Monday, April 25, 2011

when you wish upon a star...

why willows weep is a conundrum
to me, yet i sit beneath their
slouching limbs, where the
dragonflies flit and pirouette
in the sun's spotlight, crickets
chirrup cheers as the stage dims
obsidian, allowing the echoes
of stars to finally reach me
from some distant cosmos


reclined on my chest,  you
are/at peace, while i burn
in your heat & when you rise
once more to your rightful
place with a wink, remnants
of stardust remain, embedded
in the crease of my smile,
until next we meet.

76 comments:

budh.aaah said...

'In the crease of my smile....'delicious picture you paint there :)

DJan said...

I read this over many times, and I'm still not sure what is ascending.

The Empress said...

How you see a woman in a weeping willow, how you see so many things.

I really enjoy this break, over here, B.

Such a different place for my mind to go.

Thank you.

Heather said...

this is beautiful....remnants of stardust remain...wonderful!
have a good day! xo hope Easter was good with the family

annell said...

The sweetest! "Remnants of stardust" "Blow in my ear I'll follow you anywhere."

Daniel said...

Very sweet and stirring embrace with this one. Loved it. The choice of the word obsidian was very nice.

Bonnie said...

So sweet I want to weep... "stardust remains ... imbedded in the crease of my smile". Have you ever been approached by musicians/composers to use your poems as lyrics, or to write specifically for a composition? If not ... it won't be long. Perhaps that is not how you want to use your work ... just wondering if it is something you have considered.

Bossy Betty said...

A celebration of so many parts of life....thanks!

Brian Miller said...

djan, for me this was a love poem to the one whom has blessed my life, our moments together and looking forward to the next time we are together...they being the star in the sky upon which i wish...

tracy said...

Ah...I see so many of the masters lurking in this one, Brian!

Raven said...

So lovely! I really enjoyed this one. Well, I enjoy them all, but this one is particularly good. :D

Patricia Caspers said...

Pirouetting fireflies-- lovely. I've heard that we're made of 40% stardust, which makes me feel like a walking world of magic.

Bridgette said...

Beautiful! I hope you had a very Happy Easter Brian!

Tess @ Pro-tography 101 said...

You make words sound so pretty.

nance marie said...

stardust

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

A romantic and poetic piece. Peaceful.

OH, how I love the word: conundrum. :)

Pat Hatt said...

Have to say the last half really got me the most
Although the first is still great and worth a boast
You worded it so well and makes one think
Or stir stuff up with a nudge and a wink
Enjoyed this one alot
Now I'll go before I make the willows rot..lol

Sophia said...

Magic just flows from you...you know that? Just saying...

TALON said...

One of our local parks is full of willows - still not full of their leafy fronds yet. This poem made me think of soft summer nights and beautiful moments.

Teri said...

Brian--I think that this is one of my most favorite poems that you have written. It really choked me up for some reason. Maybe the nostalgia, maybe the deep love that you portray...from some reason this one really hit my hear. How you manage to find the words and paint these stories is mind-boggling to me. You are terrific! And you deserve the love you give and get!

ayala said...

Beautiful and sweet..your love ...fortunate :)

Magpie said...

There are such beautiful lines in this one, Brian. The entire second paragraph melts my heart.
"you are/at peace," Wonderful.

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
The words that you have written are beautiful and the thought behind the words more so...Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Tara Miller said...

There's a peace found in resting under a willow tree and staring up at a starry sky....

Cathleen said...

This is my favorite piece of any you've written and that's saying something... just perfect.

Yvonne said...

That is so beautiful. The words just flow so well and really stick with me.

AmyLK said...

so pretty. the visuals you create. Amazing!

Mona said...

"dil dhoondta hai phir wohi fursat ke raat din / baithe rahe tassvre jaana kiye hue..."

The heart seeks those leisurely hours/when we sat under the trees dreaming of love...

this is a visually sensitive piece. Excellent as always!

Little Ms Blogger said...

I love when I get the first glimpse of a star on a clear night. I hate to having short days, but do love when I get a chance to star gaze.

Steve E said...

Wooooo--a new word for me, 'obsidian". And this line I'd like to memorize:
"...as the stage dims
obsidian, allowing the echoes
of stars to finally reach me..."

Weep no more, lovely Willow tree!

Kate Hanley said...

