Tuesday, February 1, 2011

One Shot: same old cassette tape

on the b-side resides
songs people love but
airwaves are dominated
by popular thought process
beat drops & you singing
not real-eyes'n what your
saying, sinking deap, with
every lyric you repeat,
b-b-bass brains mush, they hush
your lips, sooth hips swayin,
fingers swirl world view, &
thats when they know they
gots you...just another mis-
begotten zombie, revolution
long forgotten, CHANGE
just a slogan on a t-shirt
ready to go to the Goodwill.

and every little ting, gonna be alright...

dope, same stuff sold on street
corners, make you see colors
where greys exist, but it don't
feed a family more'n grits &
hominy, the state of my union
distressed, like the jeans i am
dressed, holes in the knees
pressed to the earth, til it hurts
praying insane...but the song
remains the same...

Hear my song. People won't you listen now? Sing along.
You don't know what you're missing now.

BOOM, BOOM, POW, how you
like me now, blue tie, starched
shirt, corporate sponsored til
it hurts, i hear the words you be
layin', just take away the A...
layin', just take away the A...
layin', just take away...

One Shot Wednesday - where all the cool poets come to spit rhymes or maybe just verse...write a poem, come join us. The party gets started at 5 pm EST.

Italicizes lyrics are taken from Bob Marley, Led Zeppelin and the Black Eyed Peas. Heading to an open mic tonight for African American History month...wish me luck.

106 comments:

Hilary said...

I thought there was a few familiar words. :) Nicely done and best of luck with the open mic night. Will it be recorded?

rosaria said...

My! Go man! An open mike where this belongs, Yahhhhh!

Janice said...

This was a fun one! And, wow...open mic. That takes courage. Luck to you tonight. You have so many directions in your artistic talents.

moondustwriter said...

Have fun on the open mic Bri.
I like your music reflections you need to bind them up and do a collection.

Best from the Moonie

Steve E said...

OPEN mic...how exciting, even a slight challenge, but not FEAR certainly. More an opportunity!

So THIS is why you've bee practicing rapping on the blog...

Have a good time tonight!

Sue said...

Smooth transitions back and forth from you to Marley.

Well done!

=)

Pastor Sharon said...

yes, I'd like to request a first edition of that cassette tape you will be making with all this sing-song poetry you write over here.

Eva Gallant said...

Good luck!

Daniel said...

You should recite this one in a smoky, hole-in-the-wall coffeehouse, sporting a hipster goatee and wearing a beret. I will respond to your reading with the snapping of fingers. I can dig it.

Bernie said...

Good Luck, you will do just fine my friend....would love to hear you!......:-)Hugs

Mama Zen said...

Luck? Hell, Brian, you don't need no stinkin' luck!

Baino said...

Open mic? Haha good luck. Can you beat box?

BLOGitse said...

There will be chage, BIG change...soon.

Good luck!

Jen said...

Grits, hominy, collard greens, pinto beans, ham hocks...good thing I like that stuff since I'm poor...

Open mic? VLOG!

annell said...

Good Luck Brian. I know you will do fine! Wish I could be there.

Goofball said...

hihi are you going to take the mic and sing? cool

B-sides....geez we're getting old.

Vicki Lane said...

Love 'Change just a slogan on a t-shirt ready to go to Goodwill.'

Chris G. said...

Pre-gaming hm? Well I suppose I'll follow suit!

I write about music, and your surges *with* music, ever filled with beats. Smooth yet gritty, with some good references to other musical fun (every little ting, gonna be alright; as well as the BOOM BOOM POW, of course...) Best of luck at the open mic - I'm sure with the power you put into your words, you'll have no problem man! Never done an open mic, or a real reading myself, as yet...

tattytiara said...

I can hear the music.

repressedsoul said...

I agree with Rosaria I'd have love to have heard this read! Great you could have taken it so many ways Brian. Excellent!

JRM said...

Well done, well done! I really enjoy how you made that move.

LauraX said...

"CHANGE
just a slogan on a t-shirt
ready to go to the Goodwill." powerful line Brian!

Timoteo said...

I'll be at the Goodwill to buy that t-shirt!

anthonynorth said...

Great words and a sing-a-long, too. What more could we ask.

Captain Dumbass said...

Don't worry, bout a thing...

hedgewitch said...

It's bad when even the music is makin zombies--and I hate those fake 'distressed' jeans that someone else made look cool for you cuz you're too damn lazy to wear out your own clothes...nice one Brian--this will rock the house.

kenny said...

Liked this! Cassettes. Wah. Chrome dioxide, no less.

Beachanny said...

