Monday, March 7, 2011

luna-tix and sons of beaches

you are the moon
pitted & often
draped in the shadow
of other heavenly bodies,
reflecting only what has
been cast upon you

but when you walk into
the room, all the water
in my body pulls at once,
great surging tides, and i
want to break frothily upon
the shores, around your
ankles, climbing higher,
as you wade into me.

put a seashell to your
ear, hear me breath
"i love you."

90 comments:

DJan said...

Oh, I'm first! That's a first. Brian, this is just beautiful and I envy the recipient of your love.

Austin said...

Really love this bro, feel this way every time she walks in the room!

Bonnie said...

Some men just have a way with the women because of their way with words!

Jerry said...

Oh yeah, metaphorizing! Beautiful. Say it loud to the one you love dude. The moon and tides are alway fascinating...and this...more fascinating.

Lorraine said...

You touch me so with moon and sea...so happy for your love (to your wife)

Heather said...

what beautiful words to find here this morning- OH just love love this one.

A Daft Scots Lass said...

very passionate!

Pauline said...

quite the love poem!

Tabor said...

This is immensely passionate. Even a little overwhelming to the recipient.

Rob said...

Brian, I didn't know you felt this way about me. I knew you liked me, but I had no idea I affected all the water in your body.

Vodka Mom said...

incredible.


Now how's that foot????????

Daniel said...

A love note to start the day! Rejoice in what you have.

Elaine said...

I would love my husband to write poetry for me. Instead I get a shopping list for the hardware store. S'all good.
Beautiful poem for your forever lover. Sweet!

Brian Miller said...

bonnie, we use them to make up for our looks...smiles.

thanks vm...for those that caught it on twitter last night my foot is not broke, just soft tissue damage and i will be off of it for a few days...

happygirl said...

Oh, I love what you did there. I want to do that sometime. hahaha I LOVE it.

AmyLK said...

A beautiful love poem. the love of your life is SO very lucky!

natalee said...

wow... that was... beautiful..... just beautiful

She Writes said...

Brian--This was really beautifully done! I like to think my sun, moon post inspired you, along with your wife, of course :)!

Jinksy said...

Oh, boy! What a title! LOL

tracy said...

Nothing like dropping by WaystationOne for a little early morning romance!

Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillow said...

Now those are some good "good tidings"!

Janet said...

Beautiful. I grew up by the ocean so your poem evoked not only wonderful emotion but also imagery I haven't seen in a long while.

Mijayami said...

btw, the previous "janet" comment is mine :)

Loukia said...

Just lovely.

Bossy Betty said...

So beautiful!

Colleen said...

So evocative.

Tara Miller said...

Your silver tongue makes a girl melt....I love you so

-T

TALON said...

The title made me laugh and the poem made me sigh - just lovely, Brian!

The Bug said...

I agree - lovely!!

Vodka Logic said...

unbelievable.. you must sweep your wife off her feet daily

tattytiara said...

Very cool. A very sensitively used analogy.

Myrna R. said...

Such a beautiful way to show your love. Your words are magical.

(Sorry to hear you injured your foot. Get well.)

Helen said...

Oh my! Someone is incredibly lucky to be connected to you .....

Belinda said...

Awww. The women are melting and the men are stealing your lines...loved this.

ladyfi said...

So lovely and romantic!

LauraX said...

sexy and romantic...LOVE it Brian!

Nancy said...

You and I are on the same "wavelength". Lovely, Brian.

Steve E said...

Brian, I do not 'read' you every day. I EXPERIENCE you every day. WOW!

PattiKen said...

Magical, Brian. :-)

Maggie said...

Hey, Brian! How have you been lately??

The moon? the sea? Two of the most gorgeous things our world has. Very beautiful love poem.

Mighty M said...

It's magically delicious!

Eva Gallant said...

Methinks the moon tugs at your heart!

blueviolet said...

You'd better read this to her!

Natasha said...

Bad foot...Monday morning...We all need a love like this! Would surley make getting out of bed in the mornings easier (or perhaps more difficult, I suppose) Beautiful write! Yet another validation for my church of moon worship!A must ad to my hymn book :) And about that comment on my greenday post...am I just paranoid (no pun intended) or what?
Heal well fellow poet...soft tissue damage? More painful than a clean break :(

Rhymetime(aka Pat) said...

At first I thought you were going to go all raven and swear, I'm sure she wouldn't care.
But you tricked me and made me read each line for free.
Oh aren't you a sly fellow, keeping things all nice and mellow.
Again another great post, I like the blog you host.
So you use words to make up for looks? damn you must have read an awful lot of books.
hahahahaha Oh I got you good, I know you knew I would.

Mama Zen said...

