Sunday, May 1, 2011

160/1SS - Who do you say I am?



you are the wind that cleaves
the hungry mouth that carves
mountains, hulls valleys &
waves this dry ocean's
face to roar frothily
reenacting creation within me.

The picture is by Rosa Frei as featured today at One Shoot Sunday. And it was said in 160 characters for the Monkey.

83 comments:

tony said...

Creation Is Ongoing?

rosaria said...

"you" is a powerful force, indeed.

slommler said...

And you have such a beautiful mind!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Claudia said...

oh wow - much power and wildness in this one brian..

Claudia said...

oh...meant fierceness not wildness...translation issues..

Possum said...

yeah...my knee jerk reaction was also "wow"!
How often do we just ignore that frothy roar...fantastic combination of words!

Sh@s said...

Powerfully put across :)

Lorraine said...

and i -as always- am enchanted

Glynn said...

It is an ocean, with its waves and currents and acts of creation. Really like this, Brian.

dustus said...

First line is amazing in the respect that "cleaves" invokes meanings that are considered opposites, yet both meanings work in context. Great work, Brian.

annell said...

Words so beautifully selected for the image!

Sally J said...

'................cleaves
the hungry mouth that carves
mountains, hulls valleys..........
brilliant combination of words - cleaves and carves work so well together.

Patricia Caspers said...

small yet fierce.

DJan said...

Very lovely and well crafted poem, Brian. I always enjoy them, some more than others. This one got me.

5thsister said...

"soulful" was my 1st thought. Nice.

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

Beautiful, awesome!

Hope said...

wow! so much said in such few words.
perfect for the image!

the wind...can do so much
like the potter's hands

love it Brian!

Daniel said...

Yeah, the photo is inspiring. I often write blogs based upon pictures that I stumble across.

Pat Hatt said...

Your creation on the force of creation
Was no exaggeration
As you hit the nail on the head
In so few words while I was in bed
And so before the force withers things to dust
Leave I must

... Paige said...

Well done, you are such a Winner!

Heather said...

love the way you write!!! Oh so good! have a great sunday! xo

Pat said...

So, so beautiful!

libithina said...

carved and cleaved ~ creativity in action ~ breathes life ~ throughout ~ wonderful Brian ~
Lib ~ @Libithina

hedgewitch said...

"..wave's this dry ocean's face..." great visual for the mind to chew on, and also a perfect fit to the prompt. I applaud you using your brain so soon after the ending of the poetry onslaught.

David Allen Waters said...

Ah "You" the almighty creator....wonderful write:)

Steve E said...

We benefit much from that "creation within you", Brian-Boy. I'm grateful for your willingness to share it.

Absolutely LOVED (and learned from) that interview with Rosa Frei. What splendid work she does--it shows that she loves her art.
PEACE!

happygirl said...

Loved is so much I copied. I hope it's ok.

Maggie May said...

It is such a massive thing to create, isn't it? However that is only a minute part of it.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Deborah said...

Oooh, wonderfully written.

Olivia said...

This is one beautiful super shot!
I could feel the power within your words..

Sunday Hugs xox

PattiKen said...

This is wonderful homage to the power of the elements. Lest we doubt, we can see the evidence all around us.

HisFireFly said...

So much truth and beauty in so few words

love.this.

Evelyn said...

Like how each words pushes you on to the next, like a conveyor belt.

Ruthiey said...

your mind has such a different way of phrasing things. it always amazes me.

Sheila Moore said...

great - reminds me of a mother taking care of her children for some reason. impressive that you condensed to 160. Happy Sunday!

Alice Audrey said...

Cool.

So... is the old lady keeping you hopping? :)

- Alice

Brian Miller said...

david, could be or it could be sexual...i find an intense link between spirituality and sexuality and sometimes my writing will blend between the two...

Suz said...

Brian,nice
The title has so much power
we know the answer before you stop asking it

Monkey Man said...

Love the texture in the photo and the sensuality of your 160. Thanks for playing, B.

CM said...

"dry ocean"...nice.

