Sunday, April 24, 2011

1SS - Here I Am


empty halls, walls built
to protect, not dissect
us from humanity, inhumanely
abandoned, out of sight, mind
sent wandering

daughter
mother, grand
each white hair
earned, here i still am
though am i
still

the only answer
comes from you

look at the pretty dogwood
out the window, alive and
thriving

yes, i am still too.

The pictures is by Greg Laychak and is the prompt for One Shoot Sunday. One poet who takes up the challenge will have their poem published in Greg's upcoming book.

76 comments:

David Allen Waters said...

this is so powerful...having spent much time in retirement homes with the guest I have heard such words spoken often...the forgotten.

Happy easter friend

dustus said...

"here i still am
though am i
still"

Great reversal there, and fitting that it leads back to the contemplation of nature. Well played. Hope you and your family are having an excellent Easter!

PattiKen said...

How dreadful to be warehoused and be totally powerless to do anything about it except be, still.

Powerful piece, Brian.

Mama Zen said...

This is really moving, Brian.

TALON said...

So touching. A perfect poem for the heart-touching photo.

Tracy said...

Happy Easter, Brian. This is a very moving poem about being still and still being.

hedgewitch said...

Nice mix of the inevitable with the existential, brian. In another reversal, often age seems a horror to be avoided to the young, and youth begins to appear the same way to the old. We adapt, we abide.

Bonnie said...

heart-wrenching words and image Brian - i doubt that much will have changed when it is our turn

Monkey Man said...

Looks like we both hit on age inspired theme this Sunday. I remember seeing a 100 year old interviewed on TV. She looked into the camera at one point and simply said "I'm still in here."

Beachanny said...

We would all rather stay out of the institutions. Yet..often we're the last to go, no one to look after us, and left to those paid to do it. Very sad, indeed.

California Girl said...

aging sucks and the old become invisible.

this is a painful soliloquy.

A.Decker said...

Yes. Very well done.

Barbara said...

Very touching!

DJan said...

That grandmother and the flowering tree... an absolutely touching poem and picture. Thank you for this Easter gift.

jen revved said...

An able poem, Brian. this prompt so lends itself to cliches about old people in nursing homes. I can tell you that they aren't to be pitied and don't want our pity. xxxj

Hilary said...

wow, I love it.

Claudia said...

beautifully captured brian..i like the whole piece but esp. stanza 2 and 3 and how they melt together

John (@bookdreamer) said...

we must never loose sight of the humanity of those that need care

ayala said...

So touching...and beautiful. Happy Easter to you and yours.

Mona said...

I shudder to think ever getting old as that...I love the last lines! They are so powerful!

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
I have to "echo" or agree with all your previous commenter(s)...I sometimes think people "suck" too who don't take the time to "see" or "care" about their elders.(Great,Grand,Parents...)

Instead, it seems like they rather "forget," "ignore," or "push" them out the way in order to keep up with...Rat Race, Technology, Work, Money, you (not only you, but anybody) fill in the blank _________.
Thanks, for sharing!
DeeDee :-/

booguloo said...

Very thoughtful Brian.

Fireblossom said...

Nice job, Brian. :-)

Daniel said...

This one tugs at me. Things I don't want to really think about.

Goofball said...

out of sight but thanks to you not out of our hearts

G-Man said...

Happy Easter Son....G

Josh Hoyt said...

Great job very touching and thought provoking.

Gigi Ann said...

I think sometimes we forget that about the older ones, ( "yes, I am still too.") Very sad.

Mona said...

PS. Happy Easter yo you and your family!

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

This makes me sad. So true. So VERY true.

Happy Easter to you T and the boys.

libraryscene said...

well said...what a brilliant end, too..reading made me glad I went visiting today...

signed...bkm said...

I am too..still alive...each precious moment....it is too...bkm

Ruthiey said...

FEEL this one. Wow. Great poem.

Reflections said...

each white hair
earned, here i still am
though am i
still

the only answer
comes from you

gone to the depths of wondering, lost between worlds, lost between hearts.

Travel & Dive Girl said...

Very powerful. The photo invokes sadness and loneliness those in retirement homes must feel...

Betsy said...

How can she see out those windows? The certainly weren't built low enough for anyone in a wheel chair. Ack.

I visited a nursing home once a week during my college years. Those sweet people are so lonely. Many are never visited by their family.

Glynn said...

It makes me ache for her - but it's all of us, too. Good poem, Brian.

Raven said...

A touchingly powerful poem. Great write!

Pat Hatt said...

Sad but so very true
Another fine write from you
Some are just like a dungeon or worse
Not even describable by a good curse
Every word rings clear
But I doubt much will change I fear

Also sent you an email about jingle
Don't worry I won't mingle
I don't think it worked though
As stupid blogger doesn't with emails at my show
Beats me why
But I'll ignore that girl and/or guy

Bossy Betty said...

Oh my. This touched my heart.

Tara Miller said...

This is very touching, love. After working in a nursing home for a while I can tell you they sill love, they still feel, they still hurt, they know when you're there and when you don't come....they still are....and we should treat them as such.