Oh, wow! This is just . . . wow!

pink dogwood said...

I just love it :)

Cinner said...

Brian this is beautiful, is this how you hurt your foot, glad to hear it was not broken, has to be sore for sure. sorry you had a long wait in the er...feel better soon. smiles.c

Sue said...

She just has to LOVE these.

=)

TechnoBabe said...

That is such a wonderful way to say it, the entire description.

Shanae Branham said...

Wow! I am impressed! What a poem! I am glad I stopped by today and got the chance to ruminate on it.

Kaylen said...

This is what I want my prince charming to say to me when I find him!
I will love him right back!!

ayala said...

Beautiful poem!

gayle said...

So sweet!! Be sure to read it out loud to her!

Betsy said...

This one gave me goosebumps! :)

So, you hurt your ankle just to have more blog time? lol. Hope it's better soon!

Pastor Sharon said...

Shut up already! You just don't quit!

Your wife is very blessed to have such a wonderful man. I know her love for you is reciprocated because of the inspiration to continue to write this way. Which means, you too are a very blessed man.

Lynette Killam said...

A lush and lovely poem, Brian...I very much enjoyed that, as I'm certain the lady in your life must have done...:)

Lynette
Imagination Lane

Magpie said...

This one just gets better and better...starting at that awesome title. :) Hope your foot heals quickly.

Raven said...

That is so utterly beautiful!! It made me melt, even though it wasn't directed towards me.

The Retired One said...

How wonderfully sweet,Brian. I love the imagery of the tides in you pulling towards your loved one. That is exactly how it feels, isn't it? It is universal.

McGillicutty said...

awww man I wish someone had written that for me!!! sigh.. it's lovely.

Marla said...

Amazing, my friend.

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

So sweet. VERY, VERY sweet.

Baino said...

This wasn't too shabby . . .should have left the seashell bit out but otherwise I quite like it and you know how I feel about poetry.

Joybird said...

Please say you printed this one out and left it hidden somewhere for your wife to find. Big points!

ds said...

"The lunatic, the lover and the poet are of imagination all compact"...Shakespeare's nailed you ;)
Truly, this is beautiful.

KB said...

Beautiful and I love the title.

Pranavam Ravikumar a.k.a. Kochuravi said...

Just superb! or I would rather say something more than that.. I loved absolutely. Thanks for the title too.

Claudia said...

*gasp for breath* this is absolutely beautiful and passionate

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Hi! Brian...
Now, I don't have to read between the lines here Brian, that is the language called...love.
Thank, for sharing the very lovely words "in your" poem.
By the way, I really like the play on words in the title Of your poem too!
DeeDee ;-D

Zuzana said...

Oh, Brian, I hope one day a man will write a poem like that to (about) me. Wow, you are such a romantic, a very rare find thee days when the world is mostly cruel and pragmatic...
Have a great day dear friend,
xoxo

Just Be Real said...

Nice Brian.

Valerie said...

Utterly, utterly beautiful.

Katherine said...

Caliente .. Caliente... Caliente!! That was saucy, sweet! What can I say but you have a WONDERFUL way with words ... and I love the word play in the title of this post too!

adeeyoyo said...

Wonderful, Brian! I have missed reading your blog - Internet provider slacking - again! ☺

BLOGitse said...

Did you write this in Sydney? :) I can imagine this written there....
We're back in Casa, holiday was great but too short!

budh.aaah said...

Beautiful soul warming words

Margaret said...

I think this is one of my favorites of the poems I have read by you. Just love it! I'm going to have my husband read it to me and tell me he CAN NOT LAUGH! :P

I'll let you know how it goes...

Maggie May said...

How lovely!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Barbara Shallue said...

I'm drawn to anything related to the moon - this just makes me swoon! Beautiful!

lori said...

So lovely. The imagery is truly beautiful.

haikulovesongs said...

beautifully written and uniquely you, Brian. an amazing way to describe being in love.

Cheryl said...

Sweet sweet sweet.

Syd said...

Nice. I have felt that way often. And it ebbs and flows.

Ben said...

After reading the title, I really wasn't expecting that kind of subject matter. Man, all I can say is that I've studied a lot of poetry and yours is truly first rate, especially your metaphors. It would be awesome if you put together a book of poetry from a collection of your best work.

trisha said...

this was divine brian. just loved it.

Liza Ursu said...

awesome title Brian.
"all the water
in my body pulls at once"
tsunami!

Stranger said...

Oh, this is fantastic!
Sorry for the delayed commenting. I've been off the blogs for awhile and am just now catching up.

Goofball said...

well, the sun is painful & harmful to your eyes...at least the moon is gentle

Алиса said...

cool