Kiera O'Brien said...

While so many others concentrate on the image, Brian has to go and talk about the entity that put it there.

You're a showoff, B, and I love you for it.

Pheromone Girl said...

Isn't it strange that the wind is always there and we only see what it leaves behind, sometimes?

Kerry O'Connor said...

You have captured the essence of the desert in these well-chosen words and images.

Celestial Dreamz said...

Like it so much. powerfully beautiful :)

Myrna R. said...

Gratitude for creation is what this one inspires in me. Also, for you creativity, which astounds me.

C Rose said...

To go with some adjectives already showered amongst your piece...powerful, beautiful, fierce, WOW ;)

all are applicable, you have honored this work with yours. ~ Rose

budh.aaah said...

Very intimate..wonderful 160 oh you are such a romantic Brian :)

Christine said...

It was the last line that really struck me, it makes me think of the words, wonderfully and fearfully made.

ayala said...

I love, love, love it! :)

John (@bookdreamer) said...

The wind tears, the wind gives and so life

repressedsoul said...

Consice yet so powerful Brian, wind that moulds and builds just as it can strip and marr. Brilliant! And thanks for the congratulations, I'm still a bit in awe of everything!

Magpie said...

Such a perfect description of that photo. Very tactile.
Re: the bird's nest...yes, that is the only opening. It's completely enclosed with only the small opening.

blueviolet said...

That kit arrived, didn't it?

Maggie said...

Short, simply, and so beautiful! :)

Costis Demos {Ghostdog} said...

words beautifully offered. Very nice.

Little Ms Blogger said...

Very cool and it immediately reminded me of the Grand Canyon.

tracy said...

Fantastic. "You" are a master of words.

Chris G. said...

Indeed, I see we share that dry ocean bit - always enjoyable to see two minds collide as such! And the piece is an enjoyable experience at large, short but sweet, capturing the feeling and the emotions of the desert succinctly. Almost a spiritual experience...delightful.

liv2write2day said...

This reads like a meditation, Brian. I believe creation is on-going and we are co-creators.

rmpWritings said...

absolutely beautiful

love the parallel of the ocean and the desert...

Matt Coughlan said...

Now I'm wondering who "you" is, which is a good thing.

:D

Slamdunk said...

You make every character count. Nicely done.

yellowhousecafe said...

how can so few words evoke such a depth of exploration...quite an interesting read..very much enjoyed the flow, as well ~

KB said...

I like it!

Goofball said...

happy recreation to you :)

Sue said...

I liked following this "you" in as many directions as it would take me.

=)

Zuzana said...

Hello dear Brian, I am back and it was a lovely poem to return to, somewhat fitting my life.;)) Even the picture.;))
Hope all is well with you and yours.;))
xoxo

Joybird said...

Wow - love this one Brian. Short but it packs a punch.

Alan Burnett said...

Both picture and words share a luscious sensuality.

Selina Kingston said...

With just a few characters, you use every word perfectly to show us your wonderful spirit and soul. Thank you

Just Be Real said...

Power. Awesome power. Blessings to you Brian.

sheila said...

Both powerful and calming at the same time!

Alegria Imperial said...

Powerful poem, Brian! One grasp, few lines, a universe!

Hilary said...

Beautiful as always.

Katherine said...

A sensual poem Brian ... or have I interpreted it incorrectly. Either way it is quite lovely.

ladynimue said...

Stunning creation ! :)

trisha said...

just fabulous!

Paul C said...

That image and your poem reminds me of the novel and film The English Patient, a passionate love story set partly in the desert and its swirls of sand and emotion.

Steve Isaak said...

Love this, one of my favorite pieces read thus far this week. (I've read approximately forty, with one other piece receiving this particular comment.)

Syd said...

The wind can cleave and work away at a lot of things.

Tina said...

Wow. love it. Just goes to show your talent that you could do that in 160 characters. You go, my friend!

haikulovesongs said...

"to roar frothily
reenacting creation within me"

wow!

Pastor Sharon said...

He is everything to me! I love this.