Thursday, March 24, 2011

55 - entre vous et moi

heart beat, my chest
blessed to be, the tree
you carve our initials
in, sap slipping free
run your tongue, along
the blade, taste and
see, notre amour

stars break ebony
reflect on lake skin
only warmth in that
small space between
us, distance our
breath races to
catch in the
stillness, mon amour

oui

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

104 comments:

Mighty M said...

Tres bon!

I totally took French in college and I totally had to look up how to say "good". :) But I rocked the "tres". Haha...

Fluid Idleness said...

What a sweetly beautiful poem!

Dulce said...

:-)
So it seems LOVE is in the air!!!

Beautiful -Brian!

ayala said...

Beautiful, Brian.

Claudia said...

ah -c'est magnifique mon ami - beaucoup de romance dans ce poèm..

Magpie said...

I don't understand much French, but I know love when I read about it. :)

Paul C said...

Most have carved their love on a tree, but sipped the sap from the tree? Totally sensuous.

Titanium said...

Beautiful- in any language, but particularly the one you've chosen.

Stranger said...

Oo-la-la, such a lovely, steamy-sensual, spring scene.

Brian Miller said...

doesnt everything spice up a bit when you add some french...just saying...

Linda said...

This is just exquisite Brian.

william said...

tres bien monsieur :)

PattiKen said...

C'est si bon, mon ami.

rosaria said...

"...distance our brath races to catch in the stillness, mon amour."

And it's not even Valentine!

Mrsupole said...

French always seems to sound beautiful but added to licking the sap it sounds dangerous. With age comes the knowledge to never lick a knife, spoons are okay, but never a knife. But it does sound sexy somehow.

Great 55.

God bless.

Myrna R. said...

Oui. Tout le monde aime l'amour. Votre mots sont tres romantique.

Helena said...

Oh my! Sexy Sweet....Pleasing to the senses!Bella!

♥ ஆεlεɳa ~.^

Barbara said...

sweet and romantic!

Brian Miller said...

mrsu, when age catches up to me i will spoon...smiles.

David Allen Waters said...

spring has sprung, romance is in the air ;)

Sophia said...

Not sure if it is the fact that Spring has sprung or something else, but wow! Nice job.

Hilary said...

Beautiful.. and I love the little touches en français. Tres bien, mon ami.

Jannie Funster said...

Merveilleux! J'aime the tree carving metaphor tres beaucoup.

xo

Natasha said...

This one might linger...certainly doesn't compell me to rant, lol je ne parl pas francais, so that being said, the true definition of spring fever. I like this you :)

Elaine said...

Love...it sounds so beautiful in any language. I must try to say it in 55 sometime!

5thsister said...

heck...you can say anything in French and it would sound so romantic! Loving the love expressed here.

KB said...

French is such a romantic language. Beautfiul 55, Brian.

lime said...

blessed to be the tree....

now there's a vivid image that sparks imagination. as always a powerful 55.

tracy said...

Magnifique. Vous êtes le maître !

G-Man said...

Sacre Coeur!! Tres Formidable Mon Fils!!
Without sounding too much over the top with the Man-Love. That was about as Romantic as it gets!
I'm saying no more!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End!

hedgewitch said...

Remembering what Gomez always said to Morticia, "You know what it does to me when you speak French, cherie."

A love poem extraordinaire.

Me said...

Aww...I liked this one a lot.

:)

Alice Audrey said...

All that lake skin makes you want to skim a hand along it, oui?

Pearl said...

So romantic. :-)

Pearl

Betsy said...

ahh...so fun! And the french...the perfect touch!

Heather said...

oui, c'est si romantique. wow. This is totally steamy and sensual, too! all wrapped up in one great little story!

Tara Miller said...

Je t'adore votre poeme romantique mon cheri.

heartspell said...

A beautiful canvas painted in the colors of love. :)

Fireblossom said...

You forgot to say, "Let me take you to zee casbah"!

drybottomgirl said...

"stars break ebony" who needs to spin in a yard when you words of romance make the heart beat and the head spin! Nice 55 and wishing you and yours a sweet weekend...

Life with Kaishon said...

How do you do it?
Amazing Brian. Seriously AMAZING!

Pheromone Girl said...

Stars break ebony. WOW.

Beautiful and sleek.

Shanae Branham said...

Wow! That poem was intense. Very seductive. You have a magical way with words. Thanks for asking about my daughter's finger. It healed up nicely.

Joybird said...

dang!

Steve E said...

OK! OK! OK! I'll BUY the book. OK?
Each of your one page pieces lately is a gem, a stone cut and polished, ready to display for eternity!

Seriously!

RNSANE said...

Hey, I'm pretty fluent in Spanish but French eludes me...but I still get the romance of your poem...you are a sweetheart, aren't you?

Mine is at:

http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/03/friday-flash-55-rest-in-peace-elizabeth.html

budh.aaah said...

mmm..mm...

adeeyoyo said...

How lovely! French is indeed the language of love - so sensual! BUT I don't understand it. Not sure if you licked the sap from the tree or the blood from your chest, LOL. I remember my first boyfriend and I cutting our fingers to become blood brothers...

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

How lovely! C'est bon!

Mona said...

what a lovely little verse mon ami!

:)

Zuzana said...

I so love when we get to see your romantic side, you know that your writing about romance and love is my absolute favorite.;)
Your wife is a lucky girl.;)
Allez, bon vendredi Brian,
xoxo

Olivia said...

