Sunday, February 6, 2011

160 - surgeon general, save me



drunk again

bottle bedded
next to me

following its curves
room spins

there really
should be a
warning label
on your body

consume too
much and...

and...

and...

What can you say in 160 characters? Say it, then tell Monkey Man.


The incredible painting was done by Michelle Rummel at Shellartistree, a friend, beautiful artist and a poet. Thank you for allowing me to write about your art.

There is also this incredible photo prompt over at One Stop Poetry for One Shoot Sunday.

90 comments:

Fireblossom said...

And...? Yes, Brian?

He's out of it, lol.

Fireblossom said...

PS--UNO!!!

Ocean Girl said...

True.

jabblog said...

Beautiful :-)

Bonnie said...

I don't believe for a minute that you want to be saved!

TechnoBabe said...

Probably very appropriate for Super Bowl Sunday.

Jinksy said...

Loved your 160 and you body painting!

Claudia said...

..and...i think that's a nice way to get drunk...maybe even better than getting drunk on poetry...smiles

dustus said...

Nicely written 160 to a lovely painting.

repressedsoul said...

Oh yes...not a stranger to this feeling!

Great artwork Brian, and a lovely little flash of words to go with it.

Everyday Goddess said...

omg, too painful to contemplate! excellent art makes me feel better.

Valerie said...

Lovely, lovely picture, Brian. Heehee I wish I knew what came after the and...

Jerry said...

...

gautami tripathy said...

Like the "and" ending!

let it grow big

Lorraine said...

wow all i could think of is 'souplesse'

Daniel said...

Good pairing today. The big question is ... and?

Jannie Funster said...

A joy to behold her painting.

LOVE the poem!!

xo

moondustwriter said...

Great combo of poetry and paint.
A sad state for the woman

Happy Sunday Bri

Ami Mattison said...

I know far too much about bedding bottles, spinning rooms, and women who lack warning labels! Great write!

... Paige said...

nice piece and art, just gotta love the art

Nikki Rules said...

A good choice of art too, is it just me or is that house spinning?

5thsister said...

You weave such beautiful tapestries with your words! Lovely.

Stacy Uncorked said...

*hic*



:)

trisha said...

poor guy :)

i have my wholehearted sympathy for him.

both of the pix are fantastic.

Neva Flores said...

oh............wow!

Celestial Dreamz said...

even I can just say a WOW! it is a pleasure reading your verse.

hedgewitch said...

Have to agree with the point--all the most dangerous things are unlabeled by nature. Lovely painting, and excellent poem.

Mighty M said...

I bet the hangover from that is much more enjoyable than the one I have this morning!! :)

Zuzana said...

I like the inspiration you drew from the image. It is so interesting to see what people feel and see when gazing at a picture.
Hope you are having a lovely Sunday,
xoxo

Shell said...

Thank you Brian, for honoring me/my art with your graceful words and evocative prose...and my gratitude to all, for kind words about my painting. You've truly made my day...
~shell

Candie Bracci said...

Great work Brian!Great drawing!Also an amazing painting from the other artist!Viva Artists!Oh and what btw?Lol

Monkey Man said...

Great Sunday 160, Brian, and thanks for sharing that beautiful image. I am loving how you have pulled together images and 160's of late.

David Allen Waters said...

great words my friend, and thanx for the intro to the artist, always on the look out for great art :)

Eva Gallant said...

and?

budh.aaah said...

Nice 160..senses reeling under it still...
:)

Thoughts Not Lost said...

Amazing painting, your friend is so very talented!!

And I love the use of "and" at the end of your poem, it spurs thought and a sense of "and now what" in my mind.

Here's mine:
http://wp.me/pZXMF-rL

Amy said...

so, do you ever think you will put all these amazing works together in a book? I'd buy it for sure!!!

Alice Audrey said...

A body could end up married that way.

blueviolet said...

It's never good when you're that far gone.

Kathy's Klothesline said...

and .......... warning label. No one heeds the warning label!

Pastor Sharon said...

How do you do it? weave poetry, objects into real life and make art out of it?

I don't know. But I love it!

Betty said...

That painting is amazing. As always the words are well written!

drybottomgirl said...

yes, my friend a warning would have been nice but I doubt I would have listened to it anyway....love the picture too and just have to say it one more time "GO PACK GO!!!!!" :)

Beachanny said...

