heart beat, my chest
blessed to be, the tree
you carve our initials
in, sap slipping free
run your tongue, along
the blade, taste and
see, notre amour
stars break ebony
reflect on lake skin
only warmth in that
small space between
us, distance our
breath races to
catch in the
stillness, mon amour
oui
Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.
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Tres bon!
I totally took French in college and I totally had to look up how to say "good". :) But I rocked the "tres". Haha...
What a sweetly beautiful poem!
:-)
So it seems LOVE is in the air!!!
Beautiful -Brian!
Beautiful, Brian.
ah -c'est magnifique mon ami - beaucoup de romance dans ce poèm..
I don't understand much French, but I know love when I read about it. :)
Most have carved their love on a tree, but sipped the sap from the tree? Totally sensuous.
Beautiful- in any language, but particularly the one you've chosen.
Oo-la-la, such a lovely, steamy-sensual, spring scene.
doesnt everything spice up a bit when you add some french...just saying...
This is just exquisite Brian.
tres bien monsieur :)
C'est si bon, mon ami.
"...distance our brath races to catch in the stillness, mon amour."
And it's not even Valentine!
French always seems to sound beautiful but added to licking the sap it sounds dangerous. With age comes the knowledge to never lick a knife, spoons are okay, but never a knife. But it does sound sexy somehow.
Great 55.
God bless.
Oui. Tout le monde aime l'amour. Votre mots sont tres romantique.
Oh my! Sexy Sweet....Pleasing to the senses!Bella!
♥ ஆεlεɳa ~.^
sweet and romantic!
mrsu, when age catches up to me i will spoon...smiles.
spring has sprung, romance is in the air ;)
Not sure if it is the fact that Spring has sprung or something else, but wow! Nice job.
Beautiful.. and I love the little touches en français. Tres bien, mon ami.
Merveilleux! J'aime the tree carving metaphor tres beaucoup.
xo
This one might linger...certainly doesn't compell me to rant, lol je ne parl pas francais, so that being said, the true definition of spring fever. I like this you :)
Love...it sounds so beautiful in any language. I must try to say it in 55 sometime!
heck...you can say anything in French and it would sound so romantic! Loving the love expressed here.
French is such a romantic language. Beautfiul 55, Brian.
blessed to be the tree....
now there's a vivid image that sparks imagination. as always a powerful 55.
Magnifique. Vous êtes le maître !
Sacre Coeur!! Tres Formidable Mon Fils!!
Without sounding too much over the top with the Man-Love. That was about as Romantic as it gets!
I'm saying no more!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End!
Remembering what Gomez always said to Morticia, "You know what it does to me when you speak French, cherie."
A love poem extraordinaire.
Aww...I liked this one a lot.
:)
All that lake skin makes you want to skim a hand along it, oui?
So romantic. :-)
Pearl
ahh...so fun! And the french...the perfect touch!
oui, c'est si romantique. wow. This is totally steamy and sensual, too! all wrapped up in one great little story!
Je t'adore votre poeme romantique mon cheri.
A beautiful canvas painted in the colors of love. :)
You forgot to say, "Let me take you to zee casbah"!
"stars break ebony" who needs to spin in a yard when you words of romance make the heart beat and the head spin! Nice 55 and wishing you and yours a sweet weekend...
How do you do it?
Amazing Brian. Seriously AMAZING!
Stars break ebony. WOW.
Beautiful and sleek.
Wow! That poem was intense. Very seductive. You have a magical way with words. Thanks for asking about my daughter's finger. It healed up nicely.
dang!
OK! OK! OK! I'll BUY the book. OK?
Each of your one page pieces lately is a gem, a stone cut and polished, ready to display for eternity!
Seriously!
Hey, I'm pretty fluent in Spanish but French eludes me...but I still get the romance of your poem...you are a sweetheart, aren't you?
Mine is at:
http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/03/friday-flash-55-rest-in-peace-elizabeth.html
mmm..mm...
How lovely! French is indeed the language of love - so sensual! BUT I don't understand it. Not sure if you licked the sap from the tree or the blood from your chest, LOL. I remember my first boyfriend and I cutting our fingers to become blood brothers...
How lovely! C'est bon!
what a lovely little verse mon ami!
