Friday, April 22, 2011

Friday Poetically: I am no Shel Silverstein

Over at Friday Poetically, I challenged our readers to write a poem using words from Shel Silverstein's "One Inch Tall." Here is my humble offering:

if our love dreams
only in whispers,
school me to
here the sound
so i dance
true to you.

Then my inner immature teen took over and wrote:

i eat delicious yellow beans,
moon schools, some
worms dance, whisper
magic treats, today
love me asleep
before you go.


Then i got emo and wrote:

i dance in cold teardrop rain
love was only a dream
worms mined in my sleep

It's Friday, what can I say...I try not to take myself too seriously. Hope everyone has a great weekend!

58 comments:

happygirl said...

I hope you have a wonderful Easter weekend. Enjoy the vast change of weather. I don't know where you live, but I know the weather is so odd. If I get hit by a raindrop I'll drown, if I am warmed by the sunshine I brown. 'Cause I'm only only one inch tall. Loved it.

yellowhousecafe said...

simply fabulous offerings...came to check your 55, but now it seems I must ck OSP...Shel started my passion for poem at 8 ~

hedgewitch said...

I like all three--especially the delicious yellow beans and all. And nice macabre touch at the end. Lots of things to do with a simple list of words, aren't there. This was a great prompt, brian, because I was dry as a cup of dust before I saw it. Thanks.

David Allen Waters said...

I like them :) Happy Easter mate :)

Tara Miller said...

These were fun to read, love. Like them all but I'd say my fav. is the light airy feel of the yellow bean poem.

Titanium said...

The yellow beans one is my favorite. It's playful, it's fun and it's perfect. All three are great, but this one is just adorable. Like a cute little yellow peep.

Marian said...

love 'em.

Pat Hatt said...

hahaha that's one thing I will never accuse of you
As seriously one can tell you don't do
Especailly with each commnet I see
From you to me
Have to admit your inner teen I liked the most
But is that really a surprise coming from this host
Have a fun weekend
And know the bunny is eaten so he will be around the bend..haha

Betsy said...

Oh how clever..love all sides of your personality! :)

Barbara Shallue said...

They're all great! I can tell you had lots of fun with them. I might have to try my hand at that challenge.

Cathleen said...

I like the poems especially the first one. Thanks for the comments on the kids poems they really enjoyed getting such positive feedback.

Daniel said...

It's almost like 3 for the price 1 of one today here. All were good. The second one seemed the most like you though.

Lolamouse said...

Brian,
3 poems! I am impressed! Your 3rd one is making me imagine an emo Shel Silverstein brooding on the stump of the Giving Tree and looking dejected.

drybottomgirl said...

Well you know our family loves Shel and I like your three unique offerings. Maybe a new book of poetry titled,"Where the Driveway Ends?" Have a glorious Easter.....

nance marie said...

ya ya ya goot

Maggie said...

Awesome! I like the emo one the best! lol heee

Have a wonderful weekend Brian! *hugs*

secret agent woman said...

Warm sun, cool rain and a Happy Easter to you!

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
Unfortunately, I'am not familiar with poet? Shel Silverstein yet...(with "yet" being the operative word...) with that being said, your poem is very beautiful!

[Postscript: I like the shifting Of voice(s) or thoughts too in your poetry...Brian, Happy Easter! and Happy Earth Day! to you, your family and most definitely, to your readers.]
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee ;-D

Patricia Caspers said...

Shel Silverstein is the reason I'm a poet. Love those worms.

Hilary said...

They're all nicely done. I wish you and yours a wonderful Easter.

Bossy Betty said...

Great job!! I am impressed!

Christine said...

like the inner teen, nice to see someone could use the word worms somewhere. Very clever, as always:)

PattiKen said...

I love Shel Silverstein. You did him proud.

libithina said...

Have a wonderful Easter Brian ~ lovely idea of word bank ~ enjoyed Shel Silverstein and your choice of words ~~ loved all three inner shifts Brian ~ Emo, inner teen,but those yellow beans sounded abit tasty Mmmm ~ have lovely weeekend ~ Lib ~ @Libithina

Claudia said...

i love what your inner immature teen has to say...smiles

(should it be..hear the sound..?)

Sue said...

Glad to see that all the sides of you are speaking!

;)

PS. Have a great Easter with your family!

Tom said...

i got some word cubes once but everything i put together turned out dirty

trisha said...

loved the first one the most.

happy easter brian!

She Writes said...

I like emo. Always have.

joanny said...

Ah Brian you are in rare form with not one but three, loved all three, but especially the last one,,,

Happy Easter to you and yours

joanny

slommler said...

What wonderful musing in words. All and your only one inch tall!!!!
Ha!
Hugs
SueAnn

Lorraine said...

You are Amazing, I'll never say it often enough

Brian Miller said...

hey claudia, i tried to stick to only the words given...here was but hear was not so played it a bit...

the walking man said...

Emo ...yeah man that is all of it. Ever try to get an emo kid laughing?

Bonnie said...

Great how you demonstrate the different poems that can emerge on the same topic depending on which aspect (subpersonality) of ourself is doing the writing.

Nessa said...

So much fun and endearingly touching.

Raven said...

I thought those were great. Especially the emo one!

ayala said...

Nicely done...Have a great weekend, Brian.

TALON said...

I like the different facets, Brian.

Have a beautiful Easter!

Heather said...

LOVE Shel Silverstein...and LOVE these, too! Have a great day!

Pat said...

My favorite line..."love me asleep before you go". Love it!

tracy said...

But you are Brian Miller, and I love Brian Miller! Happy Easter weekend to you and your family.

Just Be Real said...

Offerings, love it Brian. Three very good ones. Happy Easter!

Valerie said...

Three gems.... wow!

blueviolet said...

As a huge fan of Shel Silverstein, I appreciated your childish side!

Happy Easter!

Maggie May said...

I always have to think when I visit you!
Have a Happy Easter.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Cheryl said...

These are fantabulous, Brian. Shows your wide-ranging talent. I'm having an emo time these days so fell in love with that one.

Happy Weekend!

Carrie Burtt said...

I love Silverstein's work and I love your to Brian...love what you did with the three poems...hope you have a wonderful Easter weekend! :-)

Joybird said...

loved the first one, tender and sweet and the second was my fav, hands down. My inner adolescent snorts loudly.

rmpWritings said...

all three are delightful...though I'm partial to the first.

Henry Clemmons said...

Very Good times three :)
Have a good Easter.

Henry Clemmons

sonny said...

i think i like the teen you best....smiles...

Vodka Mom said...

i dance
with hope and
grace and love
and pray the sprites
rain droplets of
peace
upon your soul



(cheers)

A.Decker said...

They're all three enjoyable in their own way, but I think your inner immature teen got closest to Shel. Good stuff.

budh.aaah said...

Use your heart not the ears and you will love these whispers loud and clear....

Magpie said...

I'm off to check out Shel...
You're funny and smart and clever and talented and just enough twisted to make it all work. :)

Syd said...

I like those yellow beans and moon beams. Nice.

Pastor Sharon said...

shut the front door! You truly are in touch with all the things that make you who you are. . . the greatest poet and wordsmith among us!