystal Jigsaw said...

That sentence summed it up, Brian. Really beautiful.

CJ xx

Kate Hanley said...

Great poem. Love the wheelbarrow one as well. Your imagery is so clear.

Cinner said...

Aww, that circle was filled with love she had for you. Have a great weekend Brian. smiles.

Hope said...

now I'm waiting for the rest of the story! :)
lovely write!

TechnoBabe said...

This is very touching (get it, touching?) I can see grandma touching a special name and the warmth it brought to her.

A Daft Scots Lass said...

Snoop! Kidding!

Have a great weekend.

izzy said...

Love this thanks!

Chef Kar said...

Sweet. I want more ~ the notebooks that get filled speak volumes.

Here's mine: Friday Flash 55 ~ Doing Time

JStar said...

SOOOO touching and beautiful...It feels great to be loved :)

the walking man said...

I bet you always got the biggest cookie at granny's house didn't you Brian?

daydreamertoo.com said...

Lovely imagery. I can picture the old worn pages being 'thumbed' through.

sheila said...

Wow, this reminds me of an elderly aunt I had. She had a book with stuff written down over 50 years. I even have a folder of home repairs where she made notes on the tops of the bills like... the guy was late by 14 minutes... etc... LOL!

Akelamalu said...

A wonderful keepsake. :)

annell said...

Oh Wow! What a wonderful piece! You never fail to amaze!

NanU said...

That must be wonderful, to have things of your gramma's like that. I have a box with my grandma's costume jewelry that I used to play with decades ago. Her perfume lingers in it.

Shanae Branham said...

Hi Brian,
What a beautiful loving post. You showed the power of love. I really enjoyed this piece.
Cheers,
Shanae

My Blog

Who Is Afraid Of Miss Lovett? No, Mrs.Lovett... said...

Hi! Brian...
It's time for me to play the word game with you again: Words that comes to my mind after reading your poem:Bitter-sweet,remembering,a grandson,Brian,notebook,gramma,
thinking Of, but the most important word...love.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-)

[Postscript:Brian, I hope that you, your family, and readers, have a very reflective Memorial Day! week-end too!]

Suz said...

oh my I loved this
having had a similar experience with my grandmother's notebook

Margaret said...

!!!! I have shivers going up and down my arms! This is exquisite. It is true? This is my favorite poem of yours I have ever read because it caused such an emotional reaction in me.

Helen said...

... for me it's my mother's birthday calendar. I will keep it as long as I live. She recorded birth dates of friends and family I would never have known about. It is worn, tattered and part of her.

Raven said...

Oh that was just lovely. This is the second poem today that has reminded me of my grandma. I miss her.

PattiKen said...

Oh, I bet there's a wonderful story behind this. Just lovely. This phrase ("soft as cotton from reading") brings up the image of her skin, delicate as tissue paper from living.

Sophia said...

Heart tugging. Brings back memories for me and my grandmother. We were closer than my own parents...

Lulda Casadaga said...

Are you sure she wasn't getting ready to read you the riot act! :D
ah, great memories of grandma's...I sure miss mine!!

Mona said...

awww! isn't that so sweet? very touching indeed!

Mary said...

A very effective poem, Brian!! Grandma memories are special!

libraryscene said...

Lovely tribute...she had your number... knew you'd be one to be proud of ~

gayle said...

Oh course I love this!!

Magpie said...

It's good to know these things all the time, but when we don't or can't, isn't it amazing the shift in perspective that knowing someone loved, cared and remembered makes in our life's story?

Patricia said...

Blurred because of the many times she touched your name and prayed over you.

Stranger said...

Beautiful!

wolfsrosebud said...

Beautiful piece Brian... perhaps it because of her you are who you are now.

Maggie May said...

That was a really pleasing read.
I also just read the wheelbarrow post too and thought it was very good.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Hilary said...

That's so tender.

jabblog said...

Succinct and poignant and very real - lovely memories.

Matty said...

That is sweet Brian. You meant so much to her.

The Bug said...

When I read things like this I always wish I had kept a journal.

brenda w said...

Oh yes, what a treasure.

Titus said...

Beautifully done.

Syd said...

That reminds me of my mother's notebook in which my name and phone number were written many times. She was trying hard to remember and keep it close. Thanks for sharing this.

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Just beautiful. Lovely Brian...

william said...

very touching mate :)