Gracious me..what more to add. Sensuous, curvaceous and luscious perhaps. We know what lies beyond the ?? Good work. Gay

Mama Zen said...

Just reading that make me queasy!

M.L. Gallagher said...

Poetry and paint flowing into an 'and' that leaves me breathless...

Penelope said...

Omg, she is amazingly talented!

Jill said...

I wish I could see that painting UP CLOSE and PERSONAL. It has a lot of layers in it.

Oh, the repercussions of consuming too much...

Katherine said...

And ????

Great 160 but would love to know what comes after that!!!

Sorry I've not been by in a while Brian and would like to thank you for your comforting words of support on my blog over the last month. :)

Sue said...

No AA for you, I suspect...

;)

Just Be Real said...

Truth. Blessings.

turtlememoir said...

about the warning label, I don't know - can there ever be too much of that? great 160!

rosaria said...

I've just ventured out and opened a blog for my fiction pieces, to share just a little. Bleeding alone sucks.

She Writes said...

I love what you did here.

bodhirose said...

There really should be a warning label... Love your creative 160--wonderful.

Lovely sensual painting too.

Betsy said...

surgeon general? you mean love doctor? lol

Natasha said...

An incompleted moment captured for our imaginations to complete, Wonderful painting as well...soft, sensual, sultry, and...and....I'm thirsty :)

signed...bkm said...

Yes, a warning label, some bodies should indeed have one.....nice writing Brian...bkm

Joanna Jenkins said...

Great ending ;-)
Loved this poem and the artwork too.
Cheers, jj

kkrige said...

Uh oh. Down for the count. An absolutely stunning picture. No doubt it captured your eye & spun a story.

emily wierenga said...

following its curves... love this. reminds me of bottle and body... and i LOVE the painting. exquisite.

ladyfi said...

The painting and photo are fabulous!

I'm so glad those youthful years (many many many years ago now) of experimenting with drink are OVER!

tattytiara said...

Perfect non-ending.

haikulovesongs said...

the best intoxication...

Magpie said...

Yea, I agree with Bonnie. I don't see you signing up for any twelve step program anytime soon. Go ahead, indulge a little. :)

Mijayami said...

Beautiful painting & poem. And yes, our bodies need many warning labels -- for us and others to read.

Janice said...

You said so much in so few words. Remebering some "room spins" in my own life. And...

Shadow said...

160 characters and the message is clear...

Goofball said...

it goes wrong already at the word "again"

Kavita said...

And the warning label should be real short too!! lest the consumer just fade away to "glory" before even completing the sentence :)

Good one, Brian! Message perfectly conveyed!! :)

Crystal Jigsaw said...

It's a long time since I've felt the wrath of alcohol, I'm tee-total!

CJ xx

Brian Miller said...

for the record its been a long time for me as well...and glad they are well behind me as well...its the metaphor...

the walking man said...

How much is too much and why bring the surgeon general in when you're getting drunk with her laying next to you?

slommler said...

And...and...and...well said! Room spinning and all!!
Hugs
SueAnn

Liza Ursu said...

beautiful poem Brian.

Gaston Studio said...

Wow, those paintings are just fabulous! Love your 160 Brian, again.

annell said...

Warning label is a good idea! But you are filled with good ideas! I never know what I will find when I come.

natalee said...

Lol... I can relate to this one.. That art is beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!

Raven said...

Oh, do I remember those days. So glad they are over!!

Great poem!

Myrna R. said...

I love the painting and the sensuality of your words. But oh so true - intoxicating beauty of any kind has no warning label.

Friko said...

clever as well as apt.

Boom Boom Larew said...

Happily, it's been many years since I was intimately acquainted with this scenario!

Mmm said...

lovely painting adn wise words of warning.

rmpWritings said...

i'm curious how that label might read and what a poem it might make...

lovely verse.

secret agent woman said...

I suspect even with warning labels right on our bodies, most of us would ignore them. I know I would.

mama-face said...

Cool. Open ended poetry... fill in the blanks. So, how does the surgeon general save the desperate man?

The photo? I could eat it up.

sheila said...

I KNOW! THere should be something that screams stop! I mean, other than puking.

Syd said...

I have been drunk on such powerful stuff.

Survival Jones said...

Lovely and cute, but more so because as I read your 160 and type this, my little boy is lying asleep next to me clutching his little empty milk bottle. :)

Marla said...

Perfect