Saturday, February 5, 2011

crayon love songs

if i wrote you a love song
it would be in crayon &
mostly in pictures, leaving it
open to interpretation, unveiling
something new each time you
read it, on the mood or the
moment and depth of
these feelings----

lemon yellow sun, a giraffe
with blotchy spots down his
neck, none of this
'eye' 'heart' 'sheep' nonsense
no it would be deep, maybe
 a playful squirrel or aliens
landing on cheese moons,
something you might see on
display outside kindergarten
classrooms----

it may not look like anything
but it would be real, not some
popped up version of romeo
and juliet, no it would be back
when you blushed at holding
hands and kisses were atom
bombs obliterating your world
but you couldn't help smiling--

so what do you say, i know
you are busy, enough things to
do to make you all dizzy, but
i brought my crayons and
some scratch paper, how about
we color a love song, today.

71 comments:

Lorraine said...

...Imagine being that loved....amazing Brian

the walking man said...

last verse second line?

Crayons are cool. I like crayon drawings. Now if I could only make my hands stop shaking and my heart cease the fluttering from the thought of you writing me a love poem with crayons I may yet make it through the morning.

deb colarossi said...

sweet,
yet real.
she's very lucky

Lori said...

What fun words this Saturday morning...I like the sound of coloring a love song...this put a smile on my face...happy weekend coloring love songs..

Arnab Majumdar said...

I had those, a long time ago.

Now, some have let go. Some I've lost, while some have just withered away.

As deb said, she is very lucky indeed :)

Cheers,
Joy...

TechnoBabe said...

Super sweet. Crayons and love songs. Beautiful.

trisha said...

nice invitation, i wonder if she will be able to resist it. :)

have a beautiful weekend brian with lots of sketching.

draw a rhino for me if you please.

rosaria said...

Marvelous and sweet and touching. Hallmark could pay you big ones!

Birdie said...

awww, I'm happy I stopped by before leaving for our trip, some romance is welcome in this rainy gray weather :-) have a wonderful we Brian!

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

this is so sweet.
and now I want to color :)

Zuzana said...

I would love for someone to colour a love sing with me...
Beautifully romantic...
Have a great weekend dear Brian,
xoxo

haikulovesongs said...

love it!

Valerie said...

Colouring a love song... wonderful. Sigh!

Cathleen said...

This is great.. so original, fun and as everyone has said sweet.

Everyday Goddess said...

i love the connection of how children draw from their hearts, so pure and loving.

Eva Gallant said...

I love that! So sweet! You are such a romantic!

SY said...

I'm melting. I feel like being in love just so that I can draw a picture in crayon

Daniel said...

Crack open a bottle of the good stuff ... and let the colors decide the mood. It is O.K. if you go outside the lines.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

and it's not even Valentine's Day!

Jerry said...

OOOOOooooooOOOOOOOooooo. I like this a lot. Have you ever read anything and thought...."Man, I wish I had thought of that!"
On a side note...wondering what you would do with a salmon crayon?

Bonnie said...

Tender and endearing Brian.

Raven said...

So touching and heartfelt. She's a lucky lady.

Myrna R. said...

What a sweet and loving poem. I hope you do color your love song. I know it will express the greatness of your heart.

David Allen Waters said...

playfgul, sweet, colorful...just like love :)

5thsister said...

Favorite line? "It may not look like anything but it would be real..."

A bit of lovely on this rainy morning.

ladyfi said...

Crazy crayon love! Wonderful!

Liza Ursu said...

what is deeper than a playful squirrel or aliens
landing on cheese moons?
Love should be playful.

Claudia said...

aawww - this is so lovely - i was smiling all through the reading ...and think i should grab some crayons and start writing on my love poem right now..

Amy said...

Brian, I love love love this one!! It so takes love back to when it was fresh, innocent, and pure.
When PS and I first met I worked at a day care. She got crayon drawings quiet often back in the day. It truly is about the little things that count!
Thanks for resurrecting that memory!

Vodka Logic said...

i love it... please teach me how to write poetry

AngelMay said...

Landing on cheese moons.... How cool is that? :)

Caty said...

that's so sweet...you could probably put Hallmark out of business :)

mama-face said...