Just lovely and perfect as I look out on a fresh Spring day!

PattiKen said...

So sweet. Little boy wonders seen through big boy eyes. I love it.

Monkey Man said...

Where's my hammock? This makes me log for summer nights.

Syd said...

I like those weeping willows.

hedgewitch said...

What a perfect love poem--a jewel of mood and image. The picture is delicate and yet deep, real and fanciful. Excellent writing, brian.

(And drat you, I have nothing for today, you fiend.)

Claudia said...

read it three times...such beautiful words brian and so thick with emotions..honestly, think that's one of my favs by you

Steve E said...

Think I'll 'long' for summer, while Monk-Man is 'logging' in his hammock--BIG grin!!! wink wink!

drybottomgirl said...

Weeping Willow trees are one of my favorites. My grandparent's had an enormous one in their yard. As children my brothers and I played for hours underneath it. Your words are like a garden of beautiful flowers. Really liked this one....

Barbara said...

I kept picking out favorite parts, then gave up. Love it all! What a beautiful image in my mind.

Titanium said...

Beautiful tribute to life and love- delicate, gentle embrace of time and space and change. Beautiful write, Brian.

Sue said...

I always think to myself that your wife must love these.

=)

CM said...

So lovely. It reminds me of a warm summer's night.

Nessa said...

I think weeping willows are very romantic trees, too.

Percy Bisque Silley said...

Oh fiddle faddle. This will not do at all. I have gone into hiding due to just this sort of poetry.

Remember Wordsworth! Coleridge! Keats! Silley!

Scott said...

Hmmm, the set up and then you knock 'em down. "While I burn/in your heart..." You said it!

LauraX said...

The second verse just gave me chills for the beauty each lovingly selected word holds Brian.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

nothing to say ........ just 'sigh'

ModernMom said...

Sigh...you painted a beautiful picture.

Maggie said...

lovely Brian. Hope you had a great Easter with your kids!

Reflections said...

Ah yes, the artistic talent of the painter of wishes... beautiful piece.

Vicki Lane said...

Wonderful to have a stardust bringer in your life...

happygirl said...

I love stardust

Sheila Moore said...

very good, magical

Josh Hoyt said...

Wonderful very nice imagery. I like the stardust and the heat. Great job

Joybird said...

A wonderful moment captured here, Brian.

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sonny said...

just sat reading...re-reading it....

Pranavam Ravikumar a.k.a. Kochuravi said...

Nice one again! Belated Easter wishes...

trisha said...

awesome brian. just loved the beautiful intimacy.

TechnoBabe said...

What more could you possible wish for, you have the love of your life and your boys. Nice writing.

Pauline said...

the echo of stars - you always catch me with some turn of phrase i would never have thought of

the walking man said...

Embracing the eternal portion of the being is a good thing. Now we need to learn to get lost there and not find a back trail to this place.

JStar said...

Your words are so beautifully depicted!

Corinna said...

i love this. it's so sweet and rhythmic. the words create a dance of their own. beautiful.

Lorraine said...

How inspiring that your Love poem are of your love, it's beautiful

Debbie said...

How lovely - and full of love.

Kiera O'Brien said...

Brian, everything you write is bursting with energy. I didn't realize how much I'd missed you until today :)

Valerie said...

In the crease of your smile... honestly, Brian, you should write a book on your wonderful phrases alone.

PS if you have time I'd appreciate your comment on my latest ghost story

Pat said...

I really love this one. Brought a smile to my face.

Life with Kaishon said...

You are so good.
I feel like a broken record because I just say that same thing on every post. I am so glad you share your talent with all of us.

signed...bkm said...

A beautiful read Brian...the weeping willow and dragonflies the beauty of its peace is universal and calming....bkm

deb colarossi said...

perfection.
sigh.....

Goofball said...

ooooh I want to see dragonflies pirouette...don't think I ever did. And I love the sound of crikets chirrup cheers

and I love alliterations :p

Shanae Branham said...

I'm glad you like my premise. I really liked the line...reclined on my chest, you are/at peace...

That is one of my favorite places to be with my husband. Cheers!

Katherine said...

Words laced with love Brian... I love this one. It is easy to envisage what this would feel & look like. Lovely! :)

upinthecosmos said...

Beautiful, I love the dragonfly line!