you are the moon
pitted & often
draped in the shadow
of other heavenly bodies,
reflecting only what has
been cast upon you
but when you walk into
the room, all the water
in my body pulls at once,
great surging tides, and i
want to break frothily upon
the shores, around your
ankles, climbing higher,
as you wade into me.
put a seashell to your
ear, hear me breath
"i love you."
Monday, March 7, 2011
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Oh, I'm first! That's a first. Brian, this is just beautiful and I envy the recipient of your love.
Really love this bro, feel this way every time she walks in the room!
Some men just have a way with the women because of their way with words!
Oh yeah, metaphorizing! Beautiful. Say it loud to the one you love dude. The moon and tides are alway fascinating...and this...more fascinating.
You touch me so with moon and sea...so happy for your love (to your wife)
what beautiful words to find here this morning- OH just love love this one.
very passionate!
quite the love poem!
This is immensely passionate. Even a little overwhelming to the recipient.
Brian, I didn't know you felt this way about me. I knew you liked me, but I had no idea I affected all the water in your body.
incredible.
Now how's that foot????????
A love note to start the day! Rejoice in what you have.
I would love my husband to write poetry for me. Instead I get a shopping list for the hardware store. S'all good.
Beautiful poem for your forever lover. Sweet!
bonnie, we use them to make up for our looks...smiles.
thanks vm...for those that caught it on twitter last night my foot is not broke, just soft tissue damage and i will be off of it for a few days...
Oh, I love what you did there. I want to do that sometime. hahaha I LOVE it.
A beautiful love poem. the love of your life is SO very lucky!
wow... that was... beautiful..... just beautiful
Brian--This was really beautifully done! I like to think my sun, moon post inspired you, along with your wife, of course :)!
Oh, boy! What a title! LOL
Nothing like dropping by WaystationOne for a little early morning romance!
Now those are some good "good tidings"!
Beautiful. I grew up by the ocean so your poem evoked not only wonderful emotion but also imagery I haven't seen in a long while.
btw, the previous "janet" comment is mine :)
Just lovely.
So beautiful!
So evocative.
Your silver tongue makes a girl melt....I love you so
-T
The title made me laugh and the poem made me sigh - just lovely, Brian!
I agree - lovely!!
unbelievable.. you must sweep your wife off her feet daily
Very cool. A very sensitively used analogy.
Such a beautiful way to show your love. Your words are magical.
(Sorry to hear you injured your foot. Get well.)
Oh my! Someone is incredibly lucky to be connected to you .....
Awww. The women are melting and the men are stealing your lines...loved this.
So lovely and romantic!
sexy and romantic...LOVE it Brian!
You and I are on the same "wavelength". Lovely, Brian.
Brian, I do not 'read' you every day. I EXPERIENCE you every day. WOW!
Magical, Brian. :-)
Hey, Brian! How have you been lately??
The moon? the sea? Two of the most gorgeous things our world has. Very beautiful love poem.
It's magically delicious!
Methinks the moon tugs at your heart!
You'd better read this to her!
Bad foot...Monday morning...We all need a love like this! Would surley make getting out of bed in the mornings easier (or perhaps more difficult, I suppose) Beautiful write! Yet another validation for my church of moon worship!A must ad to my hymn book :) And about that comment on my greenday post...am I just paranoid (no pun intended) or what?
Heal well fellow poet...soft tissue damage? More painful than a clean break :(
At first I thought you were going to go all raven and swear, I'm sure she wouldn't care.
But you tricked me and made me read each line for free.
Oh aren't you a sly fellow, keeping things all nice and mellow.
Again another great post, I like the blog you host.
So you use words to make up for looks? damn you must have read an awful lot of books.
hahahahaha Oh I got you good, I know you knew I would.
Oh, wow! This is just . . . wow!
I just love it :)
Brian this is beautiful, is this how you hurt your foot, glad to hear it was not broken, has to be sore for sure. sorry you had a long wait in the er...feel better soon. smiles.c
She just has to LOVE these.
=)
That is such a wonderful way to say it, the entire description.
Wow! I am impressed! What a poem! I am glad I stopped by today and got the chance to ruminate on it.
This is what I want my prince charming to say to me when I find him!
I will love him right back!!
Beautiful poem!
So sweet!! Be sure to read it out loud to her!
This one gave me goosebumps! :)
So, you hurt your ankle just to have more blog time? lol. Hope it's better soon!
Shut up already! You just don't quit!
Your wife is very blessed to have such a wonderful man. I know her love for you is reciprocated because of the inspiration to continue to write this way. Which means, you too are a very blessed man.
A lush and lovely poem, Brian...I very much enjoyed that, as I'm certain the lady in your life must have done...:)
Lynette
Imagination Lane
This one just gets better and better...starting at that awesome title. :) Hope your foot heals quickly.
That is so utterly beautiful!! It made me melt, even though it wasn't directed towards me.
How wonderfully sweet,Brian. I love the imagery of the tides in you pulling towards your loved one. That is exactly how it feels, isn't it? It is universal.
awww man I wish someone had written that for me!!! sigh.. it's lovely.
Amazing, my friend.
So sweet. VERY, VERY sweet.
This wasn't too shabby . . .should have left the seashell bit out but otherwise I quite like it and you know how I feel about poetry.
Please say you printed this one out and left it hidden somewhere for your wife to find. Big points!
"The lunatic, the lover and the poet are of imagination all compact"...Shakespeare's nailed you ;)
Truly, this is beautiful.
Beautiful and I love the title.
Just superb! or I would rather say something more than that.. I loved absolutely. Thanks for the title too.
*gasp for breath* this is absolutely beautiful and passionate
Hi! Brian...
Now, I don't have to read between the lines here Brian, that is the language called...love.
Thank, for sharing the very lovely words "in your" poem.
By the way, I really like the play on words in the title Of your poem too!
DeeDee ;-D
Oh, Brian, I hope one day a man will write a poem like that to (about) me. Wow, you are such a romantic, a very rare find thee days when the world is mostly cruel and pragmatic...
Have a great day dear friend,
xoxo
Nice Brian.
Utterly, utterly beautiful.
Caliente .. Caliente... Caliente!! That was saucy, sweet! What can I say but you have a WONDERFUL way with words ... and I love the word play in the title of this post too!
Wonderful, Brian! I have missed reading your blog - Internet provider slacking - again! ☺
Did you write this in Sydney? :) I can imagine this written there....
We're back in Casa, holiday was great but too short!
Beautiful soul warming words
I think this is one of my favorites of the poems I have read by you. Just love it! I'm going to have my husband read it to me and tell me he CAN NOT LAUGH! :P
I'll let you know how it goes...
How lovely!
Maggie X
Nuts in May
I'm drawn to anything related to the moon - this just makes me swoon! Beautiful!
So lovely. The imagery is truly beautiful.
beautifully written and uniquely you, Brian. an amazing way to describe being in love.
Sweet sweet sweet.
Nice. I have felt that way often. And it ebbs and flows.
After reading the title, I really wasn't expecting that kind of subject matter. Man, all I can say is that I've studied a lot of poetry and yours is truly first rate, especially your metaphors. It would be awesome if you put together a book of poetry from a collection of your best work.
this was divine brian. just loved it.
awesome title Brian.
"all the water
in my body pulls at once"
tsunami!
Oh, this is fantastic!
Sorry for the delayed commenting. I've been off the blogs for awhile and am just now catching up.
well, the sun is painful & harmful to your eyes...at least the moon is gentle
cool
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