You gave powerful words to this picture. :)

chrisd said...

It's nice to meet someone who loves the elderly like I do. I used to do visitation; some of them are so lonely.

Beautifully done.

Mmm said...

oh dear, reminds me how my kids love to tease how one day they will put me in a home and such. I hope I'm long gone before that should ever happen.

Anyway, just wanted to wish you a very happy Easter, even if mostly done by now. I haven;t visited blogs in so long but did want to say thank you for your continued support and such. It means a lot. :)

tattytiara said...

A sentiment dear to my heart.

Cinner said...

very powerful Brian, I sometimes see it like the lost souls, with no one visiting. it is very sad. I have no children, I often think that everyone needs their families around. My neighbor is so good with his dad, there are also stories of people that never miss a day. angels to be found all around. hope your easter was great. have a wonderful week. smiles.

Kodjo Deynoo. said...

Yes and until death, we still are, we may fade, forget and wait on others for our independence is gone, but yes we still are. I like the point you make here

Ocean Girl said...

Hauntingly sad.

TechnoBabe said...

I wonder if we will all be in a place like that one day.

Hope you and your family had a special day together for Easter.

James Rainsford said...

A brilliant response to what was a very challenging photo prompt. This manages to be both poignant and authentic, without a trace of sentimentality. Well done.

Lorraine said...

Gorgeous, sad, so many abandonned, I visited my mom all the time and I was with her the weekend she died..and she meant the world too me...being busy is no excuse

slommler said...

My heart and mind have been filled with this very thing. I have a friend who has been signed up with hospice instead of a nursing home. Blessing and sadness all rolled into one. Hard words to hear...harder to say!
And there he lays...very still...waiting.....
Hugs
SueAnn

ladyfi said...

So powerfully written about how we tend to abandon the old, who need us most.

Nessa said...

Very well done. The challenge is to still remember we are. We saw an older woman yesterday in rehab who was all alone but she continued to try and engage the world around her.

Austin said...

This was brilliant. I remember visiting family in here. Very well said Brian, thanks!

Just Be Real said...

The picture says it all. Wow! Powerful.

Gaston Studio said...

Powerful post and powerful graphic Brian. I'm so lucky to know that will not be the way I'll spend my final days.

Mom said...

So powerful...here I am getting closer to that time... memories like this past weekend are engraved on my heart...they will strengthen and sustain me...when the time comes to wait patiently for my Savior to call. Love you, Son.

budh.aaah said...

It makes me cry. I cannot imagine a fate like this..tis worse than death. Beautifully written Brian.

Heather said...

oh no, this is so sad....i've got chills. I often think about what it is like to feel so alone...very powerful! well done

Valerie said...

I feel sad ... and kind of worried ...

C Rose said...

This really touches the heart Brian, I found it to be simply perfect. The final line is stunning. Lovely piece ~ Rose

Helena said...

"Here I am" This reminds me of a movie where the family created a picture wall in their Mothers room showcasing beautiful images of when she was young and vibrant...I'm still here...I'm still that person on the inside...Wonderful write Brian ...♥ ஆεlεɳa ~.^

Patricia Caspers said...

Thoughtful, though-provoking, portrait.

Magpie said...

The photo and your words break my heart. This is why I am at my mother's taking care of her. I couldn't stand seeing people parked in a hallway and left to cry and scream.

Syd said...

I hate that they are forgotten. So sad. I visited my mother and her friends just about every day.

Steve Isaak said...

Excellent use of visual description and emotion - balanced, able work.

Sue said...

I am so fortunate that my parents are able to take care of each other in their own home. What a blessing.

=)

Sheila Moore said...

I love the reversal that adam referred to as well - it really stood out

Paul C said...

It's the grandmother who shows and provides a role model for her family: a daily resiliency and zest for life. Yes, there is beauty even in a place like this.

LebDreaM said...

nice Poem

Steve Isaak said...

Good, well-executed piece.

deb colarossi said...

it shatters me.

and your thoughts...
exceptional.
no surprise.

I hope you had a fabulous Easter weekend, Brian. One of my girls who is away at school surprised us by getting a ride home. It was more than enough as always. Life is always hard and beautiful , and full of hope .

Katherine said...
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Katherine said...

A powerful & emotive verse to read Brian. Losing one's independence, I believe, is one of life's worst tragedies & something I believe can for some people be worse than death.
What makes it even sadder, are those whom are left in this state alone, without loved ones and those that are taken advantage of.
I have worked plenty with the aged and found them to possess great fortitude, wisdom & they have some of the most amazing stories to tell. There is much to learn from our elders!
This picture depicts loneliness & it makes me feel sad. :(

Liza Ursu said...

"yes, i am still too."

Emotion drawn here, big time!

Pastor Sharon said...

This brings me home to where I work. There are so many who still are here. . . we cannot choose to bury our heads in the sand while all these with wisdom, who were once our voice, wait for us to be theirs.

I love this. . . and it makes me sad.