Yes Brian, it does get spiced up!
Wonderful words you have woven together- I had to look up- hehe

Don't understand French excepting the regular pleasantries; but it adds up to the glamor for sure- :D

French Smiles xox

anthonynorth said...

Very romantic today. Nice one.

sonny said...

short and to the point....fantastically conveyed....


everybody is speaking french here...

hmmm..

hmmm.,..

yes !

bon apetit....oui ...grins [ there ends my french ]

hpicasso said...

uhhh,,we?

Peace, hp

Ami Mattison said...

What a sensual poem, Brian! And some great enjambment here. French does indeed add a dash of romance--Love the play of "notre amour" and "mon amour." Finally, that tongue along the blade is not only painful sounding, but a nice bit of naughtiness as well, my friend. ;)

Anya said...

So so lovely words
I think Love is in the air :-)

Raven said...

Oooooh nice! So fun and flirty!

Valerie said...

Beautifully romantic, Brian.

tony said...

Love & Mother Nature.Nice One Brian.

Just Be Real said...

Very lovely Brian. You know I never carved my name into a tree. Maybe I should begin. Blessings.

Alan Burnett said...

Seems a little dark to me Brian. But, of course, you do dark just as well as you do light.

ladyfi said...

Very romantic! Lovely.

JStar said...

Your feelings passionately displayed in your words...This is breathtaking Brian...

Jill from Killeny Glen said...

Lovely!

TechnoBabe said...

oui.

Lorraine said...

I can not tell you how inspiring the love between you and your wife, a, lifetime of it...I haven't seen it much

slommler said...

Oui for sure!!! Beautiful....lovely...hot!!!
Hugs
SueAnn

TALON said...

Love and tree sap - what could be sweeter? :)

ds said...

Sigh....must be spring ;)

LadyCat said...

Magnifique! Love the image of the stars over the lake at night.

Maggie May said...

Beautiful words and images.
One of the things I never did was carve initials in a tree. I scratched them out on many a pebble though on different beaches.
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Lolamouse said...

lovely!

Mama Zen said...

The line about carving initials . . . just beautiful.

Akelamalu said...

OoLaLa I love it!

Nezzy said...

I speak Hillybilly, not French but I know love when I see it!!!

Beautifully written Brian!

God bless ya Man and have a fantastic Friday!!!

Sue said...

Oh, mon Dieu! Mes joues sont rouges.

;)

Kathy's Klothesline said...

I took French in middle school many, many years ago. As our teacher would say .... tres bien. Gee, I hope I spelled that right .....

Margaret said...

I remember carving initials in a tree... but it was a secret and no one to share it with! Gives me an idea to go out in our backyad and carve all our initials in a tree! No licking knives around the 3 year old though! :)

Daniel said...

Somethings brewing or about to brew. Awesome, especially when it lasts and runs deep!

Umamaheswari.A said...

Je l'aime . Well penned and Wonderful poem.

bsain said...

Lovely!
Makes me want to go out and drink in the beauty of a sunny day (with company ;-) )

Belinda said...

Qui a été très romantique.
Only warmth in that small space...

Kaylen said...

LOVE the ending!

MorningAJ said...

Not content with using English really skillfully, you have to start on French! Trés bon mon ami!

Debbie said...

Seems like spring has turned your thoughts to love!

Brian Miller said...

thanks for the love today everyone...have some catching up to do in a bit..traveled to NYC for the shorty awards today...they are not until monday but made it a long weekend...catch up with you in a bit!

Nikki Rules said...

Bravo mon ami! C'est une réussite...

Joanna Jenkins said...

Beautiful. Makes me wish I'd paid closer attention in high school French class.
Have a great weekend, jj

secret agent woman said...

Or maybe toi et moi at that level of intimacy. :-)

magiceye said...

wow! this is brilliant!

r3m3mb3rm3 said...

Nice I did that exact same thing....carve my initals in a tree. Im going to start again....start writing I need to, i dont feel like myself when I dont and it has been to long since the last time. and this time I am not going to care what my parents think or anyone else. I dont know why i have waited this long to start again sort of like picking up pieces when youve been crushed. why didnt i start earlier? well im starting now i dont know how but i will....):)(:(

r3m3mb3rm3 said...

I found it....):)(:(

Reggie said...

Brian, this is sweetly tender...I like it a lot.

Luke Prater said...

Another good 'un, Brian. I do like your style, always have (and I don't blow smoke :)

Warmest Salad

Luke

Goofball said...

Très émouvant

hope said...

How sweet!

Hubby carved our initials in a tree during high school. When we'd been married a few years and he discovered the tree had been removed, he was not happy.

Now THAT's true love. :)

Marla said...

Very sweet and sappy. Get it? Sappy? Nevermind. lol

trisha said...

sweet, passionate and loving. beautiful poem brian.

trisha

Liza Ursu said...

"stars break ebony
reflect on lake skin"

the language of love.
Oui!

mama-face said...

Enchanting. (i wanna say more but sometimes I feel that I am not respectful enough to your work.)

:)

Syd said...

Really nice one. The sap is rising.

lori said...

Beautiful and intoxicating...that's all there is to say :)

Who Is Afraid of Alfred Hitchcock? said...

Bonjour! Brian,
Merci, pour le partage ... Magnifique!
DeeDee ;-D