:)
I so love when we get to see your romantic side, you know that your writing about romance and love is my absolute favorite.;)
Your wife is a lucky girl.;)
Allez, bon vendredi Brian,
xoxo
Yes Brian, it does get spiced up!
Wonderful words you have woven together- I had to look up- hehe
Don't understand French excepting the regular pleasantries; but it adds up to the glamor for sure- :D
French Smiles xox
Very romantic today. Nice one.
short and to the point....fantastically conveyed....
everybody is speaking french here...
hmmm..
hmmm.,..
yes !
bon apetit....oui ...grins [ there ends my french ]
uhhh,,we?
Peace, hp
What a sensual poem, Brian! And some great enjambment here. French does indeed add a dash of romance--Love the play of "notre amour" and "mon amour." Finally, that tongue along the blade is not only painful sounding, but a nice bit of naughtiness as well, my friend. ;)
So so lovely words
I think Love is in the air :-)
Oooooh nice! So fun and flirty!
Beautifully romantic, Brian.
Love & Mother Nature.Nice One Brian.
Very lovely Brian. You know I never carved my name into a tree. Maybe I should begin. Blessings.
Seems a little dark to me Brian. But, of course, you do dark just as well as you do light.
Very romantic! Lovely.
Your feelings passionately displayed in your words...This is breathtaking Brian...
Lovely!
oui.
I can not tell you how inspiring the love between you and your wife, a, lifetime of it...I haven't seen it much
Oui for sure!!! Beautiful....lovely...hot!!!
Hugs
SueAnn
Love and tree sap - what could be sweeter? :)
Sigh....must be spring ;)
Magnifique! Love the image of the stars over the lake at night.
Beautiful words and images.
One of the things I never did was carve initials in a tree. I scratched them out on many a pebble though on different beaches.
Maggie X
Nuts in May
lovely!
The line about carving initials . . . just beautiful.
OoLaLa I love it!
I speak Hillybilly, not French but I know love when I see it!!!
Beautifully written Brian!
God bless ya Man and have a fantastic Friday!!!
Oh, mon Dieu! Mes joues sont rouges.
;)
I took French in middle school many, many years ago. As our teacher would say .... tres bien. Gee, I hope I spelled that right .....
I remember carving initials in a tree... but it was a secret and no one to share it with! Gives me an idea to go out in our backyad and carve all our initials in a tree! No licking knives around the 3 year old though! :)
Somethings brewing or about to brew. Awesome, especially when it lasts and runs deep!
Je l'aime . Well penned and Wonderful poem.
Lovely!
Makes me want to go out and drink in the beauty of a sunny day (with company ;-) )
Qui a été très romantique.
Only warmth in that small space...
LOVE the ending!
Not content with using English really skillfully, you have to start on French! Trés bon mon ami!
Seems like spring has turned your thoughts to love!
thanks for the love today everyone...have some catching up to do in a bit..traveled to NYC for the shorty awards today...they are not until monday but made it a long weekend...catch up with you in a bit!
Bravo mon ami! C'est une réussite...
Beautiful. Makes me wish I'd paid closer attention in high school French class.
Have a great weekend, jj
Or maybe toi et moi at that level of intimacy. :-)
wow! this is brilliant!
Nice I did that exact same thing....carve my initals in a tree. Im going to start again....start writing I need to, i dont feel like myself when I dont and it has been to long since the last time. and this time I am not going to care what my parents think or anyone else. I dont know why i have waited this long to start again sort of like picking up pieces when youve been crushed. why didnt i start earlier? well im starting now i dont know how but i will....):)(:(
I found it....):)(:(
Brian, this is sweetly tender...I like it a lot.
Another good 'un, Brian. I do like your style, always have (and I don't blow smoke :)
Warmest Salad
Luke
Très émouvant
How sweet!
Hubby carved our initials in a tree during high school. When we'd been married a few years and he discovered the tree had been removed, he was not happy.
Now THAT's true love. :)
Very sweet and sappy. Get it? Sappy? Nevermind. lol
sweet, passionate and loving. beautiful poem brian.
trisha
"stars break ebony
reflect on lake skin"
the language of love.
Oui!
Enchanting. (i wanna say more but sometimes I feel that I am not respectful enough to your work.)
:)
Really nice one. The sap is rising.
Beautiful and intoxicating...that's all there is to say :)
Bonjour! Brian,
Merci, pour le partage ... Magnifique!
DeeDee ;-D
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