Wednesday, April 6, 2011

one less than three you

one less than three you
an algebraic equation
to determine the feelings
that reside inside the
veins pulsing rhythm, in
attempts to contain, dissect,
and deconstruct into minute
understandable symbols
supernovas erupting from
black holes, and souls
measured in grams, the
existing distance between
us, phi, written by divine
hand, sectio divina, but pi
is square man, no way
round it, distill to its
essence, greater than
one less than three you

i text it:    1 <3 U

and await your reply...

 imperfect prose

86 comments:

Elaine said...

Not that I'm an interpreter or anything...but I think the text would read..."Ditto, or right back at ya". But I think God uses IM rather than text!

David N. said...

Love it. I had to go back and reread the poem after reading the ending. I was a little slow on the uptake!

Mijayami said...

I loved it the first time through and loved it more the second time :) Brilliant!

Ruthiey said...

I totally <3 this!!!! =DD

Titanium said...

Best possible interpretation of letter | number combinations.

This is excellent, Brian.

David Allen Waters said...

I read it over twice...just to make sure I got the jist...all I can say is brilliant!

Helena said...

♥ ஆεlεɳa

Carrie Burtt said...

This is brilliant Brian...in a world where texting is becoming more and more popular....this captures the heart of communication even in these high tech times! :-)

Sue said...

You are one very clever man.

=)

Eva Gallant said...

Oh, yeah. Well, done!

Natasha said...

Too clever for your own good if you ask me. great word play here, Brian. I have few favorite lines, where do you find the time. One amazing writer are you, and always honored by your comments at land of Tashtoo :) I <3 my visits to waystation one!

hedgewitch said...

Definitely got me with that one, Brian, and a very neat one it is, as we deconstruct the heart in words and symbols and still have no clue of what we're talking..or is that texting--about.

Tara Miller said...

1 <3 U ~

Totally got it :)

Lord Thomas of Wellington said...

The older I get, the more I become aware of the complexity of life and its limitless bountries.

Dulce said...

No maths formula can do for it
Great one BRIAN!

happygirl said...

I LOVED it. Thanks so much for concrete prose. That imagery you do sometimes confuses me. <3 1+1

Sheila Moore said...

cool...very cool

Raven said...

Oh, now I get it. Yes, I'm slow. D: Great poem Brian! The depths of your creative genius never ceases to astound me.

Hilary said...

Very sweet.. I'm sure the reply would be "1 <3 U 2" or similar. :)

Becky Avella said...

<3 This! There is a reason I always search for "Brian Miller" on the Imperfect Prose list each week. : ) You made it easier for me this week being #1.

Cathy said...

Oh how inspired, we are each made of stardust a Space program told my husband and in this poem I believe it...

ayala said...

Very cool, Brian.....clever :)

Pat said...

Gosh darn it, you're cute! Even with all that math mumbo jumbo!

Bridgette said...

Aww I LOVE that! :) Thanks for all the comments on my blog. I am SO excited. :D

Ami Mattison said...

Very clever, Brian! I love the images you've offered here, especially:

supernovas erupting from
black holes, and souls
measured in grams

The language of the piece is quite stunning, and you've done a great job of distilling truth in a compressed space--"distill to it's essence, greater than." Love it!

Ocean Girl said...

Totally awesome. This is my daily conversation with my son.

WEdB Lake said...

we make simple what is complex, and complex what is simple

enjoyed reading the piece, though I'm not sure I took out of it what other readers did, but then that is the joy of writing and reading, author and readers bring unique interpretations to the same words

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
This is post is very thought-provoking...1 <3 your post too!
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

PattiKen said...

Ohhh, he's thinking texting shorthand. I see a wealth of possibilities here. IMHO.

Rachel said...

O.K. I will admit it took me a while to comment on this because I had to figure it out, lol. May your <3 be blessed this week.

Mama Zen said...

Your creativity just amazes me, Brian!

Daniel said...

Clever, very clever.

Patricia Caspers said...

I can totally hear this being read in a coffee shop with maybe a nice drum beat backing it up. So clever and sweet. I agree with Mattison completely about the supernova lines.

Umamaheswari.A said...

Clever man...I reread it to understand better and the poem captured so many things to generate this equation..yes,your answer I <3 this poem

Rhymetime(aka Pat) said...

Damn how do you come up with this stuff
I can make my rhymes leave people in a huff
But actually going all meaningful and profound
I think I'd better just go stick my head in the ground
Another fine read
One I had to reread
I get it now though
As tonight I was kind of slow

Lisa notes... said...

I feel I am the most redundant commenter when I land on your blog because every week I want to say the same thing: Wow! You always amaze me with your way with words and thoughts. "one less than three you": who knew where you were going with that?

keLi said...

great stuff. i can just imagine the title line of the sequel. :)

drybottomgirl said...

You lost me from the start but I'm sure it's filled with brilliance...:0

sonny said...

its just brilliant brian. you know that....

Kristi said...