What a capture here, Brian! We, who witnessed in our souls the real rock revolution stand with mouths agape as the sounds born in slavery and work gangs make gangsta cool and oddbods billionaires. A twisted and strange turn of events that you explore well here, my friend. Gay @beachanny

Diana Lee said...

What a fantastic commentary and would so love to hear this live :-) You are always such a pleasant surprise.

flaubert said...

Good luck with the open mic!
I would love to hear this read.
I am one for wearing out our jeans
and not buying them that way.
Pamela

Asobime said...

Open mic? You will blow them away with this one!

What a bebop confession! The rhythm didn't quit and this HAS to be heard out loud.....mega stuff, Brian.

Lady Nyo

Liza Ursu said...

"they gots you"
yeah, dig it.
this is a wicked cool piece Brian.

AmyLK said...

Love the poem. Good luck at the open mic night

Natasha said...

Boom boom pow
You got us now
One heck of a ride
Beyond the A side.
Love this! The old cassette tape dominates much of my music library..so right from the title you had me, and there was NO slowing down. Great write! Best of luck.

Betty said...

Oh great! Hope the open mic night goes amazingly well.

TALON said...

You don't need luck - you've got super talent! :) Enjoy Brian! I know your audience will!

william said...

VERY COOL MATE, LOVED HOW U USED THE RECORD, WELL DONE ;)

Carys said...

I'd really like to hear this read aloud Brian, has rhythm an musicality just zinging along. Nice one!

Mighty M said...

Very nice - make sure you put just the right "oohmph" into that "Boom Boom Pow!". :)

mama-face said...

way to slam, Brian. awesome.

Linda said...

Oh Brian - I am so far out of my "familiar" with this. I'm afraid this is where we separate the grandma's from the young folk :)
Judging from this amazing poem you will be a sure hit tonight.

Belinda said...

Love this. Keep challenging the status quo, Brian and kick some ass at the open mic tonite.

secret agent woman said...

Now why you want to go and get Black Eyed Peas stuck in my head?

PattiKen said...

Good one, Brian. So are you going to add a little rap to you repertoire? Good luck at open Mic, though I doubt you'll need it.

Heather said...

Good luck tonight, Brian!!! Go get em...Would love to hear this one! xxoo

signed...bkm said...

Brian you be spitting some ryhme there...want to hear this and you on youtube....ready, go...bkm

Rebecca S. said...

Authenticity in music seems rare in the mainstream these days...

Good Luck! Did you end every line as if it were a question? That's what the slam poets do...:)

Myrna R. said...

Great writing. I'm so glad to be reading your lovely poetry again. Good luck with the open mike. I know you'll be great.

Maggie said...

Nice!! Good luck Tonight Brian! :D

Fragrant Liar said...

Hey, good luck tonight. Fun one-shot.

Teresa said...

Certainly good luck! This is great.

ds said...

Not the "same old tape" at all. Great stuff, Brian! Best of luck tonight.

kkrige said...

Have fun tonight Brian. I love when music can inspire words. You can feel the beat in the word drop

BOOM

(but I noticed a slight spelling mistake - 7th line deap=should be deep? If not what does deap mean?)

Corbie said...

By this time your probably well into your open mic, I hope it went well! That said, wooo hoo! This poem has got me all excited. All of the lyrics quite familiar but my how you magically transform words to flow with the lyrics. Music is my heart and soul so of course I'm loving a poem about music. Thank you for sharing!

CM said...

So cool! Good luck, hope you had fun!

Life with Kaishon said...

So unbelievable. Your talent leaves me speechless!

Carl said...

Great One Shot! I enjoyed this one!

Shewriting said...

I love, love, love this! the last verses really ties it up nicely - damn lying corportate whatevers (i.e., most of us adults - sucks to be a grown up)

Cool to hear about your open mic night...all I can say is, "watch out, now, Eminem ;)"

amyjosprague said...

This is great Brian. So intense and lyrical, practically singing in my head! Once again--creative!

Kavita said...

Ooohh... deep serious and intense!! And so lyrical too!! I was practically singing it aloud (in rap form ofcourse)

And I bet you had fun at the open mic earlier...

Zuzana said...

Oh, good luck tonight Brian, or was it yesterday.;)
I thought I recognized some of the text, I guess I know my music.;)
Happy mid week dear friend,
xoxo

Alegria Imperial said...

One does not 'read' your poems like this one, Brian; one must 'rock' it, 'rap' it, with heart and soul and body to follow each word, each swing of feeling, each leap of thought! Great shot, as usual! Thanks again!

@farflungstar said...

Beautifully crafted, enjoyed each word and interplay and wanted more :o)

budh.aaah said...