Last stanza, or should I say verse, is pure love song indeed.

Love the playfulness and sincerity.

Cloudia said...

Not a syllable out of place!

Wonderful lines and images.

Really a true POEM- KUDOs




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Stranger said...

Brian, you rock the fun yet poignant verse.
Playful creative and spontaneous is the best kind of love (and life) there is. I learn so much about living and life from your poetry, thank you for sharing these words with the world.

Jill said...

So very sweet.

Barbara said...

How romantic, Brian. I hope she will.

Maggie May said...

What an imagination you have, Brian.
Searching for crayons!
Maggie X

Nuts in May

Candie Bracci said...

Ah it's magical that one!

Kate Hanley said...

I like the images you would draw with the crayons. Wondering if could more of those into the poem - show us some of these crayon love poems. Just an idea, I like the poem though. It's sweet without being sickly.

Mona said...

I love crayon drawings too :) specially love doing the sun drawings with them.

What a sweet way to 'paint love' :)

Betsy said...

How could she say no to such a sweet invitation? The laundry mountain can wait a while longer. It's not like it's going anywhere! lol.

Kathe W. said...

ah- we sometimes go to a restaurant that has paper on the table tops and crayons for the adults- we always have such a sweet time drawing.

Dulce said...

coloring a love song... that's what you've done here so beautifully, Brian

Deidra said...

The giraffe with the blotches...something about that makes me smile. A love song like that would be a hit indeed.

TALON said...

Loved this. Love should be playful and inspired...

Ocean Girl said...

How true, Brian.

Hilary said...

Mr. Romance.. with a full box of Crayolas.

william said...

ah happy memories mate, superb...

Heather said...

oh brian this is so very sweet!!!! i love it! xo

Kat_RN said...

I like! One of my favorites!

Laura said...

this has me just smiling from ear to ear.

Steve E said...

Brian you surprise and amaze me day after day--but this one tops all--it has the tempo and a beat to rival any symphony's Third Movement, hidden rhyming rivaling any else, great love presence evoking early puppy-love-memories, and is full of "Brian-speak", those indefinable wordings which define YOU!
Excellent!
PEACE!

Sophia said...

This HAS to be my favourite of yours yet. LOVE it. Now...I best run to Target to pick up a box of crayons! LOL :)

Vicki Lane said...

Color her lucky!

Rebecca S. said...

Hmmm...I think this would make a better love song than a poem...or is that your intention? It's sweet, though.

Velvet Over Steel said...

Great & original poem!! I bet my neice and nephew would love this! :-)

Hope your having a wonderful & Warm weekened!! ~ Coreen

Bernie said...

My favorite poem evah is written in crayon......so love it, it is from my son....:-)Hugs

Mijayami said...

Fantastic! Love the idea :)

Sue said...

Nice.

Warm and waxy.

=)

budh.aaah said...

The only kind of song one would like

Pastor Sharon said...

Wow! Thanks for reviving a memory. .

Goofball said...

wow, I'd lack the self-confidence and would be trying to control my message too much...unable to leave it open for interpretation.

and maybe therefore loosing its depth and meaning

Boom Boom Larew said...

I think this is one of my all-time favorites, Brian. It's the pure simplicity of love at it's finest!

Margaret Bednar said...

I LOVE that last line! ...color a love song. Fantastic. So playful and sweet, this poem. An artist friend of mine said that crayons stand the test of time - they don't fade. Not a bad thing to used for a loved one after all.

Mmm said...

Oh that is so darling. Love this.

The Empress said...

That one was so pure and vulnerable...it has me misty eyed.

It is a trusting love, to write like that is a trusting love.

Beautiful.

Susan Deborah said...

Who would refuse such a sweet way of expressing love and of course, the witty Brian!

Joy always,
SUsAN

Shewriting said...

very beautiful...I don't know you personally but there is always something in your love poems that seems to flow from your soul more so than anything else that you write...(which would make sense...you guys must be soul mate, eh? :)

Susannah said...

Wow, that is SO beautiful!

Well written Sir. :-)

Syd said...

A good thought about coloring a love song.