Wow! Love a poem that makes me think and stretches me a bit. Great job with this...perfect for the times we live in!
Thank you so much for stopping by my blog today! :)

CM said...

Um, what???

Just kidding...pretty cute. So what was T's reply?

BTW, have you ever texted something totally crazy because of auto fill? Happens to me ALL the time!

Myrna R. said...

I am always so impressed with the level of your creativity and intelligent thinking. This one is superb.

adeeyoyo said...

Only you could come up with this, Brian! i c u r 1<3 clever.

honeyhaiku said...

This lovely, sweet and full of genius. It is a favorite.

Semaphore said...

You had me right at the title! I really enjoy poems that explore new ways to use language - and that includes texting. This is eecummings-clever, and well-executed. Bravo!

Felicitas said...

Brian, I think you may be too clever for me this time... though possibly not for everyone else(?). Regardless, I see the one person for whom this was truly for did get it and that's what really matters!

ladyfi said...

Wonderfully creative - and romantic!

Pheromone Girl said...

Loved what Hedgewitch said. But wait - someone asked if anyone ever made a funny comment based on autofill... HATE autofill. It turns words into things that aren't even remotely related to what you meant to say!

Brian Miller said...

i hear you PG, i emailed CM back on it...yeah auto fill makes me say some funny things...harder to understand than my writing...lol

tolbert said...

Good one Brian...I like the way you got "pi is square" in there, a play on the formula "pi r squared"
and of course the ending was classic...excellent.

Joybird said...

What can I say, Brian? This is simply cool.

Haddock said...

I am still on the look out for the guy who invented Algebra.... Grrrr

Anna said...

Excellent, loved it!

Brandee Shafer said...

Alright, so I have no pride and don't mind admitting that your stuff is generally beyond my ability to comprehend. But I think I got this one. And I like it.

Selina Kingston said...

there is nothing imperfect about your prose x

Zuzana said...

Very clever dear Brian.;)) Intelligent romance.;)) Made me smile.;))
I am taking an extended blog break dear friend, will miss writing, but I need to focus my energy elsewhere.
Take care, see you soon,
xoxo

Pranavam Ravikumar a.k.a. Kochuravi said...

I enjoyed this number too. I would rather say equation of life. A brilliant write. You are good at maths it seems...! My wishes. Have a nice day.

slommler said...

I <3 you back!!
Brilliant Brian!! Love it!
Hugs
SueAnn

Fireblossom said...

Anybody seeking to quantify or define love is doomed. I say stick with the typo hearts.

the walking man said...

REPLY

trisha said...

cute one, if only life could be solved like problems of mathematics.

JStar said...

So briliantly formulated!!!

eclipseofthemoon said...

Mathematically romantic!!!! :)

Lorraine said...

I love this Brian, I just get so tired of waiting for answers

Heather said...

this is cute! never used this one before...will have to show my kids! have a great day

Cinner said...

Great one Brian although I have to say I have never texted. I was slow on the uptake too. Maybe I need a morning coffee. smiles.

TechnoBabe said...

Really cute one. Souls measured in grams. From now on I shall have a better feeling when I see 1 <3 U.

TALON said...

This was wonderful, Brian - the essence of science and mathematics condensed into love.

Arts web show said...

Ha ha, what a great punchline.
Strange the strange language when talking textual these days. lol

Brian Miller said...

nice WM...i love pearl jam...great song

James Rainsford said...

A clever and intriguing write challenging us to think. Well constructed Brian. Brought back time spent reading e e cummings.

Magpie said...

Not being a texter, I'm sure a lot of this was lost on me. But reaching people on many different levels is something you do amazingly well.

emily wierenga said...

written by divine hand, indeed... brilliant, and unique! love it.

Olivia said...

Blushing already- lolssss

Arithmetic, algebra, astronomy, physics, trigonometry..........!!

I enjoyed reading this one.. :)
nothing can explain or dare I say QED love.. sigh!

hugs x

Kati patrianoceu said...

Oh that is so so cute!!! :)

btw, I have NO idea what my butler's name is, isn't that awful? He knows mine everytime I call. But I don't think it's anything memorable. I hope not.

blueviolet said...

That's a very sweet one. :)

emmettwheatfall.com said...

It has a spoken word feel to it. I like the way it drives the reader. It's like a fast moving river wherein, once your in, you got to go with the flow.

Liza Ursu said...

pi is square man, no way
round it
Ha! I love that.
Confession: I've never sent a text message.
I love this piece Brian, thanks for sharing.

Connie@raise your eyes said...

ok, I'm joining the group of "had to go back and re-read"...but now I get it...I think...:)

arspoetica said...

i've never really heard sweet mathematics before-- too clever! :)

autumnraven said...

Brilliant! The play on words, the flow...everything...f'ing brilliant!

MN accent said...

I one less three this poem!

Goofball said...

hahaha

Beena said...

Awesome ! Clever...love this one. Thanks for sharing :)

Mighty M said...

That was awesome.

Syd said...

Those little symbols remind me of the wind blowing.