Like Marley and Led Zep a lot. Nice use of the lines there.
Hmmm..but nothing would be good enough for em if they dont like/accept you for the soul you are...
All the best for open mic Brian.

Shadow said...

nice, tying together music and poetry like this!

slommler said...

Loved the beat!! Best of luck on open mic night!! How exciting!
Hugs
SueAnn

Ami Mattison said...

Ah, now that's some spoken word! Love the beat, love the music. Great work!

TechnoBabe said...

What a shame if change is only on a tee shirt headed to the Goodwill.
You will do great on open mic, I am sure. You rock.

She Writes said...

Bob Marley and Led Zeplin. Nice and eclectic.

the walking man said...

have fun tonight!

Anonymous said...

it doesnot takes long to forget revolution and become family guys with so much burden that they forget their own existence.

your poems are always extraordinary.

trisha
mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

Lynne H. said...

Oh I so can hear this being read at an open mic.. Pop-Pop-Slam-Clap*

LOVED THIS!!!!!!!

Glynn said...

There is a rhythm to this, a kind of syncopation - and it reads like a Rap song. Good one, Brian.

OJ Gonzalez-Cazares said...

you are rockin' those lyrics my friend!! I'm sure you had a great time last night ;)

Lorraine said...

wow always and yes I checked the b side and found treasures ;)

Old Ollie said...

Cool and lyrical - love the topic too.

poetgranny said...

Wow! Glad to hear about open mic night because you are definitely a voice for the world to hear! You should record your stuff on this blog so we could all enjoy. Love your stuff!

gautami tripathy said...

Gotta sing it aloud!

tears of the sky fall to the ground

SY said...

music brings out the funny in people lol

Rachel Hoyt said...

Good luck at open mike! I totally found myself singing / rapping this one in my head. It was awesome. :)

My One Shot: The Likido Diet.

Lisa said...

What could be better than waking up to good poetry first off in the morning? Thank you for this!

Roll about in your open mic experience. Think the beat box comment is a fab idea...

:)

Friko said...

'break a leg', you'll do fine.

you can't go wrong.

ladyfi said...

Good luck with the open mike!

... Paige said...

brilliant

Nezzy said...

Open mike...woohoo!!!! Your gonna have a blast. Please, please share the tape!!! Fans are awaitin'!

God bless and have an amazin' day!!!

Claudia said...

fast-paced and tight write - i would love to hear you read this...hope the open mic went well

Vicki Munn said...

i rapped the poem all the way through! that was awesome :)

randallweiss said...

I enjoy how you've used pop culture effectively.

Selina Kingston said...

Good luck - you'll be fab ....like you always are !

blueviolet said...

Now that would be fun to hear you perform it.

James Christopher Sheppard said...

This is spot on. I'm only in my late twenties, but I already see the brain deadening of the younger generation from media and music. But it's still the same dope, indeed. Loved the poem.

Magpie said...

I like some of these new styles you're trying out. Very rhythmic and zippy. :) Good luck tonight! You're a winner no matter what.

lori said...

So, what happened? Tell us please, how did it go? I love this, as usual. The whole thing is great, but as I am inclined to share my favorite lines, I shall reveal them now:

"...just another mis-
begotten zombie, revolution
long forgotten, CHANGE
just a slogan on a t-shirt
ready to go to the Goodwill."

darsden said...

Music makes my world go round!

Heather Grace Stewart said...

This will be excellent as spoken word. Have fun!

jessicakristie.com said...

Love you Brian, everything about you just sparkles. ♥♥

Syd said...

Good stuff. Those old cassettes have gone the way of dinosaurs.

Reflections said...

Brilliant piece... go get 'em on the open mic night. You'll be great.

haikulovesongs said...

LOVE your One Shot! Hope you enjoy open mic night.

Apryl Gonzales Sweet said...

Well done! Rhythm got me movin' I feel it like deep bass. Open mic for sure, it'll rock.

Shashi said...

Its so beautiful.. I loved the way you have put one line with a ting...

ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/01/whispers-emptiness-and-soul.html

Candie Bracci said...

Haha nice touch,even though sometimes we need to change the record!Really clever.

JH said...

this was az real az it git? yea a sleepy drop indeed lol, best wishes to you at open mic night. JH

June_Butterfly said...

Hi,Brian.Great to read your work,again.Feels like home.Felt like singing,too.Haha!!

Thanks for the support ,always.Though i'm up on my neck with personal stuffs will definitely go back to this beautiful world of words.

Marla said...

How was open mic?? Like I need to ask. :-)

Steve Isaak said...

Mind-weaving, wonderful work. Superb use of sounds, flow, everything.