Thursday, March 3, 2011

55 - apple of my i

great birds tore
prometheus' liver
daily, where he lay
chained to a rock
for stealing fire

& i wonder what
will they do,
finding i have
stolen you

yet that is not
why i tremble
in your presence

wrap your wings
round us, let's
share the apple,
gaining knowledge
of each other,
both good and...

Tell a story in 55 words. Give it a try or just read more, go see g-man.

Over at One Stop, It's Friday Poetically with yours truly, where we are celebrating Spring!

92 comments:

David Allen Waters said...

LOVE is always a risk worth taking....brilliant one dude.

Elaine said...

hmmm...I see a parallel between the greek myth, the garden of eden and any modern day love story. simply profound me thinks!

... Paige said...

oooo, well done

Jill said...

I like this one Brian!

Does there have to be a price for love? Me thinks NOT.

Heather said...

oooooh, I LOVE LOVE this one, Brian. sharing the apple. Wonderful stuff here tonight!

Sue said...

To be loved by a poet is a grand thing!

=)

Green-Eyed Momster said...

Oh, how I've missed you and your posts, Brian.

Thanks for stopping by. I have been feeling nostalgic lately where my bloggy friends are concerned. Something about losing friends IRL, that makes you realize what makes you happy. Now that I'm getting better, I'm remembering all of the people who touch my life and I'm reaching out to let them know that I appreciate them...(hint, hint) It'll take me quite some time to catch up with everyone.

Wishing you and yours all the best as always.

Keep up with your fantastic writing!!

Daniel said...

Oh man, top shelf today brother!

happygirl said...

Sexy. whew. Thanks.

Hilary said...

I love how you play with words... as in your title.

dustus said...

Excellent combo of Greek Myth with Biblical allusion. From stealing fire to the unknown through tempting... nicely done.

KB said...

Love it!

moondustwriter said...

Ok so Adam has the Coliseum; you have prometheus
should I have written something from Byzantine history?

Nice piece Bri - 3 weeks and counting

Monkey Man said...

Whoops! Don't let the big guy find out. Oh. Too late? Sorry.

Alice Audrey said...

If the apple is evil, how does it keep the doctor away?

This is wonderfully sweet and lyrical.

G-Man said...

Knowledge is power!
Such agony for stealing a Zippo!
Most excellent 55 Son.
Thanks for playing and your great support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Me said...

Love it! Nice 55, Brian...perfect how you ran out of words at just that moment. :)

Tara Miller said...

ooohh, thou dost tempt me as I'm reading this while sitting oh so close to you my love ;-)

Tabor said...

Do you talk like this...or just write?

Magpie said...

Such a nice blending of beliefs. Did you have to add a word above to end in just the right spot?

Brian Miller said...

ha...me & magpie...actually i had to cut a few above to get it that far...

Brian Miller said...

between yesterdays and todays can you tell what i have been studying...lol...will move off the world religeon theme tomorrow...smiles.

Rhymetime(aka Pat) said...

Guess what it's Pat, oops I meant the cat.
I'm here, I'm there and I'm back to ruffle your hair.
Oh wait you don't have much of that, oh snap I'm a sly cat.
I love the greek myths and the lore, even if there was a fair bit of gore.
Your read was great as usual, even if I'm a bit unusual.
Yeah that last bit was bad, but I didn't want to make you mad.
As I have to let you keep up a bit, so you don't have a rhyming fit.
See you soon, as I sign off still a loon.

Syd said...

I think that the risk is worth it. All for love--we do a lot for that.

Cloudia said...

Wow! So joyous!



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Vicki Lane said...

Is the single, sexless god jealous, perhaps of his creations shared happiness?

Suz said...

Oh Vicki asks a great question
Brilliant Brian...I am a fan

Brian Miller said...

thanks suz...and i just emailed her that same comment...smiles.

Margaret said...

Well, this "55" ran out of breath at a convenient spot! Fun reading!

hpicasso said...

no need for...bad

good call

Peace, hp

thank you for stopping by

Deidra said...

Very well done, sir.

TALON said...

This was a fabulous 55, Brian. No need to finish that last line, is there?

tracy said...

Just dropped by to visit an old friend...who seems to get better with age...

Susan Deborah said...

A mix of Greek, Biblical and personal myths make a wonderful salad of words.

Have a good weekend, dear Brian.

Hope T, and the juniors are swimming.

Joy always,
Susan

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Very well done!

Zuzana said...

Wow, this was beautiful Brian.;) Love and to do anything for love appeals to my romantic mindset.;)
And I have always been intrigued by Greek mythology.;)
Have a great Friday,
xoxo

anthonynorth said...

You've just got to go for it.
Great words.

Valerie said...

Brilliant 55. I just love where you broke off...

MorningAJ said...

Why is it that some people hear apple and think Eden but I hear apple and think pie?

Either way I guess it could be sinful!

Ami Mattison said...

Right on, brother! Brilliant! Love love! And damn the consequences! Besides, apples are tasty and good for ya!

the walking man said...

Eat all the apples you want...you psalmist you.

Just Be Real said...

Thank you dear Brian for sharing. Blessings.

5thsister said...

and thus the fall! in more ways than one...very nice write!

Pauline said...

a monumental cliffhanger!

Eleonora said...

Love knows no fear

Alan Burnett said...

Excellent Brian : and I want the last word to be "gooder". I know there is no such word, but there should be.

Selina Kingston said...

How do you produce such consistently good work. You are amazing ....

Akelamalu said...

Ah the dreaded apple makes an appearance.

Fab writing Brian, I love it.

Kim A. said...

Only you can create music out of mixed metaphors. :-D

♥namaste♥

Raven said...

Outstanding! I love what you did with this poem!

Dulce said...

Adam Eve's...who's to blame!?

Lorraine said...

Yes! it's about time someone takes the apple's side, I should have known it would be you!

ethelmaepotter! said...

Oooh, when I read this, I thought, "He's playing a risky game here - how is his audience going to react?" Well, it seems your audience is quite enlightened, which I guess I don't find surprising, after all.

Like all, I love the blend of myth and Biblical. Or is it myth and myth, "gaining knowledge of each other"...?

Ben said...

Awesome. Love the mythology. I'm still looking for my little bit of fire to steal from the heavens.

kenny said...

Fabulous! Enjoyed that like a good, juicy, mango chomped right into! And no mean feat...you've been posting regularly since 2008!!!! Hats off, hats off...you deserve some form of recognition!!

annell said...

Wonderful image!

PattiKen said...

Love the analogy that came to mind: stealing love is most certainly stealing fire. But I think the gods are on your side and you'll get away with it.

ladyfi said...

Wow - moodily romantic!

Myrna R. said...

It's beautifully creative writing like this that truly feeds my soul. I missed reading your posts so much. Thank you Brian for inquiring about me.

Mama Zen said...

I really like this!

Jannie Funster said...

Ah, the apple. It's always the apple of time and mystery. :)

Brian Miller -- your words are a gift to the world -- glad you share.

xo

Olivia said...

That is one neat cross!
I loved how you started with birds.. fire and then the fruit ;)

Oh well! May I say this being a fine tribute to ...

Hugs xx

RNSANE said...

That is such an evocative work, Mr. Miller. Absolutely wonderful. I would certainly like to know more!

drybottomgirl said...

Glad to see there are two sides to every story....you romantic! have an awesome weekend!

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Apples are my favorite fruit.

Nice 55, Brian!

Joybird said...

This is a random reaction but are your kids reading "Percy Jackson and the Olympians"? Cause you are lovin' the mythological references this week.

Kavita said...

Ooohh... chilling and yet so romantic...

"yet that is not
why i tremble
in your presence" -- this says it all!!!

Love knows no bounds...does it now!? I am sure Adam and his gal didn't know a thing about bounds when they shared their apple and ... (ahem)

(smiles)

Claudia said...

agh - the liver - and it grew every day anew cause he was immortal..ongoing pain..and from there to the apple..and the quivering..love and pain as soulmates? think they are quite close..and spring is in the air..nice and think you don't need herakles to rescue you ..smiles

Stacy Uncorked said...

Absolutely brilliant! Have a great weekend, Brian! :)

Alan said...

evil. good and evil? lol. Nice 55 Brian.

Алиса said...

Cool! My parents always read me greek mythology when I was kid, and that's one of my favorites. And the Garden/Devil references are good. Reminds of weed kinda

lime said...

it's really an age old tale isn't it? you never cease to amaze me with how much of a wallop you can pack into 55 words.

rebecca said...

biblical greek myth....hmm....didn't know about this....do tell more! me likes!

Rhymetime(aka Pat) said...

A new shout out in my post, this one was really the most.
It was really sly, I'm such a clever guy.
Whoops screw that, meant cat!

Joanna Jenkins said...

At first I thought this one would land in my top 10 faves from you, but that list has gotten so long it's more like the top 100.

Very nice.

Have a great weekend, jj

sage said...

Very nice, I like how you connected the ancient myths--all warning us of our mortal limits--but love transcends, somehow.

ladynimue said...

Very delicious !! i loved this ..

Bonnie said...

Brilliant Brian. Love the last stanza.

Jerry said...

Tremble for sure!

Ténèbres à la lumière... said...

Hi! Brian...
Both good and...apple, Adam and Eve, comes to my mind too!
Prometheus...Thanks, for sharing your 55 words too!
DeeDee ;-D

Mona said...

Yea, lets all set to steal our Steal!

Goofball said...

oh I love it, I love how you applied the old images to your love. Great!

versebender said...

Just excellent....superb flow from stanza to stanza...makes it all of a piece. Vb

Mijayami said...

Love it! And a 55 to boot :)

Mmm said...

I just don;t know how you summ up so much with so few words but well done, Brian. It's all a matter of perspective love, isn't it? the good and the bad as one might call it.

Paul C said...

Your mixture of allusions works wonderfully.

Belinda said...

Oh, yes. Gaining knowledge both good and bad is the only balanced way to do it. Awesome 55!

Marla said...

This one almost scares me a little. Maybe that's the point, yeah?

budh.aaah said...

Incredibly delicious aftertaste your poetry leaves in the mouth..at times..that is when it is pulling at my heartstrings

California Girl said...

excellent juxtaposition of mythology.

lori said...

and...

I want more :) excellent as always!

trisha said...

i hope they wont be jealous for your stealing a lil love :)